高考英語讀后續(xù)寫素材賞析（一）TheJourneyof

LoveInapeacefulparkonabeautifulautumnday,Isatonabench,

lostinmemoriesofthepast.Thesun’sgoldenrays

painted

thesky,

fillingmewithamixofemotions.(paint形象用詞；藍色分詞狀語)Mymindtraveledbacktothedayswhenmychildhoodhomewasfilledwithlaughter.Icouldstillhearmyfather’scontagious(感染性的)joy

thatbrightenedeverycorner.Hiseyes

sparkled

likestars,(有愛還有神韻的描寫)

guidingmystepsthroughlife’stwistsandturns.Butthen,lifetookanunexpectedturn,andmyfather’shealthdeclined.Thewarmthhebroughttoourlives

gavewayto

worryandsadness(無靈主語；givewayto用的絕了).However,mymotherbecameourrock,

showeringuswithloveandsupport.(比喻修辭手法)

Herpresencewaslikeafortingmoonbeam,

lightingthewayforourfamily.Daysturnedintomonths,anduncertainty

weighed

heavilyonourhearts.Andonecoldwinternight,

thefinalnoteofmyfather’sjourneyplayed,leavinganemptinessthatfeltimpossibletofill.Intheaftermath,ourhomefeltsomber(憂郁),asifamelodyhadgoneawry.Weshedtearsaswe

clungto

cherishedmemories.Butinthemidstofoursorrow,thestrengthofourbondbegantomendourspirits.Withtime,wediscoveredthatlovehadthepowertoheal.Eachday,weaddednewnotestothemelodyofourlives,findingjoyinthesimplemoments.Laughterreturnedtoourhome,minglingwiththeechoofmyfather’slaughterinourhearts(無靈主語+分詞狀語).Throughsharedstories,werealizedthatlovecantranscend(超越)

eventheboundariesoflifeanddeath.Astheseasonscameandwent,welearnedtocelebratevictoriesandendurehardships.Oursharedmemoriesgaveusstrengthandremindedusofthelovewestillcarried.AndasIsatontheparkbench,

theleavesgentlyrustling(獨立主格),Ifeltadeepgratitudeforthelovemyfatherhadgivenus.Hisspiritlivedonwithinme,guidingmystepsandfillingmyheartwithwarmth.Amongthesymphonyofmemories,Ivowedtokeephislovealive.Forinthemusicoflife,loveistheeternalmelodythatconnectsusall.(升華love是家庭跳動的音符，永遠存在并給我們快樂幸福。)（二）“BANG!”thedoorcausedareverberation(回聲).Itwasjuststandingthere,

withmyfatherstandingononeside,andmeontheotherside.(多好的伴隨狀語1)Wewereboth

ingreatanger.“Neversetfootinthishouseagain!”

stormed

myfather.(storm可是滿滿的畫面感，say的替換法，可讓表達錦上添花)

Withtearswellingupinmyeyes,Irushedoutoftheflatandranalongthestreet.(多好的伴隨狀語2，+并列動作加持)Thestreetlightswereshining,causingrathersadfeelings.Iwanderedaimlessly.(多好的環(huán)境描寫，氛圍襯托)Ayoungfatherwhoheldachildinhisarmswalkedpastme.IfeltasifIsawmychildhoodfromanotherspace:happyandcarefree.(比喻怎么能少1)ealways

putshisopinionsandcodesofbehavioronme.(活靈活現(xiàn)的性格特征——是不是霸道父親的影子)

Wheneverhedoessomethingwrong,heneveradmitsit.Wearejustliketwopeopleingfromtwodifferentworlds.(比喻怎么能少2)

Itfeels

likethereisanirondoorbetweenusthatcanneverbeopened.(比喻怎么能少3)Iwanderedthestreets,withoutadestinationinmind.Myheartwasfrozenonthishotsummernight.(比喻怎么能少4)

AsIwalkedon,therewerefewerandfewerpeopleinthestreets,untilIhadonlythestreetlightstokeepmepany.(多好的環(huán)境描寫，氛圍襯托)

WhenIfinallyreachedthehighriseapartmentblockinwhichIlived,Isawthatthelightwasstillon.Ithoughttomyself,

“Ismyfatherwaitingforme,orishestillangrywithme?”(thinktomyself，say的替換法，可讓表達錦上添花)

Infact,itwasnothing.Perhaps,mydadwasthrowingawaysomeofhisoldstamps.Perhapshethoughttheywereuseless.IneverhadthecouragetotellhimthatIlikedcollectingstamps.Allthelightswereoffexceptmyfather’s.Dadwasalwayslikethis.Maybehedidn’tknowhowtoexpresshimself.Aftershoutingatme,henevershowedanymercyoranymomentsofregret.However,afteranargument

hehasthehabitoftuckingmeunderneaththecoverswhileIamsleeping.(tuck情節(jié)中的細節(jié)描寫，perfect)Thiswashowhealwayswas.Hehasbeenaleaderforsolongthattellingeveryoneelsewhattodohasbeehissecondnature.Thelightwasstillon.“AmIwrong?”Iwhispered,maybe...(這個句式學(xué)會了嗎?

還處于sbsaid,

“...”句式嗎？)

Withthekeyinmyhand,IwasasnervousasIhadeverbeen.(人物的動作神態(tài)細節(jié)描寫1)

Atlast,Idecidedtoopenthedoor.AssoonasIopenedthedoor,tearsrandownmycheeks.(人物的動作神態(tài)細節(jié)描寫2)

IsuddenlyrealizedthattheirondoorthatIhadimaginedbetweenusdidnotexistatall.Love—it’s

secondtonone./Loveesinallshapesandsizes.(加個結(jié)尾，你喜歡嗎？你有更好的主題升華嗎？期待留言中......)（三）Herashenface(想想什么磨難會讓孩子臉龐ashen：lookingverypalebecauseyouareill,shocked,orfrightened)stoodoutagainstthestartling(surprising)blacknessofherhair.Shelookedmuchyoungerthanherfifteenyears,aworncoathanginglooseaboveher.(絕對的外貌描寫+獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)使用)Weweren’tsupposedtotakeachild,butanemergencycallcamethroughthatmorning.Ahomewasneededforayounggirlimmediately.I,togetherwithfourchildren,hurriedtogetherroomready.Thekidsweregreat.Joanne,oursecondeldestdaughter,didthecleaningandMargaret,RobandJeffhelpedmakethebed.Ifeltmyheartpoundinginmychest.Iwasexcited,butscaredatthesametimebecauseIwastoldanadoptedchildmightgiveusalotoftrouble.(前句pounding，加上后句細化描寫excitedbutscaredatthesametime...心情描寫真到位)(情節(jié)延續(xù)段落)Thatafternoon,TrudyarrivedwiththesocialworkerMrs.Kline.Shesteppedintothefronthallandstoodagainstthewall.Iwillneverforgetthelookinhereyes.Thefirstthingthatcametomymindwasthatshelookedlikeahuntedanimal.(特別形象的描寫孩子的膽怯表現(xiàn)淋漓盡致)Thechildrenmovedtowardsher,andJeffgrabbedherhandandsaidproudly,“eandseeyourroom.Ihelpedmakeyourbed.”Trudypulledback,speechless.(肢體語言生動形象)Atthispoint,Isteppedtowardsherandsaid,“Weletoourhome,Trudy.”(套句模仿1：狀語，+主語+連續(xù)動作...,“...”語言對話)Shelookedatmewithsuchblankeyes.Butwithherheadbowed,shesimplysaid,eyesmovingbackandforthlikeacreaturelookingforawayout,“No,thankyou.”(套句模仿2：with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)狀語，+主語+動作，+獨立主格...,“...”語言對話)(情節(jié)延續(xù)段落)Forthefirsttwoweeks,Trudywasveryquiet.ShewouldeintothekitchenwhileIwasworking,andwewoulddiscussschoolandwhatshewouldliketodointhefuture.Mrs.Klinehadgivenusalltheinformationaboutherhistory,butInevermentionedtheterriblethingsthathadhappenedtoher.(情節(jié)延續(xù)段落)Asthedayswentby,Trudybecameadelighttohavearound.Veryquickly,itseemedlikeshehadalwaysbeenwithus.Thegirlswouldsitineachother'sroomsandgiggle(咯咯笑)liketypicalteenagers.Itwasasoundthatwarmedmysoul.However,whentheytalkedaboutnewclothes,Trudyfellsilentagain.說明：文章中多處看似無關(guān)，實則起著上下關(guān)聯(lián)的重要作用，稱之為情節(jié)延續(xù)鏈或稱之為故事推動鏈。基本上可以分為兩類：一是以時間為邏輯轉(zhuǎn)換來推動故事發(fā)展，二則是以人物情緒變化或場景遷移來推動情節(jié)走向。（四）Inapeacefulcoastaltown,wheregentlewaveskissedthesandyshoreandthesaltybreezewhisperedsecrets,(故事的背景鋪墊也是唯美的)therelivedayounggirlnamedMary.However,Maryhadaspecialchallengeshecouldn’theareverythinglikeotherscould.Butthatdidn’tdiscourageherfrompursuingherpassionfordance.Marywasdeterminedtobeethebestdancershecouldbe.ShejoinedthefamousHarmonyDanceAcademy,aplacewhereherdreamscouldtakeflight.Hermentor,MissClara,wasalwaystheretoguideherandhelpherimprovehertechniques.Despiteherdifficultywithhearing,Marypouredherheartandsoulintoeverygracefulmovement.(刻畫人物性格despite不錯的選擇)(情節(jié)延續(xù)段落)Asthetimefortheannualtalentshowapproached,Maryfeltamixofexcitementanddoubt.Howwouldshebeabletodanceinsyncwithouthearingthemusicfully?Fearcreptintohermind(無靈主語：表達內(nèi)心的恐懼),makingherconsidergivingupandnotparticipatingintheshow.ButMissClarasawthestrugglewithinMaryanddecidedtohelpheroverethishurdle.Together,theycameupwitharoutinethatcelebratedMary’sabilitytofeeltherhythmdeepwithinher.Theyworkedtirelessly,practicingandperfectingeachstep.(情節(jié)延續(xù)段落)Thenightofthetalentshowarrived,andthestagewasfilledwithanticipation.Marytookadeepbreathandembracedthechallengeahead.Asthemusicstartedtoplay,sheclosedhereyesandletherothersensesguideher.Shecouldfeelthevibrationsinherbody,asifthemusicwasalivewithinher.(對人物的動作描述+修辭)Marydancedwithpassion,municatingheremotionsthroughhergracefulmovements.Eachleap,twirl,andextensiontoldastoryofresilienceanddetermination.(無靈主語：闡釋主人公的魅力：意志力)Theaudiencewascaptivatedbyherperformance,notknowingthatMarycouldn'thearthemusic.Theyweremovedbythestrengthsheexudedasshedanced.(模仿下面一段進行故事情節(jié)的推動：給主人公增加點小插曲，小意外，可以增強效果——假如考生在2022高考中，給主人公David跑步時也增加點“意外”，如摔倒后，掙扎起來繼續(xù)，則更加有畫面沖擊力:Fallingheavilytotheground,butstrugglingtogetbackup,hecontinuedrunning.)Butthen,unexpectedly,atechnicalglitchcausedthemusictostop.Marywasmomentarilylost,herheartfilledwithpanic.However,sherefusedtoletthissetbackdefineher.Inthatmomentofsilence,Mary'sdeterminationsurgedwithinher.Sheusedherbodyasaninstrument,creatingadancethatexpressedherunwaveringspirit.TheaudiencewatchedinaweasMarytransformedthesilenceintoanextraordinaryperformance.(這一段是否也可以嫁接到2022高考續(xù)寫中，thefieldfilled