PracticalWriting

---EvaluateandPolishWhatcontributetoagoodcomposition?GoodcompositionLanguageCohesionContentAppearancePart1.Evaluate假如你是李華，你的好朋友Jane來信訴說每次放假返校她都出現(xiàn)疲憊，焦慮，學(xué)習(xí)效率低等癥狀，所以想讓你就如何克服假期綜合癥(Post-holidaySyndrome)給出一些建議。內(nèi)容包括：1.表示理解和問候；2.假期綜合癥產(chǎn)生的原因及癥狀；3.克服假期綜合癥的建議。體裁Genre寫作對象Target人稱Person時態(tài)Tense寫作目的Purpose要點Keypoints建議信好朋友Jane第一人稱+第二人稱一般現(xiàn)在時就如何克服假期綜合癥給出一些建議。1.表示理解和問候；2.假期綜合癥產(chǎn)生的原因及癥狀；3.克服假期綜合癥的建議。StructureandGradingcriteriaP1:background:每次放假返校她狀態(tài)不佳2’

+writingpurpose寫信給出克服假期綜合癥的建議3’P2:Reasonandsymptom:假期作息不規(guī)律；疲憊/焦慮/學(xué)習(xí)效率低3’

+Suggestion:調(diào)整作息/積極運動/保持樂觀積極的心態(tài)3’P3:hopesandwishes:希望采納建議+成功調(diào)整狀態(tài)2’(得分含語言分)

handwriting:1’structure:1’GroupworkDiscussandevaluatetheassignedcompositionbasedontherequirementsinyourworksheet.

(3minsforgroupdiscussion)Passage1Passage2Passage3Passage4Problemsinyourcompositions語言Language1.時態(tài)使用不當(dāng)2.句與句邏輯聯(lián)系不緊密3.從句使用不當(dāng)4.句型句式單一內(nèi)容

Content1.首段沒有點明體裁2.沒有明顯關(guān)鍵詞，寫作要點不突出3.遺漏要點4.沒有思路，無法提出切題建議5.盲目套用過往背記內(nèi)容，針對性不夠強銜接Cohesion1.沒有過渡語，要點之間過渡生硬卷面Appearance1.書寫不規(guī)范2.段落空格位置不規(guī)范Part2.PolishAppearanceisimportantbutpeopleoftenpaymoreattentiontowhat’sinside.外表雖然重要人們更多關(guān)注內(nèi)在Advanced

expressionscanmakeyourwritingstandoutfromothers’.亮點使你的作文從千萬篇作文中脫穎而出.2.1Polishyourlanguage2.1.1CommonsentencepatternsofsuggestionlettersPara1I'msorrytohearthatyouarehavingtroublefittinginyournewschool.Suchproblemsarequitenormal.Perhapsthefollowingsuggestionsarehelpful.Knowingthat

youhavedifficultyindoing…..,Iamdelighted/pleased/elated

/i?le?t?d/toofferyousomeconstructivesuggestionsabout/concerning……,hopingtheycanbeofgreatbenefit/use(=bebeneficial/useful).Wordsfailtoexpressmyconcernwhen…..I’mwritingto…2.1Polishyourlanguage2.1.1CommonsentencepatternsofsuggestionlettersPara

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Youcouldconsidertakingthefollowingstepstoimprovethesituation.Attheverybeginning,youaresupposedtodo…sothatyoucan....AsfarasIamconcerned,…isofgreatimportance.Therefore,youhadbetter…and....AsfarasIamconcerned/Frommyperspective,thefollowingsuggestionsareofhelp/benefit/servicetoyou.Initially,(首先)youhadbetter…….,fromwhichyoucanbenefitalot.What’smore/Moreover,

itcouldn’tbebetterifyoucan……..

Lastbutnotleast,

beconfidentandoptimisticbecausenothingistoosmalltocelebrate.2.1Polishyourlanguage2.1.1Commonsentencepatternsofsuggestionletters建議列舉相關(guān)句式Itcouldn’tbebetterthandoingsth.沒有什么比做某事更好了Itwouldbebetterifyoudosth.要是能做某事就更好了It’sadvisable/suggested/recommended/advocatedthatyoushoulddosth.強烈建議你做某事Whatishighly/stronglyrecommended/preferred/suggestedisthatyoushoulddosth.

強烈建議你做某事Doingsthishighlyrecommended,whichwill+原因/意義

強烈推薦你做某事，這…Ofequalimportanceis/are……是同等重要的Youaresupposedto…2.1Polishyourlanguage2.1.1CommonsentencepatternsofsuggestionlettersPara3That’swhatIwanttotellyou,hopingthesuggestionsabovecanhelpyou.Istronglybelievethat/Iamfirmlyconvincedthatyouwill……..soon.Iwouldhighlyappreciateyourconsiderationofmyproposalsandhopeyoucanputthemintoeffectassoonaspossible.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.2.1Polishyourlanguage2.1.2Usedifferentsentencepatterns1.強調(diào)句2.with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)3.定語從句4.分詞作狀語5.notonly…butalso…6.on/upondoing7.insistthatsb.(should)do8.the+比較級…the+比較級…9.so/such…that…10.it作形式主語11.倒裝句注意句子之間的邏輯關(guān)系2.2Cohesion巧妙串聯(lián)起：firstofall,tobegin/startwith,aboveall...asisknowntoall承：inaddition,besides,moreover,additionallyinotherwords,lastbutnotleast,foronething,foranother…轉(zhuǎn)：however,ontheotherhand,onthecontrary,nevertheless...合：Inmyopinion,allinall,inaword,inshort,tosumup,therefore,insummary...2.3ContentTips：1.知識遷移，整合現(xiàn)有資源2.聯(lián)系生活想建議3.緊扣題目假定你是李華，你的朋友Tony剛剛升入高三，因為暑期短他沒休息好，所以現(xiàn)在狀態(tài)很差。面臨高考壓力，Tony不知所措。請你給他寫一封信表示安慰，要點如下：1、表示難過和理解；2、就如何調(diào)整狀態(tài)提出建議。假定你是李華，高三學(xué)習(xí)壓力大，外教讓同學(xué)之間以寫紙條的方式互相鼓勵，你選擇寫給你的同桌Ryan，因為他最近有些焦慮。內(nèi)容包括：1.安慰對方；2.給予鼓勵。PracticeUsewhatwehavelearntandrewritethetextbelowtomakeitmorecoherentandlogical.I’msorrytohearthatyouareexperiencingPost-holidaySyndrome.IcompletelyunderstandyourfeelingsbecauseIhavegonethroughthesamethingbefore.Iamwritingtogivesomeadvice.SosorryamIto

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thatyouareexperiencingPost-holidaySyndrome,onaccountofwhichIamwritingtoextend/express/conveymysincere/heartfeltempathysinceIhavegonethroughthesamethingbeforeandprovidesomeadvicewithyou.PracticeUsewhatwehavelearntandrewritethetextbelowtomakeitmorecoherentandlogical.Youcanaddinformationifneeded.Ihopethesetipswillbehelpfultoyou.Firstly,youcantrydrinkingcoffeeorteatohelpstayawake.Secondly,youcantrydoingsomesportstokeepyourbodyinenergeticcondition.Finally,makesuretogetplentyofsleepduringthosefewdays.ChecklistHaveIspeltallthewordscorrectly?HaveIusedcorrectpunctuation(標(biāo)點符號)?HaveIusedcorrecttense(時態(tài))?Arethereanyfragments(成分殘缺)inmysentencestructure?CanIimprovesomeofthediction(選詞)used?Arethesubjectsinmyessayvaried(多變的)?HaveIusedsomelinkingwordstomakemyessaycoherent?Frommyperspectives,thefollowingsuggestionsareofbenefittoyou.Tobeginwith,youaresupposedtograduallyreadjustyoursleepcycleandeatinghabitstonormalpatternsafteryourvacation,whichwillalleviate

/??li?vie?t/減輕

thetransitionbacktoworkorschool.Additionally,itwouldbebetterifyouconsiderengaginginphysicalactivitiestocombat與…作斗爭fatigueandlethargy/?leθ?d?i/無精打采

,suchasabriskwalkoralightworkout,whichcanhelptoboostyourenergylevels.Finally,ofequalimportanceareavoidingnegativethoughtsandfocusingonthebeautyinourdailylifeinstead,whichhelptorekindleyourenthusiasmandovercomethePost-holidaySyndrome.SosorryamIto

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thatyouareexperiencingPost-holidaySyndrome,onaccountofwhichIamwritingtoextend/express/conveymysincere/heartfeltempathysinceIhavegonethroughthesamethingbefore,andprovidesomeadvicewithyou.Asisoftenthecase,manystudentssufferfrompost-holidaysyndromewithsymptomsincludingfatigue,lowerlearningefficiency,difficultyconcentratingandeveninsomnia/?n?s?mni?/.Whenitcomestothereasonaccountingforit,itisundeniablethatmanystudentstendtooverindulge/???v?r?n?d?ld?/themselvesinplaying,binge-watching追劇

andovereatingduringtheholidays,makingthemfailtokeeptheroutinecampuslifeafterreturningtoschool.Frommyperspectives,thefollowingsuggestionsareofbenefittoyou.Tobeginwith,youaresupposedto