第四講續(xù)寫銜接、點(diǎn)題一、寫好四句，3句銜接與主旨升華1．四個(gè)順暢呼應(yīng)，進(jìn)行有效銜接(1)續(xù)寫首句與給出的首段首句的銜接；(2)續(xù)寫首段尾句與給出的次段首句的銜接；(3)給出的次段首句與續(xù)寫次段首句的銜接；(4)文章結(jié)尾升華與文章主題意義的銜接。2．圍繞“真善美”，傳遞正能量續(xù)寫故事的內(nèi)容一定要傳遞正能量，圍繞“真善美”的大主題設(shè)計(jì)情節(jié)，弘揚(yáng)社會(huì)主義核心價(jià)值觀，因此續(xù)寫結(jié)尾要按此進(jìn)行主旨升華。二、3句銜接語與主旨升華的常用方法和句式1．做好銜接的基本方法(1)提示句的主語繼續(xù)成為續(xù)寫的第一句的主語(2)提示句的某個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞成為一個(gè)新的主語(3)續(xù)寫第一段的最后一句的主語和續(xù)寫第二段的首句主語一致，使得段落連貫一致[點(diǎn)撥]根據(jù)情況以上規(guī)則可以靈活變通，如續(xù)寫第二段的首句主語一致可以作為續(xù)寫第一段的最后一句的賓語。但無論如何要保持語義連貫一致。2．銜接過渡語的常用句式(1)形容詞(短語)作狀語Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Anxiousandfullofexpectation,hetookthepopcornaroundtothehousesandbegantosellhispopcorn.一切準(zhǔn)備就緒后，伯納德開始著手他的新生意。既焦慮又滿懷期待，他拿著爆米花挨家挨戶地開始售賣。(2)非謂語動(dòng)詞作狀語(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxiety，Ifeltsad,decidingtotalksomethingwithhim.我們緊挨著坐了下來，但大衛(wèi)不愿看我。看著他那充滿焦慮的臉，我感到很難過，決定和他說點(diǎn)什么。(3)倒裝句銜接Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Innotimedidtheirfatherseemtounderstandexactlywhathadhappenedandwhattodonext.當(dāng)雙胞胎失望地環(huán)顧四周時(shí)，他們的父親出現(xiàn)了。他們的父親似乎很快就明白了到底發(fā)生了什么事，下一步該怎么辦。(4)介詞短語或副詞作狀語銜接(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Muchtomysurprise/Surprisingly,Ibeatalotofparticipantsandwonthefirstprize.幾個(gè)星期后，當(dāng)我?guī)缀跬洷荣惖臅r(shí)候，傳來了消息。令我吃驚的是，我打敗了很多參賽者，獲得了第一名。(5)對(duì)話或者獨(dú)白銜接(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.“Congratulations!Youreffortspaidoff！”saidhesmilingly.頒獎(jiǎng)典禮結(jié)束后，我去了老師的辦公室?！白ＹR你！你的努力得到了回報(bào)！”他微笑著說。(6)狀語從句銜接(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.TheminuteIsteppedin,helaughedoutloudagainashashadbefore,andsaid“Congratulations！”頒獎(jiǎng)典禮結(jié)束后，我去了老師的辦公室。我一進(jìn)門，他又像以前一樣大笑起來，說“祝賀你！”3．主旨升華的常用方法和句式6種主旨升華的方法(1)名言結(jié)尾法需要注意的是：不可生搬硬套名言警句，一定要具體文本，具體分析。①(2022·1月浙江卷)Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpersonscantravelfarther.正如俗話說，一個(gè)人可以走得很遠(yuǎn)，但一群人可以走得更遠(yuǎn)。②Justasthesayingputs，“Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.”NowIcouldn'tagreemore.正如俗話所說，“有志者，事竟成?！爆F(xiàn)在我完全同意。(2)情感升華法Seeingthejavelin，Ifeltasifithadbeenencouragingmeandsaying，“You'vefoundyourtalentandI'vefoundyou.”看到標(biāo)槍，我覺得它好像在鼓勵(lì)我，并說，“你找到了你的天賦，我找到了你。”(3)運(yùn)用修辭法①Iquicklytookoutthecameraandphotographedtherarescene—wewererobbedbyapolarbear.我迅速拿出相機(jī)，拍下了這一罕見的場(chǎng)景——我們被一只北極熊搶劫了。②Thataffectiontowardsourfamilyislikeatouchofgreentea,refreshingandheartwarming.那份對(duì)我們家人的感情像一杯清茶，沁人心脾，溫暖人心。(4)首尾呼應(yīng)法①AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.一天，在亞瑟上班的路上發(fā)生了一件有趣的事情。②Whatafunnyday!Arthurcouldn'tstoplaughingwheneverhelookedbackonthishappyexperience.多么有趣的一天??！每當(dāng)亞瑟想起這次歡樂的經(jīng)歷，他就忍不住笑個(gè)不停。(5)感悟體會(huì)法①(2024·濰坊市五縣市高三10月統(tǒng)考)Fromtheexperience，Iwasfullyawareoftheresponsibilityandgreatvalueasadoctor,which,therefore,inspiredmetocontinuetopursuemydream.從這些經(jīng)驗(yàn)中，我充分意識(shí)到作為一名醫(yī)生的責(zé)任和巨大的價(jià)值，因此，這激發(fā)了我繼續(xù)追求我的夢(mèng)想。②Iheldthepaperbagtightly,tearsrollingdownwithoutcontrol.Itislovethatmakestheworldgoaround,whichIfeltdeepinmyheart.我緊緊地握著紙袋，眼淚禁不住流了下來。正是愛讓這世界轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng)，在我心里深深感受到了這一點(diǎn)。(6)畫面定格法①Thechildrensaidloudly，“HappyMother'sDay！”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.孩子們大聲說：“母親節(jié)快樂！”媽媽緊緊地?fù)肀е麄?，一次又一次地吻著他們。②Intheevening,Dadcameback.IproudlytookoutmyownmoneyandhandedittoDad.那天晚上，爸爸回來了。我驕傲地拿出了我自己的錢，遞給了爸爸。5種常用句式(1)only引起的倒裝句①OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasbraverythatcanconquerwhateverdifficultycameintheway.直到那時(shí)我才意識(shí)到，正是勇敢才能克服前進(jìn)道路上的一切困難。②Onlywhenweopenupthedoorofourheartcanwebebathedinthebrilliantsunshineandenjoythewarmthoflove.只有當(dāng)我們打開心門，我們才能沐浴在燦爛的陽(yáng)光下享受愛的溫暖。(2)強(qiáng)調(diào)句型Itwasasimpleknotandanunderstandingheartthatsavedmefromtheawkwardsituation.正是這一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的繩結(jié)和一顆善解人意的心將我從尷尬中拯救出來。(3)Fromthenon＋表行動(dòng)的句子①Fromthenon，Imadeupmymindtopasson“l(fā)ove”toothers.從那以后，我下定決心向別人傳遞“愛”。②Fromthatdayon,everytimeImeetsomeonewhoneedshelp，Ialwaysreachouttothem,hopingtopassonthekindnessthatMexicanfamilyofferedme.從那天起，每當(dāng)我遇到需要幫助的人，我總是伸出手去幫助他們，希望把墨西哥家庭給予我的善良傳遞下去。(4)Sometimes＋表感悟類的句子①Sometimes，amomentofkindnesscouldmeansomuchtoanother,andthatasimpleactcouldmaketheworldsomuchbetter.有時(shí)候，那一刻的善良對(duì)另一個(gè)人來說意義重大，而一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的行為可以使世界變得如此美好。②Sometimesasmallactofkindnessmaybepowerfulenoughtomakeahugedifference.有時(shí)候一個(gè)小小的善舉可能會(huì)產(chǎn)生巨大的影響。(5)綜合型組合公式：結(jié)果＋難忘的經(jīng)歷＋體悟Ithoughtaboutwhathadjusthappened.WhatIwaseagertoutterwasthatitwassuchanexceedinglymemorableexperiencethatIwouldneverforget.我想了想剛才發(fā)生的事。我急切想說的是，這是一次極其難忘的經(jīng)歷，我永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)忘記?！镜淅痉丁块喿x下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass(超過)anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather，Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone(長(zhǎng)號(hào))．ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.Athome,mydadsaid，“Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119—mydadwantedtotalktome.IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.【范文賞讀】WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119—mydadwantedtotalktome.Obviously(副詞作狀語銜接),mydadwouldtrytopersuademetocontributeallmyearning.It'sneverfair.Ithoughtinmymindhopelessly,grabbingthemoneytightlyinmysweatingfist.Afteralongsilence,hedidn'taskasexpected,instead,hegentlysaid“Howdoyouplantospendthemoneyfromthefarmer？”Withoutanyhesitation,thefollowingwordspoppedout，“TherearemanythingsIwanted,suchasanewfootball，aba