溫馨提示：此套題為Word版，請(qǐng)按住Ctrl,滑動(dòng)鼠標(biāo)滾軸，調(diào)節(jié)合適的觀看比例，答案解析附后。關(guān)閉Word文檔返回原板塊。微技能4依照評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)·力創(chuàng)續(xù)寫滿分篇【真題研磨】【典例展示】(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【解題思維】第一步瀏覽前文,摸清文章關(guān)鍵要素,并歸納主旨。要素描述主旨whenThedayofthebigcross-countryrun.本文是記敘文。越野賽馬上就要開(kāi)始了,可是作者發(fā)現(xiàn)患有殘疾的大衛(wèi)悶悶不樂(lè)地獨(dú)自站在一旁,作者問(wèn)其原因,他說(shuō)準(zhǔn)備放棄比賽。通過(guò)了解,因?yàn)閾?dān)心同學(xué)們會(huì)嘲笑大衛(wèi),所以教練想讓大衛(wèi)自己決定是否參加賽跑whereTheroutethroughthickevergreenforest.whoStudents;I(theauthor);Davidstoodbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Heseemedunhappy.whatDaviddecidednottotakepartintherun.whyMaybehewasafraidofbeinglaughedatbecausehehadabraindisease.第二步梳理信息,預(yù)測(cè)續(xù)寫內(nèi)容。文段段落段落主旨前文1Thestudentspreparedforthebigrun.2&3TheauthorwantedtoknowwhyDavidhaddecidednottorun.4TheauthoraskedthecoachwhathadhappenedtoDavid.5TheauthordecidedtohaveatalkwithDavid.6AlthoughDavidhadabraindisease,heworkedhardandeveryonethoughtofhimasanormalone.續(xù)寫走向TheauthorencouragedDavidtotakepartinthebigcross-countryrun.Andhetriedhisbesttofinishtherace.第三步借助開(kāi)頭,確定續(xù)寫段落梗概。段落續(xù)寫第一段開(kāi)頭Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.梗概Noonecanchangeyourmind.Youhavehadagoodpreparation,soyoushouldshowuphere.Daviddeterminedtofinishtherun.段落續(xù)寫第二段開(kāi)頭IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.梗概Theracestarted.TherunwaywaslongandDavidworkedhard.Classmatesallcheeredforhim.Hereachedthefinalline.第四步豐富內(nèi)容,寫出符合評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的滿分作文?？紙?chǎng)滿分作文評(píng)卷老師點(diǎn)評(píng)Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Isaidgentlyandquietly,①“Noonecanchangeyourmind,exceptyourself.Ifyoudesiretochallengeyourself,thereisnothingtodowithothers’thoughts.”Hesatstillwithadeepbreath.②“Youhavehadafullpreparationbeforethisevent,whichisthemostimportantreasonwhyyoushowuphere,”③Iaddedwithasinceretone.Hearingmywords,④Davidturnedtometremblinglywithtearsspillingoutofhiseyesandexpressedhehadmadeafirmdeterminationtofinishthecross-countryrun.HiscoachheardwhatDavidsaidandgavemealook—thekindthatwasmoredeterminedthananyoneelse’s.⑤IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Theracestarted.Itseemedthattherunwaywasextremelylongforyoungchildren,nottomentionachildwithadisease.⑥D(zhuǎn)avidinsistedonrunning⑦asifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses,thoughhewastrippedoverwithinafewkilometers⑧.Itdidn’ttakelongbeforehepickedhimselfupagainandcontinuedhismission.⑨Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,cheeringforhim.“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!Weareproudofyou!”⑩theyshoutedenthusiastically.Toeveryone’sjoy,hereachedthefinallineandrankedthe20th.Itwasnomoreimportantwhetherhewonthefirstplaceornot.?Itwashisbraveheartandstrongfaiththatcouldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally①過(guò)渡自然流暢。②細(xì)節(jié)刻畫。③使用高分句型。④使用非謂語(yǔ)形式。⑤和前文第四段情節(jié)相照應(yīng),語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格一致。⑥使用了高分句式。⑦使用非謂語(yǔ)形式。⑧細(xì)節(jié)刻畫。⑨使用了高分句式。⑩使用了豐富的語(yǔ)言形式。?使用了高分句式。?和文章開(kāi)頭及上文語(yǔ)境相呼應(yīng),體現(xiàn)文章完整性,并傳遞正能量?！究紙?chǎng)技法】基于新高考評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的讀后續(xù)寫8大滿分(22—25分)策略滿分點(diǎn)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)解讀及應(yīng)對(duì)技巧詞匯詞匯多樣。準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)記敘文中不同的行為、場(chǎng)景和心理變化等。比如表達(dá)開(kāi)心不是全文都用happy,而是使用delighted,pleased等多樣的形容詞,也可以用smile,lightup等多樣的動(dòng)詞(詞組)或名詞來(lái)表達(dá)語(yǔ)法語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)多樣性,包括時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等;句型多樣性,全文不都是簡(jiǎn)單句,也不都是用單一從句堆疊起來(lái)的長(zhǎng)句子,而是能夠靈活地使用三大從句、非謂語(yǔ)、虛擬語(yǔ)氣、倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句等高級(jí)句型、句式銜接①語(yǔ)境銜接點(diǎn):通過(guò)適當(dāng)?shù)倪^(guò)渡手段,句際、段際及前后文語(yǔ)境和情節(jié)需要做到無(wú)縫銜接;②邏輯銜接點(diǎn):a.第一段首句和下文的邏輯銜接過(guò)渡要流暢;b.第一段和第二段的邏輯銜接過(guò)渡要自然;c.第二段首句和下文的邏輯銜接過(guò)渡要通順豐富性語(yǔ)言的豐富性包括詞匯、語(yǔ)法和語(yǔ)境的豐富性三個(gè)方面。具體做到:詞匯、語(yǔ)法的多樣性和不同句式、句型的變化,再通過(guò)語(yǔ)言銜接手段,使得文章語(yǔ)境充實(shí)、豐滿完整性在情節(jié)上,續(xù)寫與前文遙相呼應(yīng),前后文意義連貫、情境融合度高。具體做到:a.“時(shí)空變化”和前文一致;b.“人物關(guān)系”和前文對(duì)應(yīng);c.“情節(jié)延伸”要恰到好處;d.“情感表達(dá)”要自然流露、真摯感人思想升華讀后續(xù)寫的選材通常具有勵(lì)志性和教育性,所以要在總結(jié)前文和前期續(xù)寫的基礎(chǔ)之上,實(shí)現(xiàn)文章主題思想的升華,傳播正能量,體現(xiàn)積極的價(jià)值觀要素補(bǔ)充記敘文包括六大要素。前文中通常已經(jīng)交代了時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物事件以及部分過(guò)程,續(xù)寫部分通常需要完善過(guò)程,最重要的是寫出記敘文的第六個(gè)要素,也就是補(bǔ)充結(jié)果,完成續(xù)寫基本功單詞拼寫、語(yǔ)法運(yùn)用正確無(wú)誤;書(shū)寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)規(guī)范;續(xù)寫詞數(shù)長(zhǎng)度合乎要求;卷面整潔、自然、大方【多維演練】Test1MyparentsmovedtoVermontwhenIwasstillababy.Myfather,asoft-spokenman,settledquietlyintohismedicalpractice.Soonthelocalpeopleacceptedhimasoneoftheirown.Aroundtowntheneighborsgreetedmyfatheras“DoctorEppley”.AndIwouldalwaysbeknownas“DoctorEppley’sson”.“Ifyou’reanythinglikeyourfather,you’llbeasmartboy,”myfirst-gradeteachersaid.Icouldn’tstopbeaming.Initially,Iwasnevertiredoflettingothersknowthatmyfatherwasoneofthetown’smostrespectedpeople.Somewhereinmyteenageyears,however,somethingchanged.IgrewimpatientwheneverIheardmyneighborsstillcallingme“DoctorEppley’sson”.Myfather’snameseemedlikeanuglyshadowthatfollowedmewhereverIwent.AndsowhenstrangersaskedmeifIwasDoctorEppley’sson,Iwouldreplyloudly,“MynameisHarold.”Asanactofrebellion(叛逆),Ibegantocallmyfatherbyhisfirstname,Sam.“Whyareyouactingsorudelylately?”myfatherquestionedmeoneday.“Well,Sam,”Ireplied,“Isupposethatbothersyou.”“YouknowithurtsmewhenyoucallmeSam,”myfathershouted.“Well,ithurtsmewheneverybodyexpectsmetobejustlikeyou.Iwanttobemyself.Letmetakeitoutforadrive,”Isaid,pointingtomyfather’snewcar.Myfatheragreed,butnotwithouthisusualwarning,“Becareful.Keysareinthekitchen.”Iglaredathim,“Sam,I’msickofbeingtreatedlikeachild.I’mincollegenow.”Ijumpedintothecarandheadeddowntheroad,enjoyingthebeautyofthecountryside.MymindwaswanderingwhenIhitthecarrightinfrontofminebeforeIknewit.Thewomaninthecarjumpedoutscreaming,“Youidiot!Whatwereyoulookingat?”Isurveyedthedamage.Bothcarshadsufferedseriousdents(凹痕).注意:續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右。Isattherelikeaguiltychildasthewomancontinuedswearing.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Anhourlater,Idrovemyfather’sbrokennewcarbackhome.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Isattherelikeaguiltychildasthewomancontinuedswearing.“Areyoublind?It’sentirelyyourfault!”shesnappedatme.TheimpactofthecrashleftmykneesshakingandIstruggledtostandup.Feelinghopeless,Iblinkedhardtochokebackmytearsasshedemandedrepeatedly,“Whoareyou?”“I’m...I’mDoctorEppley’sson.”Istammered,regrettingmywordsinstantly.Thewoman’sfrownmeltedintoasmile.“Oh,I’msorry,”hervoicesoftenedandshegaveupkeepingswearing.“Ididn’trealizewhoyouwere.”Afterapologizingtoher,Idraggedmyselfbacktothecar,carryingtheweightofmyactions.Anhourlater,Idrovemyfather’sbrokennewcarbackhome.Withmyheaddown,IbracedmyselfforthescoldingIknewIdeservedbecauseIwassuremyfatherwouldbedisappointed.However,Iwasgreetedwithunexpectedcompassionfrommyfather,“Areyouhurt,Harold?”heasked,hisvoicefilledwithconcern.“No,I’mOkay...”Ireplied.“Butthecar...I’msorry,Dad.Ididn’tmeanto.”“Don’tbesorry,son.Bebetter.”Fathersaid.Seeinghissmilingface,Iburstintotearsandhuggedhimtightly.Atthatmoment,Irealizedmyfather’snamewasn’taburden,butaninheritanceofwisdom,warmthandaboveall,pride.Test2InlateDecember,thecowpathnearourhouseinTennesseewasstillcoveredwithleaves,butIknewsnowwouldbefallingsoonenough.Myyoungerbrother,BuddyEarl,andIwereonanimportantmission:GotoUncleTommie’splaceandgetagoose(鵝).ThehikingoverLittleMountainandgettingtherewouldbeworthit.UncleTommieraisedthebestgeesearound,andhe’dofferedtogiveusoneforChristmasdinner.UncleTommiemetusatthedoor.“I’mnotrushingyouboys,”hesaid,“butaslightsnowstarted,you’dbettergetthegooseandheadhome.”Itdidn’ttakemelongtopickupagoosefromhisyard.BuddyandIsaidaquickthank-youandgoodbye.Thesnowcamedownharder,windblowingeveryway.“I’mascoldasice.Howaboutyou?”askedBuddy.Itappedthegoose’shead.“Iwishwehadfeatherstokeepuswarmlikeyou,”Isaid.“Orheaviercoats.”“Doug,I’mfreezing,”Buddysaid.Icouldhardlyhearhimoverthewindandmyownchatteringteeth.“Ithinkweshouldgoback.”Theideawasattractive,butwewereclosertohomethantoUncleTommie’shouse.Wehadtopushon.Iheldthegooseclosertomychest.Thebirdwastheonlywarmthingaboutme.Isteppedinfrontofmybrother.“Buddy,openyourcoat!”“Areyoucrazy?”Heasked.“I’lllosethelittlewarmthIhave.”WhenhesawIwasserious,heslowlyunzipped(拉開(kāi)……的拉鏈)hiscoatandopenedit.Iplacedthewarmgooseinsidehiscoatandzippeditbackup.“Makesureyoukeepthegoose’sheadoutsoitcanbreathe,”Buddysighedhappily.Myplanwasworking.注意:續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右?！癉oug,itistimeforyoutoopenyourcoat.”____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Hearingoursurvivingexperience,myparentshesitatedaboutwhattodowiththegoose.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】“Doug,itistimeforyoutoopenyourcoat.”Buddyhandedthegoosetome.Itsfeatheredbodywasaswarmasangelfeathersinsidemycoat.Puttingmyfreezinghandsonitsbody,Ifeltarushofwarmthsweepingoverme.Wepassedthegoosebackandforthbetweenusallthewayhome,battlingbitingcold.Afterwhatseemedlikeages,wegothome.Uponarrival,wecouldn’twaittoexplaintoourparentshowthegoosehadkeptusfromfreezing.Hearingoursurvivingexperience,myparentshesitatedaboutwhattodowiththegoose.“WhatshouldwehaveforChristmasdinner?”Theylookedatuswithaconcernedlook.“Anythingbutthegoose.Hehassavedourlives.”BuddyandIexclaimed.Shiftinggazesbetweenusandthegoosewhichwashonkingasifhewerepleadingtoo,myparentsannounced,“Fine.Thenwe’lldowithoutit.”“Hooray!”wesprangtoourfeet.ThatChristmas,wedidn’thaveagrandfeast,butcameuponaheroinourlife.Test3Theeasywayoutisn’talwaystheeasiest.IlearnedthatlessonwhenIdecidedtotreatmyfathertoaspecialmeal.Iglancedthroughthecookbookandchoseamenuwhichincludedhomemadebread.Knowingthebreadwouldtaketime,Istartedonitassoonasheleftforwork.AsIwasnotexperiencedincooking,Ithoughtifadozenwasgood,ortwodozenwouldbebetter,soIdoubledeverything.AsDadlovedoranges,Ialsoopenedacanoforangeandpoureditallintothebowl.Soontherewasstickydough(面團(tuán))coveredwithuglyyellowishmarks.RealizingIhadbeendefeated,IputthedoughintherubbishbinoutsidesoIwouldn’thavetofacehimlaughingatmywork.Iwentonpreparingtherestofthemeal,and,whenDadgothome,wesatdowntocornishchickenwithrice.Hetriedtoenjoythemealbutseemeddisturbed.Twicehegotupandwentoutside,sayinghethoughtheheardanoise.Thethirdtimeheleft,Iwenttothewindowstoseewhathewasdoing.Lookingout,IsawDadstandingaboutthreefeetfromtherubbishbin,holdingthelidupwithastickandlookingintothecontainer.WhenIcameoutofthehouse,hedroppedthestickandexplainedthattherewassomethingaliveintherubbishbin.Pickingupthestickagain,heheldthelidupenoughformetosee.Ifeltcold.ButIsteppedcloserandlookedharder.Withoutdoubtitwasmywork.Thehotsunhadcausedthedoughtodoubleinsizeandthefermentingyeast(酵母)madethesurfaceshakeandsighasthoughitwerebreathing.Ihadtoadmitwhatthe“l(fā)ivingthing”wasandwhyitwasthere.Idon’tknowwhowasmoreembarrassedbythewholething,Dadorme.注意:續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右。Mydadtappedmegentlyontheshoulder,andwewentinside.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________