讀后續(xù)寫素材(環(huán)境描寫)

【素材1】Atthecloseoftheafternoonservice,wereturnedbyanexposedandhillyroad,where

thebitterwinterwind,blowingoverarangeofsnowysummitstothenorth,almostflayedtheskin

fromourface.

下午的禮拜結束后,我們沿著一條裸露的山路返回,凜冽的寒風吹過北方的雪峰,幾乎要從我

們臉上刮去一層皮。

【素材2】Itwasthecoolgraydawn,andtherewasasenseofpeacedeepinthewoods.Notaleaf

stirred;notasounddisturbedgreatNature’smeditation.Dewdropsstoodupontheleavesand

grasses.Awhitelayerofashescoveredthefire,andathinbluebreathofsmokerosestraightinto

theair.

這是一個涼爽的灰蒙蒙的黎明,樹林深處有一種寧靜的感覺。沒有一片樹葉被攪動,沒有任何

聲音打擾大自然的沉思。露珠落在樹葉和草上。一層白色的灰燼覆蓋著火堆,一股藍色的煙

霧直沖云霄。

【素材3】Itwasrainingandcoldwhenwewentouttoeat.Wefoundasmallrestaurantpoorly

decoratedfortheholiday.Onlyfivetablesintherestaurantweretaken.ThereweretwoGerman

couples,twoFrenchfamiliesandanAmericansailor,byhimself.Theywereeatinginstonysilence

exceptthesailor.Whileeating,hewaswritingaletter,andahalf-smilelituphisface.Inthecorner

apianoplayerwaslistlesslyplayingChristmasmusic.

我們出去吃飯時,天正在下雨,很冷。我們發(fā)現(xiàn)一家小餐館裝修得很差,不適合過節(jié)。餐館里只

有五張桌子被占滿了。有兩對德國夫婦,兩個法國家庭和一個美國水手,獨自一人。除了那個

水手,大家都在沉默地吃東西。他邊吃邊寫信,臉上露出了一絲微笑。一個鋼琴師在角落里無

精打采地彈奏著圣誕樂曲。

【素材4】AwaferofamoonwasshiningoverGatsby’shouse,makingthenightfineasbefore

andsurvivingthelaughterandthesoundofhisstillglowinggarden.Asuddenemptinessseemedto

flownowfromthewindowsandthegreatdoors,endowingwithcompleteisolationthefigureof

thehost.

一輪明月正照在蓋茨比的房子上方,使夜色像從前一樣美好,在他那仍在發(fā)光的花園的歡聲笑

語中依然存在。一種突然的空虛似乎從窗戶和大門里涌了出來,使主人的身影顯得完全孤立

無援。

【素材5】IwasstudyingaBarbieanddoingsomesimplemathinmyheadwhensuddenlyan

earthshakingclapofthunderroaredfromthestormoutside.Ijumpedatthenoise,droppingthe

dolltothefloor.Thelightsflickeredonceanddied,coveringeverythinginablanketof

blackness.Thundercontinuedtoshaketheskyandlightningilluminatedthestoreforseconds,

castingfrighteningshadowsonmymind.

我正在研究芭比娃娃,并在腦子里做一些簡單的數(shù)學,突然,外面的暴風雨中響起了驚天動地

的雷聲。聽到聲音,我嚇了一跳,把娃娃摔在地上。燈光閃爍了一下就熄滅了,一切都籠罩在一

片黑暗中。雷聲繼續(xù)震動著天空,閃電照亮了商店幾秒鐘,在我的腦海里投下了可怕的陰影。

【素材6】“I’lltellyouinthemorning,”shesaid.“Whenthefirstlightcomesintotheskyandthe

sparrowsstirandthecowsrattletheirchains,whentheroostercrowsandthestarsfade,when

earlycarswhisperalongthehighway,youlookuphereandI’llshowyousomething.”“我明天早

上再告訴你,”她說?！爱?shù)谝豢|曙光出現(xiàn)在天空中,麻雀跳來跳去,母牛咔塔咔塔地搖著它們的

鏈子,當公雞鳴叫,星星隱沒,當早班車在高速公路上發(fā)出聲響時,你抬頭看這里,我會給你看一

樣東西?！?/p>

【素材7】Aftertheheatoftheday,theeveningcameasawelcomerelieftoall.TheFerriswheel

waslightednow.Itwentroundandroundintheskyandseemedtwiceashighasbyday.There

werelightsonthemidway,andyoucouldhearthecrackleofthegamblingmachinesandthe

musicofthemerry-go-roundandthevoiceofthemaninthebeanoboothcallingnumbers.

炎熱的白天過去了,夜晚來了,大家都松了一口氣。摩天輪現(xiàn)在亮了。它在天空中轉來轉去,

似乎比白天高兩倍。游戲中心燈火通明,你可以聽到賭博機的噼啪聲、旋轉木馬的音樂聲和

搖彩攤的喊號碼聲。

【素材8】Inthecooloftheevening,whenshadowsdarkenedtheFairGrounds,Templetoncrept

fromthecartandlookedaround.Wilburlayasleepinthestraw.Charlottewasbuildinga

web.Templeton’skeennosedetectedmanyfinesmellsintheair.Theratwashungryandthirsty.He

decidedtogoexploring.Withoutsayinganythingtoanybody,hestartedoff.

在涼爽的夜晚,當陰影籠罩了展覽會場時,坦普爾頓從車上爬下來,環(huán)顧四周。威爾伯躺在稻草

里睡著了。夏洛正在織網(wǎng)。坦普爾頓敏銳的鼻子嗅出了空氣中許多細微的氣味。老鼠又餓又

渴。他決定去探險。沒有對任何人說什么,他就出發(fā)了。

【素材9】Themoonwashedthewoodsinagentlelight.Thestarstwinkledlikeachild’scurious

eyesblinkingwithanticipation.Inaninstant,everythinghadsuddenlygonequiet.Birdsdidn’t

chirp,leavesdidn’trustleandinsectsdidn’tsing.Afeelingofstillnesscreptuponme.

月亮在柔和的光線中沖刷著樹林。星星閃爍著,就像一個孩子好奇的眼睛因期待而閃爍。剎

那間,一切都突然安靜下來。鳥兒不再鳴叫,樹葉不再沙沙作響,昆蟲不再歌唱。一種寂靜的感

覺悄悄向我襲來。

【素材10】Theskyisovercast,darkenedwithgloomyclouds,andthewholeworldseemedtobe

envelopedinahugegrayquilt.Thepathiswindingandwesawmountainstoweringoverthegreen

valleysandcliffs.Thepeacefullandscapeisatruefeastfortheeyes,withitsrollinggreenhills

dottedwithsheepandcattle.天陰了,烏云密布,整個世界仿佛被一條巨大的灰色棉被包裹著。小

路蜿蜒曲折,我們看到群山聳立在綠色的山谷和懸崖之上。連綿起伏的青山上點綴著牛羊,寧

靜的風景真是一場賞心悅目的盛宴。

【方法運用】

1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

AsIwaslookingforanewflat,Iwastemporarilystayingatalovelysmallhotel.

Unfortunately,duringthattime,Iwasduetoparticipateinanonlineconferenceforanentireweek.

Iwasstuckinsidefrom10:00amuntil5:00pm,theentiredurationofthecleaninghours.Ifigured

thatIcouldgothosefivedayswithoutmyroombeingcleanedanditwouldn’tbeaproblem.I

wouldjustputa“DoNotDisturb”signonmydoor.

OntheseconddayasIwasheadingtogetbreakfastatthehotel,Ibumped(撞見)intothe

cleaningladynamedAnna.IaskedherifIcouldgivehermyrubbish,andImentionedthatI

wouldbeworkingtheentiredaysosheneedn’tworryaboutcleaningmyroom.Shesmiledand

saiditwasokay.

Thenextday,whenIreturnedfrommybreakfast,myroomhadalreadybeencleaned.The

samehappenedonthefollowingday.OnFriday,Ifinishedmybreakfastquickerthanusualand

thecleaningladywasjustheadingout.ShesmiledandsaidthatshewashappythateventhoughI

atequickerthanusual,shewasstillabletofinishintime.

Ifinallyrealizedthatallthistime,shehadbeenkeepinganeyeonwhenIheadedfor

breakfastsoshecouldcleanmyroom.Giventhatlookingforaflatinanewcityandworkingin

oneofthesmallesthotelroomsinLondonwerealreadyverystressful,Iwasincrediblymoved.I

thankedAnnaandtoldherthat,fortunately,itwastheverylastdayoftheconference,butIwas

verythankful.

Thefollowingweek,Ifinallygotthekeysformynewflat.Excitedandgratefulforallthe

helpIhadreceivedwhilemovingin,Iboughtaboxofchocolatesandmademywaytothe

receptionist.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Isaidtothereceptionist,“CouldyoupleasegivethosetoAnna?”

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Afterawhile,Annaarrived,lookingslightlypuzzled.

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2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

December16,2009wastheworstdayofmymother’slife.ItwasthedayItoldherthather

thirty-six-year-olddaughterhadstageⅢbreastcancer.Iwillneverforgetthelookofhopelessness

inhertear-filledeyesasItoldher.Seeingmymothersobuncontrollablybrokemyheart.Itwas

oneofthefewtimesinmylifethatIsawmymotherweakandvulnerable(脆弱的).

SinceIhadbeendiagnosedwithadvancedbreastcancer,thedoctorshadaheavy-dutyplan

ofattacktobeatit,whichwouldmeanadoublemastectomy(切除),fivemonthsofchemotherapy

(化療),andfiveweeksofradiation.Italsomeantthatanindependentsinglewomanwholived

alonewasinseriousneedofsomehelptakingcareofherself.

Thankfully,Iwasblessedwithmyownpersonalarmyoffamily,friends,andco-workers

whohadofferedtohelpmeoutwithwhateverImightneed,includingmealsandridestodoctors’

appointments.ButasgratefulasIwas,therereallywasonlyonepersonwhoIwantedbymy

side—mymom.Mymotherlivedmorethan300milesaway,butdidn’tevengiveitasecond

thought.Shewasgoingtobemyprimarycaregiver,driver,personalchef,counselor,andshoulder

tocryon.Nooneelseintheworldcouldfillhershoes.Itwasajobthatonlyshecoulddo.

Thenightaftermyfirstchemotherapytreatmentisforeverimprintedinmymemory.Iwas

neversosickinmyentirelife.Icouldn’tevenkeepdownaglassofwater.Andafterhoursspent

inthebathroom,Iweaklyliftedmyselfintobed,weeping,“Please,takethisawayfromme.Please

makemefeelbetter.”Atthatmoment,mymothercrawledintobedwithme,wrappedherentire

bodyaroundme,andcriedwithme.JustlikewhenIwasalittlegirl,herarmsenvelopingme

madeitbetter.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Inthefollowingmonths,mymomexperiencedrealhardship.

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Ifeelgreatlymovedbywhatmymotherdid.

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3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

Theartcompetitionatschoolwasalwaysahighlyanticipatedevent.Thisyearwasno

exception,withstudentsfromallgradeseagertoshowcasetheircreativetalents.Amongthem

weretwofriends,JaneandSally.

Janehadadeeppassionforart,butsheoftenstruggledwithexpressingherideasonpaper.

Shewouldspendhoursinfrontofablankcanvas(畫布),tryingtocapturetheperfectimageinher

mind,buthereffortsoftenfellshort.Sally,ontheotherhand,wasnaturallytalentedandher

artworkswerealwayspraisedbyteachersandclassmates.

Asthecompetitiondrewnearer,Janeworkedharderthanever,stayinguplateintothenight

toperfectherpiece.Sally,however,seemedtotakeitallinstride(大步走),casuallysketchingand

paintingwithoutmucheffort.SheoftenteasedJaneaboutherlackoftalent,makingjokesthat

weremeanttobelight-heartedbutstungJanedeeply.

Onthedayofthecompetition,Jane’sheartwasfilledwithbothexcitementandfear.She

hadworkedsohardonherpiece,butsheknewthatitstillpaledincomparisontoSally’seffortless

creations.Asshesetuphercanvasandbegantopaint,shecouldfeelSally’seyesonher,mocking

(嘲笑)hereverymove.

Halfwaythroughthecompetition,Janeencounteredadifficultobstacle.Shecouldn’tseem

tocapturetheessenceofhersubjectthewayshewantedto,andherfrustrationmounted.She

lookedaroundattheotherstudents,seeingtheirconfidentstrokesandvibrantcolors,andshefelta

pangofdefeat.Shewantedtogiveup,tothrowawayherbrushandwalkaway.

Butjustasshewasabouttodoso,shecaughtsightofSally.Sallywasn’tlaughingor

mockinghernow;instead,shelookedatJanewithamixtureofsurpriseandconcern.Itwasasif

sherealizedthatherwordshadhurtJanemorethanshehadintended.Andinthatmoment,Jane

foundanewresolve.Shewasn’tgoingtoletSally’swordsorherowndoubtsdefeather.Shewas

goingtofinishherpiece,nomatterwhat.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Withreneweddetermination,Janereturnedtohercanvas.

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Sheheardhernameannouncedasthewinnerofaspecialrecognitionawardfor

perseveranceanddedication.

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4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

OnedayinJuly,30yearsago,Iwastakingasummerclassinliteratureonthecampusof

SUNYOneontainnorthernNewYork.ProfessorJameswalkedintotheclassroomandannounced

he’dinvitedaspecialguesttoclass,buthisguesthadbeendelayed.Theclassstirredwith

curiosity.“Who’scoming?”someoneasked.

“AllIcantellyouisthathe’stheauthorofoneofthebooksyou’vereadforthisclass,”he

said.“Ineedavolunteertomeethiminthehalloftheadministrationbuildingandescort(護送)

himhere.”

Tomyamazement,myrighthandshotupasthoughithadamindofitsown.“WhatamI

doing?”Ithought.Inevervolunteeredforanything.Iwasshyanduncomfortablemeetingnew

people.Ipulledmyhanddownquickly,butitwastoolate.

“Thanks,David,”ProfessorJamessaid.“You’dbetterleavenow.He’llbearrivingany

minute.”

Seeingnowaytobackout,Iunwillinglygotoutofmyseatandheadedfortheclassroom

door.WhenIreachedit,Istopped.“Umm,”Isaid.“HowwillIrecognizehim?”ProfessorJames

laughed.“Goodpoint,”hesaid.Hepulledmeasideandwhisperedanameinmyear.“AlexHaley,”

hesaid.

“Really?”Isaidandlefttheroom.AlexHaleyistheauthorofTheAutobiographyof

MalcolmX.HewaswhatIwantedtobe:awriter.

AsIreachedtheadministrationbuilding,Ifoundamanwithabriefcasestandinginthehall.

Icameup,saying,“AreyouMr.Haley?”

“Yes,”hesaidwithalovingvoice.

“I’mfromProfessorJames’sclass.Welcome.”

“Thankyou,”hesaid.Heextendedhishandandweshookhands.Hewasamaninhis

forties,mediumheight,wearingasportsjacket.

Onourwaytotheclassroom,Iwasstruckbyhowapproachablethismanwas.Myfearwas

replacedbycuriosityandpurpose.SoIsaid,“I’dliketobecomeawriter,butIdon’tknowifI

havethetalent.Andhowdidyoudiscoveryouhadagiftforwriting?”Hestoppedandlookedat

meintheeyes.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

“Writingisnotjustabouttalent,”hesaid.“Ilearnedtowritethroughpracticeand

persistence.”

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AftermyconversationwithAlexHaleythatday,Ifoundanewfoundconfidenceinmy

desiretobecomeawriter.

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參考答案

1．Onepossibleversion:

Isaidtothereceptionist,“CouldyoupleasegivethosetoAnna?”Thereceptionist,awarm

andfriendlymanlookedatmeinconfusionandIcontinued,“She’sthecleaningladywhohas

beentakingcareofmyroomeverydayduringmystayhere.Ireallyappreciatealltheextraeffort

sheputintomakesuremyroomwasclean,evenwhenIthoughtitdidn’tneedtobe.Iwantto

showhermygratitude.”Themansmiledandnoddedinunderstanding.“Pleasewaitamoment,

Annaisinthebuilding.I’llcallher,andyoucanthankherinperson.”

Afterawhile,Annaarrived,lookingslightlypuzzled.Whenshesawtheboxofchocolates,

hereyeslitupwithsurpriseandjoy.Shethankedmeearnestly,clearlytouchedbythegesture.It

washeartwarmingtoseehersmileandknowthatIhadmadeherdayjustasshehadmademine.

Thissimpleactofappreciationmademerealizetheimpactofshowinggratitudeandkindnessto

others,eveninsmallways.Fromthatdayon,Imadeitapointtoalwaysexpressmyappreciation

forthehardworkofothers,justlikeAnnahaddoneforme.

【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，主要講述了作者在尋找新公寓期間居住在一家小旅館

里，因為需要參加整整一周的在線會議而無法打掃房間，卻意外受到清潔女工Anna無私的

幫助。Anna通過觀察作者的早餐時間，以合適的時機打掃房間，為作者減輕壓力。最終，

作者搬進新公寓，他很感激Anna的幫助，購買了巧克力，想送給她以表達感謝之情。

【要點解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內容“我對接待員說：‘你能把這些給Anna嗎？’”可知，第一段可描寫作者

向接待員說明自己想感謝Anna的緣由，以及接待員表示理解，為作者聯(lián)系Anna，讓他親

自表示感謝。

②由第二段首句內容“過了一會兒，Anna來了，看上去有點困惑?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫Anna

收到作者的巧克力的動人反應，以及作者從這件事中得到的感悟。

2.續(xù)寫線索：作者請接待員轉交巧克力——作者解釋緣由——接待員聯(lián)系Anna——Anna

出現(xiàn)——Anna的反應——作者的感悟

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①確保：makesure/guarantee/secure

②意識到：realize/recognize/beawareof

③表達：express/convey/voice

情緒類

①困惑：confusion/puzzlement/bewilderment

②感激：gratitude/gratefulness

③高興：joy/delight/happiness

④讓……感動：touch/move

[高分句型1]She’sthecleaningladywhohasbeentakingcareofmyroomeverydayduringmy

stayhere.(who引導限制性定語從句)

[高分句型2]Whenshesawtheboxofchocolates,hereyeslitupwithsurpriseandjoy(When引

導時間狀語從句)

[高分句型3]ItwasheartwarmingtoseehersmileandknowthatIhadmadeherdayjustasshe

hadmademine.(that引導賓語從句、as引導方式狀語從句)

2．

Inthefollowingmonths,mymomexperiencedrealhardship.Mymomtraveledbackand

forthbetweentwohomesandtwolives.Shecamejusttotakecareofherthirty-six-year-oldlittle

girl.Shesatbymysideforalmosteverytreatmentandmademefriedcheesesandwichesinthe

middleofthenight.Sherantothechemist’swhenIwasinseverepainandthevideostorewhenI

wantedtobeentertained.Sheaccompaniedmeovernight,sobbingwithmeandcomfortingme.

WhenIfeltbetter,shesangtheoldsongsshehadcountlesslysungwhenIwaslittle.Basically,she

putherlifeonholdtotakecareofme,herbaby.

Ifeelgreatlymovedbywhatmymotherdid.Shewasattendingtomyeveryneed,both

physicallyandemotionally,butwhowasattendingtoherneeds?Whoheardhercryinthemiddle

ofthenightwhenshesobbedforherdaughter?Whocaredifshehadamealwhenshecaredfor

medayandnight?IknowwhatmymotherwouldsayifIaskedherthosequestions.Shewould

say,“That’sjustwhatyoudowhenyouareamother.”Andforthat,Iamgreatlygrateful.

【寫作分析】本文以作者患乳腺癌的經(jīng)歷為線索，講述了母親對自己無私的照顧和付出。

【要點解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內容“在接下來的幾個月里，我媽媽經(jīng)歷了真正的艱難?！笨芍?，第一段可具

體描述母親所經(jīng)歷的艱難，如奔波兩地、日夜照顧等。

②由第二段首句內容“我被我媽媽所做的一切深深感動。”可知，第二段可表達作者對母親的

感恩之情以及對母愛的感悟。

2.續(xù)寫線索：母親奔波照顧——母親的陪伴與付出——母親的愛感動了作者——體會到母親

的艱難——感悟到母愛的偉大——感恩母親

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①奔波：travelbackandforth/shuttlebetween

②陪伴：accompany/bewith

③照顧：takecareof/lookafter

情緒類

①感動：begreatlymoved/bedeeplytouched

②感恩：begrateful/expressgratitude

[高分句型1].Shecamejusttotakecareofherthirty-six-year-oldlittlegirl（.不定式作目的狀語）

[高分句型2].Ifeelgreatlymovedbywhatmymotherdid.（使用了連接代詞what連接的賓語

從句）

3．

Withreneweddetermination,Janereturnedtohercanvas.Sheblockedoutthenoiseand

themockery,focusingsolelyonherwork.Andslowly,butsurely,herpiecebegantotakeshape.It

wasn’tperfect,anditcertainlywasn’tasgoodasSally’s,butitwashers.Itwasatestamenttoher

hardworkandherrefusaltogiveup.Whenthecompetitionendedandthejudgesbeganto

evaluatetheartworks,Janeheldherbreath.Shedidn’texpecttowin,butshehopedthatatleast

shehadproventoherselfthatshecouldpersevereinthefaceofadversity.

Sheheardhernameannouncedasthewinnerofaspecialrecognitionawardforperseverance

anddedication.Thecrowderuptedinapplause,andJanecouldseeSallysmilingandclappingfor

her.Shefeltasurgeofprideandhappinesswashoverher,andsheknewthatthiswasamoment

shewouldneverforget.AsJanewalkeduptothestagetoreceiveheraward,shelookedoverat

Sallyandgaveheragratefulsmile.Sallynoddedback,herexpressionsolemnbutsincere.Inthat

moment,theirfriendshipwasstrongerthanever,andtheybothunderstoodthatwhiletalentmay

benatural,hardworkandperseverancecanovercomeanyobstacle.

【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了學校的藝術比賽一直是一項備受期待的活動。

今年也不例外，各個年級的學生都渴望展示自己的創(chuàng)意才能。其中有兩個朋友，簡和莎莉。

簡對藝術有很深的熱情，但她的努力經(jīng)常失敗。另一方面，莎莉天生就有天賦，她的作品總

是受到老師和同學的贊揚。比賽那天，簡的心里充滿了興奮和恐懼。她為自己的作品付出了

如此多的努力，但她知道，與莎莉毫不費力的創(chuàng)作相比，她的作品仍然相形見絀。比賽進行

到一半時，簡遇到了一個困難的障礙，她想放棄，想扔掉畫筆，走開。但就在她要這么做的

時候，她看見了莎莉。莎莉現(xiàn)在不再笑她，也不再嘲笑她了；相反，她看著簡，既驚訝又擔

心。她仿佛意識到自己的話對簡的傷害超出了她的本意。就在那一刻，簡下定了新的決心。

她不會讓莎莉的話或她自己的懷疑打敗她。無論如何，她都要完成她的作品。

【要點解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內容“懷著新的決心，簡又回到了她的畫布上”可知，第一段可描寫簡努力地

完成了作品，并焦急等待著評委的結果。

②由第二段首句內容“她聽到她的名字被宣布為毅力和奉獻精神特別表彰獎的獲得者?！笨芍?/p>

第二段可描寫簡獲勝了以及簡的感受和莎莉的互動，那一刻，他們的友誼比以往任何時候都

更加牢固和簡的感悟。

2.續(xù)寫線索：努力完成作品——緊張等待——獲勝——當時的感覺——與莎莉的互動——感

悟

3.詞匯激活

行為類

放棄：giveup/quit

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