高中英語讀后續(xù)寫全面指導讀后續(xù)寫專題ContentPartOne:

Howtoread?PartTwo:Howtoorganize?PartThree:Howtowrite?ContinuationWritingIntroduction評分標準內容語言Introduction總原則故事內容一定要正能量，弘揚社會主義核心價值觀。。內容要前后銜接，上下連貫,語言表達風格一致。凡是故事都應有跌宕起伏，其中人物會遇到困難或問題，但最終能解決。Introduction總原則定基調（一致、合邏輯）定結局（正能量）補情節(jié)（曲折）控制在30min內完成Part1Howtoread要點由大到小框架-主題（關注首、尾段）中心大意（每段首、尾句）細節(jié)（故事線索、人物特點）語言描寫特色劃出關鍵詞Part1HowtoreadReadfordetailedinformation5W+1HWhat、Who、When、Where、WhyHowplot:storyline+emotionlinecharacterssettingthemefeelingsPart1HowtoreadReadfordetailedplotResolutionBackgroundConflictRisingActionFallingActionClimaxPart1HowtoreadTheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.eg.2020年高考山東卷Part1Howtoreadeg.2020年高考山東卷“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”

“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish(完成).”Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.I’lltellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”Part1HowtoreadTheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasaman

sickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.eg.2020年高考山東卷Part1Howtoread“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”

“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish(完成).”Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohn

hadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.I’lltellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”eg.2020年高考山東卷Part1HowtoreadReadfordetailedplotResolutionBackgroundConflictRisingActionFallingActionClimaxPeoplehelpedeachother.Bernard’sfamilywasintrouble.Mrs.Meredithwantedtohelp.Thethreechildrenwantedtohelp.Theydiscussedhowtohelpandagoodideawasformed.ThemeParagraph1Paragraph2Part1HowtoreadWhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Shenoddedwithasmileandencouragedthechildren,“Let’sgetstarted!”Immediately,Claravolunteeredtogetthebigboxofcornandpreparedthemicrowaveoventomakepopcorn.Atthesametime,Johnwenttopurchasesomepaperbagsandarrangedallthestuffinplace.HarryrantoBernard’sanddraggedhimtothescene.Afterhearingtheexplanation,Bernardwasoverwhelmedwithexcitementandgratitude.Theycouldhardlywait.Timewentbyswiftly,andthechildrenlaughed,carryingouttheirgreat“project”.Joyfilledtheyardandeveryone’sheart.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

Carryingallthepaperbags,hecalledout,“Popcorn!50centsforoneextra-largepack!”Peoplestartedtogatheraroundhim,whichdrewevenmorepeople.Everyoneisreadytobuyonepacktosupporthim.Theairwasrichwithhappinessandkindness.Withinnotime,Bernardsoldoutallpopcornandearnedquitesomemoney.Onreturning,hethankedtheMeredithfamilywithwateryeyes.ForClara,HarryandJohn,itwasanunforgettableexperienceaswell.Itturnedoutthattheireffortsnotonlyhelpedabrotherinneed,butalsogavethemselvesthesweettasteofhelpingothers.Part2Howtoorganize要點起中文提綱/思維導圖關注原文尾段最后一句話續(xù)寫第一段首句續(xù)寫第二段首句人物角色“戲份”分配正能量結尾Part2Howtoorganize5-8details由續(xù)寫的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。兩段首句定一框第二段的框架，由第二段首句與正能量結尾來確定。二框二首正能量Part2Howtoorganizeeg.TheMake-upGuy原文尾段最后一句話：Afterwhatseemedacentury,heslowlyopenedhismouthandherecamethemostinspiringbeautifulreply.因為不能化妝，妻子的感受、表現和行為丈夫的表現、心理活動描寫，到最后參加化妝課程的行動丈夫學習化妝成功，給妻子驚喜，對妻子造成的影響第一段和第二段妻子的狀態(tài)應該要有個對照也可以寫別人聽到時候的感受，但不是重點內容Paragraph1:Hesaidhisbelovedwifepartiallylosthereyesightbecauseofdiabetes(糖尿病)andshewasnolongerabletoapplyhermake-up.Paragraph2:Sohedecidedtotakethecoursetosurprisehiswife.

Sohedecidedtotakethecoursetosurpriseher.Withoutapause,hesharedhisstory.Hemasteredawiderangeofpracticalskills,allowinghimtohelphertakeonanewlook.Surely,beingenvelopedbyanatmosphereoflove,hisbelovedwifeatpresentwasdeeplyaffected.“Inotonlywanttolearnhowtoapplyhermake-up,Iwanthertowearthemostbeautifulmake-upsoherinnerbeautyalsoshinesontheoutside.”heannounced,“Itishersmilethattouchesmostmyheart,notthemake-up.”Part2Howtoorganizeeg.TheMake-upGuyHesaidhisbelovedwifepartiallylosthereyesightbecauseofdiabetesandshewasnolongerabletoapplyhermake-up.

Fearingbeinglaughedat,shelockedherselfinherroom,abandoningherselftogreatgrief.Shewasabsolutelybeautifulevenwithoutmake-up.But

whatupsetherwasthatshesimplyfeltnotcomfortableleavingthehomewithoutmake-up.Sensingherlonelinessinacolorlessworld,Iwasalso

atalossastowhattodo.Onceinformedofthisclass,Ideterminedtolearnmake-upwithouthesitation,hopingtomakeadifference.主題升華：不是化妝而是愛讓妻子自信美麗丈夫看重的不是妻子化妝后美麗的面容，而是化妝后自信的笑容Part3Howtowrite要點描寫：動作描寫、心理描寫、語言描寫、環(huán)境描寫“群演”戲份不能多于“主角”最后一段結尾要有主題升華（1-2句）語言描寫特色銜接（linkingwords）書寫高分Tip:

當主角情緒過于單一時，可以使用其他角色的行為、表情描寫等進行側面烘托sceneactiondialoguefeelingPart3Howtowrite動作描寫、心理描寫、語言描寫、環(huán)境描寫possibleproportion(比例)Part3Howtowrite語言描寫特色介詞短語：如with結構非謂語：多用非謂語作狀語和定語復合句：定語從句、名詞性從句、狀語從句特殊句型：倒裝句、強調句、感嘆句、虛擬語氣等修辭手法：比喻、擬人、排比等Part3HowtowriteWhenMrs.MeredithheardofJhon’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.“IthinkBernardwilllikethisbrilliant(棒極的)idea!”addedMrs.Meredith.Thenextday,togetherwithherchildren,theladyvisitedthepoorfamilyonemoretime,introducingtheideatothelittleboy,hoping

thatwouldhelpouttheirroughtimes(艱難時刻)alittle.“Soundspromising.”noddedBernard.Thefourkidsheartily(高興地)discussedeverydetailsofthebusiness:fromthepackagesizeandingredientstotargetbuyersandpromotingstrategies.“Maybeourproductneedsafancynametowoo(爭取)moresalesfromsuchtightbudget.”Johnsuggested,“HowaboutHOPE?popcornofhope—sweethopeofrevitalization(復興，再生)ofeconomy,ofourcommunity,ofallneedyfamiliesandofourdreamingpopcornbusiness.”Alltheothersclappedtheirhandsandagreed“Fantastic(妙極的)name!”Part3HowtowriteWitheverythingready,Bernardstartedouthisnewbusiness.Headopteda“door-by-door”strategy,headingtotheplannedapartments,ashabby(破舊)jeanbackpackbouncing(彈，跳)upanddownbesidehisthigh(大腿),backpackstuffed(塞滿)withelaborately(精心的)wrappedpopcornpackages,popcornfillingtheairwithaninvitingmixedscent(氣味)ofbutter,sugarandsinged(微焦的)corn,thescentsmellingofhope,knockingthedooroneafteranother,peddling(兜售)hissweetsnackfacetoface,greetingeverydooranswererswith“Abagofhopebringsyouadayofsweetness!onlyforfiftypennies!”,takingeverychancereverently(虔誠地)regardlessofrefusals,frustrationsandignorance.Theresidents’willingnesstopayforthesnackwasunexpected;withinoneday,allpopcornfromawholeboxofcornwassoldout.Satisfactionandgratitudeembraced(環(huán)抱、圍繞)Bernard—moneyenoughtocoverhisfamily’s

dailycostandhisfather’smedicalbills.AsforMeredithkids,theydidn’tgetpleasurefromofferingtheideasomuchasfromhelpinglightothers’HOPE!Summary高分寫作技巧Tip1:故事要圍繞著主要人物展開。Tip2:詳細刻畫角色及其情感。Tip3:使用恰當的銜接詞以使故事更有連貫性。Tip4:使用恰當的修飾詞以使描寫更加生動。Tip5:做到首尾呼應以使故事更加有條理。Tip6:確保第二段和第一段的銜接有邏輯。使用能夠刺激感官的詞語讓文字生動活潑學會運用修辭讓語言富有活力Summary學習策略讀文章時關注主題和細節(jié)、讀新概念2&3課文并摘抄好詞好句積累、背誦常用的描寫句式摘抄每次考試后印發(fā)的優(yōu)秀學生習作，并仿寫練書寫公眾號推薦：潮實高中部英語角（2020下半年的續(xù)寫推文）Practicemakesperfect!

讀后續(xù)寫怎么寫?--高考總復習作文專題目錄1.如何續(xù)寫2.原題演練3.例句賞析4.參考范文1.如何續(xù)寫原文5要素who（誰），when（什么時候），where（發(fā)生在哪里）why（為什么），what（發(fā)生了什么）step1.審原文備注：也有6要素的說法，how(主人公是怎么樣去做某件事，做的怎么樣)原文5要素No.1誰（續(xù)寫不加新人）step1.審原文who原文5要素NO.2step1.審原文when什么時候（以一般過去時為主）原文5要素NO.3step1.審原文where在哪里（故事背景不能天馬行空篡改）原文5要素NO.4step1.審原文why為什么（主人公面臨的問題結尾應該解決）原文5要素NO.5step1.審原文what做什么（要合理發(fā)展，有效對話，推動情節(jié)發(fā)展）step2.寫句子第一段第二句第一段最后一句第二段第二句第二段最后一句關鍵4句step3.標線索標記3線索A.動作線B.情感線C.時間線step3.標線索標記3線索A.動作線（續(xù)寫最后一定大團圓閉環(huán)結尾，想清楚文章想表達什么道理或者正能量？）step3.標線索標記3線索B.情感線（續(xù)寫最后結尾一定是積極向上的感情）step3.標線索標記3線索C.時間線（建議按照時間順序續(xù)寫）2.原題演練高考原題讀后續(xù)寫題目再現閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISEThebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.3.例句賞析1.寫第一段第二句（要和第1段給出的第1句連的上）Particularlysurprisedandtired,thetwinscouldnotbelievetheireyes,juststandingthereandsayingnothing.1.寫第一段第二句（要和第1段給出的第1句連的上）Particularlysurprisedandtired,thetwinscouldnotbelievetheireyes,juststandingthereandsayingnothing.賞析：1.運用副詞particularly替代very來修飾形容詞。2.surprisedandtired押韻，是“尾韻”的修辭手法，形容詞在句首作狀語。3.standing和sayingnothing現在分詞作狀語，呈現出一幅安靜的畫面。2.寫第一段最后一句,找準第二段給出的第一句的關鍵詞，寫一句話與之連貫（可以詞匯復現法）Withthebreakfastprepared,thetwinsfelttheycouldgoupstairsafterfathersecretlywentbacktothebed.2.寫第一段最后一句,找準第二段給出的第一句的關鍵詞，寫一句話與之連貫（可以詞匯復現法）Withthebreakfastprepared,thetwinsfelttheycouldgoupstairsafterfathersecretlywentbacktothebed.賞析借鑒：1.運用了with的復合結構2.breakfast和第二段首句的breakfast復現，非常連貫。

3.寫第二段第二句Hardlyhadthemotherwokenupwhenshenoticedthebreakfast---asimple-lookingbutspecialone.

3.寫第二段第二句Hardlyhadthemotherwokenupwhenshenoticedthebreakfast---asimple-lookingbutspecialone.分析：用倒裝等高級句式，讓閱卷老師眼前一亮注意，倒裝句有多種，如though/as引起的倒裝句基礎好的大膽去用，高分必備！例句：Childashewas,heknowalot.4.第二段結尾Seeingthesurroundings,theytwobrothersfeltasifeverythingaroundthemhadbeensayingthatitwastheirlovefortheirmotherratherthanthebreakfastthatmatteredmost.4.第二段結尾Seeingthesurroundings,theytwobrothersfeltasifeverythingaroundthemhadbeensayingthatitwastheirlovefortheirmotherratherthanthebreakfastthatmatteredmost.解讀：結尾盡量升華，運用高級詞匯和句式，比如此句含有現在分詞seeing作狀語，asif引導狀語從句，后面用了虛擬語氣，that引導賓語從句，最后還有強調句型，渾然一體。4.參考范文Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Particularlysurprisedandtired,thetwinscouldnotbelievetheireyes,juststandingthereandsayingnothing.Aminutelater,fathershowedanunderstandingexpressionandbegantheconversation,“IguessyouwerepreparingaMother’sDaysurprisebutfailed,soIamgoingtohelpyou.”Thetwobrothersthenfeltmuchmoreconfidentanddidasfathertoldthem,oneonemakingasimplerbreakfastmorecarefullywhiletheotherdoingthecleaning.Withthebreakfastprepared,thetwinsfelttheycouldgoupstairsafterfathersecretlywentbacktothebed.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Hardlyhadthemotherwokenupwhenshenoticedthebreakfast---asimple-lookingbutspecialone.‘‘HappyMother’sDay,mom!’’Thetwinsexplainedthatitwasthegifttheyprepared.Motherwastheninanoceanofhappinessandwantedtoshareitwithherhusbandwhowaspretendingtobeasleep.Thefamilythenhuggedeachother.Seeingthesurroundings,theytwobrothersfeltasifeverythingaroundthemhadbeensayingthatitwastheirlovefortheirmotherratherthanthebreakfastthatmatteredmost.

讀后續(xù)寫怎么寫?--高考總復習作文專題目錄1.如何續(xù)寫2.原題演練3.例句賞析4.參考范文1.如何續(xù)寫原文5要素who（誰），when（什么時候），where（發(fā)生在哪里）why（為什么），what（發(fā)生了什么）step1.審原文備注：也有6要素的說法，how(主人公是怎么樣去做某件事，做的怎么樣)原文5要素No.1誰（續(xù)寫不加新人）step1.審原文who原文5要素NO.2step1.審原文when什么時候（以一般過去時為主）原文5要素NO.3step1.審原文where在哪里（故事背景不能天馬行空篡改）原文5要素NO.4step1.審原文why為什么（主人公面臨的問題結尾應該解決）原文5要素NO.5step1.審原文what做什么（要合理發(fā)展，有效對話，推動情節(jié)發(fā)展）step2.寫句子第一段第二句第一段最后一句第二段第二句第二段最后一句關鍵4句step3.標線索標記3線索A.動作線B.情感線C.時間線step3.標線索標記3線索A.動作線（續(xù)寫最后一定大團圓閉環(huán)結尾，想清楚文章想表達什么道理或者正能量？）step3.標線索標記3線索B.情感線（續(xù)寫最后結尾一定是積極向上的感情）step3.標線索標記3線索C.時間線（建議按照時間順序續(xù)寫）2.原題演練高考原題讀后續(xù)寫題目再現閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISEThebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.3.例句賞析1.寫第一段第二句（要和第1段給出的第1句連的上）Particularlysurprisedandtired,thetwinscouldnotbelievetheireyes,juststandingthereandsayingnothing.1.寫第一段第二句（要和第1段給出的第1句連的上）Particularlysurprisedandtired,thetwinscouldnotbelievetheireyes,juststandingthereandsayingnothing.賞析：1.運用副詞particularly替代very來修飾形容詞。2.surprisedandtired押韻，是“尾韻”的修辭手法，形容詞在句首作狀語。3.standing和sayingnothing現在分詞作狀語，呈現出一幅安靜的畫面。2.寫第一段最后一句,找準第二段給出的第一句的關鍵詞，寫一句話與之連貫（可以詞匯復現法）Withthebreakfastprepared,thetwinsfelttheycouldgoupstairsafterfathersecretlywentbacktothebed.2.寫第一段最后一句,找準第二段給出的第一句的關鍵詞，寫一句話與之連貫（可以詞匯復現法）Withthebreakfastprepared,thetwinsfelttheycouldgoupstairsafterfathersecretlywentbacktothebed.賞析借鑒：1.運用了with的復合結構2.breakfast和第二段首句的breakfast復現，非常連貫。

3.寫第二段第二句Hardlyhadthemotherwokenupwhenshenoticedthebreakfast---asimple-lookingbutspecialone.

3.寫第二段第二句Hardlyhadthemotherwokenupwhenshenoticedthebreakfast---asimple-lookingbutspecialone.分析：用倒裝等高級句式，讓閱卷老師眼前一亮注意，倒裝句有多種，如though/as引起的倒裝句基礎好的大膽去用，高分必備！例句：Childashewas,heknowalot.4.第二段結尾Seeingthesurroundings,theytwobrothersfeltasifeverythingaroundthemhadbeensayingthatitwastheirlovefortheirmotherratherthanthebreakfastthatmatteredmost.4.第二段結尾Seeingthesurroundings,theytwobrothersfeltasifeverythingaroundthemhadbeensayingthatitwastheirlovefortheirmotherratherthanthebreakfastthatmatteredmost.解讀：結尾盡量升華，運用高級詞匯和句式，比如此句含有現在分詞seeing作狀語，asif引導狀語從句，后面用了虛擬語氣，that引導賓語從句，最后還有強調句型，渾然一體。4.參考范文Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Particularlysurprisedandtired,thetwinscouldnotbelievetheireyes,juststandingthereandsayingnothing.Aminutelater,fathershowedanunderstandingexpressionandbegantheconversation,“IguessyouwerepreparingaMother’sDaysurprisebutfailed,soIamgoingtohelpyou.”Thetwobrothersthenfeltmuchmoreconfidentanddidasfathertoldthem,oneonemakingasimplerbreakfastmorecarefullywhiletheotherdoingthecleaning.Withthebreakfastprepared,thetwinsfelttheycouldgoupstairsafterfathersecretlywentbacktothebed.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Hardlyhadthemotherwokenupwhenshenoticedthebreakfast---asimple-lookingbutspecialone.‘‘HappyMother’sDay,mom!’’Thetwinsexplainedthatitwasthegifttheyprepared.Motherwastheninanoceanofhappinessandwantedtoshareitwithherhusbandwhowaspretendingtobeasleep.Thefamilythenhuggedeachother.Seeingthesurroundings,theytwobrothersfeltasifeverythingaroundthemhadbeensayingthatitwastheirlovefortheirmotherratherthanthebreakfastthatmatteredmost.讀后續(xù)寫微技能指導

—自然環(huán)境描寫Itwasacoldwinternight,thefreezingwindwhippedcruellyonpeople’sfaces.Apoorly-dressedlittlegirlcrouchedinthecorner,shakingconstantly.FunctionsofNaturalSettingDescription渲染了憂傷的氣氛。揭示了故事發(fā)生的背景。襯托人物內心情感。HowtodescribetheNaturalSetting？一.使用恰當的動詞關于風的動詞：blow吹；howl嚎叫；whip鞭打；sting刺痛;kiss親吻Theicywindstarted__________,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife.howling關于雨的動詞：fall落下pourdown傾盆；beatagainst..拍打；crashagainst..擊打;Thedreadfulrainwas_______wildlyagainstthewindow.beating關于雪的動詞：float/fall/drift飄落;dance跳舞;meltaway融化；cover覆蓋Thepuresnowflakeswere________gracefullyintheair.dancing關于星星的動詞：shine閃耀;sparkle/twinkle閃耀；blink眨眼睛；

hide躲藏；dot布滿

Theskywasdottedwithsparklingstars.

關于太陽、陽光的動詞：comeout出來;rise升起;set落下；kiss親吻；

floodin照射進來；bebathedin沐浴在;

Thebeachwasbathedin

thesunshine.

Morningsunshine________throughtheopencurtains.floodsinItwasatoughrainynight.Thewindwas_______dreadfullyandtherainwas_______fromtheheaven,_______againstthebranchesoflinedtrees.Theworldwas_______withaseaofdarkness.howlingpouringcoveredwhipping關于風的動詞：howl嚎叫；blow吹；whip鞭打；sting刺痛;kiss親吻關于雨的動詞：beatagainst..拍打；crashagainst..擊打;pourdown傾盆；fall關于雪的動詞：dance跳舞;float/fall/drift飄落;meltaway融化；blanket裹住

cover覆蓋關于星星的動詞：shine閃耀;sparkle/twinkle閃耀；wink/blink眨眼睛；

hide躲藏；decorate裝飾;dot裝飾關于太陽、陽光的動詞：comeout出來;rise升起;set落下；kiss親吻；

floodin照射進來；bebathedin沐浴在;一.使用恰當的動詞二.使用生動的形容詞agentle

warmwindanicyhowlingwindbreeze關于風的形容詞積極形容詞：gentle/soft（輕柔的）;warm(溫暖的)；pleasant(令人愉悅的)消極形容詞：icy/freezing（冰冷的）;

strong/violent（猛烈的）；dreadful可怕的；howling(呼嘯的)；biting（刺骨的）；bone-chilling（刺骨的）二.使用生動的形容詞關于雨的形容詞積極的形容詞：gentle/light小的;pleasant令人心情愉悅的消極的形容詞：icy/freezing（冰冷的）；heavy；dreadful可怕的;讓人討厭的Thelightrainwasstillfallingslowly,butasuddenwarmthhitme.關于雪的形容詞積極的形容詞：feathery鵝毛般的;pure/clean干凈的純潔的消極的形容詞：icy/freezing（冰冷的）；heavy；dreadful可怕的;讓人討厭的thepurefeatherysnowflakes鵝毛般純潔的雪花關于星星的形容詞積極的形容詞：lovely;little;sparkling/shining/twinkling亮閃閃的消極的形容詞：pale/faint暗淡的；starless沒有星星的

thefew______stars

零零散散的暗淡的星星

thedark_______night昏暗的沒有星星的夜晚palestarless關于太陽/陽光的形容詞積極的形容詞：warm；sunny;amber-like像琥珀一樣的;dazzling耀眼的消極的形容詞：burning/scorching火辣辣的thewarmamber-likesunshine溫暖的琥珀色的陽光從名著中學表達：1.Thecloudsoverthelandnowroselikemountainsandthecoastwasonlyalonggreenlinewiththegraybluehillsbehindit.Thewaterwasadarkbluenow,sodarkthatitwasalmostpurple.-----TheOldManandSea

陸地上空的云朵仿佛連綿高聳的山峰一樣上升著，海岸也抽成了一條狹長的綠色的線，岸背后淡青色的小山崗。此刻的海水呈現深藍色，深的簡直發(fā)紫。Hemingway2.Alloverthiswindingstretchofwater,whatmeetstheeyesisasilkenfieldofleaves,reachingratherhighabovethesurface,liketheskirtsofdancinggirlsinalltheirgrace.Hereandthere,layersofleavesaredottedwithwhitelotusblossoms,someindemurebloom,othersinshybud,likescatteringpearlsortwinklingstars,ourbeautiesjustoutofthebath.

----MoonlightovertheLotusPondZhuZiqing曲曲折折的荷塘上面，彌望的是田田的葉子。葉子出水很高，像亭亭的舞女的裙，層層的葉子中間，零星地點綴著些白花，有裊娜地開著的，有羞澀的打著朵兒的，正如一粒粒的明珠，又如碧天里的星星，又如剛出浴的美人。Thedark,rainyevening,thewind,andthethunderingcloudsheldmeentirelyintheirpower.

—

“Anne’sBestFriend”

仿寫：藍天，白云，鳥鳴，鮮花讓我們驚呆了。Thebluesky,whiteclouds,thesongofbirdsandthefragrantflowersholdusentirelyintheirpower.Thepurefeatherysnowflakesdancedintheair,makingabeautiful

picture.Sparklingstarswinkedatmeinadarkeningsky.Summary:描寫______的感官形容詞。視覺sparkling/twinklingdarkdimsteepwindingfeatherythe______lightthe_______starsthe_______nightthe_______snowflakesa_______pathdimsparklingfeatherydarkwinding閃閃發(fā)光的漆黑的昏暗的險峻的蜿蜒的鵝毛般的Theicybitingwindstung（叮）myface.Thegentlewarmwindkissedherface,comfortingallhertiredness.Summary:描寫的感官______形容詞觸覺硬的輕柔的火辣辣的冰冷的潮濕的絲滑的1.the_______wind2.the_______rainhardsoft/gentleicy/freezingburningwet/dampsilkyThehowlingwindThedeafeningapplauseSummary:描寫_____的感官形容詞聽覺high大聲的low小聲的noisy吵鬧的deafening震耳欲聾的howling怒吼的melodious悅耳的gurgling潺潺的thegurgling

riverthemelodiousvoicethesweetflowersthefreshairSummary:描寫______的形容詞嗅覺smelly/stinky難聞的fragrant香的Ilookedoutofthecarwindow,________rivers,______flowers,_______wind,________beachesand______valleysholdingmeentirelyintheirfascination.windingfragrantdeepwarmsunnyConclusion:sight/touch/sound/smellAtnighttheskybecameclearerandthestarsgrewbrighter.Itwassoquiet.Therewas