審審題圈劃關(guān)鍵詞確定人稱時態(tài)確定寫作對象和內(nèi)容列列出不同的句式列出文章結(jié)構(gòu)恰當(dāng)使用連接詞改檢查語法、拼寫等錯誤并改正010204030506定連抄字丑多扣分認(rèn)真抄正如何寫好一篇好作文仁愛英語八下期末作文練筆講評根據(jù)提示，以“HowtoKeepSafe“為題寫一篇80詞左右的演講稿。范文講解：暑期安全暑假即將到來，鑒于以往假期中各種事故頻發(fā)，同學(xué)們，請你以“Howtokeepsafe”為主題，用英語寫一篇短文，給同學(xué)們一些建議。

Hello,everyone!Asweknow,safetyisveryimportantforus.Asteenagers,weshouldalwayskeepsafetyinmind.Herearesomeofmysuggestions.

Firstofall,it'ssaidthatmanypeoplegethurtorlosetheirlivesintrafficaccidentsinChina.SoIthinkit'simportantforustoobeythetrafficrules.Also,weoughttoeathealthilyandsafely.Eatingfoodthatgoesbadwilldoharmto(beharmfulto)ourhealth.(吃壞的食物對身體有害)Besides,it’sdangeroustoswimintheriver.____________Lastbutnotleast,ifyougotocrowdedplaces,remembertoputonyourmaskstoavoidthespreadofdiseases.Inshort,weshouldvalueourlivesandkeepawayfromthedanger.亮點詞拓展-value/?v?lju?/珍愛1.Theyplaceahighvalueonsafety.他們對安全極為重視。2.Ireallyvaluehimasafriend.我真的把他視為好朋友。遵守交通規(guī)則健康、安全飲食吃壞的食物對身體有害帶上口罩阻止疾病傳播

珍愛生命遠(yuǎn)離危險obeythetrafficruleseathealthilyandsafely.Eatfoodthatgoesbaddoharmtoourhealthbeharmfultoourhealthbebadforourhealth.putonyourmasksavoid/stopthespreadofdiseases.valueourliveskeepawayfromthedanger.相關(guān)短語小練筆：根據(jù)提示，以“HowtoKeepSafe“為題寫一篇80詞左右的演講稿。

審認(rèn)真讀題，圈劃出關(guān)鍵信息。定文體時態(tài)人稱演講稿（開頭結(jié)尾）一般現(xiàn)在時we(you)寫作對象：寫作目的：寫作要點：觀眾，同學(xué)們給建議，保持安全！安全！3+1自擬網(wǎng)絡(luò)交友遇險報警飲食安全……(請補(bǔ)充一條)HowtoKeepSafe網(wǎng)絡(luò)交友遇險報警飲食安全……(請補(bǔ)充一條)HowtoKeepSafe列:邏輯順序詞+提示詞+句式makefriendsonline/ontheInternetcall110whenweareindangereatsafelyswimsafely/dosportssafelyTostartwith,Next,What'smore,Last,...mattersalotthereisnodoubtthatit'sa..ideatodosth.remembertodosth.it's+dangerousforsb.todosth.列:邏輯順序詞+提示詞+句式演講稿格式-開頭Beginning：____________+________________________問候、寒暄引出主題和下文Hello(Goodmorning),everyone!It'smyhonortogiveaspeechhere.

Asweknow,safetyisveryimportantforus.Asteenagers,weshouldalwayskeepsafetyinmind.Buthowcanwekeepsafe?Herearesomeofmysuggestions.

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Asweknow,nothingismoreimportantthansafety.Herearesomesuggestionsonhowtokeepsafe.

一個亮點即可。演講稿格式-結(jié)束語該結(jié)束語并非對正文建議！而是演講的結(jié)束語That'sall.Thankyou.Tobeginwith,wearesupposedtobecarefulwhenwemakefriends,especiallyonline.Next,ifweareindanger,wemustcallthepoliceforhelpintimesothatwecankeepourselvessafe.

Moreover,eatinghealthilyandsafelymatteralottous.Eatingfoodthatgoesbad(Eatingbadfood)willbeharmfultoourhealth.Bytheway,junkfoodisalsoakillerofhealth.Lastbutnotleast,summeriscoming,andwemustremembernottoswimintheriver.Inshort,safetymustcomefirst!Pleasekeepitinmind范文-1...It'simportantforustokeepsafeindailylife.Butdoyouknowhowtodoit?Firstofall,youaresupposedtothinkitoverbeforeyouwanttomakefriendswithothersontheInternet.Noteveryoneiskindtoyou.Secondly,ifyouareintrouble,youmustcall110forhelp.What'smore,eatingfoodthatgoesbadwilldoharmtoourhealth,soweshouldmakesurethatthefoodisfreshandclean.Lastbutnotleast,youmayfeelhotandcan'twaittogoswimmingintheriver.Infact,it'sdangerousforus!Inshort,takemyadviceandI'mtrulybelieveyouwilllivesafely.That'sall.Thankyou.范文-2佳句賞析Ifyouareindanger,whynotturntothepolice.Theyarewillingtohelpyou.Wearesupposedtomakefriendsonlinecarefullybecausewedon'tknowalotaboutthem.Thebestwaytokeepyousafeistofindapolicemanforhelp.佳句賞析Asweknow,makingfriendsontheInternetispopularwithyoungpeople.However........Thefoodmustbecleanandweshouldcookitinarightway.Youshouldsaynotoswimmingintheriver.Nooneknowwhatdangeriswaitignforus.片斷賞析Tostartwith,asthesayinggoes,”Everycoinhastwosides.”TheInternetplaysanimprotantpartinourlifebutit'salsofullofdanger.Sowe'dbetterbecarefultomakefriendsonline.What'smore,thereisnodoubtthatfoodsafetymattersalot.Wearesupposedto....學(xué)生作品-找出可取之處Hello,everyone!It'smyhonortogiveaspeechhere.Tostartwith,wearesupposedtobecarefulwhenmakingfriendsontheInternet.Remembernottotalkmorepersonalquestionswiththem.Next,ifyouareindanger,youmustcall110forhelp.Meanwhile,tryingtobecalmmattersalottoyou.Thenit'snecessaryforyoutoeatregularly.Themorefruiltandvegetablesweeat,themorehealthywewillbe.Lastbutnotleast,asastudent,wemustlearntrafficrulesandobeythem.Bydoingso,wecanprotectusmoresafely.That'sall.Thankyou.Hello,everyone!It'smyhonortogiveaspeechhere.Tostartwith,wearesupposedtobecarefulwhenmakingfriendsontheInternet.Remembernottotalkmorepersonalquestionswiththem.Next,ifyouareindanger,youmustcall110forhelp.Meanwhile,tryingtobecalmmattersalottoyou.Thenit'snecessaryforyoutoeatregularly.Themorefruiltandvegetablesweeat,themorehealthywewillbe.Lastbutnotleast,asastudent,wemustlearntrafficrulesandobeythem.Bydoignso,wecanprotectusmoresafely.That'sall.Thankyou.缺演講主題句缺文章總結(jié)句Inshort...talkmuchpersonalinformationwiththem扣題不緊人稱不一致！

找出不足之處:1.結(jié)構(gòu)方面2.用詞方面3.扣題方面wecanprotectourselves