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王小芳高中英語新高考題型研究之微講座目錄

新高考英語的“讀后續(xù)寫”這一寫作新題型，即一種將閱讀與寫作緊密結(jié)合的考查方式，旨在考查學(xué)生的綜合語言運(yùn)用能力，突出了新高考試題改革的綜合性和創(chuàng)新性。一、讀后續(xù)寫新題型讀后續(xù)寫的考試要求

提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語和所標(biāo)示關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。第七檔：22-25(1)續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的質(zhì)量、續(xù)寫的完整性以及與原文情境的融洽度。(2)所使用詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性和多樣性。(3)上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。各檔評(píng)分呈現(xiàn)的是學(xué)生的續(xù)寫故事在內(nèi)容與融洽度，詞匯與語法，銜接與連貫性等方面寫作能力的遞減第五檔：15-17第四檔：11-14第三檔：6-10第二檔：1-5閱卷時(shí)，評(píng)卷老師關(guān)注的主要有以下三個(gè)方面：第六檔：18-21第一檔：0字?jǐn)?shù)卷面書寫關(guān)鍵句1.不扣題2.不合理3.無意義4.太單一5.無邏輯二、學(xué)生習(xí)作常見的問題忽略了文本的閱讀缺乏寫作的能力兩大問題Howtomakeupastory?如何續(xù)寫情節(jié)？Howtodescribevividly？如何使續(xù)寫情節(jié)生動(dòng)形象？三、讀后續(xù)寫策略及案例分析考查的實(shí)質(zhì)：problemssolutionsreactions重文本閱讀重情節(jié)構(gòu)思強(qiáng)語言輸出1.重文本閱讀——解讀文本一、讀文本淺層信息▲讀文體：記敘文；夾敘夾議▲讀內(nèi)容：5W+How1.讀主旨大意（Theme）:即明確文章主旨大意和段落大意。2.找關(guān)鍵要素：即文章中的關(guān)鍵信息（who:maincharacters;personalities;appearance;relationship,when,where,whathappened,why,howwouldthestorycontinue)

培養(yǎng)學(xué)生圈畫文本信息的習(xí)慣培養(yǎng)學(xué)生讀的習(xí)慣二、剖文本深層信息讀故事情節(jié)（故事山）：A:Beginning;Developing;Climax

What?How?找到問題的起點(diǎn)并追蹤它的發(fā)展注意情感的變化2021年6月全國新高考1卷AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jemafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jefturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.who(personalities;appearance;relationship）whenwherewhathappenedwhyhowsummarizethestory/Theme讀文本淺層信息5W+H

AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事，滿分25分。(2021年全國一卷高考讀后續(xù)寫)why：故事起因twinsJennaandJeffmotherwho：主角

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefire,soitcookednicely.when：故事時(shí)間where：地點(diǎn)what：故事開端

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.粥煮沸溢出把火澆滅了之后，Jenna驚慌失措爐子周圍一片混亂Jeff的手碰到了滾燙的火爐，他痛得叫了一聲鍋里那塊面包也變黑了what：故事發(fā)展（矛盾沖突）problem:Theycouldnotpreparethebreakfastfortheirmom.excitedHelplessThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.HowdidthetwinsfeelwhentheythoughtofgivingtheirmotherasurpriseonMother’sDay?雙胞胎想到在母親節(jié)給媽媽一個(gè)驚喜，非常興奮，并且他們認(rèn)為媽媽看到這份驚喜會(huì)很高興自豪。渲染的氛圍是溫馨的，感情基調(diào)是歡快愉悅的。他們很愛自己的媽媽。theme1.love2.gratitude2.重情節(jié)構(gòu)思———合理構(gòu)思情節(jié)

1.如何續(xù)寫第一段123找到3句話（原文最后一句、續(xù)寫第一段首句、續(xù)寫第二段首句）（內(nèi)容要與第一段首句一致、與原文情節(jié)一致、段尾要與第二段首句內(nèi)容一致）。確定第一段首句與原句最后一句之間的關(guān)系（順承、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、條件、并列、過渡、目的、讓步、對(duì)比）。結(jié)合這三句話的意思，從而確定第一段內(nèi)容。ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.Paragraph1：

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2：

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.轉(zhuǎn)折Theycouldn’tpreparethebreakfastwithoutother’shelp.Paragraph1：

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2：

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Dadhelpedthemmakethebreakfast.How?第一段的內(nèi)容：2.拓情節(jié)構(gòu)思———合理構(gòu)思情節(jié)

2.確定第一段尾句根據(jù)第二段首句，采用倒推的方法，同時(shí)結(jié)合第一段內(nèi)容，確定第一段尾句。Paragraph1：

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2：

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Dadhelpedthemmakethebreakfastsuccessfully.Finally,JeffandJennapreparedthebreakfastwiththehelpofdad.（第一段的最后一句）第一段的內(nèi)容：2.拓情節(jié)構(gòu)思———合理構(gòu)思情節(jié)

3.如何續(xù)寫第二段1確定結(jié)局。（與閱讀部分主題一致并且是正能量的）2根據(jù)第二段首句的信息和確定的正向結(jié)局情節(jié)，確定第二段內(nèi)容。（內(nèi)容要與第二段首句及原文情節(jié)一致）Paragraph1：

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2：

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Dadhelpedthemmakethebreakfastsuccessfully.Thebreakfastwasready,andthetwinsdecidedtoletmotherenjoythedeliciousfoodatonce.（第一段的最后一句）第一段的內(nèi)容：結(jié)尾：媽媽很感動(dòng)，孩子很開心，一家人都感受到了愛。How?2.拓情節(jié)構(gòu)思———合理構(gòu)思情節(jié)

4.如何續(xù)寫段落細(xì)節(jié)。1確定段落主角。2巧妙設(shè)問。Paragraph1：

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2：

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Q1.Whatdidfatherseeandwhatwouldtheirfatherreact(回應(yīng))?Q2.Whatwouldhedotohelpthetwins?Q3.Whatwastheresult?Q1.Whatwouldthetwinsdoandsaytotheirmother?Q2.Howdidthemotherfeelandreactafterhearingherchildren’sblessing(祝福)?Q3.Howdidallofthemfeelatlast?所見：看到孩子們失望所說：詢問孩子們的煩惱所做：父親決定幫忙解決問題,最終一起把早餐做好所做：孩子們一起給媽媽驚喜所見：媽媽看到禮物的反應(yīng)和感動(dòng)所思：家人之間的互相理解和關(guān)愛設(shè)問題theirfatherthetwinsandmom所做

所感人物描寫、環(huán)境描寫（自然、社會(huì)）自問自答一、根據(jù)2個(gè)段首句，自問自答二、主要圍繞“出現(xiàn)問題——解決問題”（圍繞what、how、why的問題）來展開三、每段設(shè)計(jì)3-4個(gè)問題并回答六所增加細(xì)節(jié)原文結(jié)合點(diǎn)動(dòng)作描寫所思所見所聞所說心理描寫情緒描寫語言描寫一、情節(jié)線索二、情感線索三、主旨詞匯四、人物性格特征萬能模式

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：Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Lookingattheblackbreadandmessystove,fatherfeltalittlebitannoyedandaskedthem,“Whathappened?”ThetwinssaidthewholestorytoFather.Fatherhuggedthemtightlyandsaid.“Let’smakebreakfasttogether!”Hearingtheofferofhelpfromtheirfather,arippleofexcitementranthroughthemagain.Whatapleasantsurprisetoteamupwiththeirfather!Thistime,thetwinsmadeFrenchtoastandchickenporridgequicklyandsafelyunder