讀后續(xù)寫高一（1）/(4)班讀后續(xù)寫試題說明提供一篇350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，原文多是情節(jié)豐富的記敘文，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語進行續(xù)寫(150詞左右)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。

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讀后續(xù)寫文章題材選擇以記敘文為主。文章信息完整，既可以提煉出要點，又要給續(xù)寫留出余地，此類文章故事性強，情節(jié)有起伏，內(nèi)容連貫，邏輯性強，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，結(jié)尾處有結(jié)局或者感慨、總結(jié)等。段落要求：給定的段落開頭能引導(dǎo)故事延續(xù)，又防止天馬行空的想象。評分標準

Jennywastheonlychildinherhome.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn’thelpweepingwhenshethoughtofthescoldingfromhermother.Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighedandhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?””“Oh,yes...butIdon’thavemoneyonme,”shereplied.“That’snothing.I'lltreatyoutoday,”saidtheman.“Comein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?”askedthemankindly.“Nothing,actuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJenny.“Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomercilesscomparedtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitudetoher?”Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedMother’sfamiliarfaceandweatheredhands.“WhydidInotthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelgrateful,butIhaveneverthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme.”O(jiān)nthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.______________________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback._______________________________Task:acontinuation(續(xù)寫)ofthestoryReadwhathappened____in__thestoryWritewhathappened______thestoryParagraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________afterWhat/HowWhen/WhereWhoWhyThekeyelementstoexploreinastory“4321”模式下的讀后續(xù)寫思維“4321”Method4Reads-Readforelements

,emotionalchange,conflict,theme3Principalsaction-responseconflict-solutionnegative-positive2Givensentences1Goodending研讀文章意識-細節(jié)+大意情節(jié)推進意識:結(jié)局反推情節(jié)意識show,don’ttell意識銜接意識主題意識寫作方法三大原則原文一致原則正能量原則曲折性原則寫作小技巧1.雙線并行情節(jié)線情感線寫作小技巧2.巧用過渡?地點過渡?邏輯過渡因果：thus、therefore?時間過渡atfirst/earlyinthemorning/when.../onarrivingat...(一到...)/withouthesitation(沒有遲疑)/havingdone...(做完...)/finally/intheend02、寫作方法寫作小技巧3.換詞大法簡單詞→高級詞see--catchsightofhappy--delightedsad--depressedsay--murmur/interrupt/insist/whisper/add/shout...02、寫作方法寫作小技巧4.萬能句式過渡詞，with/without...+介短/doing(主動)/done(被動),人did...,doing...,feeling...eg:After10minutes,withabookinherhand,enjoyingherfavoritesongs,shesteppedintotheclassroom,feelingdelighted.5.記敘性語言與描述性語言結(jié)合，避免流水賬。02、寫作方法兩個雷區(qū)×太過離奇×對話、長句過多Step1ReadingFastreadingWhat'sthestyleofthepassage?Narration(記敘文)B.Exposition(說明文)C.Argumentation(議論文)

講述人物經(jīng)歷、事物變化FastreadingWhichoneistrueaccordingtothepassage?Theauthortellsthestoryinthefirstperson.Theauthortellsthestoreinthesecondperson.Theauthortellsthestoryinthethirdperson.

YouHeSheItinthefirstperson.IWeWhattenseshouldweuseifwewillcontinuetowrite?Thesimplepasttense一般過去時B.Thesimplefuturetense一般將來時C.Thesimplepresenttense一般現(xiàn)在時

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whyIDavidthedayofthebigcross-countryruntheracespot(aplacewiththickevergreenforest)Davidhesitatedandsaidhedecidednottorun.BecausethecoachwasafraidhewouldbelaughedatbythekidsfromotherschoolsaspecialeducationteacherofDavid’sschoolaten-year-oldboywithabraindisease;unabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids;rockfromsidetosidewhilewalking

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Thoughunabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids,Davidwastreatedequallyasaregularkidandusuallylivedahappylifeintheschool.Hedecidedtotakepartinthecross-countryrunandpracticedveryhard,nevermissingasinglepractice,thoughhewasalwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheothers.Hewasaskedtodecidebyhimselfwhethertorunornotontherundaybecausethecoachwasafraidhewaslaughedatbythekidsfromotherschools.

Hewasstandingbyhimselfoffthesidebyafencebuthisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsent.HappyDeterminedHesitantDepressed/LostanddownPlot&EmotionsAsaspecialeducationteacher,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.IfoundDavidstandingalonebyafence,notwarmingupandwalkingtheroutelikeotherrunnersbeforetherace.Iaskedhiscoachandlearnedthereason.

AftermakingsureDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme.AdmiredSurprisedFrustratedDetemined讀故事Step2Writing兩種構(gòu)思方法“四到一行”“線索呼應(yīng)”看聽想說做找出線索，前后呼應(yīng)“兩法六句”第一步依據(jù)首句，構(gòu)思框架兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。(1)讀懂兩段首句第一段首句后的銜接句、第一段尾句、第二段首句后的銜接句。即第二段的尾句——能體現(xiàn)故事圓滿結(jié)局的句子或故事給我們啟示的句子。(2)寫好三個銜接句(3)寫好一個升華句動作描寫增加細節(jié)所見所聞、所說所思所做環(huán)境描寫人物描寫語言描寫心理活動描寫第二步增加細節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫續(xù)故事Conflicts1.最終David參加比賽了嗎？是什么讓他改變了主意？2.比賽過程中，其他學(xué)校的孩子嘲笑David了嗎？為什么有或沒有嘲笑他？Theme讀后續(xù)寫一般都用正能量結(jié)尾。所以其他學(xué)校的孩子們應(yīng)該沒有嘲笑David，反而會很敬佩他，會為他的身殘志堅和不畏困難堅持到最后的精神而鼓掌。-----所以根據(jù)事情的發(fā)展順序和所給的首句，Conflict1就是第一段要解決的內(nèi)容，第二段就解決Conflict2.續(xù)故事Clues----首句線索Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Why?Whatwashedoingthen?Howwashefeelingthen?WhatdidIdecidetodo?WhatandhowdidIsaytohimthen,makinghimdeterminedtorun?----ImanagedtopersuadeDavidtojoinintherace.----ThoughDavidfinishedtherunlongaftertheotherchildren,hewasadmiredandrespectedbyotherkids.Howdidheperformintherace?WhatdidIfeelwhenseeinghimperformthatway?Whatwastheotherkids’responsetohisperformance?續(xù)故事Clues----原文線索1.