Dotherightthing!成長總是伴隨著些許疼痛讀后續(xù)寫框架思路

與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接合理。內(nèi)容豐富，故事情節(jié)跌宕起伏，最終都是好的結(jié)局。所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富，準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯誤，但完全不影響意義表達(dá)。有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。

情節(jié)銜接

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內(nèi)容構(gòu)思&語言表達(dá)第五檔：21分-25分行業(yè)PPT模板http:///hangye/問題二：沒東西寫怎么辦？問題一：讀不懂原文怎么辦？其中第一段中的句1與句5，第二段中的句6，句9和句10共五句話基本是固定的，其他的句子安排根據(jù)具體情況可作輕微調(diào)整。Para1.五句

首句+尾句固定Para2.五句

首句+次尾句+尾句固定定句1:銜接提示句---情感/動作鏈/心理定句6:銜接提示句---情感/動作鏈/心理句2:運(yùn)用三大原則句7:運(yùn)用三大原則句3:運(yùn)用三大原則句8：運(yùn)用三大原則句4:運(yùn)用三大原則定句9:緊扣原文，交代結(jié)局定句5:過渡到P2首句定句10:點睛主題何為“十句五定法”？5R解讀、4句框架和3大原則（五四三法）Analyzethestory：5Rs1.Readforcharacters（人物）2.Readforconflict/problems（沖突/問題）3.Readforplot（情節(jié)）4.Readforemotionalchanges（情感變化）5.Readfortheme（主題）5R解讀5R解讀、4句框架和3大原則（五四三法）寫讀后續(xù)寫不同于寫其它作文，有可能需要先倒著寫的。主題句：句10（如家庭親情突出親情珍貴，遇險脫困突出勇敢，需積累主題語料庫)過渡句：句5(通過第二段開頭句)銜接提示句：句1+句6(描寫心理/動作/情感，需積累情感/動作/心理描寫語料庫)4句定框架5R解讀、4句框架和3大原則（五四三法）補(bǔ)充中間段落其他句子（情緒+動作，擴(kuò)充神態(tài)，心理等）1.Action—Response原則

角色A的所作所為所感引起其他角色的反應(yīng)2.Conflict—Solution原則

1)原文出現(xiàn)問題則解決文中出現(xiàn)的問題2)原文沒出現(xiàn)問題則第一或二段提出問題+解決方案（問題可以在第一段出現(xiàn)，也可以第二段。）3.Negative—Positive原則

情感變化，積極正能量3大原則TheRightThingtoDoFaunahadalwaysdreamedofkeepingapet.Timeandagain,sheaskedherparents,promisingtowalk,feed,andlookafterit.Eachtime,though,theygavethesamegentleresponse:“We'llsee.”O(jiān)neafternoon,onherwayhomefromschool,Faunasawalittledogwanderingnearthepark.Itsfurwasmessy,anditlookedlost,sniffingthegroundasifsearchingforsomething.Feelingcuriousandhopeful,Faunabentdownandcalledtoit.Thedogquicklyranover，wagging（搖）itstailandgentlypressingitsnoseintoherhand，liketheyhadknowneachotherforever.Shelookedaround,butnooneseemedtobesearchingforthedog.Feelingpityforthelostdog,Faunadecidedtotakeithome.Astheywalkedsidebyside,herheartswelledwithjoy.Itfeltasthoughthiswasthepetshehadalwaysdreamedof-afriendshehadbeenwaitingfor.Atthefrontdoor,Fauna'smothergreetedherwithawarmsmile.Althoughshefoundthedogadorable,shegentlyremindedFaunathattheyneededtotryandfinditsowner.Ifthedogwaslost,someonemustbemissingit.Faunareluctantly（不情愿地）agreed,thoughpartofherwishednoonewouldcomeforwardtoclaimthelittledog.Overthenextfewdays,Faunaandthedog-whomshenamedBuddy-grewinseparable.Shefedhim,playedwithhim,andlethimsleepcurledupatthefootofherbed.Everyday,itbecamehardertoimagineliewithouthim.Buddyseemedhappytoo,wagginghistailwhenevershecamehomefromschool.ButFaunaknewdeepdownthatshehadtodotherightthing.Sheandherparentspostedflyersaroundtown,hopingtofindBuddy'sowner.Justafewdayslater,thephonerang.Fauna'sheartsankasherfatheranswered.Fromtheconversation,itwasclearthatthecallerwasBuddy'sowner.HedescribedBuddyperfectly-thefriendlyeyesandplayfulpersonality.FaunaknewBuddywouldsoonbeleavingher.HerfatherarrangedfortheownertocomebyandpickBuddyup.Whenthemanarrived,thelittledogranstraightintohisarms,barkingwithjoy.___________________________Thatevening,Faunasatquietlyinherroom,feelingtheemptinessthatBuddy'sabsencehadleftbehind._______CharactersFauna,herparents,Buddy(thelittledog),theman(thedog’sowner)PlotFauna想要養(yǎng)寵物，父母沒一直有明確答應(yīng)→放學(xué)回家路上偶遇流浪狗,帶回家并建立深厚的感情→但母親提醒得找小狗主人，雖不情愿還是張貼尋主啟事→后來主人打電話來認(rèn)領(lǐng)，父親安排主人來歸還小狗。Conflict/Problemsdotherightthing---returnBuddytohisowner&Fauna’sheartsankdreamofkeepingapet&“We’llsee!”Emotionalchangescuriousandhopeful→pity→joy→reluctant→heartsankTheme做正確的事雖有痛苦，但也會帶來積極的影響和新的希望5R解讀:Readforcharacters,plot,conflict/problems,

emotionalchangesandtheme.五四三運(yùn)用---2025年廣東一模解析四句框架:主題句10，過渡句5，銜接提示句1和6Whenthemanarrived,thelittledogranstraightintohisarms,barkingwithjoy.銜接提示句1：過渡句5：Thatevening,Faunasatquietlyinherroom,feelingtheemptinessthatBuddy'sabsencehadleftbehind.銜接提示句6：主題句10：做正確的事雖有痛苦，但也會帶來積極

的影響和新的希望。TheRightThingtoDoFaunahadalwaysdreamedofkeepingapet.Timeandagain,sheaskedherparents,promisingtowalk,feed,andlookafterit.Eachtime,though,theygavethesamegentleresponse:“We'llsee.”...Overthenextfewdays,Faunaandthedog-whomshenamedBuddy-grewinseparable.Shefedhim,playedwithhim,andlethimsleepcurledupatthefootofherbed.Everyday,itbecamehardertoimagineliewithouthim.Buddyseemedhappytoo,wagginghistailwhenevershecamehomefromschool.ButFaunaknewdeepdownthatshehadtodotherightthing.Sheandherparentspostedflyersaroundtown,hopingtofindBuddy'sowner.Justafewdayslater,thephonerang.Fauna'sheartsankasherfatheranswered.Fromtheconversation,itwasclearthatthecallerwasBuddy'sowner...TheRightThingtoDo

ButFaunaknewdeepdownthatshehadtodotherightthing.Fauna'sheartsankasherfatheranswered.五四三運(yùn)用---2025年廣東一模解析四句框架:主題句10，過渡句5，銜接提示句1和6Whenthemanarrived,thelittledogranstraightintohisarms,barkingwithjoy.銜接提示句1：此情此景，F(xiàn)auna的情緒、動作、心理等過渡句5：小狗和主人離開Thatevening,Faunasatquietlyinherroom,feelingtheemptinessthatBuddy'sabsencehadleftbehind.銜接提示句6：Fauna想念Buddy，回憶和它在一起的點

點滴滴主題句10：做正確的事雖有犧牲，但也會帶來積極

的影響和新的希望。TheRightThingtoDo...Oneafternoon,onherwayhomefromschool,Faunasawalittledogwanderingnearthepark.Itsfurwasmessy,anditlookedlost,sniffingthegroundasifsearchingforsomething.Feelingcuriousandhopeful,Faunabentdownandcalledtoit.Thedogquicklyranover，wagging（搖）itstailandgentlypressingitsnoseintoherhand，liketheyhadknowneachotherforever....Overthenextfewdays,Faunaandthedog-whomshenamedBuddy-grewinseparable.Shefedhim,playedwithhim,andlethimsleepcurledupatthefootofherbed.Everyday,itbecamehardertoimagineliewithouthim.Buddyseemedhappytoo,wagginghistailwhenevershecamehomefromschool.ButFaunaknewdeepdownthatshehadtodotherightthing.Sheandherparentspostedflyersaroundtown,hopingtofindBuddy'sowner....五四三運(yùn)用---2025年廣東一模解析定句1：銜接提示句看著小狗和主人團(tuán)聚，F(xiàn)auna心痛，但是肯定這種

暖心和團(tuán)聚的氛圍。句2：配角的動作、情緒、心理等

狗主人跪下，眼里噙滿淚水和狗擁抱。句3：配角動作、心理

狗主人感激Fauna對小狗的照顧句4：主角動作、情緒、心理等Fauna強(qiáng)顏歡笑，理解小狗應(yīng)該物歸原主定句5：過渡句

銜接第二自然段：小狗和主人離開Para.1Whenthemanarrived,thelittledogranstraightintohisarms,barkingwithjoy.五四三運(yùn)用---2025年廣東一模解析定句6：銜接提示句

思念小狗的在場，回顧和小狗在一起的點點滴滴。

句7：配角的動作、情緒、心理等

母親來訪，表揚(yáng)Fauna做了一件正確的事情句8：主角的情緒、心理+

配角的動作、心理等Fauna感覺好多，母親補(bǔ)充說他們覺得是時候

給Fauna收養(yǎng)一只屬于他自己的小狗。

句9：交代結(jié)局Fauna很開心即將擁有自己的寵物小狗。

定句10：主題句做正確的事雖有痛苦，但也會帶來積極

的影響和新的希望。Para.2

Thatevening,Faunasatquietlyinherroom,feelingtheemptinessthatBuddy'sabsencehadleftbehind.

五四三運(yùn)用---2025年廣東一模解析AssessmentcontentsSelf-assessmentPeer-assessmentTeacher-assessmentIsthesenstenceslogicallyconnected?(句1，句5，句6)Yes()No()Yes()No()Yes()No()Isthedevelopmentoftheplotconsistentwiththe3principles?(句2，句3，句4，句7，句8，句9)Yes()No()Yes()No()Yes()No()Isthethemeconsistentwiththetext?(句10)Yes()No()Yes()No()Yes()No()Assessment定句1：銜接提示句看著小狗和主人團(tuán)聚，F(xiàn)auna心痛，但是肯定這種

暖心和團(tuán)聚的氛圍。句2：配角的動作、情緒、心理等

狗主人跪下，眼里噙滿淚水和狗擁抱。句3：配角動作、心理

狗主人感激Fauna對小狗的照顧句4：主角動作、情緒、心理等Fauna強(qiáng)顏歡笑，理解小狗應(yīng)該物歸原主定句5：過渡句

銜接第二自然段：小狗和主人離開Para.1Whenthemanarrived,thelittledogranstraightintohisarms,barkingwithjoy.五四三運(yùn)用---2025年廣東一模解析定句6：銜接提示句

思念小狗的在場，回顧和小狗在一起的點點滴滴。

句7：配角的動作、情緒、心理等

母親來訪，表揚(yáng)Fauna做了一件正確的事情句8：主角的情緒、心理+

配角的動作、心理等Fauna感覺好多，母親補(bǔ)充說他們覺得是時候

給Fauna收養(yǎng)一只屬于他自己的小狗。

句9：交代結(jié)局Fauna很開心即將擁有自己的寵物小狗。

定句10：主題句做正確的事雖有痛苦，但也會帶來積極

的影響和新的希望。Para.2

Thatevening,Faunasatquietlyinherroom,feelingtheemptinessthatBuddy'sabsencehadleftbehind.

五四三運(yùn)用---2025年廣東一模解析

Whenthemanarrived,thelittledogranstraightintohisarms,barkingwithjoy.Faunawatched,herheartaching,butshecouldn'tdenythewarmthoftheirreunion.Theman,whointroducedhimselfasMr.Peterson,kneltdown,tearswellingupinhiseyesashehuggedBuddy