讀后續(xù)寫而言，學(xué)生的一個(gè)問題很突出：情節(jié)過于簡(jiǎn)單，每一段似乎一句話就可以說完，如何寫得有血有肉？有不少學(xué)生，為了把簡(jiǎn)單的情節(jié)寫滿，無中生有地增加了很多戲。針對(duì)此，初步摸索出一個(gè)策略：一個(gè)中心：MainPlot兩個(gè)基本點(diǎn)：Explain；Enrich（Action,Response,Emotion）解釋：一個(gè)中心：每一段，根據(jù)提示句確定主要情節(jié)，即一個(gè)場(chǎng)景，一句話說清楚。遇到情節(jié)構(gòu)造非常明顯的，而且一句話能說清楚的，就不要絞盡腦汁去增加戲份，就用這個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的場(chǎng)景來拓展。兩個(gè)基本點(diǎn)：主要情景有了，那么下面細(xì)節(jié)描寫都必須圍繞mainplot，且指向主題思想。兩個(gè)點(diǎn)：1.Explain：對(duì)提示句里的關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行解釋：或詳述內(nèi)容，或說明其接下來發(fā)生什么。2.Enrich：對(duì)解釋的內(nèi)容從動(dòng)作、角色反應(yīng)、情緒三個(gè)方面進(jìn)行豐富。下面舉例（南京零模、蘇州開學(xué)初考試，其它的還有海門市等，基本都屬于這類。）蘇州卷讀后續(xù)寫

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ItwasachillyFridaynight,andIhadjustreturnedfromclimbingoneoftheredrocksofSedona.MyfathertelephonedmeasIwalkedthroughthearchestomydormroomandtoldmethatmymotherhadbeeninaterriblecarcrashandhadbeentakentotheintensivecareunit(重癥監(jiān)護(hù)病房)ofanearbyhospital.WhenIgottothehospital,myfatherledmedownawidehallwaywithmachinesallaround.Astrongsmellofmedicinebroughtasickfeelingtomyalreadyturningstomach.AsIturnedintomymother’sward,thecadaverous(形容枯槁的)conditionofherbodyshockedme.Herfacehadswollen,hereyeshadhugedarkbruise,andshehadtubesdownherthroatandinherarms.Gentlyholdinghercoldswollenhands,Isaid“hi”inacalmvoice,controllingmyurgetocryout.Shekeptlookingatmeasshepoundedherhandagainstthebed,lookingpainful.Iturnedmyfaceawayfromher,tryingtohidethetearsthatwererollingdownmyface.ThatwaswhenitstruckmethatIreallymightlosemymother.Fromthatnighton,mylifepletelychanged.Uptothatpoint,I’dhadtheluxuryofjustbeingakid,havingtodealwithonlytheexaggeratedmelodramasofteenagelife.Asmymotherstruggledfirsttostayaliveandthentorelearntowalk,mysenseofprioritieschangedsharply.Mymotherneededme.Thetrialsandtroubleofmydailylifeatschool,whichhadseemedsoimportantbefore,nowappearedinsignificant.MymotherandIhadfaceddeathtogether,andlifetookonanewmeaningforbothofus.Afteraweekoftreatmentinintensivecare,mymother’sconditionimprovedenoughtobemovedtoaregularhospitalward.Shewasfinallyoutofdangerbut,becauseherlegshadbeencrushed,therewasdoubtwhethershewouldbeabletowalkagain.Iwasjustgratefulthatshewasalive.Twomonthslater,asortofhospitalsuitewassetupinourfamilyroom,andshewasallowedtoehome.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Mymother’sreturnhomewasablessingforusall,butitmeantsomeunaccustomedresponsibilitiesforme.

Mymother’srelianceonmechangedourrelationship.

指導(dǎo)：

Mymother’sreturnhomewasablessingforusall,butitmeantsomeunaccustomedresponsibilitiesforme.Mainplot：我為媽媽做了那些事情（unaccustomedresponsibilities）Explain：解釋unaccustomed：曾經(jīng)，我認(rèn)為媽媽照顧我是理所當(dāng)然的解釋responsibilities：現(xiàn)在我學(xué)會(huì)了做飯，拖地；給媽媽換藥，擦洗，喂她吃飯。Enrich:Emotion：一開始，我抱怨，然后我為自己的想法感到羞愧。Action：我學(xué)會(huì)了……；我抽時(shí)間陪伴媽媽Response：媽媽從一開始的整日的郁郁寡歡到笑容滿面。完整：曾經(jīng)，我認(rèn)為媽媽照顧我是理所當(dāng)然的，但現(xiàn)在我學(xué)會(huì)了做飯，拖地；給媽媽換藥，擦洗，喂她吃飯。一開始，我抱怨這些麻煩，但逐漸體會(huì)到這一切不都是媽媽一直給我做的嗎？我為自己的想法感到羞愧。從那后，我會(huì)盡量抽出時(shí)間陪伴媽媽，讓她每天都心情愉快。而媽媽也從一開始的整日的郁郁寡歡到笑容滿面。Mymother’sreturnhomewasablessingforusall,butitmeantsomeunaccustomedresponsibilitiesforme.Iusedtotakehercareforgranted,butthedaysafterherreturnsawmelearningtocook,clean,changehermedication,batheher,andfeedher.Initially,Icouldn'thelpbutgrumbleaboutthetrouble,butIgraduallyrealizedthatshehadalwaysdonethesethingsforme.Ashamedofmypreviousattitude,Imadeanefforttospendmoretimewithmymother,ensuringshehadapleasantdayeveryday.Overtime,myeffortbrightenedheroncegloomydays.

Mymother’srelianceonmechangedourrelationship.Mainplot：我們的關(guān)系改進(jìn)了（changerelationship）Explain:如何體現(xiàn)關(guān)系改進(jìn)：用對(duì)比法，以前如何，現(xiàn)在如何以前：我很少和她說話。現(xiàn)在：隔閡消失，無話不談Enrich：Response：媽媽每次看到我的表現(xiàn)（微笑，眼放光）Emotion：家里充滿了笑聲。主題：媽媽可以照顧自己了，而我更發(fā)現(xiàn)了新的自我：成熟，長(zhǎng)大，負(fù)責(zé)完整：以前我很少和她說話。但現(xiàn)在我們之間的冰山已經(jīng)溶解，并且形成了默契。每天，媽媽看到我，臉上和眼里都是滿滿的幸福。我們經(jīng)常互吐心聲，整個(gè)家充滿了溫馨的笑聲。很快，媽媽就可以自理了。而對(duì)我來說，這更是有新的意義：我真的長(zhǎng)大了，我能夠?yàn)榧彝コ袚?dān)責(zé)任了。Mymother'srelianceonmechangedourrelationship.Irarelyusedtotalktoherbefore,andweevenoftenfoundourselvesarguing.Butnow,theicebetweenusmelted,andwedevelopedastrongbond.Eachtimemymothersawme,herfaceandeyeslitupwithhappiness.Wefrequentlypouredourhearttoeachother,andourhomewasfilledwithwarmlaughter.Soon,mymothercouldcareforherselfagain.Forme,thisnewfoundresponsibilityhastakenonanewmeaning:I'vetrulygrownup,andIcannowshoulderresponsibilitiesforourfamily.范文：Mymother’sreturnhomewasablessingforusall,butitmeantsomeunaccustomedresponsibilitiesforme.Iwouldfeedher,batheherandhelphertothebathroom.ItstruckmethatIwasprettymuchplayingtheroleofmothertomyownmother.Thedifficultpartformewastryingtobealwaysupbeat,andtokeepmymother’sspiritsupwhenshebecamefrustratedwiththepainandherinabilitytodosimplethingsbyherself.Lookingaftermymotherwasn’tmuchfun,butitfeltgoodtobetherewhenmymotherreallyneededme.Mymother’srelianceonmechangedourrelationship.Inthepast,wehadmorethanourshareofthestrainsofmotherdaughterrelationships.Theaccidentthrewusintoarelationshipofinterdependence.Togetmymother