讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)指導(dǎo)：5R解讀、4句框架和3大原則讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)：五四三法）在教學(xué)中，讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)我初步摸索出：5R解讀故事；4句框架和3大原則（即：五四三法）目前看，這種方法還是比較有效的，當(dāng)然有個(gè)前提，需要積累若干細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)的語(yǔ)句才能發(fā)揮更大的效果。題目：讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩端，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mikelickedthelastofthemintchocolatechipicecream.Itwasalmosttimetoleave.HejumpedintothecarwithhisparentsandheadedofftotheOlympic-sizedpoolforthebigswimmeet.Whenhisracecameup,Mikewasconfident.Hewasstrongandswift.Mikeclimbedoutthepool,smiling.Hehadjustwonfirstplace,makinghimthefastestboyinhisagegroup."Congratulations,son,"hisfathersaid.Hismomgavehimahug,eventhoughhewassoakingwet.Aweeklater,itwastimeforanotherswimmeet.Likebefore,Mikedecidedtoenjoyhisfavoriteicecreamflavor.Mikerememberedthatthelasttimehehadwonarace,healsoatemintchocolatechipicecreamfirst.Maybehe'dwinagain.He'stakenfirstplaceagaininhisrace.Mikewasfeelingprettygood.Asitturnedout,MikedecidedtohavesomemintchocolatechipIcecreambeforeeveryoneofthenextfewswimmeets.Hebegantothinkofitashisluckycharm.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Andhewouldn'tadmitit,butallthaticecreamwasaddingafewpoundstohisathleticswimmer'sbuild.Itdidn'ttakelongafterthatforMiketostartcominginsecondplace-andthenthird-andthenlastplaceinhisraces.Theluckymintchocolatechipicecreamhadlostitsmagic.Onthedayofhisnextswimmeet,hismothersatdownatthetablewithhim.“Mike,weallloveicecream,butit'snothealthyforyourbodytoeatsomuchofit.Maybeit'stimetoquitthesweettreatsforawhile,especiallybeforeyougoswimming.Mikeunwillinglyagreed.Hewenttotheswimmeet,anddidn'tperformwell.Hisfatherofferedtogorunningwithhimafewdaysaweektohelphimfeelbetterandstrengthenhismuscles.Theextraweightsoondisappeared,andMikefoundhimselfbreathingeasieratswimpractices.

Itwasthelastmeetoftheseason,andMikewasn'tsurewhattoexpect.Hefelthealthyagain,buthedidn'tknowifhestillhadanyspeedinthepool.1.2.3.4.1.2.3.4.至少使用五個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)Paragraph1:Ashedroveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Paragraph2:Hisjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelsetoo.如何快速寫(xiě)：第一步：Analyzethestory:5Rs

1.Readforcharacters:Mike,hisparents,Icecream,teammates2.Readforconflict/problems：IcecreamandMike'sperformance:WhetherisitaLuckycharm3.Readforplot:swimmeetNotmeetSoonmeetFirstplaceFirstplace,****NotlongofeveryafterthatswimOnedayofaswimAnotherswimSeveralmeetmonths3.Readforplot:swimmeetNotmeetSoonmeetFirstplaceFirstplace,****NotlongofeveryafterthatswimOnedayofaswimAnotherswimSeveralmeetmonthsToppositions/*third-last/place??***performwellReadforemotionalchanges:Whenhisracecameup,MikewasconfidentMikewasfeelingprettygood.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Mikeunwillinglyagreed.ReadforthemeWhatcontributestoMike'ssuccessinswimming?第二步：四句步定框架：寫(xiě)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)不同于寫(xiě)其它作文，有可能需要先倒著寫(xiě)的Step1:先把最后一句寫(xiě)好，即：主題句Mikerealizedthatone'sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.Step2:再把銜接句寫(xiě)好，即第一段的最后一句：Hedashedtothefinishline.Step3:緊接著每段的提示語(yǔ)句寫(xiě)角色的情感：Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.Mike'sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse'stoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.接下來(lái)就是把每段的中間補(bǔ)充完整，記住三大原則：Action—Response原則：角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想會(huì)引起其它角色的一系列反應(yīng)的。每段對(duì)話1-2句，不一定兩個(gè)人都要說(shuō)話，無(wú)聲的動(dòng)作也是一種response。Conflict—Solution原則：一般而言第二段會(huì)有問(wèn)題的solution，但本文和高考的讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)文章出題不一樣，因?yàn)閟olution在所給文章中就已經(jīng)有了。同時(shí)思考：能否在第一段出現(xiàn)一個(gè)問(wèn)題，然后把它解決了或者沒(méi)有解決。一方面是增加看點(diǎn)，另一方面也是給第二段鋪墊。Negative—Positive原則：寫(xiě)作中一定要體現(xiàn)情感的變化，無(wú)論前面是這樣的變化，最終都是積極的。最終：1.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.（心情）2.“ThisiswhereIbelong.Icanwintherace,”thoughthe,histeethclenchedandhiseyesfixedonthefinishlineforward.（內(nèi)心獨(dú)白）3.Suddenly,twofigureswhizzedpast,whichstartledhim.（心情變化））4.Fearingtofallbehind,hefelthisheartpoundedfranticallyandhismindwentblank.（解釋心情變化和問(wèn)題）5.Justthen,hethoughtofhissweatandhisfather'sencouragingsmile.（問(wèn)題的解決方法）Gradually,hisworrygavewaytohisconfidenceandthelast5minutessawhimdashtothefinishline,followedbytheendoftherace.（銜接句）Mike'sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse'stoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.（心情變化）However,heknewhedeservedthehonorofchampionship.（拓展）Hisparentscameupandgavehimahighfive,grinningfromeartoear.（次要角色的回應(yīng)）“Hey,whynottryyourfavoriteicecreamandcelebrate!”saidhisf