高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習湖邊垂釣，邂逅潛鳥救援之旅1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Standingatthelake’sedge,Ithrewmylineontothesmooth-as-glasswaterofPoliceOutpostLake,lostinmyownthoughts.I’dlearnedtofishfrommydad.Hehadtaughtmetofishalone,insilence.Hehadbeenafishandwildlifeofficerwithgreatpassionforhisjob,especiallythepartwhereheprotectednaturefromhumans.HehadshowedmeeverythingIknewaboutfishing.Then,hepassedaway.MybrotherIsaiahshouted,“whereshouldIstand?”“Bequietorelsewewon’tcatchanyfish,”Iwhispered.Isaiahfrowned,sighing,butitwas“messagereceived.”4續(xù)寫原文Pullingbackonmyfishpole,lookingintothelightofthesun,Icaughtsightofafewgreatnorthernloons(潛鳥)gatheredtogethernotfarfromtheshoreline.Whatweretheydoingthere?Loonsusuallytravelalone,butherewerefiveoftheminagroup.Maybeitwasafamily?Oneloon,cryinginsorrow,swamawayfromthegroup,towardme.“Isaiah!Comehere!Takealookatthatloon.It’sswimmingtowardus,gettingcloserandcloser.”“It’sonlyadecoy(誘餌),”saidIsaiah.“Lookatthatbeak(喙)!Itcouldeasilystickustodeathwiththatthing!Itcouldtearourfaces!Pulloutoureyes!”5續(xù)寫原文Justthen,theloonletoutcrazylaughingsound.“It’snotadecoy!It’stryingtogetourattention.”Isaid.Theloonstoppedintheshallowwaternearshore,nottenfeetawayfromus.Itwassoclosethatwecouldseeitssmallredeyes.Oddly,thebird’swingswereheldagainstitsspottedblack-and-whitebody.Walkingintothewater,gettingclosertotheloon,webothsawathinwiresurroundingitsnecktightly.Itwasaskingustohelp!6段首句Paragraph1：Thinkingofitsdangerousbeak,Iwasrootedtothespot.Paragraph2：Weputtheloononarockgently,satisfiedwithwhatwedidjustnow.7Part2題目分析8續(xù)寫原文分析9“我”在PoliceOutpostLake釣魚，這是從熱愛保護自然的已逝父親那里學來的。弟弟以賽亞也一同前來?！拔摇卑l(fā)現(xiàn)一群不尋常聚集的潛鳥，其中一只朝我們游來。起初以賽亞以為是誘餌，后來我們發(fā)現(xiàn)它脖子被細鐵絲纏住，是在向我們求助。點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調主題。情節(jié)構建的重點10續(xù)寫思路分析Para1:

Thinkingofitsdangerousbeak,Iwasrootedtothespot.想到它危險的喙，我僵在了原地。內心的恐懼如潮水般涌來，我深知那鋒利的喙一旦攻擊，后果不堪設想。以賽亞似乎看出了我的猶豫，他輕聲說：“我們不能見死不救啊?！蔽疑钗豢跉猓ψ屪约烘?zhèn)定下來。我們找來一根長樹枝和一把鉗子，慢慢靠近潛鳥。潛鳥似乎察覺到我們的意圖，雖然有些緊張，但并沒有攻擊我們。我用樹枝輕輕安撫它，以賽亞則用鉗子小心翼翼地剪斷鐵絲。每一個動作都充滿了謹慎，生怕弄疼了它。11續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Weputtheloononarockgently,satisfiedwithwhatwedidjustnow.我們輕輕地把潛鳥放在一塊石頭上，對剛才的行為感到很滿意。潛鳥在石頭上抖了抖身子，似乎輕松了許多。它用那雙小紅眼睛看著我們，仿佛在表達感謝。過了一會兒，它拍拍翅膀，緩緩走進水中，向同伴游去?？粗鼭u漸遠去的身影，我心中充滿了溫暖。這次經歷不僅讓我克服了內心的恐懼，更讓我明白了保護動物的重要性。我和以賽亞相視而笑，帶著這份美好的回憶，繼續(xù)我們的釣魚之旅。12Part3范文呈現(xiàn)13范文呈現(xiàn)Thinkingofitsdangerousbeak,Iwasrootedtothespot.Fearoverwhelmedme,forIknewclearlythesharpbeakcouldcauseseriousharm.Isaiah,noticingmyhesitation,saidsoftly,"Wecan'tjuststandbyanddonothing."Takingadeepbreath,Itriedtocalmmyselfdown.Wefoundalongbranchandapairofpliers,thenapproachedtheloonslowly.Theloonseemedtosenseourintention.Althoughabitnervous,itdidn'tattackus.IgentlystrokeditwiththebranchwhileIsaiahcarefullycutthewirewiththepliers.Everymovewasmadewithgreatcaution,fearingtohurtit.14范文呈現(xiàn)Weputtheloononarockgently,satisfiedwithwhatwedidjustnow.Theloonshookitsbodyontherock,lookingmuchmorerelaxed.Itstaredatuswithitssmallredeyes,asifexpressinggratitude.Afterawhile,itflappeditswingsandwalkedslowlyintothewater,swimmingtowardsitscompanions.Watchingitsrecedingfigure,myheartwasfilledwithwarmth.Thisexperiencenotonlyhelpedmeovercomemyfearbutalsomademerealizetheimportanceofprotectinganimals.IsaiahandIsmiledateachotherand,withthiswonderfulmemory,continuedourfishingtrip.15升級版范文呈現(xiàn)Thinkingofitsdangerousbeak,Iwasrootedtothespot.Awaveoffearsurgedthroughme,forIwasacutelyawareofthepotentialharmthattheloon'ssharpbeakcouldinflict.Isaiah,noticingmytrepidation,offeredagentlereminder,"Wecannotturnablindeyetoitsplight."Summoningupmycourage,Itookadeepbreathandattemptedtocomposemyself.Equippedwithalongbranchandapairofpliers,weadvancedtowardstheloonwithutmostcaution.Theloon,seeminglysensingourbenevolentintentions,remainedrelativelycalm,thoughahintofnervousnesswaspalpable.IgentlycaresseditwiththebranchasIsaiah,withsteadyhands,meticulouslysnippedthewireencirclingitsneck.Eachmovementwasexecutedwiththeutmostcare,aswewereacutelymindfulofnotcausingthepoorcreatureanydistress.16升級版范文呈現(xiàn)Weputtheloononarockgently,filledwithaprofoundsenseofsatisfactionatoursuccessfulrescue.Theloon,uponreachingtherock,shookitsbodyvigorously,asifriddingitselfofthelastvestigesofdiscomfort.Itfixeditssmall,redeyesuponus,andonecouldalmostsensethegratitudeemanatingfromit.Momentslater,itflappeditswingsgracefullyandwadedintothewater,makingitswaybacktoitswaitingcompanions.AsIwatcheditsdepartingform,awarmglowofcontentmentspreadthroughmychest.Thisencounternotonlyenabledmetoconquermyfearbutalsoinstilledinmeadeeperappreciationforthesignificanceofsafeguardingwildlife.IsaiahandIexchangedknowingsmiles,andw