基礎(chǔ)（詞句文）02如何描寫人物動(dòng)作和神情（讀后續(xù)寫講義）讀后續(xù)寫微技能定位讀后續(xù)寫微技能定位一、人物動(dòng)作與神情描寫基本概念1.定位讀后續(xù)寫中人物不可或缺，而人物的動(dòng)作與神情描寫更是尤其重要。人物的動(dòng)作與神情是人物內(nèi)在情感的外顯，它能推動(dòng)故事情節(jié)、揭示人物心理狀態(tài)并且增強(qiáng)故事的畫面感。精準(zhǔn)的人物動(dòng)作和恰當(dāng)?shù)轿坏纳袂槊鑼懣墒棺x者“看見”人物情緒，想人物之所想，急人物之所急，使后文續(xù)寫情節(jié)更加連貫（如緊張時(shí)咬唇），避免直接陳述（如"Hewasnervous"），讓續(xù)寫更符合前文人設(shè)且富有感染力。2.區(qū)分人物動(dòng)作和神情的基礎(chǔ)描寫是指我們直接直述動(dòng)作，修飾較少（例：Shenodded.Hesighed.）人物動(dòng)作和神情的進(jìn)階描寫：多個(gè)連貫動(dòng)作銜接恰當(dāng)，還可融合環(huán)境、細(xì)節(jié)強(qiáng)化、比喻、夸張等情感層次（例：Herfingerstrembledasshereachedfortheletter,thepapercrinklinglikeautumnleavesunderhertouch—astarkcontrasttoherforcedsmile.）3.技巧講解：讓動(dòng)作更生動(dòng)技巧維度例句Translation1.

動(dòng)態(tài)連貫（動(dòng)作鏈）他猛地站起身，撞翻了椅子，大步流星沖向門口，手剛碰到把手又猛地縮回。Hesprangtohisfeet,knockingoverthechair,andrushedtowardsthedoor.Hishandreachedforthehandlebutjerkedbackabruptly.2.

細(xì)節(jié)強(qiáng)化（精準(zhǔn)動(dòng)詞+伴隨態(tài)）她攥緊書包帶，指節(jié)泛白，腳步卻不自覺往教室角落挪。Sheclutchedthestrapofherschoolbag,herknucklesturningwhite,andunconsciouslyedgedtowardsthecorneroftheclassroom.3.

環(huán)境互動(dòng)（動(dòng)作+場(chǎng)景呼應(yīng)）他跺了跺腳，踩碎腳下的枯葉，沙沙聲里混著急促的喘息。Hestampedhisfoot,crushingthedeadleavesbeneathhim,therustlingsoundminglingwithhisrapidbreathing.讓神情活起來1.

五官聯(lián)動(dòng)（眼/眉/唇協(xié)同）她眉心擰成個(gè)“川”字，眼瞼低垂，嘴唇緊緊抿成一道線。Hereyebrowsknittedintoafrown,hereyelidsdrooped,andherlipswerepressedtightlyintoathinline.2.

動(dòng)態(tài)變化（神情的“起承轉(zhuǎn)”）他的笑剛在嘴角綻開，就猛地僵住，眼神里的光像被掐滅的燭火。Thesmilehadjustspreadacrosshislipswhenitfrozeabruptly,thelightinhiseyesdimminglikeasnuffedcandle.3.

隱喻聯(lián)想（神情+意象類比）他眼里像是燃著兩簇野火，灼灼地?zé)驅(qū)Ψ?，睫毛卻止不住地抖。Thereseemedtobetwowildfiresblazinginhiseyes,scorchingtowardstheotherperson,yethiseyelashestrembleduncontrollably.二、晨讀素材必背單詞1.headv.前往2.kissv.親吻3.raisev.舉起；使升高4.nodv.點(diǎn)頭5.smellv.聞，嗅6.waterv.流口水7.standup站起身8.walkgracefully步態(tài)優(yōu)美地走9.walkacrossthefields穿過田野10.jumptoone’sfeet一躍而起11.listenimpatiently不耐煩地聽12.pacebackandforth來回踱步13.walkacrossastreet步行穿過馬路14.walkarminarm挽臂而行15.walkthroughthepouringrain在傾盆大雨中走16.wanderintothewoods漫步向森林走去17.wanderoverthecountryside在鄉(xiāng)間漫步18.singone’sownpraise自吹自擂19.bearalltheblame承擔(dān)全部責(zé)任20.breakintoshoutsofapplause爆發(fā)出陣陣喝彩聲三、晨讀素材佳句賞析（選自各版本課本內(nèi)容）1.Shetiptoedintotheroomandwhisperedtome,“IlookedateveryplantandIknowIgotthebestone!”（她踮著腳走進(jìn)房間，輕聲對(duì)我說：“我看過每一株植物，我知道我選到了最好的那株?。?.Withbutterfliesinmystomach,Ibreatheddeeply.“Hi,I’mMengHao.”（心里像揣了只小鹿，我深吸一口氣：“你好，我是孟浩?！保?.Davidwasbannedfromtakingpartinthecrosscountryrunandheloweredhishead,withtearsofsadnesswellingupinhiseyes.（大衛(wèi)被禁止參加越野跑，他低下頭，悲傷的淚水在眼眶里打轉(zhuǎn)。）4.Theyoungman'seyesgleamedwithreliefandjoyatthenews.（聽到這個(gè)消息，年輕人的眼中閃爍著寬慰與喜悅的光芒。）5.Shepretendedtobehappybeforeherparentsasifnothinghadhappened.（在父母面前，她裝作一副開心的樣子，仿佛什么都沒發(fā)生。）6.Hefrozeinplace,thesmilefadingfromhislips.Hisfaceturnedpale,andhetrembledfromheadtotoe.（他僵在原地，笑容從唇邊褪去，臉變得慘白，渾身止不住地顫抖。）7.Shestoodbythewindow,joyfullyandpatientlywatching.Goldensunlightdancedinherlonghairandthechildren'slaughterfloatedintheair.（她站在窗邊，歡快又耐心地望著。金色的陽(yáng)光在她的長(zhǎng)發(fā)間跳躍，孩子們的笑聲飄蕩在空中。）8.Hepushedthedooropenforcefully,strodeintothehouse,grabbedthehatonthetable,turnedaroundhurriedly,andrushedoutlikethewind.（他用力推開門，大步邁進(jìn)屋里，抓起桌上的帽子，匆匆轉(zhuǎn)身，風(fēng)一般沖了出去。）9.ZhangYueputherhandsbehindherbacktohidethattheywereshaking.Shecouldn’t,however,hidethelineofsweatrunningdownherforehead.（張悅把雙手背在身后，想掩飾它們的顫抖，卻遮不住額頭滑落的那道汗。）10.Hetorehiseyesawayfromhismother’sface,whispered,“I’lleback.”andhurriedfromtheroom.（他把目光從母親臉上挪開，輕聲說：“我會(huì)回來的?！比缓蟠掖译x開了房間。）測(cè)試反饋：分級(jí)測(cè)試步步為贏測(cè)試反饋：分級(jí)測(cè)試步步為贏一、晚練高頻語(yǔ)塊漢譯英1.v.前往2.v.親吻3.v.舉起；使升高4.v.點(diǎn)頭5.v.聞，嗅6.流口水7.站起身8.步態(tài)優(yōu)美地走9.穿過田野10.一躍而起11.不耐煩地聽12.來回踱步13.步行穿過馬路14.挽臂而行15.在傾盆大雨中走16.漫步向森林走去17.在鄉(xiāng)間漫步18.自吹自擂19.承擔(dān)全部責(zé)任20.爆發(fā)出陣陣喝彩聲二、晚練佳句賞析漢譯英1.

她踮著腳走進(jìn)房間，輕聲對(duì)我說。(tiptoe;whisper)2.他低下頭，悲傷的淚水在眼眶里打轉(zhuǎn)。(low)3.她緊咬嘴唇，眼睛不安地來回轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng)。（bite）4.他攥緊拳頭，死死盯著地上的裂縫。（clench）5.李瑤猛地捂住嘴，眼睛瞪得滾圓，腳步不自覺地往后退。（cover）6.男孩撓了撓頭，眼神躲閃，支支吾吾地說不出完整的話。（scratch;avoid；stammer）7.她把臉埋進(jìn)臂彎里，腳尖不安地蹭著地面。（bury;rub蹭）8.老人瞇起眼睛，微微前傾身子，全神貫注地聽對(duì)方講話。（narrow使變窄;leanforward）9.他拖著沉重的步伐，肩膀耷拉著，眼皮不住地打架。（drag;slump耷拉）10.聽到這個(gè)消息，年輕人的眼中閃爍著寬慰與喜悅的光芒。（gleam）仿寫實(shí)戰(zhàn)：模仿借鑒學(xué)以致用仿寫實(shí)戰(zhàn)：模仿借鑒學(xué)以致用一、讀后續(xù)寫情景運(yùn)用—單句1.聞到食物的香味，我開始流口水了。Mymouth______whenIsmelledthefood.2.她張開嘴要說什么。She______tosaysomething.3.她拉住孩子的手幫著他爬上臺(tái)階。Shetookthechild'shandand________________________.4.他們手拉手沿著小路走。They__________________alongthepath.5.他直起身子，目瞪口呆地看著我。Hestraightenedupandlookedatme,______.二、讀后續(xù)寫情景運(yùn)用—小情景小段落閱讀所給首句，在了解首句所設(shè)定的情境后，用一句話進(jìn)行與動(dòng)作與神情描寫相關(guān)的主題續(xù)寫。1.

[校園安慰?共情溫暖]Whenherdeskmateburstintotearsafterseeingthefailedexampaper,shefrozeforasecond.2.

[家庭驚喜?感動(dòng)意外]Asheopenedthefrontdooronhisbirthday,thelightssuddenlywentonandcheersexploded.3.

[街頭助人?熱心主動(dòng)]Onthestreet,shespottedanoldmanstrugglingtocarryaheavybagofgroceries.4.

[舞臺(tái)表演?緊張突破]Backstage,hishandsweresweatingandhiskneesknockedtogetherasthehostcalledhisname.5.

[雨天避雨?溫柔憐憫]Waitingatthebusstopintherain,shenoticedasoakedstraydoghuddlingunderabicycle.6.

[圖書館認(rèn)錯(cuò)?尷尬窘迫]Inthelibrary,hereachedforabookontheshelf,onlytofindanotherhandgraspingitatthesametime.三、讀后續(xù)寫情景運(yùn)用—語(yǔ)篇1.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Myfatheraskedmetochatwithhimforawhile.Actually,wasunwillingtolistentohistalkingendlesslyasalwaysdid.Myfatherwasalawyer,butIneverwantedtogotolawschoolorfollowhispaththroughlife.Er...What...d,heclearedhisthroatandstartedtosay,"Er...What...Whatdoyoureallywanttodointhegorgeousfuture?"Iwassilentforamomentplayingwiththecellphone.Ikeptthinking,"ShouldItellhimmytruethoughts?Whatifhegetsangry?WhatifIlethimdown?"LaterIreplied,"Well,Iwanttobeawriter."Iguessedthismaybenottheanswerhewouldexpect.Butansweredsurprisingly,"Interestingidea!"Iwasshocked,speakinginalowvoicewithhesitation(猶豫)."Areyouserious,Dad?""Well,youneedconfidenceandgoodpreparations,andyoustillhaveplentyoftime.Youneedtofindoutwhatyoureallyenjoynow.Look,it'slate.Let'staketheboatouttomorrowmorning,justyouandme.Maybewecancatchsomecrabsfordinner,andwecantalkmore."Earlynextmorningwepackeduptheequipmentandsetoffalongthecoast.Wedidn'ttalkmuch,butenjoyedthesoundoftheseabirdsandthesightofthecoastline.Therewerenobigwavesandbrightsunlightatthattime."Let'sseeifwearelucky,"hesaid,andpickedupacagewitharopetiedtoitandthrewitintothesea.Wewaitedawhile,thenmyfatherstoodupandsaid,"Givemeahandwiththis."Thenwepulledupthecrabcageontothedeck(甲板).Toourjoy,thecagewasfilledwithdozensofsoftshellcrabs.Squatting(蹲）down,wewatchedthemforamoment.Atfirsttheyfoughtagainsteachothertoclimbouthard,tryingtoescape(逃跑).Manywerepulledbackintothecage.Later,somegaveup,buttherewerestillsomecrabstryingtoescapeagainandagain.Atthatmoment,myfatherpointedtothecage,"Lookatthatcrabthere!"______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Fromthatdayon,Iwasdeterminedtomakemydreametrue.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【考查目標(biāo)】主題語(yǔ)境為“人與自我”，涉及“個(gè)人未來規(guī)劃”、“親子關(guān)系”等內(nèi)涵意義。要求考生在閱讀的基礎(chǔ)上，發(fā)揮合理想象，續(xù)寫兩段文字，以使故事完整、情節(jié)合理、銜接有序和語(yǔ)言生動(dòng)?！疚谋局髦肌勘疚囊匀宋餅榫€索展開，講述了作者不愿跟隨自己的父親做一名律師，于是大膽提出了自己想做作家的想法，結(jié)果父親竟然意外同意了。隨后作者跟隨父親