基礎(chǔ)寫作訓(xùn)練話題寫作之二：Describingaperson

Shorthair,straighthair,blackhairLonghair,Curlyhair,BlondhairHowtodescribeappearanceSectionARevisonHehas

short,blond

hairandlotsoflittlewrinklesonhisforehead.Whatdoeshelooklike?Howtodescribebuild(體格)andheightThemanhasamediumbuild,andheisoneheadtallerthanthewoman.YaoMinis2.26mtallandweighs87kilos.好文章的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)1.

全面性(Comprehensiveness):要點(diǎn)全面.2.

正確性(Accuracy):語法正確并符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。3.

多樣性(Variety):詞匯短語豐富，結(jié)構(gòu)多樣，句型復(fù)雜。4.連貫性(Logic):恰當(dāng)使用承上啟下的詞語和連接詞，使全文流暢連貫，渾然一體。SectionBStepsforWritingEnglishEssays1、審題到位：內(nèi)容（要點(diǎn)）體裁，人稱、時態(tài)2、要點(diǎn)成句:(1)正確——符合英語語法和英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣。(2)優(yōu)美——豐富的詞匯，豐富而高級的結(jié)構(gòu)句式.

3.聯(lián)句成文：巧用過渡語和連接詞.4.檢查修改:語法,拼寫,字母大小寫,標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號.注意：(1)開頭的交代句與結(jié)尾的總結(jié)句,增強(qiáng)呼應(yīng).(2)牢記常識性套話的習(xí)慣表達(dá).(3)諺語，成語四個步驟1.Generalintroduction:aged23;bornintoaworker’sfamilyinBeijingonOct.23,1985;growupin…wherehereceivedhiseducation;_______________________________,LuXun,wasthefatherofChinesemodernliterature.盡量用分詞短語，使文章簡潔，通順LuXun,_________________________________,wasborninZhejiangProvince

.概況:age,sex,birth-place,background魯迅,浙江紹興人,是中國現(xiàn)代文學(xué)之父。SectionCBorninShaoxing,ZhejiangProvincethefatherofChinesemodernliterature同位語結(jié)構(gòu)，使文章簡潔，通順●2.Appearance外表Mediumbuild,fat,abitoverweight,good-looking…

我的語文老師是個溫和的女人,身材矮小，她長著兩只大眼睛，帶著一副眼鏡。MyChineseteacher，___________________，hastwobigeyesandwearsapairofglasses.MyChineseteacher，________________________,hastwobigeyesandwearsapairofglasses.MyChineseteacherisagentle,shortwoman_____________________________巧用同位語巧用定語從句巧用with介詞短語做后置定語agentle,shortwomanwhoisagentle,short

womanwithtwobigeyesandapairofglasses.●3.

character性格Absent-minded,bad-tempered,warm-hearted,patient…MrZhang,我們的物理老師,善良，而且負(fù)責(zé)又有耐心。(一句多譯)a.MrZhang,_________________,iskind,responsibleandpatient.b.MrZhang,_____________________,iskind,patientandresponsible.c.MrZhang,ourphysicsteacher

，is______kindtous,________responsibleandpatient.

d.MrZhang,ourphysicsteacher,isakindperson______________________________________.ourphysicsteacherwhoisourphysicsteachernotonlybutalsowithgreatpatienceandresponsibility●4.特長愛好LikesordislikesBedelightedindoing,begoodat,longforsth…longtodo…在她的業(yè)余時間里她大都聽音樂讀小說.b.Inhersparetimeshe_______muchtime

____________musicand________novels.a.Sheenjoyslistening

tomusicandreadingnovelsalotinherleisuretime.spendslisteningtoreading●

5.Education教育狀況在清華大學(xué)主修自然科學(xué)，四年后畢業(yè)，他繼續(xù)到海外深造學(xué)習(xí)并取得博士學(xué)位。____________________,hegraduatedfromQingHuaUniversityandafter4years,hewentabroadforfurtherstudiesandreceivedadoctor'sdegree.靈活運(yùn)用多種結(jié)構(gòu),如非謂語動詞,使文章精煉MajoringinnatureScience●

6.Health健康狀況住了六周的院,現(xiàn)在她看上去很虛弱._____________inhospitalforsixweeks,nowshelooksveryweak.Having

been●

7.詳細(xì)特色Somethingindetail–Hewasstrictwitheverybodyandineverythinghedid.Oneday,wewerehavingclasseswhen…–Hewasveryforgetful.Oncehecameacrossanoldfriendofhisinthestreetand...●

８.Bigeventsinhisorherlifetime生平大事2004年8月27日，雅典奧運(yùn)會男子110米欄決賽上，劉翔以12秒91奪得了金牌，創(chuàng)造了亞洲人在短道項(xiàng)目上的奇跡和神話！

多種結(jié)構(gòu)增強(qiáng)句子表現(xiàn)力OnAugust27,2004intheAthensOlympicGamesman110-meterhurdlesLiuXiangfinallywonthegoldmedalby12seconds91

,____________________________________!OnAugust27,2004intheAthensOlympicGamesman110-meterhurdlesLiuXiangfinallywonthegoldmedalby12seconds91,___________________creatingtheAsianmiracleandmyth!whichcreatedtheAsianmiracleandmyth●

9.Evaluation(評價）

thinkhighlyofhimandallrespecthim;

berecognized/consideredasoneofthemostinfluentialfiguresinhumanhistory;

makegreatcontributionsto…;willalwaysberememberedas…;

1）叢飛為我們樹立了好榜樣，人人都高度評價并尊敬他。2）袁隆平為農(nóng)業(yè)作出了重大貢獻(xiàn)。

注意運(yùn)用一些動詞、形容詞等短語、詞組;適當(dāng)運(yùn)用關(guān)聯(lián)詞語CongFeisetusagoodexample,so

allthepeople

spokehighlyofhimandallrespectedhim.YuanLongping

hasmadegreatcontributionsto

agriculture.

Summary:

怎樣讓你的文章更有亮點(diǎn)?一.審題得當(dāng):不遺漏要點(diǎn),文體,人稱,時態(tài)正確。二.句式表達(dá)靈活多變,長短句兼而有之,但不賣弄.三.巧用非謂語動詞，介詞短語，詞組以增強(qiáng)文章的表現(xiàn)力。四.適當(dāng)運(yùn)用過渡語使句子更美，上下文更加

協(xié)調(diào)連貫。請根據(jù)以下資料說明，使用5個規(guī)范句子寫一篇介紹劉翔的文章，具體內(nèi)容如下：姓名:劉翔出生地:上海

生日:1983.7.13項(xiàng)目：田徑

身高：188

cm

體重：74

Kg

教練：孫海平

2004年8月27日雅典奧運(yùn)會男子110米欄決賽中以12秒91獲得冠軍，使他成為世界矚目的焦點(diǎn)。在2008年北京奧運(yùn)會的男子110米欄預(yù)賽中，劉翔由于腳傷，遺憾地在首輪就退出了比賽，再一次使他成為世人關(guān)注的焦點(diǎn)。參考詞匯：雅典Athens預(yù)賽

thefirstheat男子110米欄

man110-meterhurdles

田徑TrackandField

退出比賽

quitfromthecompetition\failtostart

LiuXiang,borninShanghaionJuly13,1983,is

188centimeterstallandweighs84kg.//HisprojectisTrackandFieldandhiscoachisSunHaiping.//OnAugust27,2004intheAthensOlympicGamesman110-meterhurdleshewonthegoldmedal

by12sec