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個人頓悟篇1.歐亨利式轉(zhuǎn)折?轉(zhuǎn)折情節(jié)設(shè)置2.人生導師?3.個人頓悟?想要炫耀騎車去學校急剎車摔倒Paragraph

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Ipickedmyselfupandputatremblinghandintomypocket.

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2:“That’snottherightway.Patience.Will,patience,”avoiceechoedinmyearaftertheboyleft.負我匆忙著急我耐心平靜定全文主線正轉(zhuǎn)想起祖父的話人物主題詞細節(jié)詞grandfather;mymother;boys;Crawleythewatch;patienceRomenumber;possessions;impress;bike動詞可以變詞性、變時態(tài)或者非謂語名詞可以改變單復數(shù)，單用所有格’s不算劃線詞劃線詞不可以改變詞性和詞義理下劃線詞grandfather;thewatch;patience;mymother;boys;;Romenumber;possessions;impress;bikeCrawley推下文情節(jié)銜接第一段開頭P.1:

Ipickedmyselfupandputatremblinghandintomypocket.

P.2:That’snottherightway.Patience.Will,patience,”avoiceechoedinmyearaftertheboyleft.被男孩嘲笑，我很生氣銜接第二段開頭根據(jù)第二段開頭倒推首段結(jié)尾找不到查看手表心理頓悟找不到+震驚/緊張1??【銜接】推下文情節(jié)情緒/動作/心理/語言/渲染銜接第一段開頭找不到查看手表男孩嘲笑+我生氣根據(jù)第二段開頭倒推首段結(jié)尾2??環(huán)顧四周+即將哭泣3??看到手表??4??蹲下來撿手表+檢查5??男孩嘲笑+我生氣grandfather;thewatch;patience;mymother;boys;;Romenumber;possessions;impress;bike；Crawley頓悟1??【銜接】推下文情節(jié)情緒/動作/心理/語言/渲染2??【語言】對自己說3??4??銜接第二段開頭頓悟心理拭去眼淚+抱著手表走向?qū)W校+內(nèi)心平靜grandfather;thewatch;patience;mymother;boys;;Romenumber;possessions;impress;bike；Crawley空的！我口袋里什么也沒有找到！這一事實讓我目瞪口呆，我覺得好像有一只長矛刺進我的心臟，立刻開始流血。Empty！Ifoundnothing

inmypocket!Thefactleavingmedumbfounded,IfeltasIfaspearhadpiercedintomyheartwhichstartedtobleedimmediately.連情節(jié)成句找不到+震驚/緊張1??【銜接】P.1:

Ipickedmyselfupandputatremblinghandintomypocket.

我交集地環(huán)顧四周，幾乎哭了起來。Lookingaroundwithmountinganxiety,Ialmostburstintotears.連情節(jié)成句2??環(huán)顧四周+即將哭泣連情節(jié)成句3??看到手表??突然，手表出現(xiàn)在我的視線里，在我躺著的自行車旁邊，它的金表殼壞了All

ofsudden,intomysightcamethewatch,nearmylyingbike,whosegoldencasewasbroken.我熱淚盈眶，蹲了下來，小心翼翼地把整個東西放在掌心上，仔細檢查了一下?lián)p壞情況。Withtearsbriminginmyeyes,Isquatteddown,deliberatelyputthewholethingonmycuppedpalmsandinspectedthedamage.連情節(jié)成句4??蹲下來+撿手表+檢查就在這時，Crawley帶領(lǐng)的一群男孩從我身邊走過，他們大聲笑著，用“多么漂亮的破表?。　弊I諷我。聽到這話，我生氣得握緊拳頭！Justatthismoment,agroupofboysledbyCrawleypassedme,wholaughedloudlyandsniffedatmewithwords“whatafinestbrokenwatch!”Hearingthewords,Iclenchedmyfistwithanger.連情節(jié)成句5??男孩嘲笑+我生氣頓悟1??【銜接】推下文情節(jié)情緒/動作/心理/語言/渲染2??【語言】對自己說3??4??銜接第二段開頭頓悟心理拭去眼淚+抱著手表走向?qū)W校+內(nèi)心平靜grandfather;thewatch;patience;mymother;boys;;Romenumber;possessions;impress;bike；Crawley我突然意識到我已故祖父所說的是對的。Itdawnedonmethatwhatdeceasedgrandfatherhadsaidwasright.連情節(jié)成句頓悟1??【銜接】“木已成舟，我應(yīng)該有耐心?！蔽亦貙ψ约赫f?！癢hatwasdonewasdoneandIneedtohavepatience.”murmuredtomyself.連情節(jié)成句2??【語言】對自己說我沒有回應(yīng)，拭去眼淚，用一張紙包著我珍貴的手表。連情節(jié)成句3??拭去眼淚+抱著手表Ididn’trespondtothoseboys,wipingawaymytearsandwrappedmypreciouswatchwithapieceofpaper.當我大步走向?qū)W校時，我發(fā)現(xiàn)我的內(nèi)心世界是平靜的，因為我確信這只破了的手表會一直提醒我要耐心，直到真相出現(xiàn)。AsIstrodetowardsschool,IfoundmyinnerworldwaspeacefulforIknewforsurethatthisbrokenwatchwouldalwaysremindmetobepatientuntiltruthemergeditself.連情節(jié)成句4??走向?qū)W校+內(nèi)心平靜全文整合 Empty！Ifoundnothing

inmypocket!Thefactleavingmedumbfounded,IfeltasIfaspearhadpiercedintomyheartwhichstartedtobleedimmediately.Lookingaroundwithmountinganxiety,Ialmostburstintotears.All

ofsudden,intomysightcamethewatch,nearmylyingbike,whosegoldencasewasbroken.Withtearsbriminginmyeyes,Isquatteddown,deliberatelyputthewholethingonmycuppedpalmsandinspectedthedamage.Justatthismoment,agroupofboysledbyCrawleypassedme,wholaughedloudlyandsniffedatmewithwords“whatafinestbrokenwatch!”Hearingthewords,Iclenchedmyfistwithanger. Itdawnedonmethatwhatdeceasedgrandfatherhadsaidwasright.“WhatwasdonewasdoneandIneedtohavepatience.”murmuredtomyself.Ididn’trespondtothoseboys,wipingawaymytearsandwrappedm