試卷第=page1616頁(yè)，共26頁(yè)試卷第=page11頁(yè)，共=sectionpages33頁(yè)專題04讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)之遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)目錄01知識(shí)腦圖·學(xué)科框架速建02考點(diǎn)精析·知識(shí)能力全解【知能解讀01】讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)考情統(tǒng)計(jì)目錄01知識(shí)腦圖·學(xué)科框架速建02考點(diǎn)精析·知識(shí)能力全解【知能解讀01】讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)考情統(tǒng)計(jì)【知能解讀02】讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)考情解讀【知能解讀03】讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇困脫險(xiǎn)語(yǔ)料梳理一、雪山脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)二、冰上救援類(lèi)三、困洞營(yíng)救類(lèi)四、動(dòng)物描寫(xiě)類(lèi)五、自救他救類(lèi)六、情感描寫(xiě)類(lèi)03攻堅(jiān)指南·高頻考點(diǎn)突破【重難點(diǎn)突破01】遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)好句梳理一、惡劣環(huán)境描寫(xiě)二、被困心理描寫(xiě)三、救援行動(dòng)描寫(xiě)【重難點(diǎn)突破02】遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)主題升華【重難點(diǎn)突破03】遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)句式仿寫(xiě)句型一：Muchtoone’s情緒n.,sbdidsth句型二：Adj.as主+謂,sbdidsth句型三：Upondoingsth,sbdidsth【重難點(diǎn)突破04】遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)片段訓(xùn)練一、飛行員墜海獲救二、火海取手機(jī)獲救04避坑錦囊·易混易錯(cuò)診療【易混易錯(cuò)01】讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)精彩結(jié)尾（二）畫(huà)面定格法【易混易錯(cuò)02】遇困脫險(xiǎn)優(yōu)秀片段欣賞一、地震救援動(dòng)作鏈：二、落水救援動(dòng)作鏈：三、野生動(dòng)物救助動(dòng)作鏈：【易混易錯(cuò)03】遇困脫險(xiǎn)高考真題再現(xiàn)05通法提煉·高頻思維拆解【方法技巧01】遇困脫險(xiǎn)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)寫(xiě)作步驟【方法技巧02】遇困脫險(xiǎn)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)跟蹤訓(xùn)練01讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)考情統(tǒng)計(jì)年份卷別主題話題類(lèi)型2020浙江7月卷人與自然與北極熊面對(duì)面的一次脫險(xiǎn)經(jīng)歷遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)02讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)考情解讀【遇困脫險(xiǎn)話題解讀】遇困脫險(xiǎn)是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)中常見(jiàn)話題，涉及人與自然或者人與社會(huì)主題語(yǔ)境，會(huì)有火災(zāi)、洪水、溺水、迷路、交通事故、突發(fā)疾病等緊急情況。從最初遇險(xiǎn)的驚慌害怕，絕望無(wú)助，到想辦法救援，到最后獲救的寬慰和感激，涉及到一系列的表達(dá)。情節(jié)線：遭遇危險(xiǎn)（惡劣環(huán)境/危險(xiǎn)描寫(xiě)&情感描寫(xiě)）—出現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)（想到辦法&呼救求助）—救援脫險(xiǎn)（救援描述&情感描寫(xiě)）—感悟升華（歷險(xiǎn)者/救援者）。情感線：焦急緊張/恐懼無(wú)助—筋疲力盡--欣喜/欣慰（relieved）—感動(dòng)/感謝/感悟?！竟适虑楣?jié)構(gòu)建支架】階段情節(jié)發(fā)展情緒刻畫(huà)第一階段困難處境描寫(xiě)—困難處境+消極情緒困難處境：冰雪覆蓋、道路泥濘、氣溫降低……--情感表現(xiàn)：焦慮、緊張、恐懼、絕望、難過(guò)……第二階段救人過(guò)程呈現(xiàn)—想到辦法+如釋重負(fù)--救他型：發(fā)現(xiàn)困境—克服困難—提供幫助--他救型：遇到困境—尋求幫助—給與施救第三階段皆大歡喜結(jié)局—感激+感動(dòng)+升華--問(wèn)題解決：欣慰、開(kāi)心、擁抱、感謝……--主旨升華：難忘記憶、傳遞快樂(lè)、團(tuán)結(jié)堅(jiān)持……03讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇困脫險(xiǎn)語(yǔ)料梳理一、雪山脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)1.Exhaustedaswewere,wedidn’tstop.Grittingourteeth,wekeptdiggingthetrench.盡管我們筋疲力盡，但是我們沒(méi)有停下來(lái)，我們咬緊牙關(guān)繼續(xù)挖溝槽。2.Inchbyinch,wedugthesnowout.Afterwhatseemedacentury,wemadeit.我們一點(diǎn)一點(diǎn)的把雪挖出來(lái)，在經(jīng)歷了似乎一個(gè)世紀(jì)之后（夸張手法），我們終于成功了。二、冰上救援類(lèi)1.Theicywindstartedhowling,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife.寒風(fēng)開(kāi)始咆哮，像鋒利的小刀刺痛了我的臉。2.Hepushedthebranchtowardme.IgrabbedimmediatelyandwasdraggedoutoftheicywaterbyHarry.Whatanarrowescape!他把樹(shù)枝推向我。我立刻抓住它，最終被哈利從冰冷的水中拖了出來(lái)。真是死里逃生。三、困洞營(yíng)救類(lèi)1.Nosoonerhadwearrivedwherethechildwastrappedthanthemanstartedtoscanthesurroundings.Thenheinchedtowardtheholeandstretchedouttoseizethechild'shands,pullinghimoutwithoutreserve.(動(dòng)作鏈）我們一到孩子被困的地方，那個(gè)男人就開(kāi)始觀察周?chē)?guó)的環(huán)境，然后慢慢向洞口走去，仲手抓住孩子的手，把他完全拉了出來(lái)。2.Slowlyandcautiously,movingforward,weheldourhandstightlyinordernottobeseparated.慢慢且小心翼翼地往前走，我們緊緊地握著手，不讓彼此分開(kāi)。四、動(dòng)物描寫(xiě)類(lèi)1.Itexposedhissharpteeth,glaringatusasitranforward.他露出鋒利的牙齒，向前跑時(shí)怒視著我們。2.Itseemedthathismouthwasfullofblood,hiseyesredwithangerandthemouthwidelyopen.他的嘴里似乎滿是血，眼睛因憤怒而發(fā)紅，嘴巴張大了。五、自救他救類(lèi)1.Ishoutedforhelpatthetopofmyvoicebutinvain.我聲嘶力竭地喊叫求助，但都是徒勞。2.Ipickedmycourageandtriedtofrightenhimawaywiththepepperspray.我不得不采取行動(dòng)，所以我鼓起勇氣，試圖用胡椒噴霧把他嚇跑。3.Itookoutametalbarfromthecaratonceandstartedafightwiththewolf.我立刻從車(chē)?yán)锬贸鲆桓饘侔簦_(kāi)始與狼搏斗。4.Terrifiedbythenoisesofthehelicopterandtheshot,thebearwasstartledtoleapintothebushandgallopedtowardtheforestlikeashot.這只熊被直升機(jī)的噪音和槍聲嚇了一跳，跳進(jìn)灌木叢，像槍聲一樣沖向森林。六、情感描寫(xiě)類(lèi)1.Seeingthis,shefeltterrorwellingupinherheartandsurgingthroughher.當(dāng)她看到這個(gè)時(shí)，她感到恐懼涌上心頭并且涌向全身。2.Whenshesawthebeast,soterrifiedwasshethatthethroattightenedandthekneesweakened.當(dāng)她看到這只野獸的時(shí)候，她是如此害怕以致于喉嚨發(fā)緊，膝蓋發(fā)軟。3.Extremelyfrightened,Ifoundmybodywastremblingandmypalmsweresweating.非常害怕，我發(fā)現(xiàn)我身體正在發(fā)抖，手心正在冒汗。4.Ibreathedasighofrelief,throwingmyarmsaroundhimandhuggedhimtightly.我如釋重負(fù)的松了口氣，伸出雙臂緊緊地保住了他。5.Smilinginrelief,Ifeltarushofgratitudewellingupinmyheart.我如釋重負(fù)的笑了笑，心里涌起一陣感恩。6.Withtearsfillinghiseyes,Richardexpressedhisgratitudeinaweakvoice.理查德眼里充滿淚水，用微弱的聲音表達(dá)了他的感激之情。01遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)好句梳理一、惡劣環(huán)境描寫(xiě)1.Theheavyrainwasviolentlybeatingagainstthewindow.大雨瘋狂地?fù)舸虼皯簟?.Darkcloudscoveredthesky,andthenitstartedtorainheavily.烏云籠罩著天空，隨之而來(lái)的是傾盆大雨。3.Thecomfortingforestsoundsquicklyturnedintoaterrifyingsymphonyofthunder

andwind.

大風(fēng)從耳邊呼嘯而過(guò)，我們被推離海岸越來(lái)越遠(yuǎn)。4.Thebigwindroaredthroughourears,andwewerepushedawayfromtheshorefartherandfarther.令人欣慰的森林之聲很快就變成了雷鳴和狂風(fēng)的恐怖交響樂(lè)。5.Withrainpouringdownandtheriverswelling,theyrowedagainstthecurrent,theirwillasstrongassteel.大雨傾盆，河水上漲，他們逆水行舟，意志堅(jiān)不可摧。二、被困心理描寫(xiě)1.Fingersnumbedbythechillywater,throatchokedbyicywind,lfeltonthevergeofcollapsing.手指被冰冷的海水弄得麻木，喉嚨被寒風(fēng)吹得哽咽，我感到快要崩潰了。2.Frozenwithfear,hestoodrootedtothespot,variousterriblethoughtsfloodingin.嚇得僵住了，他站在那里一動(dòng)不動(dòng)，各種可怕的想法向他涌來(lái)。3.Havingsufferedsomuch,Tomcouldn’tcontainhisemotionsandtearsofgratitudetrickleddownhischeeks.受了這么多苦，湯姆再也不能抑制自己的情緒，感激的淚水滾下他的臉頰。4.Nervousandanxious,

Norwood

struggledtocalmherselfdownandcarriedoutfirstaid

toSimmons.諾伍德既緊張又焦慮，努力讓自己鎮(zhèn)定下來(lái)，對(duì)西蒙斯實(shí)施急救。5.Astimetickedby,fearcreptuponmyheartandlcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldstand.隨著時(shí)間的流逝，恐懼爬上了我的心，我?guī)缀醪恢牢疫€能堅(jiān)持多久。三、救援行動(dòng)描寫(xiě)1.Tomydelight,wemanagedtodigoutthetrenchandtookthesehorsesdownthemountainwiththehelpofothers.令我欣喜的是，在大家的幫助下，我們成功挖好了溝槽，馬兒被帶到山下。2.Withdesperatetears,shesuddenlyspottedaboatwithafigurewalkingonit.

Shewavedandcriedforhelpwithallherstrength.帶著絕望的淚水，她突然看到一條船，上面有一個(gè)人在走動(dòng)。她揮揮手，用盡全身力氣喊救命。3.Eyesfixedonthebeast,hepulledoutthesausagesinhisbackpack,aimedatthefurrygiantandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal,hopingtheflavorwouldattractit.他盯著這個(gè)野獸，從包里掏出香腸，瞄準(zhǔn)毛乎乎的巨熊直接扔向這個(gè)兇獸，希望香味能夠吸引它的注意力。4.Thewolfjumpedup,andrushedtowardsoneofthem,butwasbeatenback.Seeingthathecouldn’twin,thewolfranawaydownthehill.狼跳了起來(lái)，沖向其中一只，但被擊退了。狼看到自己贏不了，就跑下山去了。5.Withtearsofappreciationrollingdownhischeeks，Petersaidthankfully,“youhavesavedmetoday.Icouldn’tthankyouenough.”感激的淚水順著臉頰流下，他感激地說(shuō)：“今天你救了我，我對(duì)你感激不盡”02遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)主旨升華句1.Whatanarrowescape!Itturnedoutthatthereisalwaysawayoutofanydifficultsituationsaslongaswestaycalm.真是九死一生啊！事實(shí)證明，只要我們保持冷靜，任何困境都有出路。2.OnlythendidIrealizethatactionscancurefearandbraverycanconquerdifficulties.直到那時(shí)，我才意識(shí)到行動(dòng)可以治愈恐懼，勇敢可以戰(zhàn)勝困難。3.Nevershouldwegiveupourhopewhateversetbackswearefacedwith.我們絕不該放棄希望無(wú)論遇到什么挫折。4.Thispainfuladventureteachesmenottodespaireveninthedarkesthour,becauseaftereverynightthereisaday.這次痛苦的冒險(xiǎn)教會(huì)了我即使在最黑暗的時(shí)刻也不要絕望，因?yàn)楹谝怪缶褪抢杳鳌?.“Therescueteamisontheway."thesewordsbroughtarayofhopetotheseeminglyhopelesssituation.“救援隊(duì)已經(jīng)在路上了?！边@句話給看似絕望的處境帶來(lái)了一線希望。6.Thespecialexperienceislikeaneverlastingflower,bloomingintheriverofmymemories.這個(gè)特殊經(jīng)歷就像一朵永恒的花朵，盛放在我記憶的長(zhǎng)河里。7.Thisturnedouttobeanunforgettableexperience,whichwillneverfadeawayfromhismemeory.結(jié)果證明這是一次難忘的經(jīng)歷，永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)從我的記憶中消失。8.Withtheearlysunlightstreamingin,everyonewasbathedinloveandkindness.清晨的陽(yáng)光照進(jìn)來(lái)，每個(gè)人都沉浸在愛(ài)和善良中。03遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)句式仿寫(xiě)句型一：Much/Greatlytoone’s情緒n.,sbdidsth例句：令家人驚訝的是，丹尼斯信守諾言！Muchtothefamily’ssurprise,Dennisstucktohispromise!仿寫(xiě)1：看到我的女兒在比賽中獲得金牌，我深感驕傲。Greatlytomypride,Isawmydaughterwinagoldmedalinthecompetition.仿寫(xiě)2：(2025浙江1月卷)令所有人驚訝的是，它就在那里——一塊舊表，正如那人所描述的那樣。Toeveryone’sastonishment,thereitwas—anoldwatch,justasthemanhaddescribed.句型二：Adj.as主+謂,sbdidsth例句：雖然簡(jiǎn)很虛弱，但她加快了沿著溪流的速度，找到了回去的路。WeakasJanewas,shepickedupspeedalongthestreamtofindthewayback.仿寫(xiě)1：盡管他很害羞，但他還是鼓起勇氣向女孩表白了。Shyashewas,hesummonedupthecouragetoconfesshisfeelingstothegirl.仿寫(xiě)2：(2025八省聯(lián)考卷)盡管我仍然很緊張，但我試圖讓自己冷靜下來(lái)，等待電影開(kāi)始。StillnervousasIwas,Itriedtocalmmyselfdown,waitingforthefilmtostart.句型三：Upondoingsth,sbdidsthon/upon后面的動(dòng)名詞多為：go,arrive,leave,reach,return,step,enter等。例句：一聽(tīng)到這個(gè)好消息，學(xué)生們?cè)诮淌依锎舐暁g呼起來(lái)。Uponhearingthegoodnews,thestudentscheeredloudlyintheclassroom.仿寫(xiě)1：到達(dá)村子后，我們受到了村民的熱烈歡迎。Uponarrivingatthevillage,wewerewarmlywelcomedbythevillagers.仿寫(xiě)2：走出房間后，杰克聽(tīng)到電話鈴聲。Upongoingoutoftheroom,Jackheardthetelephoneringing.04遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)片段訓(xùn)練【片段一】飛機(jī)引擎故障墜海飛行員互幫互助得以營(yíng)救。本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了兩名飛行員由于飛機(jī)引擎發(fā)生故障而墜海，他們?cè)谄冉禃r(shí)幸免于難，兩名飛行員在海上等待救援。在等待了幾個(gè)小時(shí)后，救援飛機(jī)到來(lái)，但是，沒(méi)有發(fā)現(xiàn)他們。夜幕降臨，救援難度增加，他們能在危險(xiǎn)中互相幫助，永不放棄，最終得以營(yíng)救的故事。Afteralmost20hours,Uemoto’sbodyfinallyranoutofpower.ThenUemotoheardthesoundofthehelicopter.“It’scoming!”sheshouted.“Thisisit,Sydnie,”McMahonsaid.McMahonandUemoto1(瘋狂地?fù)]手).Totheirdisappointment,2(直升機(jī)從頭頂飛過(guò)，然后飛走了).Theyhadnochoicebuttohuginthewaterbecauseoftheirstrongdesiretosurvive.Alone,eitherofthemwouldhavedied.However,theybelievedthatiftheycouldhelpeachotherindangerandnevergiveup,theywouldmakeit.Eyesup,3(他們期待著看到另一架直升機(jī)).Asecondhelicopterarrivedtenminuteslater.Seeingit,UemotoandMcMahonburstintotears,wavingtheirlifepreservers.Afterafewmoments,4(一名救援人員將自己放入大海),followedbyametalrescuebasketthatwastiedtothehelicopter.TherescuerguidedUemotointothebasketand,withalift,5(她升到空中)andtowardthesafetyofthehelicopter.ThenitwasMcMahon’sturn.“6(這是一個(gè)我們要告訴我們的孩子和孫子的故事),”saidUemoto.【參考答案】1.wavedtheirhandscrazily2.thehelicopterflewoverheadandthenflewaway3.theywerelookingforwardtoseeinganotherhelicopter4.arescuerloweredhimselfintotheocean5.sheroseintotheair6.Thisisastorywe’regoingtotellourchildrenandgrandchildren【片段二】圣誕節(jié)家庭著火被爺爺營(yíng)救，成為最好圣誕禮物。本文以事件為線索展開(kāi)，講述作者在圣誕節(jié)前夕和妹妹Shelly以及精神錯(cuò)亂的祖父呆在家里，突然家里大廳著火，里面冒出煙霧和火焰。作者一家躲在嚴(yán)寒的戶外，想打電話911求救時(shí)才發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的手機(jī)沒(méi)有電，而祖父的手機(jī)在著火的屋里面。Thoughoverwhelmedbyextremepanic,Idecidedtotakeachance.Thehousewasengulfedinanimmensestreamofflame,1(熊熊的火焰幾乎吞噬了我).FullyawareasIwasthatalongandtoughjourneywasahead,Iwasn’tdefeated.Rather,Istoopedandinchedforward.2(似乎過(guò)了一個(gè)世紀(jì)),Ireachedthedestination,alive.Asthesmokethickened,Ifeltmythroatandlungsburning.Glancingaroundtheroom,Ilocatedthephoneandgrabbeditimmediately.BeforeIcouldcelebrate,3(熊熊大火就準(zhǔn)備把我燒成灰燼).Firesentmeintodespairbeforethefamiliarfigureofmygrandfathercameintomysight.Fearlessandswift,heshotthroughtheflames,4(像鋼鐵俠一樣在火焰中射擊).Withunwaveringdetermination,heseizedmeandrushedout.Suddenly,housebeamscollapsed,strikinghimdown.Isummonedallmystrengthtolifthimtohisfeetandsupportedhimout.Finally,wemadeit.Afterthat,mygrandfathermurmuredunconsciously,“FireconsumedtheChristmasgiftforyou.”5(我感到喉嚨哽咽低聲說(shuō)),“YouarethebestChristmasgift!”6(這段難忘的經(jīng)歷永遠(yuǎn)提醒我要珍惜那些給我們無(wú)限愛(ài)的人).【參考答案】1.withroaringfirealmostswallowingme2.Afterwhatseemedlikeacentury3.ragingfirepreparedtochewmeup4.behavinglikeanironman5.Ifeltalumpinmythroatandwhispered6.Thisunforgettableexperienceforeverremindsmetocherishthosewhoshoweruswithboundlesslove01讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)精彩結(jié)尾法（一）畫(huà)面定格法仿寫(xiě)畫(huà)面定格法，指的是通過(guò)描寫(xiě)具體的環(huán)境和人物的動(dòng)作，構(gòu)建出一個(gè)情感豐富且富有畫(huà)面感的故事結(jié)尾，從而增強(qiáng)故事的視覺(jué)效果，加深情感共鳴，提高故事的吸引力。 第一步：確定動(dòng)作和情感基調(diào)根據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展，確定此刻的人物動(dòng)作和情感基調(diào)，如喜悅、感動(dòng)、釋然等。第二步：選擇合適的環(huán)境描寫(xiě)選擇一個(gè)能夠增強(qiáng)當(dāng)前情感基調(diào)的環(huán)境背景，例如自然元素、天氣狀況或具體場(chǎng)景。第三步：整合環(huán)境與人物動(dòng)作將環(huán)境描寫(xiě)與人物動(dòng)作有機(jī)結(jié)合，形成一個(gè)完整的畫(huà)面。通過(guò)細(xì)致的描寫(xiě)，使讀者能夠感受到人物的內(nèi)心世界和情感波動(dòng)，增強(qiáng)故事的吸引力和共鳴?！臼纠科胀ńY(jié)尾句：Shewashappytoreceivethetrophy.畫(huà)面定格法：1.確定動(dòng)作與情感基調(diào)：輕撫獎(jiǎng)杯，喜悅；2.選擇合適的環(huán)境描寫(xiě)：溫暖的陽(yáng)光；3.整合環(huán)境與人物動(dòng)作：陽(yáng)光照在獎(jiǎng)杯上，她輕輕撫摸獎(jiǎng)杯。畫(huà)面定格結(jié)尾句：Shetouchedthetrophylightlyasitcaughttheglowofthesunoutsidethewindow.【仿寫(xiě)1】續(xù)寫(xiě)結(jié)尾：Hishardworkpaidoff!Holdingthesodatinfirmly,Reubenrushedfortheshoptobuythebrooch.Themomenthegotthebeautifulbrooch,heburstthroughthefrontdoorandplaceditinDora'shand.NeverhadDorareceivedsuchagift.

Speechlessandhappy,sheheldhersontightlyintoherarms,withtearswellingupinhereyes.他的努力得到了回報(bào)！魯本緊緊地握著汽水罐，沖向商店去買(mǎi)胸針。他一拿到那枚漂亮的胸針，就沖進(jìn)前門(mén)，把它放在朵拉的手里。多拉從來(lái)沒(méi)有收到過(guò)這樣的禮物。她高興得說(shuō)不出話來(lái)，緊緊地把兒子抱在懷里，眼淚涌了出來(lái)。（母子相擁感人的畫(huà)面）【仿寫(xiě)2】續(xù)寫(xiě)結(jié)尾：Thebutterflycleanedhertearsontheface,“No.”Godfeltabitrelievedandsaid,“Tomorrowyoucanbecomehumanagain.”Butsheshookherheadandsaid,“No,Iwanttobeabutterflyfortherestofmylife...”Thenthebutterflywouldstaytogetherwithherloverforever.

Onthetopofthemountain,sheseemedtoenjoythesunriseandthesunsethappilywiththem.蝴蝶擦干了臉上的眼淚，說(shuō)，“不?！鄙系鬯闪艘豢跉猓f(shuō)?！懊魈炷憔涂梢宰兓厝祟?lèi)了?！钡龘u了搖頭說(shuō)，“不，我想做一輩子蝴蝶...”然后蝴蝶就會(huì)永遠(yuǎn)和她的愛(ài)人在一起。在山頂上，她似乎和他們一起快樂(lè)地享受著日出和日落。（日出和日落的畫(huà)面）【仿寫(xiě)3】續(xù)寫(xiě)結(jié)尾：Kissedbytherainandglistening,thewetgroundiscoldunderfoot.Adenseearthlysweetsmellrisesfromtheground,envelopingeverythingwithinitssoftembrace.潮濕的地面走起來(lái)很冷，被雨水親吻后閃閃發(fā)光。一股濃郁的泥土般的香味從地上升起，把一切都包裹在它柔軟的懷抱里。（雨后清新的畫(huà)面）【仿寫(xiě)4】續(xù)寫(xiě)結(jié)尾：TheleavescrunchedbeneathmyfeetasIstrolleddownthestreet.Occasionally,onewouldfallpastme,lightlyswayingastheairgentlycarriedittotheground.

我在街上漫步時(shí)，樹(shù)葉在我腳下嘎吱作響。偶爾，有葉子會(huì)從我身邊掉下來(lái)，輕輕地?fù)u晃，緩緩落到到地面。（描寫(xiě)落葉的畫(huà)面）【仿寫(xiě)5】續(xù)寫(xiě)結(jié)尾：Theskywasabillionpureeyesoflightandthegrassgreenunderfoot,itwasasifnightanddayhadbecomeonebeautifulmoment.Dawnhadcome.天空像是一億只純凈的眼睛拼接在一起，腳下是青草，仿佛黑夜和白晝已成為一個(gè)美麗的時(shí)刻。黎明已經(jīng)來(lái)臨。（黎明到來(lái)的畫(huà)面）02讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)優(yōu)秀片段欣賞一、地震救援動(dòng)作鏈：聽(tīng)到求救聲音→確定求救者位置→準(zhǔn)備救援工具→進(jìn)入救援現(xiàn)場(chǎng)→成功救出傷者→將傷者帶到安全區(qū)域他隱約聽(tīng)到廢墟下傳來(lái)微弱的呼救聲→立即確定聲源→找到一根鐵桿作為撬杠→小心翼翼地挪開(kāi)瓦礫→成功將受困者拉出→他背起受困者，迅速撤離到安全區(qū)域。Hevaguelyheardfaintcriesforhelpfrombeneaththerubble

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Hecarriedthepersontoasafearea.二、落水救援動(dòng)作鏈：意識(shí)到無(wú)法獨(dú)自脫險(xiǎn)→尋找求救工具（電話/信號(hào)設(shè)備）→發(fā)送求救信號(hào)（撥打電話/發(fā)射信號(hào)）→等待救援→確認(rèn)救援抵達(dá)她意識(shí)到自己被困在水中，無(wú)法游到岸邊→她拼命尋找漂浮的木板→抓住木板，用隨身攜帶的手機(jī)撥打求救電話→等待救援時(shí)，她緊緊抓住木板→聽(tīng)到遠(yuǎn)處傳來(lái)直升機(jī)的聲音，她的心情逐漸平靜下來(lái)。Sherealizedshewastrappedinthewaterandcouldn’tswimtoshore

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Hearingthesoundofahelicopterinthedistance,heranxietystartedtofade.三、野生動(dòng)物救助動(dòng)作鏈：發(fā)現(xiàn)動(dòng)物受困→判斷如何解救→獲取工具或方法→接近動(dòng)物→實(shí)施救援→檢查動(dòng)物狀態(tài)他看到一只小狗被困在河邊的泥潭里→判斷必須用繩子才能把它拉出來(lái)→找到一根結(jié)實(shí)的樹(shù)枝和繩子→小心接近小狗，安撫它別害怕→將繩子套在小狗身上，慢慢拉上岸→小狗獲救后，他檢查了一下它的四肢，確保沒(méi)有受傷。Hesawapuppytrappedinamuddybankbytheriver

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Afterrescuingthepuppy,hecheckeditslegstomakesureitwasn’tinjured.03遇困脫險(xiǎn)高考真題再現(xiàn)【2020浙江7月卷】--營(yíng)地危機(jī)：兇猛北極熊來(lái)襲，面包與直升機(jī)如何化險(xiǎn)為夷熊返回營(yíng)地--緊張害怕--面包攻擊--直升機(jī)趕到--快速登上飛機(jī)--熊把籬笆推到--拍下熊“打劫”的畫(huà)面閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”-thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears-likeallwildanimalsshouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意:1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.____________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.____________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp,thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.Atthiscriticalmoment,Elligrabbedseveralpiecesofgarlicbreadandthrewthemoverthefence.Itworked!Thebearstoppedtheattackandrantothebread.Butitwasn’tlongbeforeheeatupallthebreadandcamebackagain.Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.“Thankgoodnesswearesaved!”Ellicriedout.Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.Whenweweresafeonthehelicopterupintheair,Iwasamazedtothespotthatthebearhadfinallytoredownthefenceandrantowardsthefoodweleftbehind.Iquicklytookoutthecameraandphotographedtherarescene-wewererobbedbyapolarbear.【分析】本文以事件為線索展開(kāi)，講述了作者和妻子前往被稱為“北極熊之都”的加拿大丘吉爾鎮(zhèn)拍攝北極熊。夫妻二人做飯之時(shí)，一頭饑餓的雄性幼熊跟著面包的蒜香味，靠近了營(yíng)地，猛烈撞擊營(yíng)地邊上的鐵絲圍欄。作者和妻子使出渾身解數(shù)，想嚇退這頭熊，不料它“不破籬笆誓不歸”。無(wú)奈之下，作者求助營(yíng)地管理員，被告知救援直升機(jī)要30分鐘后才能趕到，只得先嘗試用胡椒噴霧噴灑北極熊的眼睛，不料這使熊變得更加暴躁，在千鈞一發(fā)之際直升機(jī)及時(shí)趕到，他們得救了的故事?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：由第一段首句內(nèi)容“幾分鐘后，熊返回了我們的營(yíng)地。”可知，第一段可描寫(xiě)作者夫妻二人如何再次對(duì)付熊及兩人在此過(guò)程中的緊張害怕。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“就在那時(shí)，直升機(jī)趕到了?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼?xiě)作者夫妻二人獲救時(shí)的心情。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：熊返回營(yíng)地——緊張害怕——用面包攻擊——直升機(jī)趕到——快速登上飛機(jī)——熊把籬笆推到——拍下熊“打劫”的畫(huà)面3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①激怒：anger/provoke/enrage②抓起：grab/snatchup③拿出：takeout/fetchout情緒類(lèi)①瘋狂的：mad/crazy②興奮的：excited/thrilled【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly.（for引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句）[高分句型2]Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.（現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)）[高分句型3]Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.(once引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句和形容詞作狀語(yǔ))第一步：提煉六個(gè)要素，獲取主旨大意。讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的閱讀文本基本上都是記敘文，所以要提煉出六個(gè)基本要素：who,where,when,what,why和how。考生在閱讀文本過(guò)程中只有把握好這六個(gè)要素，才能總結(jié)出文章大意和故事情節(jié)，進(jìn)而推斷出作者的寫(xiě)作意圖，輕松獲取故事的主旨大意。第二步：理清故事脈絡(luò)，把握情感變化。線索是敘事性作品中貫穿整個(gè)故事的脈絡(luò)，所有的情節(jié)均圍繞文本主要線索展開(kāi)。記敘文一般有兩條故事發(fā)展線索：情節(jié)(plots)線索和情感(emotions)線索?？忌梢岳脠D表法或思維導(dǎo)圖法理清故事的發(fā)展脈絡(luò)，把握作者的情感變化。這樣，考生在續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)才可以更好地遵循原文的思路、風(fēng)格和語(yǔ)言。第三步：分析段落首句，精心設(shè)計(jì)問(wèn)題。分析續(xù)寫(xiě)后所給的兩個(gè)段首句對(duì)提高所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容和原文的融洽度至關(guān)重要?？忌梢韵确治鲆幌滤o的兩個(gè)段首句之間的邏輯關(guān)系是順承關(guān)系、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系還是因果關(guān)系等。然后，根據(jù)自己的判斷設(shè)計(jì)小問(wèn)題：根據(jù)段首句得知什么？續(xù)寫(xiě)開(kāi)始寫(xiě)什么？接下來(lái)寫(xiě)什么？續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段的段尾如何銜接第二段的開(kāi)頭？續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段的段尾如何才能照應(yīng)故事的主旨大意？第四步：設(shè)計(jì)結(jié)尾情節(jié)，拔高價(jià)值取向。考生必須緊緊圍繞故事的發(fā)展脈絡(luò)，展開(kāi)合理的想象，巧妙地設(shè)計(jì)所續(xù)寫(xiě)的兩段的故事結(jié)尾情節(jié)。設(shè)計(jì)結(jié)尾情節(jié)時(shí)，考生可以借助前文的故事脈絡(luò)設(shè)計(jì)一些具體的問(wèn)題。還要注意設(shè)計(jì)好續(xù)寫(xiě)的第二段的結(jié)尾，讓結(jié)尾處的情感得到升華或拔高，把故事所折射出的人生觀、價(jià)值觀充分體現(xiàn)出來(lái)。第五步：列出關(guān)鍵詞匯，續(xù)寫(xiě)連貫句群。設(shè)計(jì)好要續(xù)寫(xiě)的兩段的情節(jié)后，考生可以先在草稿紙上把原文出現(xiàn)的主要人物、發(fā)生的主要事件和描寫(xiě)人物或事件的情感詞羅列出來(lái)，并按事件的發(fā)生順序逐一理清。最后，考生用這些關(guān)鍵詞匯重構(gòu)句子，寫(xiě)出連貫一致的句群。第六步：升格低級(jí)詞句，謄寫(xiě)完善成文。考生在寫(xiě)好兩段的內(nèi)容后，可以根據(jù)語(yǔ)法知識(shí)把一些低級(jí)的詞匯或句式進(jìn)行潤(rùn)色升格。升格低級(jí)詞句的目的是讓續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容更加符合原文的語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格，與原文在銜接上更加融洽。完成這一步后，考生要迅速把寫(xiě)好的兩段英文以清晰、規(guī)范、美觀、流暢的書(shū)寫(xiě)謄寫(xiě)在答題紙上。讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇困脫險(xiǎn)類(lèi)綜合能力提升【01】（2025高三·全國(guó)·專題練習(xí)）--誤入森林被獵人救助閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。JimmyandTommy,goodfriendsandadventureenthusiasts,decidedtoexploreanunknownforesttheyhadheardoffromlocallegends.Afterweeksofplanningandgatheringsupplies,theysetoff,excitedyetslightlynervous.Astheyenteredtheforest,theywerestruckbyitsbeautyandmystery.Tall,ancienttreesformedanaturalshelter,andsunlightcreatedadappled(斑駁的)patternontheforestfloor.Birdschirped,andleavesrustled(沙沙作響)inthegentlebreeze.JimmyandTommywalkedalonganarrowpath,amazedatthecolorfulflowersandoccasionalsmallanimalsdashingthroughthebushes.Deeperintheforest,theymetanelderlyhunterwithaweather-beatenface,carryingariflegunandarabbit.Helookedatthemwithcuriosityandconcern.“Youngmen,”hesaidinaroughbutkindvoice,“whereareyouheaded?”“We’reexploringthisforest,”Jimmyrepliedexcitedly.“We’veheardsomanystoriesaboutit.”Thehunternoddedslowly.“It’sbeautiful,butalsodangerous.Therearehiddendangersandanimalsthatcanharmyou.Isuggestyouturnbackwhileyoustillcan.”ButJimmyandTommyweretooexcitedtofollowthewarning.Theythankedhimpolitelyandcontinuedon,confidentintheirabilities.Asthedayworeon,theforestbecamemorechallenging.Thepathdisappeared,andtheyhadtonavigate(找路)throughthickbushes.Theairgrewcolder,andtheforestsoundsbecamestrangeandunsettling.Theyrealizedtheyhadunderestimatedtheforest’scomplexity.Suddenly,Tommyslippedandfellintoadeephole,twistinghisankle.Hecriedoutinpain,andJimmyrushedtotheedge.“Areyouokay?”heaskedanxiously.“IthinkItwistedmyankle,”Tommyreplied,“Ican’tclimboutonmyown.”Jimmytriedtohelpwithastick,butitwastooshort.Theywerelost,andJimmydidn’tknowwhattodonext.Justthen,thesoundoffootstepscouldbeheardinthedistance.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Jimmylookedupandsawtheelderlyhunterapproachingthem.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thehuntersuggestedtakingthemtohiscottagetorestforthenight.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Jimmylookedupandsawtheelderlyhunterapproachingthem.Thehunter’sfacesoftenedashesawTommyinthehole.“Don’tworry,”hesaidcalmly.Hequicklytookoutalongropefromhisbag,tiedoneendaroundastrongtree,andloweredtheotherendintothehole.“Holdontight,andI’llpullyouup,”heinstructed.Amomentlater,Tommywascarefullyliftedout.Jimmybreathedasighofrelief.JimmyandTommyweregratefulforhishelp.SeeingTommy’sinjuredankleandthefadinglight,thehuntershookhishead.“It’sgettinglate,andit’snotsafetotravelinthedark.”Thehuntersuggestedtakingthemtohiscottagetorestforthenight.JimmyandTommygratefullyacceptedtheoffer.Thehunter’scottagewascozyandwarm,withafireburninginthefireplace.HeappliedsomeicetoTommy’sankleandgavethemsomehotfood.Astheysatbythefire,thehuntersharedstoriesofhisownadventuresintheforest.JimmyandTommylistenedinawe.Thenextmorning,theyleftwithanewfoundrespectfornatureandapromisetobemorecautiousintheirfutureadventures.Thisexperiencetaughtthemthevalueofkindnessandtheimportanceofrespectingtheunknown.【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以兩個(gè)探險(xiǎn)愛(ài)好者的森林冒險(xiǎn)為線索展開(kāi)，講述了他們不聽(tīng)獵人警告深入森林，遇到危險(xiǎn)后被獵人救助的故事。【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Jimmy抬頭看見(jiàn)老獵人正朝他們走來(lái)”可知，第一段可描寫(xiě)獵人救助Tommy的過(guò)程及提議帶他們?nèi)バ∥葸^(guò)夜的原因。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“獵人建議帶他們?nèi)ニ男∥菪菹⒁煌怼笨芍诙慰擅鑼?xiě)在小屋中的經(jīng)歷（如獵人的照顧、故事分享）及兩人從中獲得的感悟。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：獵人出現(xiàn)——救助Tommy——提議去小屋——抵達(dá)小屋——獵人照顧——分享故事——次日離開(kāi)——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①看見(jiàn)：see/catchsightof②接受：accept/embrace③分享：share/impart情緒類(lèi)①感激的：grateful/overwhelminglyappreciative②謹(jǐn)慎的：cautious/prudent【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]SeeingTommy’sinjuredankleandthefadinglight,thehuntershookhishead.（運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)）[高分句型2]Astheysatbythefire,thehuntersharedstoriesofhisownadventuresintheforest.（運(yùn)用了as引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句）【02】（2025·黑龍江哈爾濱·模擬預(yù)測(cè)）--獨(dú)自探險(xiǎn)迷路獲救閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Onasunnyweekend,17-year-oldTomjoinedaschoolcampingtriptoaremoteisland.Tom,anenthusiasticphotographer,wasalsoabitofalonerwhooftenpreferredexploringonhisown.Hehadtakenabasicsurvivalskillscoursebuthadnevertrulyfacedareal-lifeemergency.Asthegroupsteppedintothethickunderbrush,theairwasheavywiththescentofdampmossandwildflowers,andTomcouldn’tcontainhisexcitement.Mr.Wilson,aseasonedoutdoorsteacher,pausedeveryfewminutestowarneverybodytostayclose.Hetookoutabundleofsmallredflags.Every20steps,hetiedaflagtoalow-hangingbranchorasturdyfern(蕨),saying,“Theflags,alongwiththegurglingstreamnearby,areyourlifelines.They’llboostyourchanceofsurvival.”Moststudentswatchedcarefully,butTom,halfnoddedabsentmindedly,halfdistractedbythecallsofrumoredgolden-wingedparrots,graduallydriftingawayfromthegroup.Amomentlater,Tomwasphotographingthemouth-wateringAcaiberries(巴西莓)coveringthemountainforestswhenrollingthundercrashed.Lookingaround,herealizedtherewasnoonearound—hewasallalone.QuicklyTomstuffedhiscameraintohisbagandtriedtoretracehissteps.Buttheskydarkenedabruptly,afiercewindtorethroughthetrees.Theheavyraincamepouringintoamuddymess,washingawayanysignsofthetrail.Hisphonealreadylowonbatterydiedcompletelybecausehepresseditinawildmannertocallforhelp.Tomstumbled(蹣跚而行)throughthemud,hissneakersstainedwithdirtandwaterdrippingfromhishair.Asnightfell,thedownpourstoppedbutthetemperaturedroppedbelowfreezing,andthecoldbitthroughhisclothes.Throughthebitterwind,heheardachillingsound—thedistanthowlofwolves.Heartpoundingheavily,Tomwasinacompletepanic,withanoverwhelminglongingtogohome.注意：(1)續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；(2)請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。Withanemptystomach,Tomfelthisstrengthslippingaway.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Afterwhatseemedlikehours,Tomheardshoutsinthedistance.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Withanemptystomach,Tomfelthisstrengthslippingaway.Desperately,TomscannedhissurroundingsandfoundsomeAcaiberries.Afterabriefrest,asenseofurgencypropelledhimtoaction.Withnewfoundstrength,herecalledMr.Wilson’swordsabouttheredflagsandthestream.Hedelvedintothedenseunderbrush,hisgazedartingaroundinsearchofthetell-taleredflags.Allthewhile,heprickeduphisears,tryingtocatcheventheslightestmurmurofthestream,acutelyawarethatitwashislifeline.Afterwhatseemedlikehours,Tomheardshoutsinthedistance.Hisheartracedwithhopeashemusteredhisstrengthtoshoutback,“I’mhere!”Finally,heemergedfromthethickunderbrusha