續(xù)寫積累提能練教材語(yǔ)料整合亮詞[情感描寫]anxiousadj.焦慮的；不安的；annoyedadj.惱怒的；生氣的；frightenedadj.驚嚇的；害怕的；awkwardadj.令人尷尬的；難對(duì)付的；lookforwardto盼望；期待；curiousadj.好奇的；求知欲強(qiáng)的[人物描寫]maleadj.男(性)的；雄的n．雄性動(dòng)(植)物；男子femaleadj.女(性)的；雌的n．雌性動(dòng)(植)物；女子；outgoingadj.愛(ài)交際的；外向的；makeanimpression留下好印象；concentrateon集中精力于；confidentadj.自信的；有把握的；partnern．同伴；配偶；合伙人；personalityn．性格；個(gè)性美句1.IamnotoutgoingsoIamalittleanxiousrightnow.(情感描寫)2.Theclasswasdifficult，buttheteacherwaskindandfriendly...Ifoundmostofmyclassmatesandteachersfriendlyandhelpful.(人物描寫)3.Thismorning，Iwasworriedthatnoonewouldtalktome.ButIwaswrong.Ididn’tfeelawkwardorfrightenedatall.(情感描寫)4.Theguynexttometriedtotalktomethewholetime.(人物描寫)5.IamanactivepersonandIlovesports.(人物描寫)6.Ilookgood，thinkfastandplayhard.(排比修辭)7.Athousandmilejourneybeginswiththefirststep.(主旨升華)拓展語(yǔ)料積累情感細(xì)節(jié)描寫：緊張、焦慮單詞panicn．/v.恐慌；uneasen．不安；tenseadj.緊張的→tensionn．緊張；壓力；nervousadj.緊張的→nervousnessn．緊張；scarevt.使恐懼；使害怕→scaredadj.害怕的→scaryadj.恐怖的；嚇人的；terrifyvt.使恐懼；恐嚇→terrifyingadj.極其可怕的；駭人聽(tīng)聞的→terrifiedadj.非常害怕的；極度驚恐的詞塊beonpinsandneedles如坐針氈；(have)butterfliesinone’sstomach忐忑不安；likeantsonahotpan像熱鍋上的螞蟻；beseized/overewithpanic/fear驚慌失措；one’sheartinone’smouth心提到嗓子眼；one’sheartraces/beats/poundswildly/violentlywithfear嚇得心怦怦跳；pacerestlesslyupanddown不安地踱來(lái)踱去；handsshake手發(fā)抖；palmssweat手心出汗；feelone’sthroattightandone’smouthdry感到喉嚨發(fā)緊，嘴發(fā)干句型1.Allstudentswerewaitingfortheirfirstexaminationresultsanxiously，beingonpinsandneedles.(比喻句)所有學(xué)生都焦急地等待著他們第一次考試的結(jié)果，如坐針氈。2.Whenhethoughtthathewouldbefacedwithpletelynewsurroundings，afloodoffearwelledupinhim.(無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)句)想到他將面臨全新的環(huán)境，一陣恐懼涌上了他的心頭。3.Ifeltsoscared/nervousthatmythroattightenedandmykneesweak.我感到很害怕/緊張，嗓子發(fā)緊，膝蓋發(fā)軟。4.Iknowhedidn’tbelieveme，andeverytimehelookedmyway，myheartstartedpoundingwildly.我知道他不相信我，每次他朝我看的時(shí)候，我的心就開(kāi)始狂跳。5.Herstomachwasgrippedwithanxiety，likeavolcanoeruptinginsideher.(比喻句)她的胃因?yàn)榻箲]而痙攣，就像一座火山在她體內(nèi)噴發(fā)一樣。6.Hisheartbeat/raced/poundedwildlyandhislegstrembled.他的心狂跳著，雙腿發(fā)抖。語(yǔ)料運(yùn)用學(xué)校生活(2022·浙江1月，讀后續(xù)寫改編)①_______________________________(分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ))，wewereallwaitingfortheannouncementofourexperimentpartner.②____________________________________whowasoutgoingandeasytogetalongwith.Tomydisappointment，Iwasassignedtoworkwithanextremelyseriousguywhoalwaysworedarkclothesandwasalwaysnotsatisfiedwithothers’work.Learningthat，③_______________________________(無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)句)．Tobehonest，sofrightenedwasIthat④____________________________________wheneverspeakingtohim.⑤______________________________(形容詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ))，Ihadnochoicebut⑥______________________________ourprojectwithhim.However，Igraduallyfoundheactuallyhadanamazingpersonality，⑦_(dá)____________________________________(定語(yǔ)從句)．I⑧______________________oureffortswouldpayoff.我們都在忐忑不安地等待實(shí)驗(yàn)伙伴的宣布。我一直期待著一個(gè)外向、易于相處的女生搭檔。令我失望的是，我被分配和一個(gè)非常嚴(yán)肅的家伙一起工作，他總是穿著深色衣服，總是對(duì)別人的工作不滿意。得知這一點(diǎn)，我心中涌起了恐懼。老實(shí)說(shuō)，我太害怕了，每次和他說(shuō)話，喉嚨都會(huì)發(fā)緊，膝蓋都會(huì)不由自主地顫抖。盡管焦慮又緊張，我別無(wú)選擇，只好集中精力和他一起設(shè)計(jì)我們的項(xiàng)目。然而，我逐漸發(fā)現(xiàn)他其實(shí)有著極好的個(gè)性，這消除了我的焦慮和恐慌。我相信我們的努力會(huì)有回報(bào)的。答案：①Havingbutterfliesinourstomachs②Ihadbeenlookingforwardtoafemalepartner③afloodoffearwelledupinme④mythroattightenedandmykneestrembleduncontrollably⑤Anxiousandnervous⑥toconcentrateon/upondesigning⑦whicherasedmyanxietyandpanic⑧wasconfidentthat讀后續(xù)寫技能點(diǎn)撥01宏觀感知題型解讀讀后續(xù)寫考題提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語(yǔ)言材料，要求依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(150詞左右)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。從試題結(jié)構(gòu)來(lái)看，讀后續(xù)寫評(píng)價(jià)的是書面理解能力和書面表達(dá)能力。因此，在寫作之前，首先要讀懂文本、理清故事情節(jié)，然后再構(gòu)思故事的發(fā)展和結(jié)局。命題特點(diǎn)該題型一方面考查學(xué)生對(duì)所學(xué)語(yǔ)言的實(shí)際運(yùn)用能力，另一方面也培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的發(fā)散思維能力。讀后續(xù)寫不是隨心所欲地寫，而是根據(jù)題目要求，在讀懂原文的基礎(chǔ)上，利用原材料的素材、線索和情節(jié)等充分發(fā)揮想象力和創(chuàng)造力來(lái)續(xù)寫。通過(guò)對(duì)高考真題中讀后續(xù)寫的分析，我們可得出它的四大命題特點(diǎn)：評(píng)分原則1．本題總分為25分，按5個(gè)檔次給分。2．評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來(lái)衡量、確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。3．詞數(shù)少于120的，酌情扣分。4．評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)主要考慮以下三個(gè)方面：①續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的質(zhì)量、完整性以及情節(jié)的合理性(與原文情境的融洽度)；②應(yīng)用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性和多樣性；③上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。5．單詞拼寫與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確性的重要方面，評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮，英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。6．書寫較差以致影響交際的，酌情扣分。評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)檔次描述第五檔(21－25分)(1)創(chuàng)造了豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融洽度高。(2)使用了多樣并且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，可能有個(gè)別小錯(cuò)，但完全不影響理解。(3)有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義連貫。第四檔(16－20分)(1)創(chuàng)造了比較豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，比較有邏輯性，續(xù)寫比較完整，與原文情境融洽度較高。(2)使用了比較多樣并且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但不影響理解。(3)比較有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。第三檔(11－15分)(1)創(chuàng)造了基本合理的內(nèi)容，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫基本完整，與原文情境相關(guān)。(2)使用了簡(jiǎn)單的詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，有一些錯(cuò)誤或不恰當(dāng)之處，但基本不影響理解。(3)基本有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，意義基本連貫。第二檔(6－10分)(1)內(nèi)容或邏輯上有一些重大問(wèn)題，續(xù)寫不夠完整，與原文情境有一定程度的脫節(jié)。(2)所使用的詞匯有限，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯(cuò)誤較多，影響理解。(3)未能有效地使用語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不夠清晰，意義不夠連貫。第一檔(1－5分)(1)內(nèi)容或邏輯上有較多重大問(wèn)題，或有部分內(nèi)容抄自原文，續(xù)寫不完整，與原文情境基本脫節(jié)。(2)所使用的詞匯非常有限，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯(cuò)誤很多，嚴(yán)重影響理解。(3)幾乎沒(méi)有使用語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不清晰，意義不連貫。0分所寫內(nèi)容太少或無(wú)法看清以致無(wú)法評(píng)判；所寫內(nèi)容全部抄自原文或與題目要求完全不相關(guān)。未作答。續(xù)寫“7－3－4”原則七個(gè)不不增加人物三個(gè)一致原文一致原則不增加旁支情節(jié)曲折性原則不用過(guò)多對(duì)話正能量原則不用負(fù)能量結(jié)局四個(gè)銜接續(xù)寫第一段第二句：銜接(給出的)第一段首句不在文末設(shè)置懸念續(xù)寫第一段尾句：銜接(給出的)第二段首句不偏離原文主題續(xù)寫第二段第二句：銜接(給出的)第二段首句不違背邏輯常理續(xù)寫第二段尾句：銜接前文并升華原文主旨續(xù)寫5步驟讀后續(xù)寫規(guī)范練(一)1．（2425高一上·貴州·階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一片完整的短文。WhenIenteredhighschool,myworldseemedtobechanged.Among790freshmen,Icouldn’tfindafamiliarfacefrommiddleschool.Athome,lonelinesscontinued.Myelderbrotherwasplanningforhisfutureincollege,myyoungerbrotherseemedtohavebuiltawallbetweenus,andmyoutgoingoldersisterwasalwayssurroundedbyherfriends.“They,allhavefoundtheirplace,”Ithoughttomyself.Yet,therewasalwaysabeaconoflightwaitingformeathome–mymother’swaitingfigure.JustasIwasabouttorushintoherarms,seekingsolace(安慰)fortheday’sdisfort,Iheard,”Carole,lookatyourbedroom,it’samess.Whycan’tyoukeepitclean?”Thissuddencriticism(批評(píng))waslikecoldwaterpouredovermydelicate(脆弱的)heart.WhatIneeded,morethananything,wasjustafewwordsofwarmthfromher.“Mom,I...”Itriedtoexplainmystruggles,butwascutoffbythesuddenringingofthephone.“Justaminute,Carole.”Momhurriedawaytoanswerthecall.Fromherconversation,Icouldroughlymakeoutthatshewasdiscussingworkmatterswithhereditor.Shesatatherdesk,noddingoccasionallyandtakingcarefulnotes.Iknewshewasagreatwriterandalovingmother,strictwithherselfandhadadeeploveforus.Iknewhowbusyshewas,butstill,Icouldn’thelpfeelingdisappointedandupset.Iwentbacktomyroomandpulledoutmymathsexercise.Yet,almostimmediately,Isawmyfirstmistake.“Wrongagain!”Ithought.Iangrilytorethepaperoutofmynotebook,crumpled(弄皺)itintoball,andthrewittowardsthewastepaperbasket.Thepaperballlandedonthefloor.Gradually,theentireroomwascoveredwithpaperballs.Inthischaos(混亂),Ifoundastrangesenseofsatisfaction.Eventually,Ikickedthepaperballsunderthebedandlefttheroomwithouttidyingitup.

Thenextday,Iarrivedhometofindthehousequiet.Idraggedmyselftomybedroomasusual.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:WhenIopenedthedoor,Iwasastonishedtoseeafairlytidyroom.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Ireadthenoteagainandagain,andfeltaweightliftedfromme.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】參考答案WhenIopenedthedoor,Iwasastonishedtoseeafairlytidyroom.Mymomhadobviouslycleaneditherself.ThinkingofthemessIdeliberatelymadeunderthebed,Ihurriedtomybedandbentdowntotakealook.Tomygreatsurprise,thefloorhadbeencleanedaswell.Allthepaperballshaddisappeared.Amixedfeelingsurgedthroughmywholebody.AsIstoodupandfrozeforawhile,Inoticedanotelyingonmydesk.Pickingitup,Irecognizedmymom’sperfecthandwritingatonce:“DearCarole,Iamcriticalofmyself,andIhavefoundthatIhavealsobeenverycriticalofyoulately.Forthat,I’mtrulysorry.Ijustexpectthatyouaretobeyoursweetself.Love,Mom.”Ireadthenoteagainandagain,andfeltaweightliftedfromme.ItwasreplacedbysomethingassoftandfortingasMom’shug.IknewMomstilllovedmethesameway,andshecaredaboutmeevenwhenshewasoveroccupiedbyworkallthedays.Tearswerestreamingsofastthatmyvisionwasabitunclear.Momhadsaidsorrytome,andIowedherthesame.Whenshegothome,Irushedtoherandcouldn’twaittotellherallIhadbottledupinside.Embarrassed,Isoonfoundmybrothersstandingbyandlookingatmesmilingly.Onthecouch,wesatsidebyside,sharingallthestoriesandfeelingsasthesunset.【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，本文講述了主人公卡羅爾進(jìn)入高中后感到孤獨(dú)和無(wú)助，渴望得到母親的關(guān)懷和溫暖，但卻經(jīng)常遭到母親的批評(píng)。在一次與母親發(fā)生不愉快后，卡羅爾故意把房間弄得一團(tuán)糟，但母親回家后卻默默地為她收拾干凈，并留下一張道歉的紙條。最終，卡羅爾向母親傾訴了內(nèi)心的感受，一家人坐在一起分享彼此的故事和感受。【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)我打開(kāi)門時(shí)，我驚訝地看到一個(gè)相當(dāng)整潔的房間?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懽髡甙l(fā)現(xiàn)房間被母親清掃過(guò)，作者變現(xiàn)出復(fù)雜的情緒，同時(shí)描寫母親給女兒寫了一封道歉信。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我一遍又一遍地讀著這封信，感到如釋重負(fù)。”可知，第二段可描寫作者在閱讀完母親的道歉信后的感受，并且明白到母親的辛苦與不容易，同時(shí)意識(shí)到應(yīng)該給母親道歉，分享自己的內(nèi)心感受，全家人其樂(lè)融融的畫面。2.續(xù)寫線索：發(fā)現(xiàn)房間被清掃過(guò)——發(fā)現(xiàn)媽媽的道歉信——感覺(jué)如釋重負(fù)和內(nèi)疚——感動(dòng)流淚并決定向母親道歉——與家人袒露心聲分享內(nèi)心感受——一家人其樂(lè)融融3.詞匯激活行為類①清理：clean/sweep②.擔(dān)心：careabout/concern③.說(shuō)抱歉：saysorryto/apologizeto情緒類①.淚流滿面：tearswerestreaming/tearswererollingdownone’scheek②.尷尬的：embarrassed/asenseofembarrassment/awkward【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1].Pickingitup,Irecognizedmymom’sperfecthandwritingatonce:“DearCarole,Iamcriticalofmyself,andIhavefoundthatIhavealsobeenverycriticalofyoulately.（由現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)以及that引導(dǎo)賓語(yǔ)從句的結(jié)構(gòu)）[高分句型2].Onthecouch,wesatsidebyside,sharingallthestoriesandfeelingsasthesunset.（由現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語(yǔ)的結(jié)構(gòu)）2．（2324高二上·河南開(kāi)封·期中）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,myfamilymovedtoSeattle,wheremyparentsstartedtheirnewbusiness—asmallgrocerystoredownstairsmyhouse.Asagirlofshyandreservednature,Ihadtotakeafreshstarttofitintothesophisticatedcitylife.Onesunnyday,myschoolannouncedanexcitingevent,atalentshowforthelocalfoodbank.StudentswereencouragedtoshowcasetheiruniquetalentsinfrontofthepublicinthecityhallonNationalDay.Abuzzofexcitementfedtheschoolaseveryonebeganpreparingforthebigday.Deepdown,Ifeltasparkofcuriosityandadesiretoparticipate.However,myselfdoubtheldmeback,“Idon’thaveanyspecialskillstoshare.”Daysturnedintoweeks,andthetalentshowdrewcloser.Icouldn’tshaketheupsettingfeelinguntiloneday,Emma,oneofthemostpopulargirlsinmyclass,cametomewhileIwashelpinginthegrocerystoreafterclass.“Howaboutsingingtogetherinthetalentshow?”Shegrinned,“Iheardyousingingatune,alongthewaybackhome.Ican’thelpfollowingyouhere.”Gosh,Icouldn’tbelievemyears.Emma,withpersonalityandpopularity,acknowledgedmylittletalent.SinceEmmahadtheworld’sprettiestvoice,Ifeltlikebeingfavouredbyfortune.“Youtwo?Thetalentshowforthefoodbank?”Mymumbenttowardsusandherfacelitup.“Abigoccasion.”Thenalightbulbseemedtogoinherhead.“Whynotpractiserightnowupstairs?Ibetyou’llbeaperfectmatch.”Winkingatus,sheseemedtoknowwewerethinkingalike.EmmaandIembarkedonrehearsingalmosteverysingledayafterschool.Webrainstormed,exchangedideasandrehearsedthescene.Asthedaysrolledby,Iwasfeelingprettygoodaboutouract.Butthedaybeforetheperformance,Emmacalledthatshehadanacutestomachacheandwasnotinanyshapetoperform.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Iwaspletelyknockedoutbythenews.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Finallycamethebigmoment.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Iwaspletelyknockedoutbythenews.WhatshouldIdo?Havingpreparedforsuchalongtime,Ididn’tthinkofthatingup.Feelingataloss,IwasbrainstormingashardasIcouldtothinkofasolution,whenagentletouchonmybackbroughtmebacktoreality.Itwasmymum,wholookedatmewithcareandconcern.“Youhavepreparedforitenough.Youcandoitbyyourself.”Shesaidaftermystumbledexplanation.Ilookedbackathereyes,andasenseofconfidenc