Welcometomyclass!

高三2部楊曉玉

Welcometomyclass!

高三2部楊曉玉Howtomakeyour

writing

better?

讓你的作文起來

“亮”Whatisagoodpieceofwriting?

1.neatwriting書寫2.content內(nèi)容3.structure結(jié)構(gòu)4.language語言GoodfirstimpressionWellorganizedandsmoothlydevelopedEverythingrequiredincludedNoChinglishNoGrammaticalmistakesUsegoodwordsandmoresentencepatterns一，改變句子的開頭方式二，句型轉(zhuǎn)換A.合并為簡(jiǎn)單句把其中一句改為分詞短語把其中一句改為介詞短語B.合并為復(fù)合句三，避免只使用一兩個(gè)句式，要靈活運(yùn)用諸如倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句、主從復(fù)合句、分詞狀語、with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)等.

四，注意使用高級(jí)詞匯代替一些單詞，以增加文采。Task1:Makeyourlanguagebetter一.改變句子的開頭方式，不要一味地都是主語開頭，接著是謂語、賓語，最后再加一個(gè)狀語?？梢园褷钫Z置于句首.2.Theboyisveryhungryandhehurriedhome.Hungry,theboyhurriedhome..Task1:Makeyourlanguagebetter1.Thevolleyballplayerspracticedveryhard

towin

thematch.

Towinthematch,thevolleyballplayerspracticedveryhard.二.Transformationofsentencesinwriting(寫作中的句型轉(zhuǎn)換)A.合并為簡(jiǎn)單句1.把其中一句改為分詞Hehadfinishedsupper.

Hewentouttohaveawalkthen.Havingfinished

supper,hewent

outtohaveawalk.2.把其中一句改為介詞短語Hewasbroughtin.Hishandsweretiedbehindhisback.Hewasbroughtin

hishandstiedbehindhisback.with

B.合并為復(fù)合句1.

TheChineseartistsweretoperformherethatnight.Thenewscheeredeveryoneofus.（同位從）Thenews

thattheChineseartistswereto

performherethatnight

cheered

everyoneofus.2.Inrecentyears,Beijinghasbeenadvancingveryfast.Allthesemakepeople’slivesconvenient,pleasantandcolorful.（非限制定從）

,whichInrecentyears,Beijinghasbeenadvancingveryfast

makespeople’slivesconvenient,pleasant…三.在整篇文章中，避免只使用一兩個(gè)句式，要靈活運(yùn)用以下句型：倒裝句強(qiáng)調(diào)句主從復(fù)合句分詞狀語With復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)...........感嘆句1.Thoughheiswealthy,heworkshard.Wealthyasheis,heworkshard.Inspiteof/Despitehiswealth,

heworkshard.2.Hedidn’tgetupuntil7o’clock.Itwasnotuntil7o’clockthathegotup.Notuntil7o’clockdidhegetup.3.Itisnicetohearfromyouagain.

Hownicetohearfromyouagain!

2.Ihadagoodidea.

Agoodideaoccurredto/struck/cameto/hitme.Icameupwithagoodidea.注意使用詞組、習(xí)語諺語、表強(qiáng)調(diào)的詞來代替一些單詞，以增加文采。

四.use“complicated/advancedwords”

1.I'llthankyouifyouthinkaboutmyapplication．I'llappreciateitifyoucantakemyapplicationintoconsideration.一，改變句子的開頭方式二，句型轉(zhuǎn)換A.合并為簡(jiǎn)單句把其中一句改為分詞短語把其中一句改為介詞短語B.合并為復(fù)合句三，避免只使用一兩個(gè)句式，要靈活運(yùn)用諸如倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句、主從復(fù)合句、分詞狀語、with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)等.

四，注意使用高級(jí)詞匯代替一些單詞，以增加文采。Task1:MakeyourlanguagebetterTask2:Makeyourstructurebetter文章結(jié)構(gòu)1.Inconclusion,weshouldtakeintoaccounttheproblem.(結(jié)論)2.I'magainstsmokingforthefollowingreasons.First,it'sharmfultoone’shealth.Second,

it'sawasteofmoneytobuycigarettes.

Lastbut

notleast,itcausesairpollution.（順序）3.

Inadditiontothebeautifulscenery,touristscanenjoyavarietyofactivities.（遞進(jìn)）2.有效使用

，過渡自然，連貫通順，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。1.通常使用

段式。三連接詞邏輯角度合適的過渡性詞匯時(shí)間順序first，second，then，finally／atlast，immediately，suddenly，soon空間順序here，there，Ononeside，Ontheotherside，infrontof，atthebackof，nextto對(duì)稱關(guān)系Foronething，foranother，Ontheonehand，Ontheotherhand轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系but，however，while，though，otherwise因果關(guān)系because，since，as，thanksto，asaresult(of)條件關(guān)系A(chǔ)slongas，solongas，Onconditionthat，if,unless讓步關(guān)系though，as，evenif／though，whether,who(what，when，where)-ever遞進(jìn)關(guān)系what'smore，besides，tomakemattersworse，what'sworse過渡性插入語Ithink，I'mafraid，youknow，asweallknowA.

Second,twentyyearsago,teenagerslistenedtomusicwithtaperecorders.Differently,todayweusemp3,mp4andevenmp5whichareeasytotake.B.

Anotherchangeisincommunication.Insteadofwritingletters,teenagersnowadayspreferwritinge-mailsorcallingtokeepintouchwithfriends.C.

First,teenagersoftwentyyearsagolearnfromLeiFengandZhangHaidi,whilenowweconsiderBillGatesand…asourrolemodels.

D.

Whatgreatchangestheyare!E.

Greatchangeshavetakenplaceinteenagers’lifeduringthepasttwentyyears.

rightorder:___________________________ECABDExample:國外某網(wǎng)站舉辦新的一輪網(wǎng)上講座活動(dòng)，正面向全球中學(xué)生征集話題。假設(shè)你是新華中學(xué)的學(xué)生李華，經(jīng)常訪問該網(wǎng)站。現(xiàn)請(qǐng)你用英文給該網(wǎng)站發(fā)送一封電子郵件，向其推薦話題。內(nèi)容包括:自我介紹寫信目的話題：我們應(yīng)該感恩（thankful).推薦理由預(yù)?；顒?dòng)成功注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右;2.郵件格式已為你給出；3.郵件出不能出現(xiàn)本人信息；4.在答題卡上作答。

MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarefindingthemesfromstudentsallovertheworld.Now,IwritethisletterbecauseIwanttorecommandatheme.Weshouldbethankfulisagoodtopic.Ourfatherandmotherthrowthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.Ourteachersteachushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead.weshouldthanktothem.asaChinese,weshouldbethankful,becausewherethereisthankful,there’rehopestomaketheworldbetter,andwithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytheme.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveansuccessfulend.Aslookingfortopicsrecommendtopictopicthroughthickandthinthankfulness

分161.MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.2.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.IamLihua,astudentfromXinHuaMiddleschool.Makethesentencesbetter!

Ioftenvisityourwebsite,whereIgotthenewsthatyou’relookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.（同位語）（定從+同位從）1.Weshouldbethankfulisagoodtopic.2.Ourfatherandmotherthroughthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.3.

Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytopic.4.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveasuccessfulend..5.Withathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.6.Now,IwritethisletterbecauseIwanttorecommendtopic.Haveatrytomakethesentencesbetter!ourshowtimeNow,Let’scheckwhetherour

writinghasbeenbetter?

我們的文章亮起來了么？

I’mLihua,astudentfromXinHuaMiddleSchool.Ioftenvisityourwebsite,whereIgotthewonderfulnewsthatyou’relookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.Here,I’mwritingtorecommendone.Inmyopinion,thatweshouldbethankfulisagoodidea.Firstly,itisourparentswhobroughtusupthroughthickandthin,soweshouldthankthem.Besides,weshouldthankourteachers,forwecouldn’tbewhowearenowwithouttheirhardwork.What’smore,thankfulnessisalsoourtraditionalChinesevirtue.Wherethereisthankfulness,therearehopestomaketheworldbetter.Onlywithathankfulheart,canwefullyrealizehowbeautifullifeis.

I’dappreciateitifmytopicwillbechosen.Wishtheactivityagreatsuccess.24-25分TipsinyourdailyEnglishlearning:1.Collectgoodwords/phrases/sentences;2.Readmore;3.Practicemakesperfect;4.Beconfidentanytime.HomeworkHaveatry!

每年12月你們學(xué)校都要舉行為期一個(gè)月的體育節(jié)，在今年體育節(jié)來臨之際，請(qǐng)給學(xué)校體育節(jié)組委寫一封信，表達(dá)你對(duì)體育節(jié)的看法和建議。主要內(nèi)容如下：1推薦至少兩項(xiàng)活動(dòng)；2說明開展這些活動(dòng)的理由；3談?wù)勀銓?duì)體育節(jié)的看法；注意：1詞數(shù)不少于120個(gè)2可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮適當(dāng)想象，增加細(xì)節(jié)，以便行文連貫。writingsteps寫作六部曲step1topicexploring審題step2wording構(gòu)詞step3sentencemaking成句step4essaywriting成篇step5checking修訂step6

copying藤抄HomeworkHaveatry!

每年12月你們學(xué)校都要舉行為期一個(gè)月的體育節(jié)，在今年體育節(jié)來臨之際，請(qǐng)給學(xué)校體育節(jié)組委寫一封信，表達(dá)你