題型九：告知回復信&友情感悟類讀后續(xù)寫

一、告知回復信

告知信是告訴對方某個情況或活動?；貜托攀轻槍υ儐栃诺幕貜?，往往是對

對方詢問的某項活動或中國傳統(tǒng)文化風俗方面的相關情況的答復。

寫作步驟：

1.告知/回復某人某事（寫信背景、目的）

2.相關事宜

3.期盼回復

【案例分析】

（全國卷n改編）假定你是校排球隊隊長李華。請你寫封郵件告知你的隊友

Chris球隊近期將參加比賽，內容包括:1.比賽信息2賽前準備;3.表達期待。

注意:寫作詞數(shù)應為80左右。

DearChris,

I'mexcitedtoinformyouourteamistopeteinanimportantvolleyballmatchnext

week.

Asscheduled,theeventwillbeheldinourschoolgymat9amnextSunday.To

makefullpreparationsforit,Ihavemadeaspecifictrainingplan.Alltheteammembers

aresupposedtotakethetrainingpunctually.Additionally,weareexpectedtopractice

alotinanefforttoimproveourskillsandcooperatebetterwitheachother.Idohope

wecandoagoodjobthroughjointefforts.

Eagerlylookingforwardtoyourearlyreply.

Yours,

LiHua

【素材積累】

開頭句［告知/回復某人某事（寫信背景、目的）］

1.Hereisapieceofexcitingnews!Therewillbeavolleyballmatchnextmonth.

2.1canhardlywaittosharewithyoutheexcitingnewsthatafolkmusicfestivalisto

beheldinourcity.

3.Learningyouareenthusiasticabouttheartfestival,I'mdelightedtosharewithyou

somedetails.得

4.Hereissomerelevantinformationthatyouaredeeplyconcernedabout.

篇中旬（說明相關情況）

5.Thecourseisarrangedtostartfromwhichwilllastonemonthwithonelecture

eachdayfrom...to...

6.Thenextclassisaboutcalligraphy,forwhichyoushouldmakesomepreparations.

7.Notonlydoestheactivityarousestudents*interestinreading,butitalsocultivates

students9loveforknowledge.

8.Thematchwilltakeplacebetween...and...,sowe'dbetterarrivealittleearlier.

9.1hopethechangeofthecoursearrangementwillnotcauseyoutoomuch

trouble/inconvenience.

lO.Inpreparationfortheingevent,youaresupposedtocollectsomematerials

regardingthetraditionalfestival.

結尾句（結尾點題，表示期待）

11.eandexperiencerealChinesecultureyourself.

12.1fyouwanttoknowanythingelse,pleasedon'thesitatetocontactme.

13.HopewhatissaidabovecangiveyouabetterunderstandingoftraditionalChinese

shadowplay.

二、友情感悟類讀后續(xù)寫

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

（2022?浙江首考改編）WhenDr.Hendersonwasassigning（指定）projectmatesfor

hispsychologyclass,Isecretlyhopedthathewouldpairmewithmybestfriendorat

leastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith."Aboveall,Ihopedhewouldn'tassign

metoworkwiththefiercelypetitiveandextremelyseriousfellowwhoalwayswore

darkclothesandapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch."Asfate（命運）wouldhaveit,

Dr.HendersonverydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthatIwould

beworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.

Iwentuptomynewteammateandintroducedmyself.Helookedatmeasthough

Iweren'tthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablymake

himfailtogetanAinthecourse.Hewasn'tmeanorabusive;hejustgavemethe

impressionthathecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.

Needlesstosay,Ididn'tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff,butI

triedtomakethebestofitanddidn'tsayanythingforfearthatIwouldmakethings

worse.

Theprojectrequiredeachteamtodevelopahypothesis（假說），setupan

experimenttotestthehypothesis,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.

Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.

WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject,Iwasuneasy.Herewasthis

challengingstudentwhohadareputationforsinglemindednessandgoodgradesthe

exactoppositeofme.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint,butstoppedshort

becauseIdidn'twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout,Idecidedto

sticktoitnomatterwhat.Afterlongdiscussionswesomehowagreedtodoastudyon

thepsychologicalwellbeingofteenagers,|wasn'tsurewhatitmeantexactly,butatleast

wehadatopic

注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右2請按如下格式在以下位置作答。

Pl:Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.

P2:OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.

主題特點：

友情感悟類涉及兩人或其中一人遇到了某種困難或者兩人之間存在某種誤會。續(xù)

寫部分往往是如何幫助朋友或在朋友幫助下如何成功解決問題，彌補破碎的友誼,

最后是主題升華。其中常用的描寫涉及后悔、內疚、欣慰、激動、興奮、感激之

情等，心理描寫之回憶兩人日常溫馨相處點滴等。

三步法：第一步:友情出現(xiàn)危機或誤會/朋友的困難境;第二步:友情的彌補/解決困

難（動作鏈和場景描寫）;第三步:友誼帶來的改變，友情的升華（感悟成長）。

寫作步驟：

步驟1：讀原文理基本要素和2線

Character:______________________________________

When:_______________________________________

Where:_______________________________________

What:當Henderson博士分配項目搭檔時，“我”希望和最好的朋友或玩得來的同

學分在一組,但博士偏偏把“我”和一個高冷學霸分在一組，他根本不把“我”放在眼

里?！拔摇币膊桓时豢幢?，硬著頭皮開啟了課題。

情節(jié)線:Dr.Henderson安排研究小組一作者被安排與一位自己原想避開的同學合

作一作者主動向搭檔介紹自己一搭檔冷漠對待一作者害怕事情更糟，什么也沒說

一項目要求兩人合作，最終兩人其享成績一作者與搭檔討論項目時局促不安一作

者的矛盾心理一最終確定課題一（續(xù)寫）“我們”一起制訂計劃;得知他住院…

情感線:1:不情愿一自慚形穢一想放棄又不甘心一決心堅持下去搭檔:不情愿

步驟2：“以舊帶新”2原則（421原則4街接、2情線、1主題;ARE原則action、

response>emotion）

兩段首句定一框銜接①:開頭句銜接首句“我們開始定期碰面制定計劃”可寫—

過渡句:搭檔給“我”的新印象一“我”是什么表現(xiàn)（不愿拖后腿）。

銜接②:尾句銜接第二段首句中的“得知他住院”可寫

二框二首1主題彳釘接③:開頭句銜接首句中的“得知他重病住院”可寫

過渡句:“我”努力完成剩下的課題任務T課題獲得A等一告訴搭檔，搭檔開心。

銜接④:尾句銜接續(xù)寫_____________________________________________________

1主題:比成功更重要的是友誼。

情感線：1：吃驚T擔憂、后悔一積極、投入一吃驚、激動一高興

搭檔:嚴肅、認真一擔憂一高興。

步驟3思伏筆添細節(jié)原續(xù)更融洽

捕捉原文所設伏筆，充盈過渡句細節(jié)并合理銜接，以使續(xù)寫段落在邏輯和內容更

符合原文基調。

原文伏筆點與過渡句中可與伏筆銜接的細節(jié)

Para.1.......workwiththefiercelypetitiveandextremelyseriousfellow

Para.2IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimback;hejustgavemethe

impressionthathecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone一

面對成績優(yōu)秀而高傲的搭檔感到自卑

續(xù)寫第一段涉及的項目進行過程中可描寫

Para.5Ididn'twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.Idecidedtostick

toitnomatterwhat一不臨陣退縮;好強;勇于堅持

續(xù)寫第二段可寫___________________________________________________________

Para.2...makehimfailtogetanA

Para.4..wouldbesharedbybothstudents

續(xù)寫第二段可寫____________________________________________________________

Para.2Ifelt...asthoughhejustgavemetheimpression...一'最初“我”對搭檔的感

覺改變；

續(xù)寫兩段中蘊含著“我”的改變:“我”對搭檔看法的“我”對課題態(tài)度的改變。

步驟4沿原文特點寫3好表達（準確、豐富、地道）

原文語氣詼諧幽默，利用口語Asfatewouldhaveit,beingbrushedoff,chickening

out等幽默輕松的表達:在陳述事實時，復合句很多;利用虛擬語氣描寫人物神態(tài)。

續(xù)寫時應學會借鑒和仿效，如續(xù)寫第一段可寫“我，，的投入是twocents5worth,第二

段可寫“我”的showmanship,這樣才能與原語言風格保持一致。

【參考例文】

Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Themorewemet,themoreI

enviedhisintelligenceandhisabilitytoapproacheverydetail,OnceIgatheredupmy

courageandaskedhimwhyhewassoserious,Tomysurprise,herepliedthathedidn't

havetimeforsmalltalkorsocalledfriendsthatwouldwastehistime,Heevenadded

whenhedidchoosesomeonetobehisfriend,theywouldbefriendsforlife.Asthe

termworeon,Iputinmytwocents1worth,buthe,asthedrivingforce,grew

surprisinglypaler.

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Without

anydelay,Irushedtothehospital.Seeinghispaleface.Ifeltawaveofregret.Sensing

hisworry,IassuredhimIwouldnotlethimdownandtoldhimthatheshould

concentrateongettingbetter,Ipouredmoretimeandenergyintothatprojectthanever

before,andeventuallydidmylevelbesttopresentourfindingswithmyshowmanship.

Tomyamazement,wewereawardedanA!When1toldhimaboutoursharedsuccess,

hesmiledandthankedmeforcarryingon.Andhewasright:webecamefriendsforlife.

【練習】

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

Itwasmyfirstdayofschool.Ilovedschool:thesmellofchalkandcoloredcrayons

andhavingmyowndeskthatwasjustmysize.However,therewasonebigproblem

withschool:Mildred.

DailywhenIwalkedtheshortdistancehomeafterschool,Mildredwouldhitme

andscareme.Iwasabsolutelyterrifiedofher.Shehadfailedfirstgradeandwasayear

olderthanme.Mildreddidn'thaveanyfriends,sosheseemedtoconcentrateonmaking

enemies.BecauseIwasoneofthesmallestchildreninfirstgrade,shehadselectedme

ashernumberoneenemy.

Assoonasthedismissalbellrangeachday,myheartstartedtopoundandIblinked

fastsothatIwouldn'tcry.

Prettysoonmymotherfiguredoutsomethingwaswrongatschool.Ididn'twantto

tellheraboutMildred.Mothercontinuedtoquestionme,andIfinallysobbedoutthe

wholestory.Ibeggednottogotoschoolanddidn'tsleepmuchthatnight.Thenext

morningshesaid,"Marion,I'mgoingtowalkupthehillwithyoutoday.Ibelievewe'll

seeMildred."Mildredwalkedfromwayacrossdowntoschool.Sheneverbotheredme

onthewaytoschool,onlyafterward.

“Oh,mama,pleasedon'tdothat!Don'tsayanythingtoMildred.Itwilljustmake

hermad.Letmestayhomebymyself.Please,mama.

“Hurryandgetdressed,Marion.^^Hervoicewasgentle,butquitefirm.

"Tleeease,mama."

“Trust,Marion.Ihaveaplan.”

Webundledupagainstthebittercoldwindandstartedout.Maybewewouldn'tsee

Mildred,Ihoped.Butmymotherhadthisconfidentlook.1knewthelookwell,andI

hadasinkingfeelingthatwewouldseeMildredandthatwewoulduseher“plan”.

Justasweturnedaroundatacomer,wespottedMildred.Wewaitedafewmoments

assheapproachedus."Hello,Mildred/9mymothersaidquietly.

注意:L續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右2請按如下格式在以下位置作答。

Pl:Mildredstopped,frozenasstillasastatue.

P2:Mildredchewedonherbottomlipandthennodded.

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

WhenmyfriendAveryand1triedoutforAliceinWonderland,however,things

wenttheoppositeway.

"Ireallyhope1getpickedtobeAlice,"saidAvery.

“You'dmakeagreatAlice!,91said,"Idon'tcarewhatpart1getaslongasPminit.”

“Soyou'dbehappytohaveasmallpartliketheDormouse?nsheasked.

“Exactly!”Isaid.“OreventheCheshireCatwouldbegood."

Afewdayslater,AveryandIracedovertothetheateroffice,wherethedirector

hadpostedthecastlist.

"Wow!"saidAvery."YougotthepartofAliceandIgotthepartoftheMarchHare.

“Thatcan'tberight,nIsaid."Theremustbesomemistake!99

But1reallyandtrulywasgiventhepartofAlice.I'mprettysurethereasonwhyI'd

donewellisthatIhadn'tbeennervousatallduringtheaudition.AndthereasonwhyI

hadn'tbeennervousisthatithadn'tevenoccurredtomethatIcouldgetthemajorrole.

“Doyouwanttoeoverafterschoolandwecanpracticeourlines?"Iasked.

“Youmeanpracticingyourlines?"Averysaid,notevenlookingatme."No,thanks.

I'mprettybusythisweek.”

“OK,"Isaid.t6Howaboutsomedaynextweek?”

"Sorry/shemumbled.6TmprettysureI'mbusyforever.99

Thatnightatdinner,aftermyparentscongratulatedmeongettingtheleadrole,

theyaskedhowIfeltaboutit.

“Well,I'mconfused,"Isaid.“AverywassoupsetthatIwaspickedtobeAlice,she

prettymuchthrewawayourfriendship.

“HmmJsaidmydad."Arizona,don'tyouthinkthismightbeanopportunityfor

youtobeanextragoodfriend?99

“Dad'sright,"saidmymom."Sometimeswhenourfriendsdowell,wefeel

enviousanddon'tknowhowtoact.Trygivingheralittletimeandunderstanding.Ibet

shellearoundbeforetoolong.

Overthenextweek,IdidmybesttogiveAverysomespace.

注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右2請按如下格式在以下位置作答。

Pl:Thenatrehearsaloneday,Iapproachedher.

P2:Ourplayendedupgoinggreat.

拓展積累：關于情感表達的公式

公式1:Alook/Anexpressionof+情感名詞/A(n)+情感形容詞+look/expression

+flashedacross/spre