人與社會之個人成長

實現(xiàn)英雄夢Itwasacold,snowyevening.Tommywasrunningasfastashecould,focusedonnothingbuthisdestination---theshoponthestreetcorner.Twoweeksago，hesawfigurinesofMarvelsuperheroesontheshelvesandfelthehadtohaveone.He'sbeenwalkingtheneighbor'sdogeversincethentoearnmoneytorealizehislittledream.Hewassoexcitedandhardlynoticingtheworldaroundhim.Maybethat'swhyhetrippedoverthelegsofahomelesswoman,whowassittingonthesidewalk,herbackagainstthewall.Hemurmured(低語)"sorry"andmovedontohisdestination.Onceheenteredtheshop,hewentstraighttotheshelveswithfigurines.Hulk,Thor,CaptainAmerica,IronMan,andmanymore---

allofhisadmiredheroes.WithhisheartpoundinglikecrazyhereachedforSpiderman."Youlikethese,truebeliever?"Tommyturnedaround.Anoldmanwasstandingbehindhimwithawidesmileonhisface."Y-yes...Yes,they'reawesome!"answeredTommy."They'restrongandfastandhelpotherpeoplealot..."theboylookedatfigurinesinadmiration."IwishIcouldbeasuperherotoo."

"Thenbecomeone!"saidtheoldman."How?"Tommyaskedinsurprise."Idon'thaveanysuperpowers.""Andwhywouldyouneedthem?"theoldmansmiled.Seeingtheconfusionontheboy'sface,hesquatted(蹲下)andputhishandsonTommy'sarms."Didyouknow,thatshopkeeperladyovertherehasadisabledhusband?She'sbeenworkinghardandtakingcareofhimforyears.I'veneverheardawordofcomplaintfromher.Andthisperson”

---hepointedataredheadman,whojustenteredtheshop."He'safirefighter;he'ssavedcountlesslives.Henevergivesup,nomatterhowdangerousthesituationseemstobe."TheoldmanlookedTommyintheeyesandsmiled."Youdon'tneedasuperpowertobeaheroforsomeoneelse.Thepathofasuperherostartsnotinthemind,notinthemuscles,butintheheart."注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Para1:

Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.Para2:

Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.人物分析:主角Tommy，第二配角theoldman,thehomelesswoman一段中提到thehomelesswoman肯定有特別的用意，她可以成就Tommy成為平凡英雄。另外兩個人物:theshopkeeperlady;thefirefighter是Tommy學(xué)習(xí)的楷模，英雄就在身邊;地點:onthesidewalk因踩到homelesswoman而差點絆倒，但是此次是忽視她的;theshop是Tommy思想轉(zhuǎn)變的地點，在這里，Tommy接受了一個智者的建議，實現(xiàn)了第二個轉(zhuǎn)變，把原本要買的超人小雕像變成別的東西，可能是吃的or蓋的,如:毯子or襪子衣服,帽子等。也可以籠統(tǒng)地寫。背景:寒冷，下雪---暗示Tommy的善舉時間:acold,snowyevening溫暖了這個女人的雪夜。情節(jié):原文主人公有個夢想---想擁有一個超人小塑像---并努力遛狗掙錢---反向結(jié)局---沒有買小超人塑像---拿著掙到的錢去做善事，成為別人的平凡英雄。*文本簡析主題語境：人與社會之個人成長*本文的聚焦于三個方面：1.Tommy有個夢想---擁有一個漫威超人小雕像。2.如何實現(xiàn)夢想？---通過給鄰居遛狗掙到足夠的錢。3.去店里的路上差點絆倒了，因為一個街頭流浪的女子。（這個女子的價值在于成就Tommy的超級英雄夢）4.在店里，遇到了一個睿智的老者，告訴湯姆超級英雄就在身邊，如店老板娘以及消防員，激發(fā)Tommy向他們學(xué)習(xí)，成就自己的英雄夢。本文特點：1.文本類型：個體動機(jī)激發(fā)個體行為，個體行為產(chǎn)生相應(yīng)的結(jié)果，行為結(jié)果刺激個體反思，最終實現(xiàn)個體成長。2.類似的文本:一般結(jié)果是正向的，即通過個體努力，實現(xiàn)了目標(biāo)。但本文是初始目標(biāo)沒有實現(xiàn)，因為智慧老者的出現(xiàn)，改變了原來的目標(biāo)，轉(zhuǎn)而去實現(xiàn)另外一個目標(biāo)。但不管目標(biāo)實現(xiàn)與否，個體的行為造成的結(jié)果一定會帶來思想上的反思，并促使個人獲得成長。這一點與問題解決類的讀續(xù)文本相似。問題解決類的文本幾乎在順利解決問題或內(nèi)心沖突后，個體有了反思，并實現(xiàn)個體的成長。3.解讀文本:關(guān)注一下不同文本共性的東西，備考會更加有的放矢，可以進(jìn)行更有效和更充分的語料準(zhǔn)備。Para1:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoes,thinkingintensely.

首段情節(jié)設(shè)計:Tommy

想啊想---一心只想自己的小夢想,心里感到羞愧--看看身邊的兩個平凡英雄，立志向他們學(xué)習(xí),成為街頭的女子的英雄--心狂跳，決定要做沒有超能力的英雄---不買超人小雕像，買了別的東西Para2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.情節(jié)設(shè)計:女子瑟瑟發(fā)抖的樣子---夜色中行人匆匆，沒有人為她停留---把購物袋塞到她手里--女子喃喃道謝---小湯姆實現(xiàn)成為他人英雄的愿望---感悟:原來超級英雄只需要一顆愿意去做英雄的心Para1:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.情節(jié)一：1.他的大腦快速地轉(zhuǎn)動著，突然有了一個想法。他臉上最初的迷惑被決心和興奮所取代。2.抬起頭，環(huán)顧著那兩位令人尊敬的英雄，Tommy決定向細(xì)致的有愛心的shopkeeperlady和無畏的有獻(xiàn)身精神的firefighter學(xué)習(xí)。他們才是真正的超人。

*Hismindracedfastandagreatideaoccurredtohim.Initialconfusiononhisfacewasreplacedby/gavewaytodeterminationandexcitement.*Raisinghisheadandlookingaroundatthetworespectedheroes,Tommydecidedtolearnfromthecaringanddedicatedshopkeeperladyaswellasthefearlessanddevotedfirefighter.Theywereactuallybrilliantsupermenaroundhim！Para1:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.情景二：3.突然，那位無家可歸的婦女在寒風(fēng)中顫抖的一幕在頭腦中閃過。被老人的話所激勵著，他決定為周圍有困難的人做一些事情，象真正的英雄一樣。4.他的臉因為激動而發(fā)燒。他沒有買supermanfigurine，而是買了一些食物和衣物。

*Allofasudden,thesceneofthehomelesswomantremblinginthebitingcoldanddarkeveningflashedacrosshishead.Inspiredbytheoldman’swords,Tommydecidedtodosomethingforthepeopleinneed,justlikearealsuperhero.*Hisfacewasburningwithexcitement.Insteadofbuyingasupermanfigurine,hecameoutofthestorewithalargeshoppingbagfulloffoodandclothes.Para2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.情景一：1.她象樹葉一樣顫抖著。街上人來人往，皆象他先前一樣忽視這位可憐的婦女。2.看到這一幕，Tom加快步子，靠近婦女，臉上帶著笑容遞給她裝滿東西的袋子。*Shewasshakinginthecoldlikealeaf.Peoplewerehustlingandbustlingonthestreet,ignoringthewomanjustashedidpreviously.*Onseeingthis,Tomquickeneduphissteps,approachedthewomanandofferedherthelargebagfullofitemswithasmileonhisface.NosoonerhadthewomantakenthebagfromhishandsthanlittleTommydisappearedintothedeepdarkness.Stunnedandmoved,thewomansaidthanksagainandagain,tearsblurringhervislon"Thankyou,littlesuperman!"WithTommy'sgestureofkindnessthatnightwouldbeawarmestnightforher.Para2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.情景二：3.“.“Goodevening,youmayneedthis.9Withthesewords,Tommyputdownthebag,turnedawayandheadedforhiswarmhome.Anoverwhelmingsenseofpridewelledupinsidehimasheturnedbacktofindthewoman'sfacelitup.“Yes,lmadeit!Tobeasupermandoesn'tneedasuperpower.ltonlyneedsakindandgenerousheart."LittleTommyexclaimed!Thewomantookthebagfromhishands.ThenlittleTommywalkedintothecrowdsanddisappearedintothedeepdarknessbeforeshecouldsayaword.Stunnedandmoved,thewomansaidthanksagainandagain,tearsblurringhervision.WithTommy'sgestureofkindness,thatnightwouldbeawarmestnightforher.Itwasacold,snowyevening.Tommywasrunningasfastas多could,focusedonnothingbuthisdestination---theshoponthestreetcorner.Twoweeksago,hesawfigurinesofMarvelsuperheroesontheshelvesandfelthehadtohaveone.He'sbeenwalkingtheneighbor'sdogeversincethentoearnmoneytorealizehislittledream.Hewassoexcitedandhardlynoticingtheworldaroundhim.Maybethat'swhyhetrippedoverthelegsofahomelesswoman,whowassittingonthesidewalk,herbackagainstthewall.Hemurmured(低語)"sorry"andmovedontohisdestination.Echo1:Despitethefactthatitwassnowingheavily,thatnightwasthewarmestoneinthewoman'sheartbecauseofTommy'skindnessItwasacold,snowyevening.Tommywasrunningasfastas...could,focusedonnothingbuthisdestination---theshoponthestreetcorner.Twoweeksago,hesawfigurinesofMarvesuperheroesontheshelvesandfelthehadtohaveone.He'sbeenwalkingtheneighbor'sdogeversincethentoearnmoneytorealizehislittledream.Hewassoexcitedandhardlynoticingtheworldaroundhim.Maybethat'swhyhetrippedoverthelegsofahomelesswoman,whowassittingonthesidewalk,herbackagainstthewall.Hemurmured(低語)"sorry"andmovedontohisdestination.Echo2:Tommywasracingbackasfastashecould,focusedonnothingbutthetremblinghomelesswomanonthesidewalk.Itwasacold,snowyevening.Tommywasrunningasfastas魚could,focusedonnothingbuthisdestination---theshopontriestreetcorner.Twoweeksago,hesawfigurinesofMarvesuperheroesontheshelvesandfelthehadtohaveone.He'sbeenwalkingtheneighbor'sdogeversincethentoearnmoneytorealizehislittledream.Hewassoexcitedandhardlynoticingtheworldaroundhim.Maybethat'swhyhetrippedoverthelegsofahomelesswoman,whowassittingonthesidewalk,herbackagainstthewall.Hemurmured(低語)"sorry"andmovedontohisdestination.Echo3:Themoneyearnedbywalkinghisneighbor'sdogdidn'tgotoanysupermanfigurine.Instead,withadeterminedlook,hechosesomethingelse.Itwasacold,snowyevening.Tommywasrunningasfastascould,focusedonnothingbuthisdestination---theshoponthestreetcorner.Twoweeksago,hesawfigurinesofMarvesuperheroesontheshelvesandfelthehadtohaveone.He‘sbeenwalkingtheneighbor’sdogeversincethentoearnmoneytorealizehislittledream.Hewassoexcitedandhardlynoticingtheworldaroundhim.Maybethat‘swhyhetrippedoverthelegsofahomelesswoman,whowassittingonthesidewalk,herbackagainstthewall.Hemurmured(低語)“sorry”andmovedontohisdestination.Echo4:Tommyfelthisfaceburningasheonlythoughtofhissocalleddream/desire---toownasupermanfigurine,completelyignoringothers/theworldaroundhim.Someonewassufferingout

intheworld!Itwasacold,snowyevening.Tommywasrunningasfastascould,focusedonnothingbuthisdestination---theshoponthestreetcorner.Twoweeksago,hesawfigurinesofMarvesuperheroesontheshelvesandfelthehadtohaveone.He'sbeenwalkingtheneighbor'sdogeversincethentoearnmoneytorealizehislittledream.Hewassoexcitedandhardlynoticingtheworldaroundhim.Maybethat'swhyhetrippedoverthelegsofahomelesswoman,whowassittingonthesidewalk,herbackagainstthewall.Hemurmured(低語)"sorry"andmovedontohisdestination.Echo5:SeeingTommyoffinthedarknight,thewomanmurmuredthanksagainandagain,tearsofgratitudeblurringhereyeOnceheenteredtheshop,hewentstraighttotheshelveswasfigurines.Hulk,Thor,CaptainAmerica,lronMan,andmanymore-allofhisadmiredheroes.WithhisheartpoundinglikecrazyhereachedforSpiderman."Youlikethese,truebeliever?“Tommyturnedaround.Anoldmanwasstandingbehindhimwithawidesmileonhisface."Y-yes..Yes,they'reawesome!"answeredTommy."They'restrongandfastandhelpotherpeoplealot..."theboylookedatfigurinesinadmiration."lwishlcouldbeasuperheroto.Echo6:Hisheartbeatinglikecrazy,hewasapproachingthewomanwithaheavyshoppingbagfullofstuff.Onceheenteredtheshop,hewentstraighttotheshelvesfigurines.Hulk,Thor,CaptainAmerica,lronMan,andmanymoreallofhisadmiredheroes.WithhisheartpoundinglikecrazyhereachedforSpiderman."Youlikethese,truebeliever?“Tommyturnedaround.Anoldmanwasstandingbehindhimwithawidesmileonhisface."Y-yes..Yes,they'reawesome!"answeredTommy."They'restrongandfastandhelpotherpeoplealot.."theboylookedatfigurinesinadmiration."lwishlcouldbeasuperheroto0.Echo7:LittleTommywasnotonlyatruebelieverofManvesupermenbutonlyafirmpractitionerofhisbelief---Hecouldbeasuperherowithoutasuperpower.Andwhatcounts/matters/isimportantisthathelpingothersisjustawesome!"Thenbecomeone!"saidtheoldman."How?"Tommyaskedinsurprise."ldon'thaveanysuperpowers."Andwhywouldyouneedthem?"theoldmansmiled.Seeingtheconfusionontheboy'sface,hesquatted(蹲下)andputhishandsonTommy'sarms."Didyouknow,thatshopkeeperladyovertherehasadisabledhusband?She'sbeenworkinghardandtakingcareofhimforyears.l'veneverheardawordofcomplaintfromher.Andthisperson”---hepointedataredheadman,whojustenteredtheshop."He'safirefighter,he'ssavedcountlesslives.Henevergivesup,nomatterhowdangerousthesituationseemstobe.Echo8:Hismindracedfastandagreatideaoccurredtohim.Initiaconfusionontheboysfacewasreplacedby/gavewaytodeterminationandexcitement."Thenbecomeone!"saidtheoldman."How?"Tommyaskedinsurprise."ldon'thaveanysuperpowers."Andwhywouldyouneedthem?"theoldmansmiled.Seeingtheconfusionontheboy'sface,hesquatted(蹲下)andputhishandsonTommy'sarms."Didyouknow,thatshopkeeperladyovertherehasadisabledhusband?She'sbeenworkinghardandtakingcareofhimforyears.i'veneverheardawordofcomplaintfromher.Andthisperson”---hepointedataredheadman,whojustenteredtheshop."He'safirefighter;he'ssavedcountlesslives.Henevergivesup,nomatterhowdangerousthesituationseemstobe.Echo9:Hecouldlearnalotfromthecaringanddedicatedshopkeeperladyaswellasthefearlessanddevotedfirefighter.TheoldmanlookedTommyintheeyesandsmiled."Youdon'tneedasuperpowertobeaheroforsomeoneelse.Thepathofasuperherostartsnotinthemind,notinthemuscles,butintheheart.Echo10:Thatcoldandsnowynight,littleTommybecameaheroforthehomelesswoman.ltalsodawnedonhimthattobeasuperheroonlyneedsawillingheartratherthanasuperpowerPara1:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.首段情節(jié)設(shè)計:Tommy想啊想一想到好點子---看看身邊的兩個平凡英雄，立志向他們學(xué)習(xí)---心里感到羞愧，一心只想自己的小夢想---成為街頭的女子的英雄---怎么做---不買超人小雕像買了別的東西---心狂跳，決定要做沒有超能力的英雄，Para2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.Para1:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathissho多菡thinkingintensely.Para2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime段內(nèi)容設(shè)計Tommy飛奔回去，一心想著可憐的女子---描述女子瑟瑟發(fā)抖的樣子---夜色中行人匆匆，沒有人為她停留---把購物袋塞到她手里--回家---女子喃喃道謝---小湯姆實現(xiàn)成為他人英雄的愿望---感悟:原來超級英雄只需要一顆愿意去做英雄的心Ending1(呼應(yīng)老人講的話)Italsodawnedonhimthattobeasuperheroonlyneedsawillingheartratherthanasuperpower.Ending2(Tommy不僅相信漫威超人而且成了堅定的踐行者)TommywasnotonlyatruebelieverofManvelsupermenbutonlyafirmpractitionerofhisbelief---Hecouldbeasuperherowithoutasuperpower.Andwhatcountsisthathelpingothersisjustawesome!Ending3(Tommy把自己體驗到的感悟說出來)Yes,lmadeit!Tobeasupermandoesn'tneedasuperpower.ltonlyneedsakindandgenerousheart.”LittleTommyexclaimed!Para2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawher溯恩英記time.Tommywasracingbackasfastashecould,focusedonnothingbutthehomelesswomanonthesidewalk.Thewomanwasshakinglikeatremblingleaf.Asitwassnowingharderandharderpeopleweregoingdownthehustlingandbustlingstreet,ignoringthewomanashedidbefore.NosoonerhadTommyapproachedherthanhestuffedtheshoppingbagintoherhands.“Goodevening.Youmayneedthis."Withthesewords,Tommyleftforhiswarmhome.SeeingTommyoffinthedarknight,thewomanmurmured“thanks"againandagain,tearsofgratitudeblurringhereyes.Thatcoldandsnowynight,littleTommybecameaheroforthehomelesswoman.ltalsodawnedonhimthattobeasuperheroonlyneedsawillingheartratherthanasuperpower.Para1:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.Amillionthoughtsracedinhismind.“Howcanlbeasuperherowithoutasuperpower?"hethoughttohimself.Allofasudden,asceneofahomelesswoman,tremblinginthebitingcoldanddarkevening,flashedacrosshishead.Tommy'sheartachedandhisfacewasburningwithshameashehadbeenth