MadebyLaura讀后續(xù)寫分析Learningobjectives:1.Findouttheforeshadowing(伏筆)byreadingtheoriginalstorycarefully.2.Designvividandlogicalplotbasedonforeshadowing.3.Polishyourwritingbyechoingtheoriginallanguagestyle.試卷續(xù)寫材料呈現(xiàn)Inourweeklystaffmeeting,oureditorAshleywasnotpleasedwiththequalityofourreporting.“Our

readershipiswaydown.WeneedbetterstoriesforthisThursday’sschoolnewspaper.Doesanybodyhaveany

ideas?”shesaid.IhandedhermyarticleaboutourbasketballteambeatingDeerfieldHighSchoolthepreviousnightbyone

point.“Sportsstoriesarefun,”

shesaid,“butnotgoodenoughforthefrontpage.

Weneedsomethingtoreally

getpeople’sattention.”試卷續(xù)寫材料呈現(xiàn)Afterourmeeting,

weleftthenewsroomtogetherandheardsomeonescreaming.

“Perryismissing!”

Perry

wasabigredparrotandhadbeenourschoolmascot

(吉祥物)

fortenyears.

Heplayedanimportantrolein

students’lives,bothinandoutofclass.Hehadalsobeenaconstantpresenceatschoolevents,

inspiringa

senseofunityamongstudents.試卷續(xù)寫材料呈現(xiàn)EveryonegatheredaroundPerry’semptycage,heartbroken.

Suddenly,

astudentfromthecrowdcameover

andshowedmeaphoto.“You’reareporterfortheschoolpaper,right?

Ihappenedtotakethisyesterday,”

he

said.

InthephotowasaDeerfieldHighSchoolbasketballplayerwithsomethinglargehiddenunderhisshirtaroundthesizeofaparrot.試卷續(xù)寫材料呈現(xiàn)“HemusthavestolenPerrytogetbackatusforwinningthegame!”

Ashleycried.

Wehurriedbacktothenewsroom,

agreeingtorunthephotoonthefrontpagewiththeheadline

“Deerfield

StolePerry.”

“Thisisjustthestoryweneed.

Everyonewillreadit,”

Ashleysaidconfidently.試卷續(xù)寫材料呈現(xiàn)Aftersheleft,Itookacloserlookatthephoto.Theclockinthebackgroundread4:15pm,

butourgame

againstDeerfieldhadn’tstarteduntil4:30pm.

WhywouldtheboyhavetakenPerrybeforeweeven

played?

Anuneasyfeelingcameovermethatwemighthavefalselyaccusedsomeone.IwenttoPerry’susualcaretakertoaskifheknewPerrywasmissing.“He’snotmissingHe’sretired.He’sreadyforsomequieterdays,”hesaid.Learningthetruth,IimmediatelytoldAshleyandsuggestedwritingastorytosaygoodbyetoPerry.試卷續(xù)寫要求注意：1.

續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.

請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Tomysurprise,Ashleyinsistedonreportingthe“DeerfieldStolePerry”story.OnThursday,thepapercameoutwiththeheadline“Bye-Bye,Perry”onthefrontpage.段落大意

para6-7:IrevealedthetruthandsuggestedwritingaPerrystory.para1-2:Ashleywasunsatisfiedwiththereportandeagerforabetterone.para3:Perrywasmissing.para4:AphotoshowedaplayerfromDeerfieldmaystealPerry.para5:Wedecidedtoreportthisstory.foreshadowing(伏筆)1.“Our

readershipiswaydown.WeneedbetterstoriesforthisThursday’sschoolnewspaper.(para1)2.“Sportsstoriesarefun,”

shesaid,“butnotgoodenoughforthefrontpage.

Weneedsomethingtoreally

getpeople’sattention.”(para2)3.Perry

wasabigredparrotandhadbeenourschoolmascot

(吉祥物)

fortenyears.

Heplayedanimportantrolein

students’lives,bothinandoutofclass.foreshadowing(伏筆)4.“HemusthavestolenPerrytogetbackatusforwinningthegame!”

Ashleycried.

5.Theclockinthebackgroundread4:15pm,

butourgame

againstDeerfieldhadn’tstarteduntil4:30pm.

foreshadowing(伏筆)theme:character：

seektruth;honesty;agoodstory:touchingandgenuine)Ashley:judgemental、eagerforinsistsuccessI:honest、integrity故事情節(jié)Para1：Tomysurprise,Ashleyinsistedonreportingthe“DeerfieldStolePerry”story.part1：銜接首句人或物（what/why/how)para2:HowwasAshleypersuaded?

para3:銜接Para2的首句

WeworkedtogetherandfinishedPerrystory.

WhydidAshleyinsist?Whatwasmyreactionandfeelings？WhatwasAshley’sreactionandfeelings？WhatwasAshley’sreactionandfeelings？故事情節(jié)Para2:OnThursday,thepapercameoutwiththeheadline“Bye-Bye,Perry”onthefrontpage.Part1:銜接首句人或物（what/why/how)

Whatwasthecontentofstory?Part2:Ourreportdrawgreatattention.

Whatwerestudents’reponses?(heateddiscussion)

Whatwasourfeeling?(relieved,happy)

WhatwasAshley’sreaction?(appologize;praise)Part3:主題升華(seektruth;honesty;

agoodstory:touchingandgenuine)checklist

ItemsPeerevaluationscores(1-5)1.Correcttheme2.321parinciple3.Foreshadowing4.Characterinteraction5.Handwriting作品呈現(xiàn)

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參考范文Paral:"Well,nobodyknowsthetruthanyway,"shecontinuedwithadeterminedtone.Withoutanydelay,Ipulledoutthephotoandpointedattheclockinit,explainingthatitclearlyread4:15pm,whichwasbeforeourgameagainstDeerfield.ThisundeniablepieceofevidencemadeAshleyhesitate,asshestammered,"Butwereallyneedastorylikethistoattractreaders."Atherwords,Ishookmyheadwithdeterminationandstressedtheimportanceofjournalisticintegrityoversensationalism.Followingathoughtfulpause,Ashleyagreed.Andinthefollowingdays,allofourstaffimmersedourselvescompletelyinthetaskofcraftingthestoryaboutPerry.參考范文Para2:OnThursday,thepapercameoutwiththeheadline“Bye-Bye,Perry”onthefrontpage.ThearticledetailedPerry'sdecade-longserviceastheschoolmascotandhissignificantimpactonstudents'livesbothinsideandoutsidetheclassroom.Whattookuscompletelybysurprisewasthat,inaveryshorttime,the