2009年高考情景作文

假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三一班的學(xué)生李華，為響應(yīng)綠化祖國(guó)的號(hào)召，你班四月十二日去郊區(qū)植樹，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，介紹植樹活動(dòng)的全過程，給某英文雜志的“綠色行動(dòng)”專欄寫一篇以“GreenActioninOurClass”為題的英文稿件。注意：詞數(shù)不少于60

提示詞：郊區(qū)suburbs

情景作文

假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三一班的學(xué)生李華，為響應(yīng)綠化祖國(guó)的號(hào)召，你班四月十二日去郊區(qū)植樹，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，介紹植樹活動(dòng)的全過程，給某英文雜志的“綠色行動(dòng)”專欄寫一篇以“GreenActioninOurClass”為題的英文稿件。注意：詞數(shù)不少于60

提示詞：郊區(qū)suburbs

審中文信息標(biāo)題圖的順序不能錯(cuò)！詞數(shù)提示詞第一人稱過去時(shí)圖1.出發(fā)

圖2.種樹過程圖3.安插提示牌圖4.照相留念

審圖四幅圖的先后順序：

圖1內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié)要點(diǎn)出發(fā)細(xì)節(jié)清晨騎車出發(fā)風(fēng)景和心情圖2內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié)要點(diǎn)種樹細(xì)節(jié)挖坑搬樹種樹澆水圖3內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié)要點(diǎn)安插提示牌細(xì)節(jié)安插提示牌愛護(hù)樹木圖4內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié)要點(diǎn)照相留念細(xì)節(jié)手里拿著種樹工具站在小樹林和牌子旁心情或感受圖1內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié)要點(diǎn)Setout細(xì)節(jié)EarlyinthemorningonApril12th；suburbs;bybike；圖2內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié)要點(diǎn)planttrees細(xì)節(jié)arrive;digholes;carrytrees;watertrees;圖3內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié)要點(diǎn)putupaboard細(xì)節(jié)putupaboardsaying”pleaseprotecttrees”圖4內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié)要點(diǎn)takephotos細(xì)節(jié)takephotos;standinarawwithtoolsinhands;besidetheboardandtrees順序要點(diǎn)要點(diǎn)的細(xì)節(jié)支撐連接詞Picture1setoutearlyinthemorning;onApril12th；suburbs;bybike；earlyinthemorning

Picture2planttreesarrive;digholes;carrytrees;watertrees;assoonaswearrivedattheplantingspot;whenwereached…；uponarrivalPicture3putupaboardputupaboardsaying”pleaseprotecttrees”afterwards;afterfinishingplantingallthetrees;Picture4takephotostakephotos;standinarawwithtoolsinhands;besidetheboardandtreesbeforeleaving;inordertotreasuretheactivity閱卷過程中發(fā)現(xiàn)的問題時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)不清：onApril12th,suburbs關(guān)鍵詞錯(cuò)誤：dig-dug，board字?jǐn)?shù)不足60詞-1無結(jié)尾-1人稱錯(cuò)-酌情扣分時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)-降檔情景作文寫作要求內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)、上下文的連貫、詞匯和句式的多樣性及語言的準(zhǔn)確性。考試說明指出：情景作文評(píng)分原則先看內(nèi)容定檔重點(diǎn)參考語言質(zhì)量注重整體語言運(yùn)用能力要點(diǎn)齊全，語言好，進(jìn)三檔以上（12分以上）缺要點(diǎn)，語言差，四檔或五檔（11分以下）情景作文各檔范文高考范文：April12ismemorablebecauseourclasshadameaningfulexperience

onthatday.Inthemorning,webicycledtothesuburbstoplanttrees,talkingandlaughingalltheway.Uponarrival,webegantoworkimmediately.Somewerediggingholes.Somewerecarryingandplantingyoungtrees.Otherswerewateringthem.Aftergettingtheworkdone,weputupaboard

remindingpeopleto

protectthetrees.定檔：一檔Beforeleavingwetooksomephotostorecordourgreenaction.Seeingthelinesoftrees,weallhadasenseofachievement.Wefeelit’sourdutytoprotectandbeautifyourenvironment.點(diǎn)評(píng)

GreenActioninOurClass

IamLiHuafromClass1Senior3inHongXingmiddleschool.OnApril12thourclassorganizedanactivitytoplanttreesinsuburbstomakeourcountrymorebeautiful.

EarlyinthemorningonApril12th,

myclassmatesandIwenttothesuburbsbybicycle.Andtherewas

anawsomebreath-takingsceneryonourwaywhichcouldbejustappreciatedinruralareas,greenmountains,goldenwheatfieldandsoon,whichbroughtusgreatjoys.

覆蓋了所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，有細(xì)節(jié)描述，句式和詞匯較豐富，所寫內(nèi)容連貫，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，體現(xiàn)較強(qiáng)的語言運(yùn)用能力。17-18分

Whenwegotthere,wewentintoworkingatonce.Someofusdugholestoplanttreesandsomeofustookthelittletreestotheholes.What’smore,therewerealsosomecarefulgirlswateringthetreeswhichwerejustplanted.Thankstoourgreatefforts,allthetreesweresoonplantedandtwoofourclassmatesevenputupaboardreading“l(fā)oveandprotectthetrees”infrontofthelittleforestmadebyus.Afterallthehardwork,wealsotookphotosofourwholeclasswithtoolsinourhandinfrontofthetrees.

Exhaustedbuthappy,wehadasignificantdayandIhopeourcountrywillbemorebeautifulbecauseofthedecoratingoftrees!點(diǎn)評(píng) I’mLiHuaastudentofSeniro3classofHongXingMiddleSchool. Inordertorespondtotheappealationofmakingourcourntry

greener,ourclassdecidedtogotosuburbstoplanttreesonApril,12th. Earlyinthemorning,wewenttothedestinationbybike.Therearemanytreesandricebythesideoftheroad.Onourwaytothere,weenjoyedthebeautifulviewandtalkedhappily.Assoonaswegotthere,webegantowork.Someofusdug,someburried,somewateredandtheresttookthetreestoplaceswhereneedthem.Afterplantingtrees,wechoseanobviousplacetomakeasignread“Protecttreess”

standtopreventpeoplefromcuttingtrees.Atlast,wetookphotesinfrontofthetrees.Almostwornoutaswewere,weextremelyexcited,forwedidaqualificationdeed.基本覆蓋了全部?jī)?nèi)容要點(diǎn)，細(xì)節(jié)描寫不夠充分，基本完成規(guī)定的寫作任務(wù)。存在語法和用詞等錯(cuò)誤。12分

點(diǎn)評(píng) HongXingmiddleschoolhadanactivitytomakethecountrygreenthanbeforeonApril12nd.Classonegreadethreestudentsmadetheactioninsuburbs.Firstofall,theymetatcountryroadinthemorningandwenttothesuburbsbybike.Afterthearrivedatthesuburbstheybegantoplantedthetreeandwateredthetree.Whiletheyfinishedplanting,theymadeasignbesidethetrees.Thewordsinthesignareplaseprotectthetrees.Finallytheytooksomephotosandbacktothehome. Whatameaningfulday!要點(diǎn)描述不充分；尤其是第二幅圖沒有展開；所用句式和詞匯有限；有語法等表述錯(cuò)誤，影響對(duì)內(nèi)容的理解。6分

好句子Whenwegotthere,itwasstillearly.Weworkedsohardthatwefinishedtheworkquickly.Afterfinishingplantingtrees,weputupaboardremindingpeopleofprotectingthetrees.Standinginfrontofthetrees,wetookaphototorecordthismeaningfulactivity.Itwasourdutytobeautifyournation.ThatwaswhatIgainfromouractivity.Thesweatrolleddownfromourneck,butwewerestillfullofenergy.Pleasurecanbeseenonourfaces.Wehopedth