海南省天一大聯(lián)考20242025學(xué)年高二下學(xué)期學(xué)業(yè)水平診斷（三）英語閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。MybrotherandIleftourhometownintheMidwestyearsago,eachpursuingcareersandbuildinglivesanhour’sdrivefromourparents’house(獨(dú)立主格交代故事的背景).Whilewetreasuredweeklycallsandweekendvisits,thedistanceseemedlikeasilentworry(無靈主語)especiallyasourdad'shealthdeclinedwithcancerandourmommanagedherheartdiseasealone.Littledidweknowthat(倒裝句)fatehadplacedguardianangelsnextdoor(文章中心已經(jīng)呼之欲出，可不能寫跑題).MyparentshavelivedintheMidwestforover30years.Foryears,itwasjustthem,uskidsingandgoing(獨(dú)立主格),andthequietrhythmofsmalltownlife.ButwhentheSmithsmovedinnextdoorfiveyearsago,thatrhythmgainedanew,beautifulbeat(無靈主語句).TomSmith,aconstructionworkerwithaheartasbigashistoolbelt,andhiswifeEllen,aretirednurse,wouldewiththeirkidsLily,then15,andJake,20andBear.AtamedBear.Atfirst,theinteractionsweresimple:wavesacrossthefence,sharedstoriesovermorningcoffeeandLilyaskingtopetthedog(可以理解為獨(dú)立主格或名詞并列).Butasmydad’shealthdeclinedandmymom'sdiseasedemandedmoreattention,thosesmallexchangesgrewintosomethingstrong.Tomtooktocheckingonmydaddaily,oftenchattingwithhim(現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨動(dòng)作).“Yourdadisastoryteller,”he’dsay.“Bestpartofmydaylisteningtohistales(現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨動(dòng)作)."Ellen,noticingmymom’sstruggletomanageherbloodsugar(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作),starteddroppingoffnotesonthefridgewithwords:“Roastchickennosugar,extralove!”Andthekidsbecameregularstoo,helpingtowaterthegardenformyparents(現(xiàn)在分詞段做伴隨動(dòng)作).peaceful.Thenemedpeaceful.Thenonespringnight,astormhitsuddenly(故事的核心事件到來).Thunderwasloudandrainbeathardagainstthewindows.Myparents’oldmapletree,weakfromyearsofstorms(adj短語做補(bǔ)語或后置定語),struggledinthewindandfellontothedriveway,blockingitpletely(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做結(jié)果狀語，這一幕太有畫面感了！).Whenmyparentsphonedmeabouttheirsituation,Iwastrappedonhighwaysfilledwithfallenbranches(過去分詞短語做后置定語).Unfortunately,mybrotherwasawayonabusinesstripinanothercity(沖突升級(jí)).Weworrieddeeplyaboutourdadandourmom,beingaloneinthestorm(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做后置定一股).注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Atthatmoment,somefamiliarfiguresappeared.Paragraph2:Afterthestorm,mybrotherandIknockedontheSmiths’door.

海南省天一大聯(lián)考20242025學(xué)年高二下學(xué)期學(xué)業(yè)水平診斷（三）英語閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。MybrotherandIleftourhometownintheMidwestyearsago,eachpursuingcareersandbuildinglivesanhour’sdrivefromourparents’house.Whilewetreasuredweeklycallsandweekendvisits,thedistanceseemedlikeasilentworryespeciallyasourdad'shealthdeclinedwithcancerandourmommanagedherheartdiseasealone.Littledidweknowthatfatehadplacedguardianangels(天使)nextdoor.MyparentshavelivedintheMidwestforover30years.Foryears,itwasjustthem,uskidsingandgoing,andthequietrhythm(節(jié)奏)ofsmalltownlife.ButwhentheSmithsmovedinnextdoorfiveyearsago,thatrhythmgainedanew,beautifulbeat.TomSmith,aconstructionworkerwithaheartasbigashistoolbelt,andhiswifeEllen,aretirednurse,wouldewiththeirkidsLBear.Aten15,andJake,20andadognamedBear.Atfirst,theinteractionsweresimple:wavesacrossthefence,sharedstoriesovermorningcoffeeandLilyaskingtopetthedog.Butasmydad’shealthdeclinedandmymom'sdiseasedemandedmoreattention,thosesmallexchangesgrewintosomethingstrong.Tomtooktocheckingonmydaddaily,oftenchattingwithhim.“Yourdadisastoryteller,”he’dsay.“Bestpartofmydaylisteningtohistales."Ellen,noticingmymom’sstruggletomanageherbloodsugar,starteddroppingoffnotesonthefridgewithwords:“Roastchickennosugar,extralove!”Andthekidsbecameregularstoo,helpingtowaterthegardenformyparents.peaceful.Thenloud.andpeaceful.Thenonespringnight,astormhitsuddenly.Thunderwasloud.andrainbeathardagainstthewindows.Myparents’oldmapletree,weakfromyearsofstorms,struggledinthewindandfellontothedriveway,blockingitpletely.Whenmyparentsphonedmeabouttheirsituation,Iwastrappedonhighwaysfilledwithfallenbranches.Unfortunately,mybrotherwasawayonabusinesstripinanothercity.Weworrieddeeplyaboutourdadandourmom,beingaloneinthestorm.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Atthatmoment,somefamiliarfiguresappeared.Paragraph2:Afterthestorm,mybrotherandIknockedontheSmiths’door.

1.文章分類與續(xù)寫思路分析文章類型：社區(qū)家庭鄰里情感類（家庭溫情+鄰里互助）續(xù)寫構(gòu)思方向：情感基調(diào)：溫暖、感恩、互助核心沖突：父母在暴風(fēng)雨夜孤立無援，鄰居史密斯一家及時(shí)幫助主題升華：陌生人如何成為“守護(hù)天使”，彌補(bǔ)子女無法陪伴的遺憾布局與框架：段落內(nèi)容設(shè)計(jì)關(guān)鍵銜接點(diǎn)第一段史密斯一家冒雨出現(xiàn)，分工救援（如湯姆清理樹干，艾倫照顧父母情緒，孩子安撫寵物）承接“雷雨夜”“樹倒堵路”“子女被困”的危機(jī)第二段風(fēng)暴后子女登門感謝，發(fā)現(xiàn)史密斯一家默默付出的細(xì)節(jié)（如冰箱上的便簽、父親的日記），揭示“守護(hù)天使”的深層意義呼應(yīng)“鄰居日常幫助”“父母依賴感”續(xù)寫注意事項(xiàng)：承接原文：時(shí)間/空間：暴風(fēng)雨夜→次日清晨人物動(dòng)作：史密斯一家的救援動(dòng)作需具體（如“Tom揮舞電鋸”“Ellen提急救箱”）情感線索：父母從“恐慌”到“安心”，子女從“擔(dān)憂”到“感激”巧妙設(shè)計(jì)：加入象征性細(xì)節(jié)（如“Bear舔母親的手”表安慰）用對(duì)話揭示伏筆（如父親說“史密斯總說我的故事救了他”）2.故事山模式與原文分析故事山結(jié)構(gòu)：階段原文內(nèi)容續(xù)寫對(duì)應(yīng)點(diǎn)開端子女離家，父母健康惡化暴風(fēng)雨引發(fā)危機(jī)發(fā)展史密斯一家逐漸融入父母生活鄰居冒雨救援高潮樹倒堵路，子女無法趕到史密斯一家化解危機(jī)結(jié)局子女感恩，主題升華關(guān)鍵分析表：分析角度內(nèi)容原文反應(yīng)句人物刻畫史密斯一家無私善良“Tomtooktocheckingonmydaddaily”情感層次父母從孤獨(dú)到依賴“thosesmallexchangesgrewintosomethingstrong”關(guān)鍵情節(jié)點(diǎn)暴風(fēng)雨夜樹倒“theoldmapletree...fellontothedriveway”語言特色樸實(shí)中帶溫情“extralove!”（冰箱便簽）心理描寫子女的擔(dān)憂“Weworrieddeeplyaboutourdadandmom”動(dòng)作描寫鄰居的日常幫助“helpingtowaterthegarden”隱含主題鄰里如親“guardianangelsnextdoor”伏筆沖突父母健康問題+子女距離“distanceseemedlikeasilentworry”隱含線索父親的故事對(duì)湯姆有意義“Yourdadisastoryteller”解決方案：明線：史密斯一家清理路障、提供醫(yī)療幫助暗線：通過救援行動(dòng)揭示“守護(hù)天使”的伏筆（如湯姆曾受父親故事鼓舞）續(xù)寫段落示范（大綱）Paragraph1:動(dòng)作銜接：閃電中史密斯一家披雨衣現(xiàn)身，湯姆用電鋸鋸樹，艾倫檢查父母健康狀況。情感銜接：母親顫抖的手被莉莉握住，父親重復(fù)“你們不該冒險(xiǎn)…”。關(guān)鍵詞復(fù)用：“Bear”（狗）沖進(jìn)屋內(nèi)抖落雨水，打破緊張氣氛。Paragraph2:空間轉(zhuǎn)換：次日清晨，子女看到整潔的車道和廚房里熱湯，發(fā)現(xiàn)父親日記記錄“史密斯每晚陪他看夕陽”。主題升華：湯姆說：“你們父母才是天使，他們讓我懂得家的意義?！?.英文例句及高級(jí)替換詞(1)動(dòng)作描寫（ActionDescriptions）Tomgrabbedachainsawandbegancuttingthroughthefallentreetrunk.（湯姆抓起電鋸，開始鋸斷倒下的樹干。）Ellenrushedintothehouse,herraincoatdrippingwet.（艾倫沖進(jìn)屋子，雨衣還在滴水。）Lilykneltbesidemymom,gentlyholdinghertremblinghands.（莉莉跪在我媽媽身旁，輕輕握住她顫抖的雙手。）Bearbarkedloudly,hisfursoakedfromthestorm.（Bear大聲吠叫，毛發(fā)被暴雨淋濕。）Mydadstruggledtostand,leaningheavilyonTom’sshoulder.（我爸爸掙扎著站起來，重重地靠在湯姆的肩膀上。）Jakedraggedthebrokenbranchesaway,hismusclesstraining.（Jake拖走斷裂的樹枝，肌肉緊繃。）Thewindhowledoutside,rattlingthewindows.（風(fēng)在外面呼嘯，震得窗戶咔咔作響。）Momclutchedherchest,herbreathingshallow.（媽媽捂著胸口，呼吸急促。）Tomwipedhisbrow,sweatmixingwiththerain.（湯姆擦了擦額頭，汗水與雨水混在一起。）Ellenwrappedablanketaroundmymom’sshoulders.（艾倫把毯子披在我媽媽的肩上。）(2)心理描寫（PsychologicalDescriptions）AwaveofreliefwashedovermeasIsawtheSmithsarrive.（看到史密斯一家來了，我松了一口氣。）Feargnawedatmyheart—whatifmyparentswerehurt?（恐懼啃噬著我的心——萬一我父母受傷了怎么辦？）Guiltweighedheavilyonmefornotbeingthere.（無法陪伴的內(nèi)疚感沉重地壓在我心頭。）Dad’seyessoftenedwithgratitudeasTomhelpedhim.（湯姆幫忙時(shí)，爸爸的眼神因感激而柔和下來。）Mom’slipstrembled,hervoicebarelyawhisper.（媽媽的嘴唇顫抖著，聲音幾乎微不可聞。）Ifeltalumpinmythroat,unabletospeak.（我喉嚨發(fā)緊，說不出話來。）Jake’sreassuringsmileeasedsomeofmyanxiety.（Jake安慰的微笑緩解了我的部分焦慮。）Asenseofhelplessnesscreptinasthestormragedon.（暴風(fēng)雨肆虐時(shí)，一種無助感悄然襲來。）Forthefirsttime,Itrulyunderstoodthemeaningof“guardianangels.”（我第一次真正理解了“守護(hù)天使”的含義。）Mybrother’svoicecrackedwithworryoverthephone.（電話里，我哥哥的聲音因擔(dān)憂而哽咽。）(3)環(huán)境描寫（EnvironmentalDescriptions）Therainlashedagainstthewindowslikearelentlessdrumbeat.（雨水猛烈地拍打著窗戶，像無情的鼓點(diǎn)。）Thunderrumbledinthedistance,shakingtheground.（遠(yuǎn)處雷聲隆隆，震得地面顫動(dòng)。）Theoldmapletreegroanedundertheforceofthewind.（老楓樹在狂風(fēng)中發(fā)出呻吟。）Thedrivewaywaspletelyblockedbythefallentree.（車道被倒下的樹完全堵住了。）Lightningflashed,illuminatingtheterrifiedfacesinside.（閃電劃過，照亮了屋內(nèi)驚恐的臉。）Thestormhadturnedthepeacefulneighborhoodintochaos.（暴風(fēng)雨讓寧靜的社區(qū)陷入混亂。）Waterpooledonthefloorwheretheroofleaked.（屋頂漏雨，地板上積了一灘水。）Thewindhowledlikeawoundedanimal.（風(fēng)像受傷的野獸一樣嚎叫。）Thescentofwetearthfilledtheairaftertherain.（雨后，潮濕的泥土氣息彌漫在空氣中。）Thefirstlightofdawnrevealedthedamageleftbythestorm.（黎明的第一縷陽光照出了暴風(fēng)雨留下的破壞。）4.高級(jí)替換詞&語料積累(1)高級(jí)替換詞（按場景分類）基礎(chǔ)詞高級(jí)替換詞適用場景helpassist,aid,support救援、照顧kindpassionate,benevolent,selfless描述善良worriedanxious,distressed,uneasy心理描寫quicklyswiftly,promptly,hastily動(dòng)作迅速tiredexhausted,weary,drained疲憊狀態(tài)(2)固定搭配&詞法解析checkonsb.（查看某人情況）Tomtooktocheckingonmydaddaily.dropoff（順路送某物）Ellenstarteddroppingoffnotesonthefridge.taketo(doingsth.)（開始習(xí)慣做某事）Tomtooktochattingwithmydadeverymorning.manage(acondition/disease)（控制病情）Mymomstruggledtomanageherheartdisease.blockpletely（完全堵?。㏕hefallentreeblockedthedrivewaypletely.(3)可積累的生詞短語decline(v.)（惡化）Hishealthdeclinedrapidlyafterthediagnosis.近：deteriorate/反：improveguardianangel(n.)（守護(hù)天使）TheSmithswerelikeguardianangelstomyparents.近：protector/反：threatrhythm(n.)（節(jié)奏）Thequietrhythmofsmalltownlifewasforting.近：pace/反：chaosstruggle(v.)（掙扎）Theoldtreestruggledagainstthestrongwind.近：strive/反：succeedtremble(v.)（顫抖）Herhandstrembledassheheldthecup.近：shake/反：steady總結(jié)動(dòng)作描寫：多用具體動(dòng)詞（grab,rush,kneel,drag）增強(qiáng)畫面感。心理描寫：用比喻（waveofrelief,guiltweighed）表達(dá)情緒。環(huán)境描寫：擬聲詞（howled,rumbled）渲染氛圍。高級(jí)替換：避免重復(fù)，如用passionate代替kind。固定搭配：如checkon,dropoff，讓表達(dá)更地道。

PossibleVersions(4)Version1Paragraph1:Atthatmoment,somefamiliarfiguresappeared.Tom,Ellen,andtheirchildren,LilyandJake,allheldumbrellasandflashlights.MyfatheropenedthedoorjustasTomshouted,“Wesawthetreefall!”Withouthesitation,TomandJakeapproachedtheblockeddriveway.Usingtheirtoolsandteamwork(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作),theybegancuttingthebrokenbranchesandclearingapath.Meanwhile,Ellenhelpedmymothertositdown,wrappingawarmblanketaroundhershoulders(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作).Lily,thoughsoakedfromtherain(adj短語做主語補(bǔ)語),gentlyplacedamugofwarmteainmyfather’shands,whispering(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作),“It’sgoingtobeokay.”Theircalm,determinedactionseasedmyparents’fear(無靈主語句).WatchingtheSmithsactsoswiftly(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做主語),asifhelpingtheirownfamily,wassomethingbeyondkindness—itwasloveinaction.Paragraph2:Afterthestorm,mybrotherandIknockedontheSmiths’door.WhenTomopenedthedoor,holdingaphotoalbumfilledwithmemoriesofourparents’lifeintheneighborhood(過去分詞做后置定語).“Wewantedyoutoknowhowmuchyoumeantothem—andtous,”Isaid,voicetremblingslightly(獨(dú)立主格).Tomgrinned,wipinghishandsonhispants(現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨動(dòng)作).“We’reneighbors.That’swhatwedo.”Ellenadded,“Familyisnotjustblood,sometimesit’safenceaway.”Aswesharedstoriesandlaughter,Irealizedthatinthisquiettown,wehadfoundmorethanguardians—wehadfoundfamily.Beforeweleft,Lilyhandedusasmallnotebook,labeledDad’sStories(過去分詞做后置定語).“Hetoldussomany,”shesmiled.Inthatmoment,IknewtheSmithshadn’tjustsavedthenight—theyhadgivenussomethingtoholdontoforyearstoe.語言分析與語料積累類別表現(xiàn)高分語法點(diǎn)狀語從句：“asifhelpingtheirownfamily”現(xiàn)在分詞：“holdingumbrellas”,“wrappingablanket”非限制性定語從句：“Tom,whoalways...”地道搭配clearapathvoicetremblingslightlysomethingbeyondkindness同義詞替換“help”→assist,etoone’said“calm”→posed,steady情緒描寫短語voicetremblingeasedtheirfearwhisperedgently動(dòng)作描寫短語approachedthedrivewaywrappedawarmblanketwipedhishands亮詞升級(jí)“said”→murmured,responded,explained“kindness”→passion,generosity例句積累Shewhisperedsoftly,hervoicetremblingwithemotion.Heworkedasifhewerehelpinghisownfather.Theircalmpresencemeltedthepanicintheair.Thebrokentreestoodlikeabarrierbetweenfearandhelp.Version2Paragraph1:Atthatmoment,somefamiliarfiguresappeared.Flashlightsbobbedthroughtherain(無靈主語句，借代？).ItwastheSmiths,withBearbarkinggentlybesidethem(現(xiàn)在分詞做后置定語).Tomwavedashecalledout,“Stayinside—we’vegotthis!”Inablurofteamwork,heandJakestarteddraggingthelargestbranchesasidewhileEllenandLilycheckedonmyparents.Myfather,stillshaken(過去分詞做adj補(bǔ)語),triedtohelpbutwasfirmlytoldtorest.Ellenquicklyassessedmymother’sconditionandwhisperedreassuranceswhilehandingherapillboxfromthekitchen.Lily,drippingwet(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做后置定語),smiledandjoked,“Guessthisstormforgotwehadplanstonight!”Thatsinglemoment—stormyandchaotic(adj做補(bǔ)語)—turnedintoamemoryofwarmthandsafety.ThoughmybrotherandIwerefaraway,weknewsomeonehadsteppedinwhenitmatteredmost.Paragraph2:Afterthestorm,mybrotherandIknockedontheSmiths’door.Withahomemadecakeandtwohandwrittenlettersinhand(with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)),weknockedonthedoor.Themomentthedooropened,wewereweledwithwarmhugsandfamiliarlaughter.“We’rejustgratefulyouwerethere,”mybrothersaid.Ellensmiled,“They’relikeourownparentsnow.”Aswesatintheircozylivingroom,lookingatBearsnoringbythefire(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作),Lilyreadpartofherletteraloud:“Thanksforbeingourheroesintherain.”Thequietsincerityinhervoicemovedeveryone.Itwasn’tagrandrescue,butitwaslovestitchedintoeverydayacts(過去分詞短語做后置定語)—checking,helping,forting(動(dòng)名詞短語并列).Thatday,wepromisedtoreturnmoreoften—notoutofguilt,butoutoflove,tosharethekindnesstheSmithshadmodeledsoeffortlessly.語言分析與語料積累類別表現(xiàn)加分語法點(diǎn)虛擬語氣：“asifthestormforgotwehadplans”分詞結(jié)構(gòu)：“drippingwet,smiled”強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)：“ItwastheSmithswho...”地道搭配whisperreassurancesdragbranchesasidesnoringbythefire替換詞“chaotic”=hectic,stormy“safe”=protected,secured情緒短語firmlytoldtorestmovedeveryonesincerevoice動(dòng)作短語bobbingflashlightshandingapillboxsatinthecozylivingroom亮詞升級(jí)“helped”→camethrough,steppedin“grateful”→thankful,appreciative例句積累Shehandedoverthemedicineboxwithoutaword,butwithdeepcare.Itwasn’tarescuewithsirens,butonewithheart.Flashlightsdancedthroughthestormlikeguidingstars.Lovewasstitchedintothelittlethingstheydid.Version3Paragraph1:Atthatmoment,somefamiliarfiguresappeared.Tom,hisworkbootssplashedwithmud(獨(dú)立主格),wasalreadyassessingthefallentree.Jake,carryingachainsawandropes(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做后置定語),approachedthefallentreetoo.Bearbarkedonce,asifencouragingthem.MyfatheropenedthedoorjustasTomshouted,“Hangtight—we’rehere!”Whiletheyworked,Ellenbroughtoversomemedicineandawarmdrink,gentlyguidingmymothertothesofa(現(xiàn)在分詞短語叢伴隨動(dòng)作).Lilywrappedthedogintowelsandhelpedlightcandlesasthepowerflickered.Despitethestormoutside,therewasawarmthinsidethatcamenotfromelectricity,butfromhumancare.Myparents,thoughshaken(過去分詞做adj補(bǔ)語),foundthemselvesquietlysmiling.Thoughmilesseparatedus,theSmiths’actionsconnecteduscloserthanever.Paragraph2:Afterthestorm,mybrotherandIknockedontheSmiths’door.、Carryinganoldfamilyphoto(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作)framedwithanote(過去分詞短語做后置定語):“You’vebeenpartofthisstory.”Tomlaughedheartily.“Iwasjusttellingyourdad’sfishingstorytoJakeagain.”Wesataroundthetable,drinkinghotcocoa(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作)aslaughterechoedthroughthehouse.“Youweretheangelswedidn’tknowweneeded,”Isaidquietly.Ellentearedup,replying(現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動(dòng)作),“We’rejustluckytohaveneighborslikethis.”Itwasn’taboutheroism.Itwasaboutthesmall,steadfastthings—checkingin,stayingclose,lovingwithoutbeingasked(現(xiàn)在分詞短語并列).Wepromisedtovisitmore,notjustforourparents,buttoremindtheSmithstheyweren’tjustneighbors.Theywereourchosenfamily.語言分析與語料積累類別表現(xiàn)高分語法點(diǎn)強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)：“Itwasn’taboutheroism—itwasabout…”分詞作伴隨：“carryingachainsaw”,“wrappedintowels”定語從句：“theangelswedidn’tknowweneeded”高頻搭配flickeringlightsquietlysmilingframedwithanote詞匯替換“storm”→downpour,tempest“support”→care,presence情緒亮點(diǎn)tearedupquietlysmilingwarmthinsidedespitestorm動(dòng)作亮點(diǎn)guidinghertotheso