親情類讀后續(xù)寫指導(dǎo)案例

——以生病的Mike讀后續(xù)寫為例TeachingObjectives:Afterthisclass,studentswillbeableto:1.explorethegiventextincludingitstexttype,tense,theme,conflict,sixbasicelements,itsplotsandsoon;2.haveagoodunderstandingofhowtoworkoutthefameworkandconstructtheplotinthecontinuationwritingonfamilyaffections(親情)usingQ-Astrategy;3.cherishfamilyaffections.Lead-inbywatchingashortvideoandhaveadiscussioningroups.Let’shaveadiscussioningroups:1.Whathappenedbetweenthemotherandson?2.Didthesongotoschoolfinally?Why?3.Canyoupredictwhathislifewillbelikeinthefuture?TheGivenText01Comprehension02Let’sexplorethetext.1.What’sthe

theme?

Healthyeating&honesty.

Parents’

andkid’s

to

unhealthyfood;(1)Parents:didn’tgivemoneytobuyjunkfood;(2)Mike:stronglywishedtobuyjunkfood;secretlytakesomefromhismom’swallet;boughtabagoffood...;hungaroundoutsidetoenjoythefood..;didn'ttakenoticeofit.

Let’ssearchformoredetailedinformation:oppositionaddiction2.What’stheconflict?3.Readforbasicelements:5w+1Hsixbasicelementsmajortense:When

Where

WhoWhatWhyhowwhenMikewassevenyearsold,atnoonthatday,intheafternoonthatdayathome,astore,hospitalMike,Mike’smother,doctorHisparentsusuallydidn'tgivehimmoneybecausehelikedtobuyjunkfood.Theyknewsuchfoodwouldbeharmfultokids’bodies.Hurriedtodrivehimtothehospital;admitwhathehaddone。simplepasttense4.Readforplot:

Mike’sparentsusuallydidn’tgivehimmoneybecausehelikedtobuyjunkfoodMikesecretlytakesomemoneyfromhismom’swalletwithoutlettingherdiscoverit.Paragraph1:Shehurriedtodrivehimtothehospital.

Paragraph2:Mikerealizedheshouldadmitwhathehaddone.

Opening(介紹)

Build-up（發(fā)展）

Climax（高潮）Resolution(解決)Ending(結(jié)尾)writingprocess03本課以生病的Mike即IllMike讀后續(xù)寫為案例，嘗試運(yùn)用G-NandQ-A策略高效的指導(dǎo)學(xué)生展開親情類文章的讀后續(xù)寫。在續(xù)寫部分，教師基于原文本信息的解讀以及圍繞兩段首句中hurried;driveto;hospital，realized,admit等關(guān)鍵信息以what,how,why等6個(gè)問題串進(jìn)行提問，最后修改、潤(rùn)色、整理成文。具體操作：語言學(xué)王初明教授指出，“內(nèi)容要?jiǎng)?chuàng)造，語言要模仿，創(chuàng)造與模仿要緊密結(jié)合”。為了加強(qiáng)讀后續(xù)寫在主題與情感方面與原文的融洽度，分為兩個(gè)步驟進(jìn)行：第一步就是讀：讀懂六要素和主題、讀通情節(jié)和感情發(fā)展并讀精、讀深；第二步就是續(xù)寫：首先要關(guān)注銜接，其次就要關(guān)注構(gòu)思。讀后續(xù)寫原文文本一般為記敘文?；谖谋咎攸c(diǎn)，續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的豐富性取決于情節(jié)的發(fā)展（沖突構(gòu)造--沖突化解--親情升華）。因此，要基于前文的閱讀、圍繞主題，對(duì)故事的情節(jié)進(jìn)行合理的預(yù)測(cè)和構(gòu)造，進(jìn)而發(fā)展為續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容?？梢园凑彰慷稳齻€(gè)層次，構(gòu)思每一段的情節(jié)。續(xù)寫第一段基于段首句，延續(xù)文章的發(fā)展預(yù)測(cè)可能的故事情節(jié)根據(jù)第二段段首句，預(yù)測(cè)第一段的結(jié)束續(xù)寫第二段基于段首句，延續(xù)文章的發(fā)展故事的結(jié)局升華：呼應(yīng)主題——受到教訓(xùn)，得到啟發(fā)，獲得靈感HaveadiscussionWhatquestionswillyouraiseaboutthegiventwofirstsentence?Para1:

Shehurriedtodrivehimtothehospital._____________________________________Para2:Mikerealizedheshouldadmitwhathehaddone.______________________________Possiblequestions:Para1:She

hurriedto

drive

him

to

the

hospital:Q1:What’sMikeandhismom’sresponseandhowdidhefeelonthewaytothehospital?Q2:WhatdidthedoctordoandsayandhowdidMikefeel?WhatdidMike’smomdoandhowdidshefeel?Para2:Mike

realized

he

should

admit

what

he

had

done:Q3:WhatdidMiketellhismomandhowdidhefeelaftertellingthetruthandwhat’shismom’sreaction?Q4:WhatthendidthedoctordowithMike’sillnessanddidhefeelbetteraftertakingthemedicine?Q5:WhatdidMikelearnfromthisexperience?Possiblequestions:Para1:She

hurriedto

drive

him

to

the

hospital.Designtechniques在續(xù)寫第一段的框架下，就續(xù)寫第一段首句中的關(guān)鍵人物Mike和Mom,事件：媽媽開車送他去醫(yī)院路上的路上，從人物的動(dòng)作、行為、心理、情感等方面進(jìn)行提問和嘗試回答，答案不唯一，合理即可。（注意與原文的銜接）Para1:She

hurriedto

drive

him

to

the

hospital.Q2:WhatdidthedoctordoandsayandhowdidMikefeel?WhatdidMike’smomdoandhowdidshefeel?PA1:Afterparkingthecar,hismomrushedhimtothedoctorswiththenurse’shelp.Afterafewsimplechecks,thedoctorsaidheneededafewfurtherexaminationsaboutthestomach,whichwouldbeverypainfulandexpensive.Seeingthattheywerenotrichandmomfeltsoworriedthathertearsbeganfallingdownherface,Mikerecalledthemomentswhenhisdearmomanddadusuallytaughthimtobeanhonestmanwhengrewup.Designtechniques到醫(yī)院停車后，媽媽有哪些行為、動(dòng)作、語言等；醫(yī)生問了我什么問題，我的感受如何，什么促使我做出后來承認(rèn)一切的這一舉動(dòng)的原因也要設(shè)計(jì)進(jìn)取，整個(gè)故事應(yīng)該出現(xiàn)一個(gè)促進(jìn)問題解決-即我承認(rèn)錯(cuò)誤以及媽媽原諒我的正能量結(jié)尾關(guān)鍵性因素。因此，圍繞這些關(guān)鍵因素提出了兩個(gè)主要的問題并嘗試回答。（注意：沖突構(gòu)造；注意與續(xù)寫第二段首句的銜接）Para2:Mike

realized

he

should

admit

what

he

had

done.Q3：WhatdidMiketellhismomandhowdidhefeelaftertellingthetruthandwhat’shismom’sreaction?PA1:He

felt

so

sorry

and

guilty.

After

gathering

his

courage,

he

came

close

to

his

mom

and

told

her

that

he

took

a

few

coins

from

her

wallet

and

bought

a

bag

of

peppery

food

and

a

bottle

of

iced

Cocacola.

After

hearing

this,

his

mom

seemed

to

have

understood

everything,

patted

him

gently

on

his

shoulder

and

said

it

was

so

kind

of

you

to

be

honest

and

it

was

not

too

late

to

let

us

know

it.PA2…Designtechniques基于第二首句與正能量結(jié)尾構(gòu)成的框架，圍繞Mike承認(rèn)錯(cuò)誤這一事實(shí)，結(jié)合主題，圍繞關(guān)鍵因素Mike的心理活動(dòng)、語言、動(dòng)作等進(jìn)行提問。他承認(rèn)錯(cuò)誤前經(jīng)歷了那些思想斗爭(zhēng)，鼓足勇氣，回憶父母一直的教育--做人要誠實(shí)，最終承認(rèn)錯(cuò)誤，說了什么話，媽媽有何感受？（注意：沖突化解）Para2:Mike

realized

he

should

admit

what

he

had

done.Designtechniques醫(yī)生了解情況之后，說了什么，吃了醫(yī)生開的藥之后，我的情況是否緩解和好轉(zhuǎn)。Para2:Mike

realized

he

should

admit

what

he

had

done.Q5:WhatdidMikelearnfromthisexperience?PA1:Mikefeltsothankfultohisgreatmomandlearnedthatnomatterwhathappenedweshouldnothesitatetotellourparentsthetruthinordertogettheirtimelyhelp

andpromisedthathedidn’ttakeju