第4講要虎頭也要豹尾,9招出奇制勝高考總復(fù)習優(yōu)化設(shè)計GAOKAOZONGFUXIYOUHUASHEJI2025技法1高分開頭5妙招技法2吸睛結(jié)尾4妙招目錄索引0102技法1高分開頭5妙招如何寫好讀后續(xù)寫,在高考中吸引閱卷老師的眼球,獲得夢寐以求的高分?如何讓學生的作品在高考中脫穎而出?這是很多老師和學生一直不懈努力的課題。一個好的故事開頭就好比是一個香味十足的誘餌,誘使讀者上鉤并且饒有趣味地讀完。

而一個拙劣的故事開頭,一定會讓讀者大倒胃口,懨懨欲睡?！癢ellbegunishalfdone!”可見寫好一個故事的開頭是多么重要。下面教你五招高分開頭的方式。妙招1巧用形容詞/副詞短語[典例1]Disappointed

and

frustrated,Davidhunghishead,tryingtoavoideyecontactwithme.(2022新高考Ⅰ卷)大衛(wèi)又失望又沮喪,低下頭,盡量避免和我有眼神接觸。[典例2]Happily

and

excitedly,theywenttothesupermarketforwhattheyneeded.他們高興而興奮地去超市買他們需要的東西。妙招2巧用分詞(短語)[典例1]Seeing

his

face

filled

with

anxiety,Ifeltsad,decidingtotalksomethingwithhim.(2022新高考Ⅰ卷)看到他滿臉焦慮,我感到很難過,決定和他談?wù)?。[典例2]Afewweekslatertheboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.Hurrying

home,hecouldn’twaittoseehisoldfriendPoppy.(2020浙江1月卷)幾個星期后,男孩從大學回到家里。匆忙回家,他迫不及待地想見到他的老朋友波比。妙招3巧用高級句式[典例1]Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Mybrothercameupwithanideathat

he

could

cut

the

pumpkin

with

a

knife.(同位語從句,2021浙江1月卷)我被困了五六分鐘,雖然感覺要長得多。我的弟弟想出了一個主意,他可以用小刀把南瓜切開。[典例2]Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Ithoveredoverthecamp,causingstrongwindthat

blew

the

bear

unsteady

on

his

feet.(非謂語動詞+定語從句)(2020浙江7月卷)就在這時,直升機到了。它在營地上空盤旋,刮起大風,把熊吹得雙腳不穩(wěn)。妙招4巧用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)[典例]Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Hardly

had

the

little

dog

come

outwhenPoppycameovertolickitasifitwerealong-lostfriend.(2020浙江1月卷)爸爸打開盒子,一只可愛的小狗出現(xiàn)了。小狗剛出來,波比就過來舔它,好像它是一個失散已久的朋友。妙招5巧用強調(diào)句結(jié)構(gòu)[典例]ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.It

wasmybrotherwhodidthatforamusement.(2021浙江1月卷)這段視頻是在萬圣節(jié)前一天發(fā)布的。那是我弟弟為了消遣才那樣做的。[即時訓練1]完成下列句子1.回答不出老師的問題,所有學生們都保持沉默。(形容詞短語作狀語)

,allthestudentskeptsilent.

2.但當他向旁邊看時,他立刻發(fā)現(xiàn)那根本不是一只狗,而是一只狼,很快就趕上了他。(時間狀語從句和副詞)But

,hesaw

thatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,

catchingupwithhim.

3.一團鮮紅的煙霧籠罩著這只動物,讓馬克松了一口氣的是,它向后一退,搖著頭。(分詞作狀語)Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,

.

Unable

to

answer

the

teacher’s

questionwhen

he

looked

to

the

sideinstantlyquicklyshaking

its

head4.爸爸建議我們沿著這條河走,它可能會把我們帶到農(nóng)舍,似乎沒有什么比那更好的了。(賓語從句和定語從句)Dadproposed_______________________________________________________________andnothingseemedbetterthanthat.

5.Poppy如此興奮,她想靠得更近,結(jié)果不小心撞倒了盒子。(倒裝結(jié)構(gòu))

thatsheaccidentallyknockedovertheboxinanattempttogetcloser.

6.果然,僅僅過了一會兒,這個毛球就從盒子里抬起頭來,偷看它的新家和新朋友。(強調(diào)句)Sureenough,

theballoffurlifteditsheadoutoftheboxtopeekatitsnewhomeanditsnewfriend.

that

we

should

walk

along

the

river

which

may

lead

us

to

thefarm

houseSo

excited

was

Poppyit

was

only

moments

later

that技法2吸睛結(jié)尾4妙招精彩的結(jié)尾能給閱卷老師留下深刻的印象,有一個精彩的結(jié)尾對于讀后續(xù)寫得高分至關(guān)重要。文章常見的結(jié)尾方式有點題式、主題升華式、人生感悟式、寓情于景式等,合適的結(jié)尾方式能凸顯文章主題,起到畫龍點睛的作用。妙招1點題式此類結(jié)尾就是在續(xù)寫文章結(jié)尾時,通過一兩句話點明文章主旨,突出文章的立意。一般可以通過總結(jié)閱讀材料寫出點題式結(jié)尾。[典例]2022年新高考卷講了作者鼓勵患有腦疾的David參與越野賽的故事,體現(xiàn)了堅定信念是成功的關(guān)鍵這一主旨,考生便可用“Suchisthekeytosuccess—alittlebitmoreeffortsanddeterminationwillcreatealittlemoremiracles.”作為結(jié)尾,直接點明主旨。妙招2主題升華式主題升華式結(jié)尾是指在續(xù)寫文章結(jié)尾時,通過一句高度凝練的話來對主題進行升華,使文章主題上升到一定的高度,給讀者啟示。這種話往往可采用一些名言或諺語。[典例]2022年浙江1月卷講了作者與搭檔一起做研究項目,由消極配合到積極參與,最終取得了良好的結(jié)果,體現(xiàn)了團隊合作的重要性,考生便可用“Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpeoplecantravelfarther.”作為結(jié)尾,通過名言來結(jié)束全文,畫龍點睛。妙招3人生感悟式人生感悟式結(jié)尾是指在續(xù)寫文章結(jié)尾時,用一兩句話將故事主角從故事中悟出的人文情懷、人際關(guān)系、個人奮斗等方面的感受表達出來,故此類結(jié)尾通常從主角的第一視角發(fā)出。此類結(jié)尾宜用倒裝句和強調(diào)句。[典例]2021年浙江6月卷講述了作者原本不愿意將打工掙來的錢上交家庭,看到父母的辛勞,最后決定上交工資并有所感悟的故事,考生可從“我”的角度,用強調(diào)句“ItwasonthatdaythatIrealizedwhatDadhadaccomplishedatmyagewasmuchgreaterthanIdid.”來結(jié)尾,體現(xiàn)對父母的理解。妙招4寓情于景式寓情于景式結(jié)尾是指在續(xù)寫文章結(jié)尾時,將情感融入特定的自然景物或生活場景中,借助對這些景物或場景的描寫來抒發(fā)感情的一種方式,能使情和景互相感應(yīng),互相交融,互相依托。[典例]2023年浙江1月卷講述了作者搶救蜂鳥,蜂鳥返回來感謝作者的故事,考生可通過“Afterawhile,shemadeasqueaktome,hoveredovermeandthenflewintothesky,whichremindedmethatwehumanbeingsshouldliveinharmonywithotherlivingcreatures.”描寫作者與蜂鳥的互動,并引出人與自然和諧相處的主題。[即時訓練2]補全并背誦下列句子1.Sometimes,asmallactofkindnessmaybepowerfulenough

.

有時候小小的善舉可能足以產(chǎn)生巨大的影響。2.She

,andbelievedtherewaskindnessineverycorner.

她在寒冷的日子里感受到了溫暖,相信每個角落都有善意。3.Itis

.

活到老,學到老。to

make

a

huge

differencefelt

warmth

in

the

cold

daynever

too

late

to

learn4.Constantdropping

.

滴水穿石。5.Theworld

thedreamer.

世界總會給有夢想的人開路。6.Eachmanis

.

每個人都是自己命運的建筑師。wears

the

stonemakes

way

forthe

architect

of

his

own

fate課堂應(yīng)用(2023浙江1月卷)Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網(wǎng))andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygoodbye.”注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

參考范文A

few

weeks

later,I

went

to

the

farm

again.Asmycarn