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--應(yīng)用文BiodiversityGradeanalysisofWriting19分及以上5人LearningObjectivesBytheendoftheclass,youwillbeableto:1.knowthebasicstructureandlearnsomespecificexpressionsaboutmainwritingpoints;2.Identifyandcorrectyourproblemsandpolishyourwriting.假定你是李華，你的英國(guó)朋友Jasper對(duì)你在“科學(xué)三分鐘”(3-minuteScienceSpeechActivity)中介紹的生物多樣性研究很感興趣，想了解你如何應(yīng)對(duì)研究中的挑戰(zhàn)。請(qǐng)你寫一封郵件回復(fù)，內(nèi)容包括：1．研究困難；2．解決方法。注意：1．寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。ActivityI.AnalyzeandOrganiseGenre(體裁):Person(人稱):Tense(時(shí)態(tài)):Contents(內(nèi)容):aletterofreplymainlyfirstpersonmainlypasttense1.challenges

2.solutions-Para.1:

backgroundinformationwritingpurpose(replyandshare)-Para.2:challenges&solutions

-Para.3:expresswishes，feelingsandearlyreplyStructure:Para1：

backgroundinformationwritingpurposePara2：

challenges：

limitedareasextinctionofsomesamplessolutions:

askschoolforhelpapplynewtechnology句型，詞匯Para3：

earlyreply

ActivityⅡ.IdentifyYourProblems審題—體裁偏差+人稱誤用AletterofsuggestionAletterofreplymainlyfirstperson審題—中心要點(diǎn)偏離主題biodiversityresearch:challengesandsolutions3-minuteScienceSpeechActivityActivityⅡ.IdentifyYourProblems審題—缺失要點(diǎn)2+語(yǔ)言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確性limitedaccesstodifferentcreatures

ActivityⅡ.IdentifyYourProblemsByexpandingourresearchrange/searchinginformationonline構(gòu)思—要點(diǎn)1、2沒(méi)有針對(duì)性

ActivityⅡ.IdentifyYourProblemshardandtime-consumingtosearchfortheinformationonlybyreferencebooksWhy?limitedways?devices?fewaccesstospecies?書寫：不允許使用涂改筆；書寫潦草；劃痕太多；結(jié)構(gòu)布局：兩段或四段，應(yīng)分為三段審題：人稱；體裁para2構(gòu)思/要點(diǎn)：偏離中心主題（生物多樣性）；

要點(diǎn)缺失；要點(diǎn)沒(méi)有針對(duì)性；語(yǔ)言：語(yǔ)義表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性；語(yǔ)篇連貫性；詞匯和句式的豐富度

ActivityⅡ.IdentifyYourProblemsReflectionCheckyourcompositionandfindoutyourprolemsMainTask:Learnhowtoexpresschallengesandsolutionsaccuratelyandspecifically假定你是李華，你的英國(guó)朋友Jasper對(duì)你在“科學(xué)三分鐘”(3-minuteScienceSpeechActivity)中介紹的生物多樣性研究很感興趣，想了解你如何應(yīng)對(duì)研究中的挑戰(zhàn)。請(qǐng)你寫一封郵件回復(fù)，內(nèi)容包括：1．研究困難；2．解決方法。注意：1．寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。Ⅲ.ReadandExploreWhatcouldbethechallenges?Howtodealwiththem?

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