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▼【1】Missywasabsolutelymybestfriendinthewholeworld.Wehadknowneachothersincefirstgrade,andweliterallydideverythingtogether.Wefrequentlyvisitedeachother’shomes,wekneweachother’sfamiliesliketheywereourown.Theinterestingthingaboutourrelationship,howeverthefactwasthattheolderwegot,themoreourvaluesseemedtodiffer.Westillenjoyedalotofthesamethings,butIwasabitmoresettledwhileshelovedbeingassociatedwithpopularpeopleandthings.Althoughshewasbasicallyagoodperson,shehadnoproblemwithforcingthingstogoherway.【2】Perhapsthisiswhyitseemedthatherfamilyactuallytrustedmemorethantheytrustedher.So,onthedaywhenMissyshowedupatmyhousewithahugedent(凹痕)inherfather’scar,Iknewthatwewereinforatroublesometime.【3】Shehadbangedthecarintoatreewhileoutthatday,andsheknewherfatherwasgoingtohaveanexplanation.Soshestoppedbymyhouseinordertomakeupastorythatwouldlessenherfather’srage.Missydecidedtotellhimthatwhileinaparkinglot,someonemusthavebackedintothecaranddentedit.Lookingatthedentwithsomecrashedleavesandbarkstillstickingthere,Iattemptedtoperish(打消)herthought.“Idon’tthinkyourfatherwillbuyit.”“Don’tworry,”sheinsisted,“evenifmydaddoesn’ttrustme,he’lltrustyou.”Myrolewastoconfirmforher.NowkeepinmindthatIhadstrongobjectionstolyingandIwantedabsolutelynothingtodowiththesituation.Ilovedherparentsjustlikemyown,andIdidnotwanttobeapartytothisliethatMissywascreating.Nevertheless,aftermuchrequestandageneralquestioningofmyloyaltytoourfriendship,IdecidedthattheleastIcoulddowastoactasasilentwitness.Thatway,Iwasn’tactuallylying;Ijustwasn’ttellingthefulltruth.Paragraph1:Anhourorsolater,wepresentedMissy’sfatherwiththecarandtheinquirybegan.Paragraph2:Herfatherlookedatmewithgreatdisbelief.一句話歸納下原文

▼發(fā)小撞壞父親汽車，求我?guī)退龍A謊。友誼與道德：沉默還是坦白？文本關鍵詞：1.lying-truth

2.friendship-relstionship

3.honesty

4.trust

5.silent-silence參考范文▼Anhourorsolater,wepresentedMissy’sfatherwiththecarandtheinquirybegan.

Herfatherexaminedthedent,hisbrowsfurrowingindeepconcern.HelookedatMissy,hiseyesfilledwithamixofastonishmentanddisbelief.

Missy,withanervoussmile,repeatedthestorywehadmadeupearlier.

Asshespoke,Icouldseeherfather’strustwaver,hiseyessearchingforanysignofdeception.Witheveryutterancethatescapedherlips,apangofguiltandregretwashingoverme,Ipainfullystruggledwiththeinternalconflictofloyaltytomyfriendandthemoraldilemmaofmaintainingalie.(Wordcount:92)Herfatherlookedatmewithgreatdisbelief.

Inthatpivotalmoment,theinnerstrugglebetweenloyaltyandhonestyreacheditstippingpoint.

Withaheavyheart,Imusteredthecouragetospeakthetruth,forIknewthatthefoundationofanyrelationshipisbuiltontrust.IconfessedtoMissy’sfather,recountingtheeventsastheytrulyunfolded,sparingnodetail.

Theroomwasenvelopedinaprofoundsilence,whiletheweightofmyconfessionlingeredintheair.

Itwasadifficultlessontolearn,butthroughthisexperience,Idiscoveredtheimportanceofintegrityandthetruemeaningoffriendship.(Wordcount:95)值得積累的語料點睛

▼父親震驚+懷疑的動作、表情、情緒描寫注意第一段藍色部分的兩個獨立主格句發(fā)小撒謊的過程（注意怎么避免對話，飛速推進）注意第一段紅色部分的那個非常簡潔的句子。這塊同學們在處理的時候很容易過分細節(jié)，顯得啰嗦。這篇文章的主角是「我」，圍繞的是我的「內(nèi)心掙扎」。發(fā)小就是妥妥的工具人，沒必要著太多筆墨，容易沖淡主題，且字數(shù)不好把控。我內(nèi)心掙扎的層層推進

&

真相和盤而出的系列動作同學們在處理我的內(nèi)心掙扎的時候，最常見的問題是寫得過于突兀，沒有層層推進的「過程感」。但你可能會很納悶，續(xù)寫部分就兩段，還能寫出什么花兒來？其實也不需要你怎么花大力氣，簡單兩句話其實就可以處理出這種層層推進的過程感。第一段結(jié)尾處我開始陷入掙扎，到發(fā)小父親看我時，情緒到達頂峰。這波操作就可以了。接下來大家在處理「我把真相和盤而出」這個橋段的時候，很可能要么處理成了對話，要么處理得啰里啰嗦。由于篇幅有限，大家一定要學會把這種啰里啰嗦的內(nèi)容大刀闊斧往前推進的寫法。唯一需要注意的是，動作是有先后順序的。你要把真相和盤而出，動作簡單分解一下，是不是得先鼓起巨大的勇氣（鼓起勇氣肯定有原因吧），然后才說明真相。Withaheavyheart,Imusteredthecouragetospeakthetruth,forIknewthatthefoundationofanyrelationshipisbuiltontrust.IconfessedtoMissy’sfather,recountingtheeventsastheytrulyunfolded,sparingnodetail.有價值的套路句（具體可參看前一篇文章）這里重點復習下上篇文章中提到過的上價值的套路句語料「這次的經(jīng)歷給了我寶貴的教訓」。這次經(jīng)歷

▼thisexperience/event/incident/encounter

給了我

▼注意冒號前一般過去時，冒號后一般現(xiàn)在時（放之四海皆準的普遍真理）。Thisexperience

imparted

avaluablelesson

to

me:...注意下這里介詞用toThisexperience

instilledin

meavaluablelesson:...注意下這里介詞用in

I

gained

avaluableinsight

from

thisexperience:...注意這里主語是人寶貴的

▼valuable/meaningful/precious/priceless

經(jīng)驗教訓

▼lesson/

insight所以這篇文章最后上價值的句型也可以利用上一篇的語料進行改造，比如隨便寫一個：Thisexperience

imparted

avaluablelesson

to