十句話搞定讀后續(xù)寫3

十句五定法讀一、讀什么：讀材料（一般是記敘文）＋讀提示句（讀關(guān)鍵詞）。

時(shí)間不夠讀首尾段二、怎么讀：1.找信息——who/where/when/what/why/how2.思考——readforcharacters人物/plot情節(jié)/conflict沖突/emotionalchange情感變化/theme主題3.讀的過程中圈畫關(guān)鍵信息，重要細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容（用以細(xì)節(jié)呼應(yīng)），好的句式（用以仿寫）三、讀完之后要明白：文章主人公是誰，文章主要情節(jié)，待解決的問題，人物情緒變化與文章主題。第二節(jié)(滿分25分)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Therewasanelderlyladystandinginthebone－chillingcoldoutsidethebackofthesupermarket.Shewasholdingabasketwithbunchesofflowers.“WouldyouliketheflowersTheyare$3，”sheaskedmeasIwaswalkingpast.Ipolitelyresponded“No,thankyou”，asIwalkedawayandwentinsidethesupermarket.IwaswalkingaroundthesupermarketsearchingforthethingthatIwasneedingtobuyandthinkingofthatlady,standinginthecoldholdingherbasketofflowers.VisualisingthebeautifulflowersIhadadmired,herpolitequietvoiceandlonelyfigure,Iwonderedaboutherunknownstoryofstandinginthecoldwithherbasket.Maybeherfamilywasinurgentneedofmoney;maybeshewasalonesoultoearnalivingwithherownhands...Ihadmyownpersonalstruggles,IhadtobudgetforeverythingandIappreciatedthat$3wasalotforme,likemanyofusallandprobablyforhertoo.Butitwasn'tmyfirstthoughtwhenshehadaskedmeaboutbuyingherflowers.MyfirstthoughtwasIdidn'thavethecashbutthiscouldn'tbeusedasanexcusefornotbuyingthoseflowers.IhadnotcarriedcashwithmeforafewyearsandIthoughtmanyofusdidthesame.

WhenIwenttotheregistertopaywithmycardIaskedfor$3cashout.Thestaffmemberquestionedmeaboutthe$3.IfeltanxiousaboutitquicklyandtriedtorememberthemoneyIhadinmyaccount.Andatthesametimeshepressedthebuttontoprocessit.IhadmentionedthatIwantedtobuyflowersfromtheladywhowassellingthemoutside.Sighofrelief.Iwasgladtoseeitallhadbeenacceptedbythemachineandthestaffmemberhandedmethe$3.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。

Iwalkedawayandaroundthecornerofthesupermarkettothelady.

Aftergivingher$3,Iwassurprisedwhenshehandedmethechange.

[前文大意]本文以人物為線索，講述了作者在去超市買東西時(shí)，遇見一位賣花的老婦人。在她向作者售賣這些花時(shí)，作者拒絕了她。后來在購(gòu)物期間，作者的腦海中一直浮現(xiàn)著這個(gè)賣花老婦人的形象，想著她可能遇到了生活中的困難或者是一位靠賣花來生活的孤獨(dú)老人。于是，作者在收銀臺(tái)換了3美元。[續(xù)寫思路]1．段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我走開了，在超市的拐角處，走向那位女士”可知，接下來可描述作者當(dāng)時(shí)看到這位女士的情景，以及作者決定買下她的花。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“給了她3美元后，她把零錢給我的時(shí)候，我很驚訝”可知，接下來可描寫作者詢問她這樣做的原因以及作者的感悟。2．續(xù)寫線索：走向女士——看到她的情形——作者的愧疚——決定買花——給錢，但她少收了錢——詢問原因——作者的感悟十句五定法paragraph11銜接para1提示句（接著para1首句往下寫）2345銜接para2提示句（根據(jù)para2首句倒推寫）paragraph26銜接para2提示句（接著para2首句往下寫）789

結(jié)尾（正能量）10

升華主題寫剩余五句補(bǔ)齊細(xì)節(jié)情緒動(dòng)作心理語言環(huán)境描寫Para1.Para2.定

句1:銜接提示句--心理/動(dòng)作鏈定句6:銜接提示句--心理/動(dòng)作鏈句2:句7:句3:句8：句4:定句9:緊貼原文，交代結(jié)局定句5:過渡到P2首句定句10:點(diǎn)睛兩段十句五定法的思路其中第一段中的句1與句5，第二段中的句1，句4和句5共五句話基本是固定的，其他的句子安排根據(jù)具體情況可作輕微調(diào)整。para1：Iwalkedawayandaroundthecornerofthesupermarkettothelady.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________para2:Aftergivingher$3,Iwassurprisedwhenshehandedmethechange.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

接下來可描述作者當(dāng)時(shí)看到這位女士的情景，以及作者決定買下她的花。接下來可描寫作者詢問她這樣做的原因以及作者的感悟。我走開了，在超市的拐角處，走向那位女士。給了她3美元后，她把零錢給我的時(shí)候，我很驚訝。第一句話：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第二句話：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________接上句“走向那位女士”，人還在嗎？花賣完了嗎？呼應(yīng)文中的“天冷thebone-chillingcold”，描寫那位女士的狀態(tài)She

wasstillstandingwhereIoncemether,holdingthebasketofflowers.十句五定法：Thewindwasblowingheavilyandhercheeksnowwereredbecauseofthechillywind.第三句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第四句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“我”接下來的舉動(dòng)（買花）Atthemoment,ImadeupmindandcameuptoherandtoldherthatIwouldbuytheflowers.我的心理感受（突出“有點(diǎn)后悔”）Somehow,Ifeltabitashamedofnotbuyingtheflowersbeforehand.第五句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第六句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________她看見有人買花后的反應(yīng)，以及銜接下一句出現(xiàn)的money。Feelingexcited,shehandedmetheflowerspolitely,andIreachedmypocket,givingherthemoney.接上句“surprisedtoseethechange”,詢問是否找錯(cuò)零錢。I

askedifshehadmadeamistake.Asimpleword“No”wasanswered.第七句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第八句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________她的解釋。突出“只有我”買了她的花，銜接下一句她的舉動(dòng)。Shetoldmeshehadstoodhereforalmostalldaysellingtheflowersasherhusbandwsabadlyill.Noonewantedtogiveherthesympathytobuytheflowers.ItwasonlyIthathelpedherandboughtherflowers.第九句話：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第十句話：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________她很感激，因此給我打了個(gè)折扣。我的感悟。（“升華主題”）Shewasverygratefulanddecidedtogivemeadiscount.

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thatmoment,Irealisedthatevenasmallkindnesscanalsomakeabidifference.step1認(rèn)真剖析首句，構(gòu)思段落內(nèi)容step2十句五定法

展開劇情para1para2考慮與上下文的融洽銜接和續(xù)寫第二段開頭語的呼應(yīng)和銜接關(guān)注與文章開頭的遙相呼應(yīng)根據(jù)具體語境弘揚(yáng)感情的真、人性的善或拼搏的美第1句：接著para1首句(心理/動(dòng)作鏈）第5句：根據(jù)para2首句第6句：接著para2首句(心理/動(dòng)作鏈）第9句：結(jié)局第10句：升華總結(jié)：step1讀原文，梳理信息，3-5分鐘step2構(gòu)思、初稿（十句五定法），10-15分鐘step3補(bǔ)充細(xì)節(jié)，寫剩下五句，潤(rùn)色，定稿，10-15分鐘step4謄寫到答題卡上，5分鐘[參考范文]I

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