一、2021浙江首考讀后續(xù)寫Pumpkin

(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.My

dad

hasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,

Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmy

mom

filmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmy

head

insidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,my

nose

brieflypreventedentry.FinallyI

managed

toputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(軟木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingto

support

itsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewhereto

rest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenI

pulled

hard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.注意：1.

所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.

至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.

續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好；

4.

續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)?！颈尘敖榻B】本文選自英國(guó)《衛(wèi)報(bào)》2018年10月26日的一篇文章。文章講述了在萬(wàn)圣節(jié)前，一個(gè)女孩為了證明自己搬回的南瓜最重，把頭塞進(jìn)南瓜但卻不幸被卡在里面，整個(gè)過(guò)程被媽媽拍下來(lái)傳到網(wǎng)上的一個(gè)搞笑又溫馨的故事?！疚恼露温浞治觥勘疚氖且黄洈⑽?。文章段落可分成兩部分：1-2段：“我”鬼使神差地認(rèn)為把頭塞到南瓜里，可以證明“我”搬回來(lái)的南瓜是最重的。3-4段：“我”費(fèi)了好大勁，終于成功地將整個(gè)頭塞了進(jìn)去；然而，好運(yùn)變厄運(yùn)，“我”的頭卡在了南瓜里。猜測(cè)后面續(xù)寫的兩段，應(yīng)該是：“我”的頭是如何拿出來(lái)的；頭拿出來(lái)后發(fā)生的事。【關(guān)鍵詞】任何一個(gè)完整的句子都少不了名詞和動(dòng)詞，所以可以將關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行分類：名詞：pumpkin,dad,Jason,mom,head,nose動(dòng)詞：managed,support,rest,pulled【寫作分析】1.

考生在寫作時(shí)，可以把自己置身在文中，作為旁觀者，或者把自己換成文章作者去體驗(yàn)和行動(dòng)——想象自己的頭被卡在南瓜里是什么狀態(tài)。2.

厘清上下文邏輯后，把文中的關(guān)鍵詞帶入續(xù)寫部分，在心中描繪出一個(gè)故事發(fā)展的梗概。3.

利用好續(xù)寫部分的首句。通常，首句有兩種作用：承上啟下+整段中心句。4.

最后，保證詞數(shù)、語(yǔ)法和標(biāo)點(diǎn)正確，因?yàn)樵谧x后續(xù)寫的評(píng)分原則里，詞數(shù)不足也會(huì)扣分，標(biāo)點(diǎn)和拼寫等也會(huì)對(duì)分?jǐn)?shù)有影響。參考范文Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Growingmorepanic,Ibegantocry.Fortunately,hearingmecrying,

dad

cameandhelpedmelaymy

head

onthetable,somyneckcould

rest

forawhile.Thenhesaidtome“Listen,honey.Ihavetocutthis

pumpkin

inhalf.”Ihadnochoicebuttokeepstillwithmyeyestightlyclosedandlisteningtotheknifemovingonthepumpkin.Momentslater,myheadwasfinallyreleasedfromthishorriblepumpkincage.Then

mom

toldmeshehadjustfilmedme

managing

to

pull

myheadoutofthepumpkin.Paragraph2ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.ActuallymymomhadaskedwhethershecouldpostitontheInternet,becauseafterallIwassoembarrassedandlookedsosilly