2025年高考英語(yǔ)應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作與讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)講義練習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)作基本技法(2021·新高考Ⅰ卷)AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意:續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

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Step1:厘清主題把握走向要素描述主題whenMother’sDay本文以母親節(jié)為線索展開(kāi),講述了雙胞胎Jenna和Jeff為了獻(xiàn)給母親一份美味的早餐,自己動(dòng)手做起早餐來(lái),但不幸的是,他們接連失敗,后來(lái)在父親的幫助下獲得成功,他們把早餐獻(xiàn)給親愛(ài)的母親,母親非常感動(dòng)的故事。whereAthomewhoThetwins—JeffandJennawhatThepairpreparedbreakfastfortheirmother.whyTheywantedtogivetheirmotherasurprise.Step2:尋找主線深挖要點(diǎn)文段線索文脈線索前文情感線excited→disappointed故事線First,theyboiledtheporridge.→Next,theymadetheFrenchtoast.→Asliceofbreadturnedblack.→Thentheyfoundtheporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.→Theotherpieceofbreadturnedblack,too.續(xù)寫(xiě)要點(diǎn)1.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.2.TheirmotherwassurprisedtofindthebreakfastcookedbyJeffandJenna.Step3:精研首句起承轉(zhuǎn)合根據(jù)所給續(xù)文段落首句產(chǎn)生問(wèn)題鏈接,形成續(xù)寫(xiě)思路,采用G-N(Given-New)和Q-A(Question-Answer)策略,做好起承轉(zhuǎn)合,創(chuàng)造新的情節(jié)。Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Q1:WhatwasFather’sfirstinstinctwhenfacedwiththemess?Q2:Howdidthetwinsexplaintheirplantotheirfather?Q3:WhatdidFatherdotohelpthetwinstomakedeliciousFrenchtoastandchickenporridge?Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Q1:WhatwasMother’sfirstinstinctwhenthetwinswokeherup?Q2:WouldthetwinsgiveMotherabigsurprise?HowdidtheyexpresstheirbestwishestoMother?Q3:HowdidMotherfeel?Howcanyoudesigntheendingmoreappealingandmeaningful?續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段梗概Theirfatherhelpedthemadjustthefireandtheypreparedbreakfastsuccessfully.Howhappytheywere!續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段梗概Thetwins’motherwassurprisedtoseethedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher.Shewasdeeplymovedbyherchildren.Step4:吃透語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格一致為了使所寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言和原文保持連貫性和一致性,讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)需要通過(guò)在理解原文的基礎(chǔ)上,巧妙利用“拉平效應(yīng)”,創(chuàng)造性地模仿和使用語(yǔ)言,即繼承原文語(yǔ)言表達(dá)方面的顯著特征,包括寫(xiě)作手法及語(yǔ)言表達(dá)技巧,從而一方面保證寫(xiě)作的效率和流暢度,另一方面保證寫(xiě)作在各個(gè)語(yǔ)言層次和表達(dá)風(fēng)格上和原文保持一致。通過(guò)分析語(yǔ)篇,可以從五個(gè)方面理解原文的語(yǔ)言應(yīng)用技巧:1.場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě)(Surroundings)場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě)指的是描寫(xiě)人、物、事發(fā)生的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、自然環(huán)境及社會(huì)場(chǎng)景等。場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě)可以充當(dāng)背景信息,提供人、物、事發(fā)生的具體設(shè)定。其次,場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě)可以表達(dá)角色的感情、情緒,可以隨著情節(jié)的發(fā)展有所變化,甚至可以提示、推動(dòng)情節(jié)的發(fā)展,增強(qiáng)語(yǔ)篇的代入感。2.動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)(Actions)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)指的是描寫(xiě)人物在具體情況下的行為舉止,是情節(jié)發(fā)展的具體體現(xiàn)。恰到好處的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)不僅可以塑造生動(dòng)形象的人物,還可以反映人物的情感態(tài)度及心理變化,并最終反映人物的性格特點(diǎn)及思想品質(zhì)。3.心理描寫(xiě)(Feelings)心理描寫(xiě)指的是描寫(xiě)人物在具體情況下的看法、感受、情感及心理活動(dòng),并由此反映人物的性格特點(diǎn)及思想品質(zhì)。心理描寫(xiě)除了對(duì)心理的直接描寫(xiě),還可以結(jié)合動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)及場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě),共同構(gòu)成有意義、緊湊的語(yǔ)篇。4.有效對(duì)話(EffectiveDialogues)有效對(duì)話是記敘語(yǔ)篇中塑造人物的一個(gè)重要手段。對(duì)話的有效性首先體現(xiàn)在符合人物設(shè)定,這樣不僅能夠有效地推動(dòng)情節(jié)的發(fā)展,更能夠增加記敘的生動(dòng)性。此外,對(duì)話語(yǔ)言也要符合記敘語(yǔ)篇的語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn),即生活化、簡(jiǎn)化及去書(shū)面化。5.修辭(Figuresofspeech)修辭是增加語(yǔ)言生動(dòng)性的最佳手段。它可以引起共鳴,使抽象的情境具體化。常見(jiàn)的可以應(yīng)用的修辭有比喻、擬人、夸張和排比等?？紙?chǎng)滿分作文1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.①Father’sappearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.②Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytookpositiveactionandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,③whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Deliciousbreakfastwasready.④Howhappytheywere!Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.⑤Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.⑥Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,⑦“HappyMother’sDay!”⑧Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.評(píng)卷老師點(diǎn)評(píng):①過(guò)渡自然流暢。②時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)境和前文相互照應(yīng)。③使用高分句式。④使用高分句式。⑤使用高分句式。⑥使用并列結(jié)構(gòu)。⑦使用直接引語(yǔ),生動(dòng)真實(shí)。⑧動(dòng)作及情感表達(dá)真實(shí)細(xì)膩。考場(chǎng)滿分作文2:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Facedwiththemessthetwinshadmadeofthekitchen,Fatherfeltannoyedbuttriedtocontainhimself.Jennaranuptohim,whispering“We...WejustwanttomakebreakfastforMomasMother’sDaygift.”Afterhelearnedwhatallwasabout,hisannoyancegavewaytoreliefanddelight.Immediately,hejoinedthemandtheystartedalloveragain.SoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Thekitchenfilledwiththescentofbreakfastandsweetnessofafamily.Lookingatthework,thethreeexchangedanunderstandingsmile.Aftersignalingthemtokeepitasecret,Fatherslippedintothebedroom,pretendingtoknownothingaboutit.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Stillalittlesleepy,Motherfailedtofigureoutwhattheywereupto.“HappyMother’sDay!”Thetwinscongratulated.“Wemadebreakfastforyouasyoudothatforus.Mom,weloveyou!”Thoughstillinherpajamas,Mothertookabiteofthetoastandsippedthehotporridge.Lostinthedeliciousbreakfastandpurelovefromhertwins,shesobbed,withdelightfultearsstreamingdownherface.Lovingly,shepressedtwogentlekissesontheirforeheads,proudlyenjoyingtheirbestwishes.Theirfatherwasstandinginthedoorway,recordingthistouchingscene.ThewholeroomwasbathedinahappyMother’sDayatmosphere.評(píng)卷老師點(diǎn)評(píng):文章用詞精準(zhǔn)(whisper,understanding,signal,pretend,lostin,streamdown,proudly等),句式高級(jí)(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、獨(dú)立主格和介詞with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)等),通過(guò)動(dòng)作、對(duì)話和心理活動(dòng)等描寫(xiě),生動(dòng)、形象地呈現(xiàn)了雙胞胎孩子在母親節(jié)為媽媽做早餐,獻(xiàn)上一份特別的節(jié)日禮物和驚喜?？紙?chǎng)滿分作文3:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Seeingthemess,Fatherfrozewithshock,asifrootedontheground.Fromtheblackbreadandthespilledporridge,hesuddenlyfiguredouttheirsecret.Asmileofunderstandingflashedacrosshisface.Herealizedtheirintention.HejoinedtheminpreparingtheMother’sDaysurpriseimmediately.Theystartedalloveragain.Everythingwentsmoothly.Thechickenandriceweredancingharmoniouslyintheboilingwaterpotandbreadsliceswereshowingoffitsmosttremendousgoldencolor.SoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Thekitchenfilledwiththescentofbreakfastandsweetnessofafamily.Despitetheoilstainsonthetwins’aprons,nothingseemedimperfect,andallwasinplaceexceptthemostimportantone.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Stillalittlesleepy,Motherfailedtofigureoutwhattheywereupto,butthecheerful“HappyMother’sDay”fromthetwosweetiesbroughtherbacktoreality.Thebreakfastwithlovemadebyhertwinsreallystruckherheartstrings.Motherkissedthemandgavethemeachabearhug,saying“Ohdear,thankyoumysweeties.Whatabigsurprise!”Thenextmoment,shewokeupFather,eagertosharetheblessingandtheinvitingbreakfastseasonedwithlove.Father,whohadbeenawake,cooperativelyrubbedhiseyesandtookabigbite,winkingatthetwinssecretly.Afterall,thesurprisedidmakeasweetsurprise!評(píng)卷老師點(diǎn)評(píng):文章通過(guò)動(dòng)作、對(duì)話和心理活動(dòng)等描寫(xiě),生動(dòng)、形象地呈現(xiàn)了雙胞胎孩子在母親節(jié)為媽媽做早餐,獻(xiàn)上一份特別的節(jié)日禮物和驚喜。在故事情節(jié)推進(jìn)的過(guò)程中,運(yùn)用語(yǔ)篇分析的主位推進(jìn)理論、呼應(yīng)和修辭等手法來(lái)揭示語(yǔ)篇的感恩、互愛(ài)的主題,讓人豁然明白“我們平時(shí)認(rèn)為媽媽無(wú)條件的愛(ài)和支持是理所當(dāng)然,沒(méi)什么大不了的。等到自己回報(bào)母愛(ài)時(shí),卻發(fā)現(xiàn)并不輕松”,反映內(nèi)心觸動(dòng)和成長(zhǎng)歷程?！痉椒ㄟ\(yùn)用】1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Iwasanaveragestudentinmyearlyelementaryyears.IcamehomewithasteadyflowofB’s,C’sandtheoccasionalF’sinsecondlanguagesubjects.IwastoldthatIwasn’tapplyingmyselfand,aseveryreportcardIeverbroughthomeclearlystated,Italkedtoomuch.Ididn’twritewhenIwassupposedtowrite.Italkedtootherswhiletheteacherwasgivinginstructions.ThatIcouldrecitewhatshehadsaidtotheclasswhileIwastalkingwasnothelpfulbecauseIhadanegativeeffectonmyclassmates’learning.SoIregularlybroughthomedisappointingreportcards.Myparentsandmyteachersdidn’tknowwhattodowithme.Punishmentsdidn’tseemtowork.Rewardsdidn’tseemtoeither.And,frankly,Idon’tthinkIknewwhatIcoulddoto“applymyself”.AndIcertainlydidn’tknowhowtonotenjoytalkingwithmyclassmates!WhatIknewwasthatItalkedtoomuch.Untilgrade5.Thatautumn,wehadasuddenchangeinteachersasourelderlyteachertookamedicalleave.Inhisplace,ayoungsubstitute(代課老師)arrived—MrsRoyal.Shelookedlikeshewasfreshlyoutofuniversityandseemedtooyoungtobecastintheroleofbeingresponsibleforaclassoftween,butthereshewas,chargedwithalivelygroup,andme.Idon’tremembermanydetailsofthatyearexcepttheafternoonwhenIgotmyfirstreportcardfromher.Shehandedoutthereportcardsrightaftertheafternoonbreakandinvitedustolookthemover.Thensheletusknowthatwecouldalltalkquietlyamongstourselveswhileshecalledeachstudentuponeatatime,inalphabeticalorder(按字母順序),todiscussourreportcardswithher.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Ilookedovermyreportcard,expectingtheusualresult.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenitwasmyturntotalkwithher.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Tenmilesawaystoodahousewithshinyredwalls,agreengardenandanappletree.Ayounggirl’sfacewouldbeseenreflectingfromoneofthelargeglassywindows.HernameisMaggie.Hereyesweresparklingandonherfacetherewasasmilewhichcouldlightamillioncandles.Sheseemedtobelongingforachancetoplaylikeayoungchild,butshehadnostrengthinherlegsbecausesheandherfamilymetwithanaccident,inwhichshelostbothherlegs.Butherspiritwasstrong.Shewouldbeinspiredbyseeingbirdsfly.Theflyingeaglewouldmakeherwanttofly.Shewaslonely.Shelongedforatruefriendwhowouldtalktoherandteachhertoflyoratleasttellherstoriesaboutsoaringintothebluesky.Oneevening,Maggieslowlyrolledherwheelchairtothegiantwindowandlookedouttothemanyhousesthatlayacrosstheroad.Suddenlysheheardsomeonesingingandthencouldseeanoldmaninapilotsuitsinginginglory.Thebeautifulsoundandthemelodymadethelittlegirlhappy.Suddenlyhestoppedandgazeduptowardher.“Whatareyoustaringat?”hesaidangrily.“YouthinkI’macircusclown?(馬戲團(tuán)小丑)”“No,Sir.Iwasjustlisteningtoyou.Yousingverywell,”shesaid.“Idon’tneedyourpraises.Idon’tneedanyone!”heshouted.Hestartedtowalktohishouseandshutthedoor.Tearsrolleddownfromherapple-redcheeksasthemanshoutedather.Shewaslonely.Nextmorning,Maggiepushedherwheelchairacrossthegardentothestoneroadaslittlechildrenplayedhide-and-seekaroundher.Suddenlyoutofnowherealoadingtruckcamerumblingacrosstowardher.Terrified,shetriedtomoveawayfromitspathbutthewheelsofherchairwerestuck.“Ohmy,”shethoughtasthetruckcameinherdirectionfast,withthedriverunawareoftheobstructioninfrontofhim.Shescreamedloudlybutinasplitsecondshewaspulledoutofherwheelchairbysomeoneandfellontheground.Sheclosedhereyesandshiveredasthetruckpassedherwhistling.Assheopenedhereyes,shecouldseeamanstandingbesideher.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Shegazeduptohimandimmediatelyrecognizedhimasthemanshesawsinginglastnight.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________MaggiegottoknowhisnamewasKenandthathewasaretiredpilot.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mamawasweavingamat(織墊子)withwild-grassstalks(莖稈)whenshecalledtoAchenyo,“Willyoudomeafavorandfetchmesomewaterforthepaints,Achenyo?”Inthecornerwerepotsofcoloringmattershe’dusetopaintthefinishedmats.“Ofcourse,Mama!”Achenyopickedupaclaypotassheslippedoutside.Shedidn’tlikemat-weaving,althoughitwasatraditionforamothertopassontheskillstoherdaughter.Achenyowouldratherbeplayingoutdoorswithherfriends.Outside,AchenyocalledtoAjuma,whosehousewasacrossfromhers.Bothgirls,withclaypotsbalancedontheirheads,madetheirwaytotheNigerRiver.Whentheyarrivedatthewater’sedge,whattheyfoundwasshocking.Theriverwasgone!Initsplacewasablanketofdarkgreenleavesdottedbycoloredflowers.“Ohno!”Achenyocried.“Theriverisgone!There’snowaterfordrinking,cooking,orbathing!Mamawon’thavewatertomixthepaintsforhermats.Lastyear,therainyseasonbroughtaninvasionofwaterhyacinths(水葫蘆).Theplantscoveredtheriverandleftnoroomtoputinapottofetchwater.Therewasnoroomtobatheorswim.Fishermencouldn’tcasttheirnetsforfish.Andnowthewaterhyacinthswereback“Howcouldsuchaprettyplantcausesuchharm?”AchenyowonderedTheadultsjumpedintothewateramongthebroad,greenleaves,Theybeganthrowingthemontotheriverbank.AchenyoandAjumajoinedthem.Whenthey’dclearedenoughplants,thegirlsfilledtheirpotswithwater.ApileofwaterhyacinthslayontheriverbankWhatapitytowastesuchprettyflowers,Achenyothought.ShepickedsomeforMama,andthenthegirlsheadedhome.Eachday,theyfoundtherivercoveredbywaterhyacinthsasifnoonehadclearedthewaterfrontthedaybefore.Oneday,asAchenyomovedanarmfulofdriedwaterhyacinthsoutofherway,shehadanidea.Carryingtheplantsunderherarm,sheranhome.“Mama,willyouteachmetoweave?注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Mamawastoogladtopassonthemat-weavingskillstoherdaughter.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________MamaandAchenyothentaughttheirneighbors.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mykitchenwasamess.Cloudsofflourdustedthecounters,thefloor,andtheapronsofthewomengatheredthere.Peelsfrom40poundsofappleswerepiledinthecorner.Mixingbowlsstickywithcinnamonandsugartippedmessilyinthesink.Thewrappersfrom12pounds’worthofbutterspilledfromthetrash.But,wow,itdidsmellsweet.SixofushadgatheredthatSaturdaymorningtomakeapplepies.Oncecolleagues,nowsimplyfriends,wesharedanintensecuriosityaboutallsortsofthings,andwelovedtochat.Todayourcuriosityandchatterweredirectedtopie-making.WhileIwasnotopchef,IknewhowtousearollingpinandI’dhadyearsofpracticeservingupstrawberrycakes,coconutcream,andsourcherrypiestomyfamily.Pie-makingisalotofwork.Whoevercoinedthephrase“easyaspie”musthavemeantconsuming,notcreating.Wespenthourspeeling,coring,slicing,measuring,andlearningtohandledelicatedough(面團(tuán)).“It’sstickingtotherollingpin,”oneofthemsaid,hervoicefullofdepression.“Ohno,it’scracking!”cameanothercry.Iassuredthemthepatchedcrust(皮)wouldsimplyserveasareminderthatthesepieswerehome-made.Outside,anOctobersnowstormstruckheavily.Inside,though,itwasallsteamywindows,softmusicandhappylaughteraswefinallyputourpiesintotheoven.Whenplanning“PieDay”,wedecidedthatwewouldeachmaketwopies:Oneforourfamiliesandonetodonatetosomeoneelse.Byearlyafternoon,12pieshadbeenplacedonthecounter,theirperfectlyimperfectcrustsshininggoldenly.Werushedtopreparefordelivery,packingthepiesmessilyinboxesandbags.Wemarcheddownthedriveway.Thesnowhadmelted(融化);theroadswereclear.Itwastimetodeliver.Then,disasterstruck.Oneofthepainstakinglycraftedpiesmeltedthroughthebagitwaspackedinandfellontothedriveway.Screamsofhorrorfollowed.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Onefriendranbackintothekitchenandreturnedwithforks.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thebestpartwasstilltocome:Handingoutpieswasevenbetterthaneatingpies.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1．Ilookedovermyreportcard,expectingtheusualresult.Buttomysurprise,herfeedbackwasdifferent.Insteadoffocusingonthenegatives,shepointedouttheimprovementsIhadmade.Sheacknowledgedmyefforts,howeversmall,andencouragedmetokeepworkingonmyweaknesses.Idouble-checkedandmadesureitwasdefinitelymyreportcard.Eventhoughwehadbeengivenpermissiontotalkamongstourselves,IhadverylittletosaytofriendsasIwaitedanxiouslyforhertocallmyname.Thenitwasmyturntotalkwithher.Shebeganwithawarmsmile,“Youhaveanyquestionsforme?”Irememberlookingdownatmyreportcardandsaying,“Idon’tgetA’s,besides,nowhereonheredoesitsayItalktoomuch.”Shesaid,“Ifiguredyoualreadyknewyoutalkedtoomuch,soIthoughtIcouldtellyousomethingdifferent.Asforthegrades,youearnedtheA’s.”Fromthatdayon,IknewIwascapableof“straightA’s”andcouldhavequalitiesotherthanthatofastudentwhotalkedtoomuchinclass.【寫(xiě)作分析】本文以學(xué)生的學(xué)習(xí)經(jīng)歷和改變?yōu)榫€索展開(kāi)，講述了“我”在小學(xué)早期是一個(gè)成績(jī)中等且愛(ài)在課堂上講話的學(xué)生。由于這種不良習(xí)慣，“我”不僅影響了自己的學(xué)習(xí)，還對(duì)同學(xué)產(chǎn)生了負(fù)面影響，導(dǎo)致常常帶回家令人失望的成績(jī)單。盡管父母和老師嘗試了各種方法，但都沒(méi)有顯著效果。直到五年級(jí)時(shí)，班里來(lái)了一位年輕的代課老師MrsRoyal，她以不同的教學(xué)方式處理成績(jī)單，讓“我”對(duì)自己的學(xué)習(xí)問(wèn)題有了新的認(rèn)識(shí)和期待?！疽c(diǎn)解析】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我看了看我的成績(jī)單，期待著和往常一樣的結(jié)果。”可知，第一段可描寫(xiě)作者得到的成績(jī)單和往常不同。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“然后輪到我和她說(shuō)話了。”可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)作者和MrsRoyal交流的具體內(nèi)容。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：成績(jī)單反饋不同——肯定進(jìn)步——開(kāi)始談話——給于肯定——感動(dòng)。3.詞匯激活行為類①指出：pointout/identify②鼓勵(lì)：encourage/inspire③認(rèn)為：figure/think情緒類①驚訝：surprise/astonishment②焦急地：anxiously/nervously[高分句型1]Eventhoughwehadbeengivenpermissiontotalkamongstourselves,IhadverylittletosaytofriendsasIwaitedanxiouslyforhertocallmyname.(運(yùn)用了eventhough引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句和as引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句)[高分句型2]Idon’tgetA’s,besides,nowhereonheredoesitsayItalktoomuch.(運(yùn)用了nowhere位于句首的倒裝句以及省略that的賓語(yǔ)從句)2．Shegazeduptohimandimmediatelyrecognizedhimasthemanshesawsinginglastnight."Thankyouforsavingme,"shesaidingratitude,"andI'msorryifIbotheredyoulastnightwithmylistening."Themanlookedather,asoftnessinhiseyes."Ididn’tmeantobesoharsh."hesaid,hisvoicefilledwithremorse.ThesoftnessopenedMaggie’sheart.Shepouredoutherstoryoftheaccident,herlongingforafriend,andherobsessionwithflying.Kenlistenedintently,hisheartgoingouttotheyounggirl."AndIdon’tseemtobetheonlyonewholovesflying."saidthegirl,eyeingtheman’suniform.MaggiegottoknowhisnamewasKenandthathewasaretiredpilot.Asthesunbegantoset,MaggielearnedsomuchaboutKenthatsherealizedthatshehadfoundatruefriendinKen.Forthefirsttimeinalongtime,shefeltgenuinehappiness.Thenextday,KencamebacktovisitMaggiewithasmallgift,abookaboutflying.Maggie’sfacelitupassheflippedthroughthepages,imaginingherselfsoaringthroughtheclouds.Manyafternoonssawtheminthegarden,laughingandenjoyingeachother’scompany.Theirfriendshipgrewstrongerwitheachpassingday.【寫(xiě)作分析】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了一個(gè)名叫麥琪的年輕女孩，因?yàn)橐淮问鹿适チ穗p腿。盡管身體受到限制，麥琪的精神依然堅(jiān)強(qiáng)。她渴望找到一個(gè)真正的朋友，能和她交談、教她飛翔，或者至少給她講述關(guān)于藍(lán)天的故事。一天，麥琪在窗前聽(tīng)到一個(gè)老人唱歌，她很開(kāi)心地欣賞著。但老人卻生氣地責(zé)備她，并走回自己的房子。麥琪感到非常孤獨(dú)。第二天，當(dāng)一輛貨車朝她駛來(lái)時(shí)，她被一個(gè)人拉出輪椅并躺在地上，幸免于難。她睜開(kāi)眼睛看到的人正是昨晚唱歌的那個(gè)男人。他們互相交流，麥琪向他傾訴了她的故事。她發(fā)現(xiàn)這個(gè)男人名叫肯，是一位退休飛行員。他們成為了真正的朋友，每天在花園里笑著相處。他們的友誼與日俱增。【要點(diǎn)解析】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“她抬頭望著他，立刻認(rèn)出他就是昨晚唱歌的那個(gè)人?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫(xiě)麥琪表達(dá)感謝以及向肯講述她的故事。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“麥琪知道他的名字叫肯，是一名退休飛行員。”可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)麥琪了解肯的很多事情以及他們成為了好朋友。。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：麥琪抬頭望著他并且認(rèn)出他——麥琪表達(dá)感謝——麥琪講述自己的故事——了解肯的事情——他們成為好朋友——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①打擾：bothered/disturbed②.渴望：longfor/yearnfor③.意識(shí)到：realized/beawareof情緒類①.感謝：thank/showingherappreciation/showhergratitude/begrateful②.專心地：intently/attentively[高分句型1].AndIdon’tseemtobetheonlyonewholovesflying.（運(yùn)用了關(guān)系代詞who引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句。）[高分句型2].Maggie’sfacelitupassheflippedthroughthepages,imaginingherselfsoaringthroughtheclouds.（運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞imagining作狀語(yǔ)。）3．Mamawastoogladtopassonthemat-weavingskillstoherdaughter.Butshewasdoubtfulaboutthewaterhyacinthstalks.Achenyoinsistedthatthewaterhyacinthstalkswouldbestrongenoughtobemadeintoschoolbagstocarrybooks,andbasketstotakevegetablestothemarket.So,MamabegantoteachAchenyohowtoseparatethestalksfromtheleaves,howtobendthewovenropeintoaroundshapeandhowtotietheropestogether.Achenyolearnedveryquicklyandsoonshecouldweavebagsandbasketsallbyherself.MamaandAchenyothentaughttheirneighbors.Theywerealleagertomaketheirowncraftsusingthosewaterhyacinthstalks,whichnowseemednotsoannoying.Theymadeschoolbagsfortheirchildren,andbaskets,trays,andchairmatsfordailyuse.Bytheendoftherainyseason,thevillagerswereeagertogototherivereverymorningtoharvestwaterhyacinths.Theynolongerthoughtoftheplantasaninvader,butaprovider.Achenyowasproudthatshemadeadifferencetohercommunity.【寫(xiě)作分析】本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)。本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)。媽媽在織墊子時(shí)叫阿琴約幫她取些水來(lái)拌顏料。阿琴約不喜歡織墊子，但還是愉快地答應(yīng)了。她和朋友阿朱瑪去尼日爾河取水，卻發(fā)現(xiàn)河水不見(jiàn)了，取而代之的是一片布滿彩色花朵的綠色葉子。原來(lái)，去年雨季水葫蘆入侵，覆蓋了整條河，導(dǎo)致無(wú)法取水、沐浴或捕魚(yú)。成人和孩子們開(kāi)始清理水葫蘆。阿琴約覺(jué)得這些花扔掉可惜，便撿了一些給媽媽。每天清理的水葫蘆第二天又會(huì)重新覆蓋河面，這讓阿琴約想到一個(gè)主意。她拿著干枯的水葫蘆跑回家問(wèn)媽媽：“你能教我織東西嗎？”【要點(diǎn)解析】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)①由第一段句首內(nèi)容“媽媽很高興把編織墊子的技藝傳給女兒。”可知，第一段可以描寫(xiě)媽媽教阿琴約的過(guò)程。②由第二段句首內(nèi)容“然后，媽媽和阿琴約教他們的鄰居?！笨芍?，第二段可以描寫(xiě)媽媽和阿琴約教他們的鄰居的過(guò)程和因此帶來(lái)的變化。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：傳藝給女兒——學(xué)會(huì)編織——二人教鄰居——變化——感到驕傲3.詞匯激活行為類①堅(jiān)持：insist/persist②開(kāi)始：begin/start③教導(dǎo)：teach/instruct情緒類①懷疑的：doubtful/skeptical②煩人的：annoying/tiresome【高分句型1】Achenyoinsistedthatthewaterhyacinthstalkswouldbestrongenoughtobemadeintoschoolbagstocarrybooks,andbasketstotakevegetablestothemarket.(運(yùn)用了that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句)【高分句型2】Theywerealleagertomaketheirowncraftsusingthosewaterhyacinthstalks,whichnowseemednotsoannoying.(運(yùn)用了which引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句)【高分句型3】Achenyowasproudthatshemadeadifferencetohercommunity.(運(yùn)用了that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句)4．第一段：Onefriendranbackintothekitchenandreturnedwithforks.Welookedforeverylastbitofthefallenpie,laughingandcryingatthesametime.Itwasamomentofpurejoyandconnection,aswerealizedthateveninthefaceofdisaster,thereisalwayssomethingtobegratefulfor.Theincidentonlymadeourpiesmoreprecious,remindingusofthehardworkandlovethatwenti