Sedonahikingtrails文本解讀

Sedonahikingtrailscanbefunandrelaxing,butsometimescanalsobechallenginganddangerous.

Rogers,33,anon-dutyairman,wasintownfromColoradoSpringsforadventuresonSedonatrails.EvenhehadjusttakenasharpturnonhismountainbikeinApril2020whenhewasstoppedshortbythesightofawomansittingonthesideofthetrail.Shewascuteandhadlongblondhairandbigexpressiveeyes.Whathedidn’tknowthenwasthatshewasalsoinextremepain.

SydneyLinden,28,hadbeenjoggingdownAdobeJackTrailinSedona,Arizona,forapicturesquesunsetviewoftheRedRockswhenshehoppedoverarockandherlegoverextendedonthelanding.Thepainwasinstant.

Herrightlegcollapsedandshehitthedirthard.Lindentriedtostandbutcollapsed.Shewasn’tsureifshehadtornherACL(十字韌帶),brokenherleg,orsomethingelse.Allsheknewwasthatthepainwasa15outof10.

Althoughitwasspring,theArizonasunbeatdownrelentlessly(無(wú)情地).Lindendraggedherselftotheshade,asifananimalpreparingtodie.She’dcalledafriend,butafter30minutes,herfriendwaslost.That’swhenshesawthemountainbiker.

Rogerswastryingtoplayitcool.Hecasuallyrodebyataslowerspeed,stealingaglanceatthewoman.Sensinghersuffering,Rogersstoppedandaskedifhecouldhelp.Lindenexplainedhersituationandthat’swhenhenoticedtheswellingunderherleggings.Sheneededahospital----now.

RogershelpedLindentoherfeetandtheybeganthesteep(陡坡)overtherockyregionanddesertbushes.Itwasalongwaytogo.LeaningonRogers,Lindentriedtohopalong,butthepainwassevere.Shewouldnevermakeittothetrailhead(登山口)thisway.Para.1ThenRogershadanotheridea.____________Para.2ItwasaftertheoperationthatLindenfoundRogersgone._______________文本解讀---maineventswhenwherewhowhatRogershelpedbutfailedonedayinSpring(butveryhot)Sedona,ArizonaRogers,33Linden,28rodeamountainbikeforadventuresonSedonatrailsjoggingforapicturesquesunsetviewoftheRedRockstriedtoplayitcoolcasuallyrodebyataslowerspeedstealingaglanceatstoppedandaskednoticedhoppedoverarockherlegoverextendedonthelandingrightlegcollapsedhitthedirthardtriedtostandbutcollapsedtornherACLbrokenherlegorsomethingelesthepainwasa15outof10draggedherselftotheshadecalledafriendbutthefriendwaslostTheRogershadanotheridea.文本解讀----detailsRogershelpedbutfailedHowdidRogershelpLinden?Rogers·helpedLindentoherfeetLinden·leanedonRogers

·triedtohopalong

failedsometimescanalsobechallenginganddangerousLindenwasinextremepainthepainwasa15outof10thepainwasseverewasn’tsureifshehadtornherACL,brokenherleg,orsomethingelsespring,butthesunbeatdownrelentlesslydragged...shade,asifananimalpreparingtodiecalledafriend,butshe/hewaslostvariousdifficulties/unexpectedsituations文本解讀----features

Sedonahikingtrailscanbefunandrelaxing,butsometimescanalsobechallenginganddangerous.

Rogers,33,anon-dutyairman,wasintownfromColoradoSpringsforadventuresonSedonatrails.EvenhehadjusttakenasharpturnonhismountainbikeinApril2020whenhewasstoppedshortbythesightofawomansittingonthesideofthetrail.Shewascuteandhadlongblondhairandbigexpressiveeyes.Whathedidn’tknowthenwasthatshewasalsoinextremepain.

SydneyLinden,28,hadbeenjoggingdownAdobeJackTrailinSedona,Arizona,forapicturesquesunsetviewoftheRedRockswhenshehoppedoverarockandherlegoverextendedonthelanding.Thepainwasinstant.

Herrightlegcollapsedandshehitthedirthard.Lindentriedtostandbutcollapsed.Shewasn’tsureifshehadtornherACL(十字韌帶),brokenherleg,orsomethingelse.Allsheknewwasthatthepainwasa15outof10.

Althoughitwasspring,theArizonasunbeatdownrelentlessly(無(wú)情地).Lindendraggedherselftotheshade,asifananimalpreparingtodie.She’dcalledafriend,butafter30minutes,herfriendwaslost.That’swhenshesawthemountainbiker.

Rogerswastryingtoplayitcool.Hecasuallyrodebyataslowerspeed,stealingaglanceatthewoman.Sensinghersuffering,Rogersstoppedandaskedifhecouldhelp.Lindenexplainedhersituationandthat’swhenhenoticedtheswellingunderherleggings.Sheneededahospital----now.

RogershelpedLindentoherfeetandtheybeganthesteep(陡坡)overtherockyregionanddesertbushes.Itwasalongwaytogo.LeaningonRogers,Lindentriedtohopalong,butthepainwassevere.Shewouldnevermakeittothetrailhead(登山口)thisway.Para.1ThenRogershadanotheridea.____________Para.2ItwasaftertheoperationthatLindenfoundRogersgone._______________記敘文結(jié)構(gòu)模式穿插回放式交叉的敘事角度，全知視角文本構(gòu)思TheRogershadanotheridea.ItwasaftertheoperationthatLindenfoundRogersgone.穿插回放式beginning:交代物象及主要人物的人生關(guān)系developing&climax:跌宕起伏，少繁瑣敘述，突出感人細(xì)節(jié)ending:鏗鏘有力，寓意深刻，照應(yīng)開(kāi)頭交叉的敘事角度，全知視角What’sthetheme?help?rescue?gratitude?人與社會(huì)3S主題續(xù)寫

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Sedonahikingtrailscanbefunandrelaxing,butsometimescanalsobechallenginganddangerous.

Rogers,33,...Whathedidn’tknowthenwasthatshewasalsoinextremepain.

SydneyLinden,28,...Thepainwasinstant.

Herrightlegcollapsedandshehitthedirthard.Lindentriedtostandbutcollapsed.Shewasn’tsureifshehadtornherACL(十字韌帶),brokenherleg,orsomethingelse.Allsheknewwasthatthepainwasa15outof10.

Althoughitwasspring,theArizonasunbeatdownrelentlessly(無(wú)情地).Lindendraggedherselftotheshade,asifananimalpreparingtodie.....

Rogerswastryingtoplayitcool....Sheneededahospital----now.

RogershelpedLindentoherfeetandtheybeganthesteep(陡坡)overtherockyregionanddesertbushes.Itwasalongwaytogo.LeaningonRogers,Lindentriedtohopalong,butthepainwassevere.Shewouldnevermakeittothetrailhead(登山口)thisway.Para.1ThenRogershadanotheridea.____________Para.2ItwasaftertheoperationthatLindenfoundRogersgone._____possibleplot1:

Howtoendthestory?→canbechallenginganddangerous,butcanalsobefunandrelaxing.possibleplot2:

Howtoaddthedifficulty?→Linden’spain/paleface/unbearablepainstimulateshernerves/thewavesofpainwashedoverher/theextremepainseizedher/...possibleplot3:Howtoaddthedifficulty?→sweatsswoopingfiercelyoutofhisbody/sweatlikebeansripplingdownherface/thesunshonebrightly/...

Para.1ThenRogershadanotheridea.____________Para.2ItwasaftertheoperationthatLindenfoundRogersgone._______________3S主題續(xù)寫

自問(wèn)抓伏筆Q1:_____________________【與首句銜接】Q2:_____________________【情節(jié)推動(dòng)1、2】Q3:_____________________【與第二段首句銜接】Q1:_____________________【與首句銜接】Q2:_____________________【情節(jié)推動(dòng)1、2】Q3:_____________________【照應(yīng)前文首句，哲理性結(jié)尾？自然結(jié)尾？情景交融式結(jié)尾？】

Para.1ThenRogershadanotheridea.____________Para.2ItwasaftertheoperationthatLindenfoundRogersgone._______________3S主題續(xù)寫

自問(wèn)抓伏筆Q1:WhatdidRogersdo?What’shisanotheridea?【actions,thoughts】Q2:Whatdifficultiesorunexpectedsitutionstheywouldmeet?【setting,feelings】Q3:Didhisanotherideawork?【actions,feelings】Q1:HowdidLindenreact?【actions,thoughts,feelings】Q2:WhatdidLindendo?【actions,feelings】Q3:Howtoendthestoryandmakesuretheendingwouldbecorrelatedwiththebeginning.【哲理性結(jié)尾？自然結(jié)尾？情景交融式結(jié)尾？】

Para.1ThenRogershadanotheridea.____________Para.2ItwasaftertheoperationthatLindenfoundRogersgone._______________3S主題續(xù)寫

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詞句構(gòu)建Q1:WhatdidRogersdo?What’shisanotheridea?Q2:Whatdifficultiesorunexpectedsitutionstheywouldmeet?【setting,feelings】Q3:Didhisanotherideawork?RogersrushedtofetchthebikeandstruggledtohelpLindensit...【與首句銜接】Lindenmusteredupherstrengthtotakeovertheseverepain...needlesdeeplypiercingherheart...thedesperategrownandfullypalepaceofLinden情節(jié)推動(dòng)1】thesunshonebrightly,sweatlikebeans...【情節(jié)推動(dòng)2】theimagesofhospitalflickeredinthedistanceLuckily,therewasahospital,whichgaveLindenanoperationimmediately.【與下一段首句銜接】

Para.1ThenRogershadanotheridea.____________Para.2ItwasaftertheoperationthatLindenfoundRogersgone._______________3S主題續(xù)寫

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詞句構(gòu)建Q1:HowdidLindenreact?【actions,thoughts,feelings】Q2:WhatdidLindendo?Q3:Howtoendthestoryandmakesuretheendingwouldbecorrelatedwiththebeginning.【哲理性結(jié)尾？自然結(jié)尾？情景交融式結(jié)尾？】Hereyesdartedaroundandaletterarrestedherattention...Afeelingmixturedthankfulnessanddisappintmenttookholdofher.【與首句銜接且交互可成推動(dòng)情節(jié)事件3】Bathedinthesun’sgentlelight,Lindenbeamed,fromeartoear.【情景交融】Evenifthedesperatecircumstanceoccurredinlife,thetwosoulsstillgotthroughitwithamazingpersistanceanddevotedcompany.【哲理性】Lyingonthebed,Lindenreflectedontheunusualday,stillafraidofthedangeroussuffering,andexpressedhersinceregratitudesilentlyintheheart.【自然式】shetriedSedonahikingtrailsagain【推動(dòng)情節(jié)事件4】作文分享點(diǎn)評(píng)：

行文風(fēng)格與前文相符合。以交叉的敘述角度，第一段Rogers視角，第二段Linden視角，完成故事。且各段銜接自然到位。

充分利用前文的“疼痛”“天熱”伏筆元素。故事結(jié)尾thewarmscene與原文開(kāi)頭funandrelaxing基調(diào)一致，照應(yīng)到位。作文分享點(diǎn)評(píng)：

行文風(fēng)格與前文相符合。以交叉的敘述角度，完成故事。且各段銜接自然到位。

第一段開(kāi)篇的一系列動(dòng)作描寫讓人印象深刻，把一個(gè)細(xì)心周到的男士寫得淋漓盡致。突出了感人細(xì)節(jié)，結(jié)尾寓意深刻。敘事結(jié)構(gòu)自然到位。相似話題匯聚2022.03廣東一模OnaSundayafternoon,KianaFrenchwashavingfunfishingwithherfatherandyoungersister,notknowingthenextminute,theywouldstrugglenottosinkinthefreezingwater.Their12-footboatwastakinginwaterlittlebylittle,andthewindwaspickingup.Herfather,GaryFrench,hurriedtooperatetheengine,whileKiana,16,wasinthemiddlewithCierrah,hersister,frightenedbutstillabletokeepcalm.KianaaskedCierrahtotakeoffoneofhercowboyboots,withwhichshegotsomeofthewaterout.Hardasshetried,thatlittleeffortwouldnothelpstoptheboatsinking.Momentslater,theunthinkablehappened.Theboatwasfullofwaterandthenitflippedover.Kianaandhersisterweredumpedinthewater.Theirfather,whohadhadasurgerysixmonthsago,managednottobethrownintothewaterbutseemedtohavegreatpaininthechestduetothesuddenchange.KianaquicklyputonherlifejacketandsawCierrah'sandherfather'slifejacketsfloatingaway.Shereactedquicklytogetthembackandheldhersisterontotheboat.Theyweresofaroutinthemiddleofthelakethattheycouldnotseetheshoreclearly.What'sworse,itwasgettinghardertostayabovethewaves.Theirfatherswamoverandhuggedhistwogirls,Cierrahcryingsilently.Kianaheardherbelovedsistermurmured,"Ican'tfeelmyfeet."Kianaknewtheonlythingtodowastogettoshoreherselfandfindhelp.Shelookedupatherfather,exchangingaconcernedglance,turnedroundandswamashardasshecouldtowardstheshore.Fightingagainstthestrongcurrentsandcoldwind,shescreamedforhelpatthetopofherlungseverythreeminutesorso.Astrongwindblew,andshelookedbackonlytoseehersister'sandfather'sheadsbobbing（浮動(dòng)）inthewater.Sheburstintotears,thinkinghersisteranddadweredead,becauseshewastakingtoolong.相似話題匯聚2022.03廣東一模下水文：

Withdesperatetears,shesuddenlyspottedaboatwithafigurewalkingonit.Shesawaglimmerofhope.Shewavedherhandswildly,yellingwithallherremainingstrength,“Help!Help!”Itseemedlikeacenturytowaitfortheboattoapproachher.Amiddle-agedfishermanreachedouthishand,carriedhertotheboatandaskedherwhathadhappened.Withtremblingvoice,shereplied,“Myfather...sister....there.Help!”O(jiān)nhearingthis,thefisherman’sfacebecameserious.Heheadedtheboattowardsthedirectionwhereshepointedatwithfullspeed,notknowingwhatwouldhappenifhesloweddownevenalittlebit.Meanwhile,hecalledforhelp.Afterawhile,theycaughtsightofKiana’sfatherandsister’spaleface.Havingfloatingontheseaforalongtime,theywereonboardeventually.

Oncerescued,theywererushedtoshore,whereaconcernedgroupwaitedfortheirarrival.Warmblanketsandhotmilkwereprovidedtothem,makingthemfeelbetterinnotime.Agroupofdoctorsandnursescheckedtheirbodiesonthespot,andthentheyweresenttothenearesthospitalbytheambulance.Alocalreporterinterviewedtheminthehospital.Whenaskedwhatmadeherswamaloneinthecoldwatertosaveherfamilies,thebravegirl,lookingathersister’ssleepingface,saidwithadeterminedlook,“It’slovethatsupportmetofindthehope.”Thoughshestillwascoldinherbody,shefeltwarmth,justlikeawarmcurrentrushingthroughherheart.相似話題匯聚2021.12Z20名校聯(lián)盟GiftsforJaceI’llneverforgetthedaythatoneofmystudentsshylyraisedhishandandsaidthathehadneverreceivedagift.Myshockedfifth-graderswerediscussingareadingstoryaboutaboywhowasnotgoingtobegettinganythingforhisbirthdaybecausemoneywastightthatyear.Eventhoughthisclasswasveryopenduringreadingdiscussions,Jace’shonestysurprisedevenme.Whatwasevenmoreeye-openingwasthefactthatthissweet,fifth-gradeboyhadgonetenyearsandneverexperiencedthejoyandsurpriseofreceivingapresent.Isearchedmymindforareasonthathemightbesayingthis.Didhewantattentionfromhispeers?No,thatwasdefinitelynothisstyle.Washeexaggerating(夸大)?Again,hewasnotthetype.ThenIrememberedhisstory.Hismotherwasoutofthepictureandhelivedalonewithhisdad.Hisfatherhadahardtimeholdingdownajob,andcomingtothinkofit,Ididn’tseehisfatheratregistrationorparent-teacherconferences.EventhoughontheoutsideJacewasabituntidy,healwayscametoschoolwithasmileandsincereenthusiasmforlearning.AcoupleofweeksafterJace’scomment,hewasabsentfromschoolduetothefactthathehadmovedaway.ThishappenedtobethedayIwassendinghometheannualnoteabouttheclassroomChristmasgiftsexchange.Traditionally,eachboywastobringagiftforaboyinthethree-dollarrangeandthesamewastrueforeachgirl.Aswewerediscussingthespecifics,agirlraisedherhandandsincerelysuggestedthatwedoawaywithourtraditionalpolicy,andeachbuyagiftforJaceinstead.TheenthusiasmgrewasthestudentsdiscussedthekindsofthingstheyknewJacewouldlike.Wetookaquickvoteandconsistentlyagreedtogoaheadwiththiswonderfulidea.Paragraph1:DaysbeforeourChristmasvacation,thegiftsbegantopourin.____________Paragraph2:

AsIdrovedownhisroad,Isawalightflashing,signalingwhichhomewashis._____________相似話題匯聚2021.12Z20名校聯(lián)盟下水文：DaysbeforeourChristmasvacation,thegiftsbegantopourin.ThereweresomanyofthemthatIhadtogobackandforthseveraltimestoloadmycar.Myeyesfellonthegiftswithribbonstiedinbows.Whatlovelyandkind-heartedstudentstheywere!Icouldn’thelpthinkinghowexcitedJacewouldbewhenreceivingthegifts.IphonedtoaskJacewherehelivednow.Fortunately,heansweredthephoneandtoldmehisnewaddressandhowtofindhishomequickly.AsIdrovedownhisroad,Isawalightflashing,signalingwhichhomewashis.Iknockedonthe