讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)原文—田徑少女

"WhatamIdoingwrong?”JasmineWilsonthoughttoherselfassheheavilybreathed.Herbreathingcouldbeheardfromnearbybutwasdrownedoutbythefirmstepsofseveralpairsoffeethittingtheground,eachdesperatelypushingforwardtogettothefinishinglinebeforetheother.Itwasherfirsttrackmeeting,andshehadalmostgivenupmidwaythroughtherace.

Shedidn'tknowwhyshehaddecidedtochoosetrackandfieldasanafter-schoolactivity.Asshetriedtothinkofareasonwhyshehadchosentodoasportthatrequiresalotofhardtraininginsteadofsomethingeasier,sheassumedthatshehadsimplywantedtotryitout.

Trackpracticewasmuchharderthanshehadanticipatedandveryexhausting.Atleast,that'swhatitfeltliketoher.Whensheobservedherteammates，theyseemedtoruneffortlessly.Shewantedtobelikethem,butitwasdifficult.

"Ms.Wilson,doyouhaveagoalinmind？"BettyJones，thecoachofthetrackteamaskedJasmineonedayafterpractice."Ijustwantyoutothinkaboutthat.Whatareyourunningfor？Whoareyourunningfor？Whatwillyougetoutofthisexperience，andhowwillthathelpyouroverallgoal？Thesearequestionsthatyoureallyneedtoconsider，Ms.Wilson."TheolderwomanplacedahandonJasmine'sshoulderwithafirmlook."Youdon'thavetoanswermerightnow，butIlookforwardtohearingyouranswers."

Attherace，smallbeadsofsweatrandownthesidesofJasmine’sflushedfaceanddrippedontothefadedlettersofthehighschooltrackteam'suniform，whichwasclosetoherskin.Jasminecouldbarelyfocusonthepresentmomentbecauseherheartwaspoundingtooloudinherears.

Thensheheardsomeoneask,"Wilson!Ms.Wilson，areyouallright？"Thefamiliarvoicebroughthercomebacktohersenses.要求：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Para1

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energy.中文意思“我做錯(cuò)了什么？”JasmineWilson深呼吸著，心想。她的呼吸聲可以從附近聽(tīng)到，但被幾雙腳落地的堅(jiān)實(shí)步伐淹沒(méi)了，每雙腳都拼命向前推，趕在另一雙腳之前到達(dá)終點(diǎn)線(xiàn)。這是她第一次參加田徑比賽，她幾乎在比賽中途放棄了。她不知道自己為什么決定選擇田徑作為課后活動(dòng)。當(dāng)她試圖思考自己選擇做一項(xiàng)需要大量艱苦訓(xùn)練而不是更容易的運(yùn)動(dòng)的原因時(shí)，她認(rèn)為自己只是想嘗試一下。田徑練習(xí)比她預(yù)想的要困難得多，而且非常累人。至少，這就是她的感覺(jué)。當(dāng)她觀(guān)察她的隊(duì)友時(shí)，他們似乎毫不費(fèi)力地跑了起來(lái)。她想和他們一樣，但這很難。練習(xí)結(jié)束后的一天，田徑隊(duì)教練貝蒂·瓊斯問(wèn)賈斯敏：“威爾遜女士，你心中有目標(biāo)嗎？”。“我只是想讓你想想。你在為什么競(jìng)選？你在為誰(shuí)競(jìng)選？你會(huì)從這次經(jīng)歷中得到什么，這對(duì)你的總體目標(biāo)有什么幫助？威爾遜女士，這些都是你真正需要考慮的問(wèn)題。”年長(zhǎng)的女士把手放在賈斯敏的肩膀上，神情堅(jiān)定。“你現(xiàn)在不必回答我，但我期待著聽(tīng)到你的回答?！痹诒荣愔?，小汗珠順著Jasmine臉紅的臉兩側(cè)流下，滴在高中田徑隊(duì)制服上褪色的字母上，這些字母緊貼著她的皮膚。Jasmine幾乎無(wú)法專(zhuān)注于當(dāng)下，因?yàn)樗男奶谒亩淅锾罅恕Ｈ缓笏?tīng)到有人問(wèn)：“威爾遜！威爾遜女士，你還好嗎？”熟悉的聲音讓她回過(guò)神來(lái)。續(xù)寫(xiě)點(diǎn)撥故事簡(jiǎn)介：

JasmineWilson報(bào)名了課后田徑練習(xí)，而日常練習(xí)卻沒(méi)有想象中容易，教練BettyJones試圖進(jìn)行目標(biāo)引導(dǎo)。在第一次比賽中，Jasmine不堪疲憊，想要放棄，陷入迷茫。續(xù)寫(xiě)重點(diǎn)Para.1:①見(jiàn)到教練Betty，Jasmine會(huì)說(shuō)什么？②教練Betty會(huì)說(shuō)什么、做什么，使Jasmine充滿(mǎn)力量？Para.2:①重新振作后，Jasmine會(huì)做出怎樣的決定？②跑步結(jié)束后，Jasmine有了什么新的感悟？參考思路Para.1:Jasmine情緒低落，向教練傾訴→教練安撫并鼓勵(lì)Jasmine→Jasmine重拾信心Para.2:Jasmine調(diào)整狀態(tài)堅(jiān)持比賽→教練陪伴鼓勵(lì)Jasmine→Jasmine順利完成比賽，收到祝賀，明白了田徑的意義參考范文：Whenshelookedup,itwasthecoachoftheirteam,BerryJones.ItwasthenthatJasminetwitchedhermouthwithtearsandsweatonherfaceandtoldherthat,shecouldn’tmoveaninch.NosoonerhadsheutteredthelastsyllablethanBettygentlystrokedherhead."DoyoustillrememberthequestionsthatIaskedyoutheotherday?"Bettyencouragedher,adding.“Confrontedwithtiredness,youaresupposedtobeatyourselfwithdeterminationaswellaspersistence,whichshouldbeyourultimategoalofrunning."Withherwordsechoinginherears,Jasminepluckedupcouragetogiveitatry,determinedandmotivated!Jasminetookadeepbreathandsuddenlyfeltfullofenergy.Puffingandpanting,shedraggedherlegswithallherstrength,movingtowardsthefinishline.Withherheartthumpingfuriouslyandpulseracing,shedashedasswiftlyasshecouldinthelast50meters.Instantlyshereachedthefinishline,,thunderousapplauseerupted.Bettyembracedherinabighug.ItwasthenthatJasmineshedtearsofjoymingledwithappreciation.Haditnotbeenforthecase,shewouldn’thaverealizedthegoalthatshewasrunningfor--Itwasbeatingherselfwithsteelywillanddetermination.點(diǎn)評(píng)：這篇續(xù)寫(xiě)文章情節(jié)完整合理，描寫(xiě)生動(dòng)到位，語(yǔ)言恰當(dāng)高級(jí)，充分把所學(xué)運(yùn)用到實(shí)際寫(xiě)作中，書(shū)寫(xiě)認(rèn)真、整潔、工整。默寫(xiě)版：Whenshelookedup,itwasthecoachoftheirteam,BerryJones.__________________________________________________________________________________________就在那時(shí)，Jasmine流著眼淚和汗水抽搐著嘴，告訴她，她一寸都不能動(dòng).NosoonerhadsheutteredthelastsyllablethanBettygentlystrokedherhead."DoyoustillrememberthequestionsthatIaskedyoutheotherday?"Bettyencouragedher,adding.________________________________________________________________________“面對(duì)疲勞，你應(yīng)該用決心和毅力打敗自己，這應(yīng)該是你跑步的最終目標(biāo)?！盬ithherwordsechoinginherears,_________________________________________________________________Jasmine鼓起勇氣嘗試了一下，決心堅(jiān)定，充滿(mǎn)動(dòng)力!Jasminetookadeepbreathandsuddenlyfeltfullofenergy.______________________________________________________________她大口大口地喘著粗氣，用盡全力拖著腿向終點(diǎn)線(xiàn)走去.Withherheartthumpingfuriouslyandpulseracing,shedashedasswiftlyasshecouldinthelast50meters.____________________________________________