黃皮174讀后續(xù)寫人與社會YOURLOGO匯報人：WPS課前測1.befamiliarwith對...熟悉2.figureout弄清楚，弄明白3.grocerystore雜貨店4.beoccupiedin從事于，忙于5.exhausted筋疲力盡的6.graduatefrom從...畢業(yè)—抬頭并看了直升機，Jane感覺一股強烈的激動用涌上心頭，并涌遍全身。課前測1.befamiliarwith2.figureout3.grocerystore4.beoccupiedin5.exhausted6.graduatefromLookingupandseeingahelicopter,Janefeltagreatsenseofexcitementwellingupinherheartandsurgingthroughher.學(xué)習(xí)目標(biāo)1.了解續(xù)寫故事編寫規(guī)則2.根據(jù)編寫規(guī)則，用中文寫出一篇續(xù)寫任務(wù)清單1.講解續(xù)寫故事編寫規(guī)則2.閱讀文章，得出主要人物2.根據(jù)續(xù)寫每句話編寫規(guī)則，寫出第一段第二段中文續(xù)寫并訂正；故事設(shè)計思路

半限定寫作---“戴著鐐銬跳舞”一、根據(jù)文章首尾段和給出的提示句進行腦補人、環(huán)境、情節(jié)二、選詞要點：人物＞時間地點＞名詞＞形容詞（5個），在寫的時候盡量用上這些詞（可以選一些句子，可模仿句型）三、起草P1

P2之間的內(nèi)容P1①順承提示句，有因必有果（提示句是因，緊接著提示句的是果）②事件描寫，制造懸念（先干什么，沒干成，中間包含積極的或消極的情緒，動作描寫）第一段最后一句起承上啟下作用P2①有因必有果（提示句是因，緊接著提示句的是果）②事件描寫（先干什么，沒干成，中間包含積極的或消極的情緒，動作描寫）第二段最后一句，體現(xiàn)圓滿結(jié)局，體現(xiàn)真善美，升華主旨P1流程圖

半限定寫作---“戴著鐐銬跳舞”順承提示句，從人物動作、心理方面描寫。一般情緒是消極狀態(tài)事件描寫：從嘗試解決問題、矛盾入手?？梢允亲晕夜膭睿部梢允撬藥椭?。事件描寫：從事件發(fā)展上進行描述，一般劇情設(shè)置成矛盾或問題暫緩心理描寫：順承第③句，看到矛盾或問題暫緩，心情比較開心，積極，如釋重負(fù)事件描寫，設(shè)置懸念：（從事件發(fā)展上進行描述，一般設(shè)置劇情又出現(xiàn)失敗或出現(xiàn)新問題）心理描寫：從情感動作上描寫湊字?jǐn)?shù)。（萬能情感描寫，失落，灰心，泄氣）第一句第二句第三句第四句第五句第六句第七句承上啟下：與下文第一句話銜接(承上啟下），可以選第二段提示句中關(guān)鍵詞Ⅳ.讀后續(xù)寫閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)

成一篇完整的短文。（2024·綿陽高二期末）There’s

a

lot

that

goes

into

moving

to

a

new

city.

You’re

house

hunting

in

areas

you

aren’t

familiar

with，

dragging

all

of

your

belongings

around，

trying

to

figure

out

which

grocery

store

keeps

your

favourite

noodles

in

stock，

and

wondering

when

you’ll

ever

find

a

new

dentist.

This

was

exactly

what

I

went

through

when

I

settled

in

Chicago.

Every

day，

I

was

fully

occupied，

exhausted.

I

found

my

new

city

so

big

and

unfriendly.

After

graduating

from

college

in

May，

I

moved

from

the

town

of

Oxford，

Mississippi

to

Chicago

to

start

my

full-time

job.

Typically，

when

I

went

through

lots

of

change

in

my

life，

I

had

consistent

faces

around

me：

my

family

or

my

friends.

This

time，

however，

it

was

just

me.

And

for

someone

who’s

an

introvert

（內(nèi)向的人），

this

was

anything

but

easy.

Besides，

the

job

itself

was

also

something

beyond

my

expectation.

What

I

learnt

in

college

was

totally

different

from

what

I

needed

to

do

in

the

company.

I

worked

longer

hours

to

sort

things

out

and

couldn’t

sleep

well

at

night.

It

was

a

lot

of

change

at

once.

It

was

too

much.

I

was

helpless.

What’s

worse，

my

poor

health

added

to

the

helplessness.

Due

to

days

of

pressure，

I

had

a

physical

problem.

It

seemed

that

I

had

to

go

to

hospital

for

a

thorough

examination.

It

seemed

a

small

challenge

compared

to

the

one

I

was

about

to

face，

but

things

started

to

go

wrong

right

from

the

beginning.

Not

having

a

car

or

knowing

the

city，

I

was

depending

on

a

couple

of

buses

to

get

around.

Although

I’d

left

myself

plenty

of

time，

soon

it

was

obvious

that

I

was

going

to

be

late，

as

I

had

mistakenly

got

on

a

bus

that

was

taking

me

in

the

opposite

direction.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.

請按如下格式作答。

I

had

no

choice

but

to

get

off

the

bus.

Suddenly，

a

car

stopped

in

front

of

me

and

it

was

the

same

woman.

①站在街上，看著成群的車輛和人，我感到非常無助。（有因必有果）②我突然意識到，我應(yīng)該向路人問去醫(yī)院的路（嘗試解決問題）。③幸運的是，就在這時，我看到一位面容和善的女士，便上前問她如何去醫(yī)院。（事件描寫）④聽到她耐心地回答，我感到一股強烈的信心涌上心頭，貫穿全身（危機暫緩，如釋重負(fù)）。⑤然而，當(dāng)我準(zhǔn)備去醫(yī)院時，我發(fā)現(xiàn)自己還是不知道該怎么走（事件又出現(xiàn)失敗）。⑥我又累又害怕，努力尋找方向，試圖不在身體和心理上崩潰（萬能情感描寫，失落）。⑦向后看，如果那位女士能進一步幫助我，我會感覺好很多。（承上啟下）3.萬能句式：Seeing/Hearingsth,sbfeltagreatsenseof+情緒+wellingupinsb’sheartandsurgingthroughsb.看到/聽到sth,sb感到一種強烈的（agreatsenseof）+情緒涌上某人心頭（wellingupinone’sheart）,并且涌遍（surgethrough）全身?！ь^并看了直升機，Jane感覺一股強烈的激動用涌上心頭，并涌遍全身。Lookingupandseeingahelicopter,Janefeltagreatsenseofexcitementwellingupinherheartandsurgingthroughher.一、作+心理描寫1.a.+and+a.assbwas,sbdidsth,doingsth.(盡管又...又...,sb依然做...)盡管又累又怕，她依然掙扎著站起來，努力不讓自己身體和精神都崩潰。Tiredandterrifiedasshewas,Janestruggledtoherfeet,tryingnottohaveabreakdownbothphysicallyandmentally.①Standingonthestreetandseeingthecrowdsofcarsandpeople,Ifeltveryhelpless.②ItsuddenlydawnedonmethatIshouldaskfordirectionstothehospitalfromapasser-by.③Fortunately,atthesametime,Ifoundakind-lookingwomanandapproachedhertoaskhowtogettothehospital.④Hearingheranswerspokenpatiently,Ifeltagreatsenseofconfidencewellingupinmyheartandsurgingthroughme.⑤However,whenIpreparedtogotothehospital,IrealizedthatIstilldidn’tknowhowtogetthere.⑥TiredandterrifiedasIwas,Istruggledtofindthedirection,tryingnottohaveabreakdownbothphysicallyandmentally.⑦Lookingback,ifthewomanhadhelpedmefurther,Iwouldhavefeltbetter.P25-6句話詳細(xì)規(guī)定

半限定寫作---“戴著鐐銬跳舞”順承提示句，從人物動作、心理方面描寫。一般情緒是消極狀態(tài)事件描寫：可以設(shè)置成作者靈機一動，有好的想法出現(xiàn)；可設(shè)置成關(guān)鍵人物出現(xiàn)，幫助解決問題，一般不隨意添加人物事件描寫：從事件發(fā)展上進行描述，一般劇情設(shè)置成矛盾或問題向好的方向發(fā)展事件描寫或心理描寫：承接第③句（可進行事件描寫，或人物情感動作描寫向積極的方向描寫）事件描寫或心理描寫：⑤繼續(xù)進行積極的事件描寫，人物積極的情感動作描寫體現(xiàn)圓滿結(jié)局，體現(xiàn)真善美，升華主旨第一句第二句第三句第四句第五句第六句答題卡上不要空格，用衡水體寫滿①急切又興奮，我揮動我的黃色襯衫，竭盡全力大喊，以便吸引那位女士的注意。②我的心瘋狂地跳動，手心出汗，似乎有一個內(nèi)心的聲音堅定地告訴我，我必須得到那位女士的幫助。③令人驚訝的是，那位女士說她愿意送我去醫(yī)院。④聽到她的話，我顫抖著轉(zhuǎn)向她，眼淚從眼睛里涌出來。⑤隨后，那位女士送我去醫(yī)院，我們成了最好的朋友。⑥那是一個我永遠(yuǎn)不會忘記的難忘日子，從那天起我意識到，沒有什么比幫助他人更好的事了。4.萬能句式：情緒+and+情緒，sbsparednoefforttodo...,soasto....(不遺余力地做某事為了...)_迫切又激動，她揮舞著黃布衫，不遺余力地大喊大叫，為了吸引別人注意。Eagerandexcited,sheflaggedheryellowblouseandsparednoefforttoyellsoastoattractother’sattention.One’sheartpoundingfiercelyandone’spalmsweating,thereseemedtobeaninnervoicetellingsbfirmlythat.......eg:1.His

heartpoundingfiercelyandhispalmsweating,thereseemedtobeaninnervoicetellinghimfirmlythathehadtofinishthetask.（改人稱即可）

他的心瘋狂地跳，并且他的手掌在出汗，似乎有一個內(nèi)心的聲音在堅定地告訴他，他不得不去完成這個任務(wù)。

2.Hearingmywords,heturnedtometremblinglywithtearsspillingoutofhiseyes.(所有主題都可以哭，改人稱即可）聽到我的話，他顫抖地轉(zhuǎn)向我，眼淚從眼睛里撒了出來。3.Suddenlyabrilliantideaflashedintohismind.Hismindbegantorace,tryingtothinkofawayout.（所有主題都可以出現(xiàn)心里聲音，改人稱即可）突然一個明智的聲音山現(xiàn)在了他的大腦里。他的大腦開始極速運轉(zhuǎn)，努力去想出一個方法出來。萬能句補充18.他一閉上眼睛他就睡著了

.themoment銜接詞

一...就eg:Hefeltasleepalmostthemomentheclosedhiseyes.9.們感動的是，老男士含著眼淚想我們揮手告別Whatmovedusmostwasthattheoldmanwavedusgoodbyeintears.10.那是難忘的一天，她將絕不會忘記，從那