Unit1ScienceandScientists單元寫(xiě)作深度指導(dǎo)（人教版2019）

（讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)）

三年考情（20222024）解題技巧

1.從原文中整理出3?5個(gè)小的情節(jié)，從中推理出續(xù)寫(xiě)的主要情節(jié)。情節(jié)不能

自己讀后憑空想象，要合理推理。

2.根據(jù)兩個(gè)段首語(yǔ)來(lái)推理情節(jié)。段首語(yǔ)往往決定著一整段話的走向，要銜接

2024：新高考I卷&H卷：自然、順暢、合理。

人與社會(huì)（打車(chē)費(fèi)）3.根據(jù)關(guān)鍵詞來(lái)推理情節(jié)發(fā)展。原文中關(guān)鍵詞一般會(huì)在十個(gè)左右，也并不是

浙江1月：人與自我（校都能用上。有一部分關(guān)鍵詞對(duì)于預(yù)刎下面的情節(jié)是有導(dǎo)向意義的，因而可以用

園話題）在續(xù)寫(xiě)之中。關(guān)鍵詞中，有關(guān)于情感的連接的，有關(guān)于時(shí)間的指向的，有關(guān)

2023新高考I卷&II卷：人鍵句線索反復(fù)出現(xiàn)的。同學(xué)們要注意的是：前面的伏筆后面是否有所體現(xiàn)，前

與自我（老師幫助作者培養(yǎng)文的人物關(guān)系是否把握，以及把握后是否在續(xù)寫(xiě)中使矛盾凸現(xiàn)進(jìn)而解決，這些

寫(xiě)作興趣）都是決定分?jǐn)?shù)高低的因素。一般答案是可以體現(xiàn)這些伏筆與連接的，如果嚴(yán)

2022新高考I卷&H卷；重偏題，首先要考慮是否讀懂文章，其次，杜絕天馬行空的續(xù)寫(xiě)，需要回歸文

人與自我（鼓勵(lì)殘疾學(xué)生參本，不需要與標(biāo)準(zhǔn)答案一致，但要體現(xiàn)前文的伏筆、線索、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系，這方面

加越野賽跑）考查的是理解能力與閱讀預(yù)判能力，需多練習(xí)加以提升。

浙江1月：人與自我（與4.根據(jù)故事需要，合理地豐富、有條理地增加一時(shí)次要的情節(jié)。比如人物的

隊(duì)友互助完成任務(wù)）表情、動(dòng)作、心理活動(dòng)等細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)。

浙江6月：人與社會(huì)5.根據(jù)生活常設(shè)或者社會(huì)經(jīng)驗(yàn)，豐富文章的細(xì)節(jié)。不可鬧出不合常理的笑話，

（參加社區(qū)服務(wù)）成為改卷老師緊張改卷期間的談資。

6.平時(shí)多練習(xí)續(xù)寫(xiě)微作文，找到自己所能掌控的語(yǔ)句長(zhǎng)度。7句*20詞=140

詞，8句*20詞=160詞，10句*15詞=150詞。其實(shí)續(xù)寫(xiě)并不是很可怕，一篇

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)1（）?15句，就可以達(dá)到字?jǐn)?shù)。然后分開(kāi)兩段，每段也就5?8句話。

7.多種句型反復(fù)練習(xí)、嘗試，找到自己能夠駕馭的句子類(lèi)型。這樣的好句可

以加分不少。簡(jiǎn)單句、并列句、復(fù)合句。當(dāng)然建議復(fù)合句也只是基礎(chǔ)的復(fù)合句，

無(wú)需過(guò)于復(fù)雜，有時(shí)候牽強(qiáng)用上反而礙事。

8.平時(shí)注意多積累記敘文、故事方面的詞匯、句型和句段，豐富自己的記敘文

類(lèi)英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言的語(yǔ)料庫(kù)?？荚囍杏贸龅氐赖挠⒄Z(yǔ)句子，老師一定會(huì)很欣賞。腦

中先成文，落筆就一氣呵成。相對(duì)簡(jiǎn)單的部分，可以直接書(shū)寫(xiě)在答卷上：重點(diǎn)

部分可以先在草稿紙.上寫(xiě)一下，斟酌一下詞句的使用，然后譽(yù)抄上去。

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一.高頻寫(xiě)作例句

腳部動(dòng)作：

1.ThenLisastoodupandmadeherwaythroughthecrowdtowardme.

2.Lisaplantedherfeetfirmlyinfrontofme.

3.Shemanagedtoclimbontoitandwaitedpatiently.

4.Reubenran/rusheddownWaterStreet,tremblingwithgreatpanic.

5.TheshadowswerelengtheningwhenReubenarrivedatthefactory.

6.Then,clutchingthetincan,heheadedfortheshop.

7.Racinghome,Reubenburstthroughthefrontdoor.

8.Disappointedandfrustrated,thepoormanmadehiswaybacktohisfamily.

9.Suddenly,(hewomanstoodupandenteredthehouseintears.

10.Andyet,theyalljuststood(herestaringatme,motionless.

11.BelleRingernoddedthoughtfully,andFranniehurriedofftov/aitontherestofhertables.

12.Iledthemtowardalargecoinerbooth.Icouldfeeltherestofthestafffollowingbehindaswemarched

throughthediningroom.

13.Idraggedmyselfthroughdailychores,feelingexhausted.

14.Theelderlymanfledawaywithgreatpanic.

15.Themansteppedback/sleppedontotheplatform(otakeagoodlookatthepaintings.

16.Heleapttohisfeetandrushedoutofthelivingroom.

17.Hesprungfromhischairandrushedtopickupthetelephone.

18.Hejumpedupandrushedoutofthelivingroom.

19.Shejustsattherestaringintospace.

20.Thekidssataroundacampfire.

21.Pleaseremainseateduntilyournameiscalled.

22.Heseatedhimselffortablyatthefootofthebed.

23.Hetookhisusualseatatthefrontoftheclassroom.

24.Thatmanishurt.He'slimping.

25.Hewassodrunkthathestaggeredallthewayhome.

26.Shestumbledupstairsandintobed.

27.Shetiptoedtothebedsoasnottowakethebaby.

28.Theystrolledaround(hepark.

29.Theyenjoywanderingthroughthecountryside.

30.Hepacedupanddowntheplatform,waitingforthetrain.

31.Demonstratorsmarchedthroughthestreetsofthecity.

32.Ababycrawlsbeforehecanwalk.

33.Pauldecidedtoedgeawayfromthecrowd.

34.Thecatcreptsilentlytowardsthebird.

35.Theboysneakedinwithoutpaying.

36.ImustdashorI'llmissthetrain.

37.Shegoesjoggingeveryday.

38.Hetrippedoverthestepandfell.

39.Thegrouphikeduptothetopofthehill.

4().AsIwassittinginthepark,1watchedascouplesseemedtomeanderaroundhappily.

手上動(dòng)作：

1.Stunned,1stoodupandgaveheranawkwardhug/huggedherinanawkwardway.

2.Speechless,shesmiledradiantlyandgatheredhersonintoherarms.

3.Theneareritgot.themoreshewavedtheyellowblousewildly.

4.Themantook(hesacks,reachedintohispocketandplacedfourcoinsinReuben'shand.

losttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestaigglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachother

meetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.She

knewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadlime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicine

tothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickin

bed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboyhisnamewas

Bemardhadinterestedherverymuch.

“1wishyoucouldseehim,“shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara."Heissuchahelptohis

mother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,but1don'tseewhathecando.”

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.Twishwecouldhelphimtoearn

money,^^saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”

“SodoI,“saidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!I

haveasolution（hatwecanallhelpacplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone."Itell

youwhatwccando,“saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofccmUncleJohnsentus?Well,wccanmake

popcom（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

精講精析：

本題屬于“問(wèn)題解決型”續(xù)寫(xiě)，即材料文本設(shè)立了一個(gè)“問(wèn)題”，而把“解決問(wèn)題''的方法和過(guò)程作為情節(jié)構(gòu)思的

核心。

文章主旨

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)所給原文的體裁是記敘文，主要涉及五位主人公：Mrs.Meredith,John,Harry,Clara以及Bernardo

在社會(huì)經(jīng)濟(jì)蕭條的大環(huán)境下，Mrs.Meredith一直樂(lè)于助人。她的行為對(duì)她的三個(gè)孩子產(chǎn)生了積極的影響，

在他們的心中播種了愛(ài)和善良的種子。所以當(dāng)她向孩子們介紹Bernard一家的情況時(shí)，三個(gè)孩子非常渴望幫

助這一家人，并且想出了制作爆米花讓Bernard在社區(qū)售賣(mài)的好主意。

文章線索

文章暗藏了兩條線索：一條是明線，即主人公們做了什么，構(gòu)成了短文的情節(jié)發(fā)展；另一條是暗線，即主

人公們的感覺(jué)。明線中，心地善良、樂(lè)于助人的Mrs.Meredith告訴自己的三個(gè)孩子Bernard家的情況，三

個(gè)孩子決定幫助這一家人，兩家人產(chǎn)生交集，交匯點(diǎn)是孩子們的互動(dòng)：即三個(gè)孩子積極思考，想出售賣(mài)爆

米花來(lái)幫助Bernard的辦法。暗線中，Meredith一家人樂(lè)于助人，而B(niǎo)ernard—家人恰好需要替助，雙方最

終都得償所愿，情感自然是激動(dòng)、感激相互交織。

續(xù)寫(xiě)難點(diǎn)

情節(jié)比較簡(jiǎn)單，但想象的空間很大，須設(shè)定波折。一般的處理方法是側(cè)重細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)，心理活動(dòng)與情感描寫(xiě),

平時(shí)需要積累一定量的能表現(xiàn)人物情緒與心理的具體動(dòng)作詞匯。

續(xù)寫(xiě)方向

角度1：將情節(jié)的高潮放在第一段中?？芍孛鑼?xiě)孩子們?nèi)绾蜗敕皆O(shè)法幫助Bernard弄到爆米花機(jī)、如何克

服困難學(xué)習(xí)制作爆米花等情節(jié)，通過(guò)動(dòng)作、語(yǔ)言等描寫(xiě)，來(lái)體現(xiàn)孩子們熱心、聰明、能干的特點(diǎn)，從而在

續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段中，通過(guò)描寫(xiě)B(tài)ernard的爆米花被一搶而空，孩子們非常欣慰等情節(jié)，將文章結(jié)局的主題處理為

“孩子們年紀(jì)雖小，但幫助他人時(shí)的智慧、熱情、能力等，一點(diǎn)也不比大人差”或“孩子們同樣可以為鄰里友

善、互幫互助作出巨大貢獻(xiàn)''等。

角度2:將情節(jié)的高潮放在第二段中?？芍孛鑼?xiě)孩子們?nèi)绾螏椭鶥ernard銷(xiāo)售爆米花，通過(guò)語(yǔ)言、心理等描

寫(xiě)，來(lái)體現(xiàn)孩子們熱心、勤勞、勇于面對(duì)挑戰(zhàn)的特點(diǎn)。此處可設(shè)置一些在銷(xiāo)售過(guò)程中“遇到困難一解決困難

一達(dá)到目的''的情節(jié)，來(lái)表現(xiàn)孩子們通過(guò)幫助他人獲得了成長(zhǎng)，或突出彼此之間的情誼羈絆，將文章結(jié)局的

主題處理為“事在人為”“遠(yuǎn)親不如近鄰”或“與人玫瑰，手留余香”等。

另外，無(wú)論情節(jié)側(cè)重如何，續(xù)寫(xiě)文章都需要有一個(gè)好的結(jié)尾。這種結(jié)尾可以是情節(jié)自然推動(dòng)帶來(lái)的結(jié)尾，

比如可以用Mrs.Meredilh的鼓勵(lì)或者Bernard的感謝與作為結(jié)尾，或者孩子們“相視一笑，感受到助人為

樂(lè)的喜悅，鄰里之情的溫暖''等等作為結(jié)尾。同樣地，我們也可以采用點(diǎn)題或儀論升華的方式結(jié)尾，比如可

以感嘆“助人為樂(lè)不分年齡，重點(diǎn)在于去做”或者“給予是快樂(lè)的”等等。

【答案】WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.So,theywenttothelocal

supermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcornandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.Whentheygothome,they

madealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,theywenttoBernard'shome.Theytold

Bernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.And（heMeredithfamilyalsofeltvery

happytohelpthisfamily.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundtothehousesand

soldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobeselfdependent.Therefore,heaskedMrs.

Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,notonlydidhesellpopcorn,buthealsoaddedcreamand

salt（othepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrewuptobearemarkableman.Hedidnotforgetthehelpof

Meredith'sfamily,andhealsodidwhathecouldtohelpthoseinneed.

【分析】本文是根據(jù)短文進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之成為一個(gè)完整的故事。

【詳解】1.認(rèn)真讀懂所給提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一個(gè)小社區(qū)里，他們想幫助一個(gè)貧困的家庭。

那家的男主人生病臥床，女主人要照顧丈夫、無(wú)法外出賺錢(qián)，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生

活十分困難。后來(lái)，Meredith的孩子想出了一個(gè)主意制作爆米花，讓Bernard去賣(mài)爆米花。

2.根據(jù)所給材料確定文章主題:Meredith如何通過(guò)制作和賣(mài)爆米花幫助Bernard一家擺脫困境的。

3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分和前面的文章銜接得上，并且與原文情節(jié)發(fā)展和人物性格相一致，故事情節(jié)的向后延續(xù)發(fā)展要合

乎情理。

4.根據(jù)第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.（當(dāng)Meredith太太

聽(tīng)到John的主意時(shí)，她也認(rèn)為這是個(gè)好主意）可以針對(duì)如何實(shí)現(xiàn)制作爆米花這個(gè)提議展開(kāi)構(gòu)思；根據(jù)第二段

首句Withever51thingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.（?切準(zhǔn)備就緒后，Bernard開(kāi)始了他的新生

意）可以針對(duì)Bernard如何通過(guò)賣(mài)爆米花讓家庭擺脫困境展開(kāi)構(gòu)思。

5.續(xù)寫(xiě)的語(yǔ)言要盡可能與原文的語(yǔ)言保持風(fēng)格上的一致。文章時(shí)態(tài)以一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主。應(yīng)使用自己熟悉的句

型和短語(yǔ)進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒?jí)句式和高級(jí)詞匯，

以提高書(shū)面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。作文要層次清晰，要點(diǎn)全面，表達(dá)流暢，切合題干要求，句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確,

適當(dāng)補(bǔ)充信息，使篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。

一、翻譯語(yǔ)段

她眉毛粗，眼睛大，聽(tīng)到我的話，驚訝地?fù)P起眉毛。我揚(yáng)起眉毛作為回應(yīng)，

揚(yáng)起眉毛表示我是認(rèn)真的。她垂下眉毛，考慮著我的提議，然后又揚(yáng)起眉毛，表

示同意。我們相視一笑，揚(yáng)起眉毛，期待著接下來(lái)會(huì)發(fā)生什么。

【答案】Withthickeyebrowsandbigeyes,sheraisedhereyebrowsinsurprise

atmywords.Iflickedmyeyebrowsupinresponse,liftingmyeyebrowstoshow

thatIwasserious.Sheloweredhereyebrows,consideringmyoffer,thenflickedher

eyebrowsupagain,indicatingagreement.Wesmiledateachother,oureyebrows

raisedinanticipationofwhatwouldenext.

f點(diǎn)評(píng)］與“眉毛”有關(guān)附迥匯“flickedone'seyebrowsup挑了挑眉書(shū)（得意）,raise

one'seyebrows揚(yáng)起眉毛（高興）,withthickeyebrowsandbigeyes濃眉大眼，lift

one'seyebrows痛起眉毛（憤怒法肅）,lowerone'seyebrows垂下盾毛（不開(kāi)心），等描

述了人物外貌和驚訝、得意、嚴(yán)肅等的心理。與“眉毛''有關(guān)的表達(dá)還有：eyebrows

knittedtogether眉毛擰在一起（不開(kāi)心），knittedhisheavyeyebrows緊縮眉毛,

beneathhisdarkeyebrows在他濃密的眉毛下，等。

二、讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)

1.（2324高二下?內(nèi)蒙古興安盟?期中）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成

一篇完整的短文。

In2018,17yearoldHemeshspentalifechangingsummerwithhisgrandmotherAnne,whohadbeen

diagnosedwithAlzheimer'sdisease.Witnessingtheimpactofthediseasefirsthand,Hemeshwasauakenedtothe

seriousnessofthesituation.

Onenight,Hemeshwalkedirto（hekitchenonlytodiscover（hathisgrandmotherhadleftthegasstove（爐）

onaftermakingtea.ShockedbythedangerousconsequencesAlzheimer'sdiseasecouldbringabout,hecouldn't

helpbutwonderwhatmighthavehappenedifhehadn'tbeenthere.

Hemesh'sworriesincreasedasheobservedhisgrandmother'sbehavior.Shewouldwakeupintheearly

hoursof（hemorning,believingshewasonatrain,andwanderoutsideaimlessly.Thiswanderingtendencycould

potentiallyleadhertogetlostorputherselfinriskysituations.

Determinedtomakeadifference,HemeshengagedhimselfinextensiveresearchaboutAlzheimer'sdisease

anditssymptomatic（癥狀的）progression.Throughhisstudies,hediscoveredthatwanderingwasamonproblem

amongdementiapaiicnis,especiallythosewithAlzheimer'sdisease.

Inspiredbyhisnewfoundknowledgeandfueledbyhisdesiretohelp,Ilcmcshtoldhisfamily,UIcan'tjust

standbyandwatchthishappen.IneedtodosomethingtokeepGrandmasafe.IthinkIhaveanideathatmight

helpnotjusther,butothersinsimilarsituations.^^

Withfirmdetermination,hedevelopedaninventiveanswertothewanderingdilemma,adevicehecalledthe

Guardianpanion.Itwasawearabledevice,similartoasmartwatch,specificallydesignedforAlzheimer'spatients.

ItintegratedadvancedGPStechnologyandapanicbuttontoassistthosewhotendedtowander,ensuringtheir

safetyandwellbeing.Afterthedevicegotitsofficialapproval,Hemeshhappilywenttotryitonforhis

grandmother.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

AsAnneputontheGuardianpanion,Hemeshexplainedhowirworked.

InthenextJewweeks,thedevicemadeadifferencetoAnneandherfamily.

【答案】參考范文:

AsAnneputontheGuardianpanion,Hemeshexplainedhowitworked.Hereassuredherthatitwouldhelp

keephersafe.Withamixtureofcuriosityandskepticism,Anneagreedtogiveitatry.Thedevicefitfortablyonher

wrist.Hemeshwalkedhisgrandmotherthroughthefeatures,showingherhowtousethepanicbutton.Anne,seyes

litupwithaglimmerofhope,andforthefirsttimesinceherdiagnosis,shefeltasenseofregainedindependence.

Inthenextfewweeks,thedevicemadeadifferencetoAnneandherfamily.Notonlydiditprovideasenseof

securityforAnne,butitalsorelievedtheconstantworryforherlovedones.Thedevicebroughtpeaceofmindto

theentirefamily,knowingthatAnnewasprotectedevenwhentheycouldn'tbebyherside.Hcnicsh'screationhad

trulytransformeddementiacare,andhefoundhimselfonanewmissiontomakethedeviceaccessibletoasmany

peopleaspossible,ensuringthatnoonehadtofacethechallengesofAlzheimer'sdiseasealone.

［導(dǎo)語(yǔ)］這是一篇記敘文。文章主要講述了2018年，17歲的Hcmesh和被診斷患有阿爾茨海默病的祖母

Anne度過(guò)了一個(gè)改變?nèi)松南奶?Hemesh親眼目睹了這種疾病對(duì)祖母的影響的嚴(yán)重性，主要表現(xiàn)為“閑蕩工

出于對(duì)于祖母安全的考慮，憑著堅(jiān)定的決心，他發(fā)明了一種可穿戴裝置，類(lèi)似于智能手表，專(zhuān)門(mén)為患有阿

爾茨海默病患者設(shè)計(jì)。通過(guò)該裝置的使用，祖母不僅在人身安全方面得到了保障，也在精神上有了自由保

證。不僅如此，Hemesh希望可以對(duì)該裝置進(jìn)行跟進(jìn)和改善，以適用于更多的患有阿爾茨海默病的人。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“AsAnneputontheGuardianpanion,Hemeshexplainedhowitworked.（當(dāng)Anne戴上“守

護(hù)伴侶”時(shí)，Hcmesh解釋了它是如何工作的。）”可知，第一段可描寫(xiě)Hemesh對(duì)這個(gè)裝置的具體解釋和演示

使用方法。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“Inthenextfewweeks,thedevicemadeadifferencetoAnneandherfamily.（在接下來(lái)的幾

個(gè)星期里，這個(gè)裝置對(duì)Anne和她的家人產(chǎn)生了影響。廠可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)這個(gè)裝置對(duì)于Anne和家人的

具體影響，以及Hemesh的打算。

2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：勸服Anne戴上“守護(hù)伴侶”——解釋功能——點(diǎn)燃希望——“守護(hù)伴侶''給Anne和家人帶來(lái)的枳

極影響Hemesh的打算

3.詞匯激活

行為類(lèi)

①演示/展示：show/display/reveal/present

②提供：provide/offer/give

③帶來(lái)/導(dǎo)致：bring/produce/cause

④知道/了解：know/leamabout/beawareof/makesure

情緒類(lèi)

①希望/信心：withaglimmerofhope/wishfully/hopcfully

②擔(dān)心/焦慮：constantworry/anxiety

［點(diǎn)睛］［高分句型11.NotonlydiditprovideasenseofsecurityforAnne,butitalsorelievedtheconstantworry

forherlovedones.（使用了“Notonly...”置于句首的部分倒裝句式）

［高分句型2］.Thedevicebroughtpeaceofmindtotheentirefamily,knowingthatAnnewasprotectedevenwhen

theycouldn'tbebyherside.（"knowingthatAnnewasprotectedevenwhentheycouldn'tbebyherside”為現(xiàn)在分

詞作狀語(yǔ)，且由at引導(dǎo)從句，作動(dòng)詞“knowing”的賓語(yǔ)從句）

[高分右J型3].Hemesh'screationhadtrulytransformeddementiacare,andhefoundhimselfonanewmissionto

makethedeviceaccessibletoasmanypeopleaspossible,ensuringthatnoonehadtofacethechallengesof

Alzheimer'sdiseasealone.（由and連接前后兩個(gè)并列句;"ensuringthatnoonehadtofacethechallengesof

Alzheimer^diseasealone”為現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)，且that引導(dǎo)從句作動(dòng)詞“ensuring”的賓語(yǔ)從句）

2.（2324高二上.河南洛陽(yáng)?期末）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落的開(kāi)頭續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，便之構(gòu)成一篇

完整的短文。

HenryfinishedrollingcopiesofTheGazette,filledhisbagandtookofftodeliverthenews.

a.m.Mr.Gradya.m.whenhedeliveredthelastnewspaper.HehadputthepaperwhereMr.Gradycouldgetit

withoutstrugglingtothesidewalk.Acrossthestreet,Henry'sdeliveryhadlandedperfectlytoo.Mrs.Burke,with

twinbabies,probablylikedhavingherpaperwithineasyreach.

Henryparkedhisbikeneartheofficebuildingandboundeduplo（heeditorinchiefsdoor.Mr.Trottasaid,

"We'reclosingshop,HemyAdvertisingisdown.Televisionishowpeoplegettheirnewstoday.''

“Um,no,“saidHenry.'Tvemetsomanypeopleonmyroute.It'ssad.Peoplewon'tgettheirneighborhood

newsanymore.**

Mr.Trottanoddedandsighed.uWcheldoutaslongaswccould,"hesaid."Youwereterrific,Henry—always

dcpcndablc.^^

Aweekafterhislastdeliveries,HenrywonderedifhiscustomersmissedTheGazetteasmuchashedid.He

thoughtofawaylofindout.Hestartedoutonhisoldroutewithanotebook.Firststop:Mr.Jonas,17Oak.Mr.

Jonassaidthathelikedreadingtheweek'shappeningsandhehadapileoficsfromoldcopiesofTheGazette.He

wonderedifanyonewouldwantthem.Henrymadeanoteinhisnotebook.

Mrs.Burkesaidsheneededababysitter.ShewasgoingtoputanadinTheGazette,but...

AsHenrymademorenotes,anideastartedforminginhishead.Maybehecouldcreateanewsypageforthe

neighbors.Buthowwouldheprintit?1IewenttothelibraryandexplainedeverythingtoMissGinger,thelibrarian.

“Followme,^^shesaid.Secondslater,infrontofamachine,MissGingerturnedahandleandapurphprintedsheet

rolledout.MWillmimeographed（油印的）copieswork?^^sheasked.

“Perfect.”

Henryhadaplan.

注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

CustomerscheeredHenry'sidea.

Henrytypedthenews,minieographedpurplecopies,anddeliveredthefirstTreeStreetsNewsonSaturday.

【答案】范文

CustomerscheeredHenry'sidea.BesidesMrs.BurkewholongedforababysitterandMr.Simonwhodesired

alargeaudienceforhisconcert,Henryalsocollectedsixotherneighborsappealingandneeds,includingMrGrady

whoyearnedfbrhischildren'singbackfbrashortreunion.Informationinhand,HenryknockedatMr.Trotta's

doorandpleadedfbrhissupportinpublishinghisfirstOakStreetNews,whoapprovedalmostimmediately.Soon,

Henry'stabloidwasincirculation,whichhecheerfullydeliveredfromdoortodoorasbefore.

Henrylypedihenews、mimeographed，urplecopies、anddeliveredihefirslTreeSlreelsNewsonSaturday.

Neighbonsapplaudedtheideaofsharingtheirneedsinamunalnewspaper,whichreallyaddressedtheirimmediate

concerninapracticalandefficientway.AsMrsBurkesuccessfullyfoundanidealbabysitter,MrSimonsecureda

largefollowingforhisconcertandMrGradywhohappilyreunitedwithhiskids.Henryrealized,fromhisdeep

heart,thatTheGazettewasfarfromgoneinthisTVera,buttransformedintoOakStreetNewsthatconnected,

bondedandtiedtheOakneighborsinacoryfabric.

【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了亨利是一個(gè)送報(bào)工，但是隨著電視的流行，報(bào)紙公司快要關(guān)門(mén)了。

這時(shí)亨利想到了創(chuàng)辦第一份《橡樹(shù)街新聞》報(bào)紙，來(lái)刊登鄰居們的需求。不久，亨利的小報(bào)開(kāi)始發(fā)行，他

像以前一樣興高采烈地挨家挨戶(hù)地送報(bào)紙。鄰居們對(duì)在社區(qū)報(bào)紙上分享他們的需求的想法表示歡迎，這確

實(shí)以一種實(shí)用而有效的方式解決了他們最關(guān)心的問(wèn)題。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě):

①由第?段首句內(nèi)容“顧客們?yōu)楹嗬南敕g呼?！?可知，第一段可描寫(xiě)亨利創(chuàng)辦《橡樹(shù)街新聞》報(bào)紙，來(lái)刊

登鄰居們的需求。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“亨利把新聞打了出來(lái)，用油印機(jī)印了紫色的副本，并在星期六發(fā)表了第一份《樹(shù)街新

聞》?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼?xiě)《橡樹(shù)街新聞》報(bào)紙帶來(lái)的良好影響。

2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：為想法歡呼——亨利收集信息——出版《橡樹(shù)街新聞》報(bào)紙——送報(bào)紙——鄰居的需求得到解

決——鄰居聯(lián)系在一起

3.詞匯激活

行為類(lèi)

①收集：collect/gather

②渴望：yeamfor/longfor

③支持：approve/beinfavorof

情緒類(lèi)

①高興地：cheerfully/gladly

②高效的：efficient/effective

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]BesidesMrs.BurkewholongedforababysitterandMr.Simonwhodesiredalargeaudience

forhisconcert,Henryalsocollectedsixotherneighborsappealingandneeds,includingMrGradywhoyearnedfor

hischildren'singbackforashortreunion.（運(yùn)用了who引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句）

[高分句型2]AsMrsBurkesuccessfullyfoundanidealbabysitter,MrSimonsecuredalargefollowingforhis

concertandMrGradywhohappilyreunitedwithhiskids,（運(yùn)用了as引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句和who弓導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從

句）

3.（2324高三上.河南鄭州?階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成

一篇完整的短文。

OurscienceteacheralwaysenjoysgivingoutchallengingassignmentstoourGrade10scienceclass.Unlike

otherteacherswhohandoutpageuponpageoftextbookquestions,Mr.Husseyseemstopreferhavingthestudents

learnsciencethroughamorehandson,doityourselfapproach.

“Today,"saidMr.Hussey,t4everyonewillbemakinganicebox!"'Asvvesatinawe,tryingtoimaginewhatkind

ofdevicehewasreferringto,Mr.Husseyhandedouttheprojectinstructions.Ingroupsoftwo,wewoulddesigna

storage（貯:藏）devicethatwascapableofkeepingitscontentsataconstanttemperatureforacertainperiodoftime,

regardlessof（heoutsidetemperature.Thepetitionwasquitestraightforward：everycon（es（an（wouldreceiveacube

（立方體）ofice.Theteamthathadthebiggestpieceleftthenextdaywouldwin!

Asalways,Ipartneredwithmybestfriend,Vlad.Thatafternoonwewentstraighttothelibrary.Afteran

intensediscussion,weagreedonthebasicideaofhavingtheicecubeinsideabox,whichwouldbeputinside

anotherbiggerbox.Betweenthetwoboxeswouldbetheheatinsulator（絕緣體）.

Thefirsttestoftheiceboxwasextremelydisappointing.Sincethiswasourfirstexperiment,webothwanted

goodresultstobuildourconfidence.BeforeIwenttobedthatnight,Icarefullypickedoutahugeblockoficefrom

ourrefrigeratorandplaceditinsidetheicebox.WhenIwokeupthenextmorningandlookedintotheicebox,there

wasn'tevenabitoficeleft.Reflectingonthisfailure,weweredeterminedtofindabetterinsulatingmaterial.Then

wetriedthesameexperimentagain.Thistime,wemadeit.Therewas70percentoftheiceleft.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Thedayofthepetitioncameveryfast.

Thenextday,everybodyrushedtowardstheseworksofart.

【答案】Onepossibleversion:

Thedavofthepetitioncameveryfasl.Weallbroughtourmasterpiecesintotheclassroom.Everyteamhada

differentdesignfromboxesmadeofdifferentmaterialstoboxesthatoperatedindifferentways.Onefelloweven

attachedamotortohisiceboxandturneditintoarefrigerator.Beforeweleftschool,Mr.Husseygaveeachgroup

anicetubeofthesamesize.Weputthemintheiceboxesthatwereplacedsidebysideonthetable.Thenweleft

forhome,hopingthatwewouldwin.

Thenextday,everybodyrushedtowardstheseworksofart.Weallhopedthattherewouldstillbesomeiceleft.

Somekidssearchedandsearched,andwereevenabouttoteartheiriceboxesapart,butcouldn*tfindanything.

Luckily,itturnedoutthatwedidn'tdotoobadly.Havingalmost60percentoftheicecubestillremaining,wehad

anaboveaverageresult!Thewinnerofthepetition,however,wastheguywhomadeamotorizedrefrigerator.When

weopenedhisicebox,hehadapieceoficethatwas140percentthesizeoftheoriginal!Hisinnovativedesignwas

definitelyacutabovetherest.

【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了科學(xué)老師總是喜歡給10年級(jí)的科學(xué)班布置有挑戰(zhàn)性的作業(yè)，這天

老師要求他們制作一個(gè)冰箱，并且進(jìn)行比賽，比賽很簡(jiǎn)單：每個(gè)參賽者都會(huì)得到一塊冰塊。笫二天剩下最

大一塊的隊(duì)伍將獲勝。于是作者和朋友Vlad搭檔，經(jīng)過(guò)不斷嘗試，他們的比賽結(jié)果高于平均水平，比賽的

獲勝者是制造了電動(dòng)冰箱的人。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容”比賽的日子來(lái)得很快”可知，第一段可描寫(xiě)同學(xué)們進(jìn)行比賽的場(chǎng)面和心情。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“第二天，每個(gè)人都沖向這些藝術(shù)品“可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)同學(xué)們第二天去查看冰的情況

以及作者他們所取得的比賽結(jié)果。

2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：比賽來(lái)臨一不同的設(shè)計(jì)參賽——開(kāi)始比賽——第二天查看結(jié)果——高于平均水平——獲勝者

出類(lèi)拔萃

3.詞匯激活

行為類(lèi)

急忙:rushtowards/iushto

希梟：hope/wish

找到:find/discover

情緒類(lèi)

創(chuàng)新：innovative/creative

出類(lèi)拔萃:aculabovetherest/brilliant

［點(diǎn)睛］［高分句型1］Beforeweleftschool,Mr.Husseygaveeachgroupanicetubeofthesamesize.（運(yùn)用了

before引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句）

［高分句型2］Thenweleftforhome,hopingthatwewouldwin.（運(yùn)用了that引導(dǎo)賓語(yǔ)從句）

C/?真畫(huà)感1

（2023?山東濟(jì)寧?三模）閱讀下面西料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

“Anursinghomewouldbesafer,Dad,"Arlyntoldherfather,Jim.

“Noway/'Jiminterrupted.Hiswifepassedawayjustayearbefore.At91,hestillwantedtoremaininthe

cottageheandhiswifehadbuilt.

JimstartedexperiencinganearlysignofAlzheimer'sdisease.Arlynfoundhisdeclinewasindeed

allconsuming.However,sheherselfwasinherlatesixties;herhousewasa40niinutedrivefromthecottage.One

day,whenshereadaboutaneweldercareservicecalledCare,coach,itfueledherinterest.Forabout$200amonth,

aputerizedavatar（頭像）（controlledremotelybyahumancaregiver）wouldwatchoverahoineboundperson24

hoursaday.Shesignedupimmediately.

Aweeklater,atabletarrived.Followingtheinstructions,Arlynuploadeddozensoffamilypictures.Thenan

animateddogappearedonthescreen.Shepresentedthe（ablettoJim.pointingtothescreenpel,andsaidexcitedly,

“HereDad.Youhaveanewpanion.^^Jim,doubtfulaboutthedog'sservice,knewhehadtolearnhowtogetalong

withthedogbeforeAlzheimer'stookhold.

Withinaweek,Jimandhisdog,whomhenamedPony,settledintoaroutine.Every15minutesorso,Pony

wouldlookfbrJimcallinghisnameifhewasoutofview.SometimesJimwould“pct"toawakethesleepingPony

onscreen.PonyremindedJimwhichcaretakerwouldbevisitingtodothetasks:preparingmeals,drivinghimtoa

seniorcenter,etc.Ponywouldreadpoetryaloudordiscussthenews.WhenPonypraisedJim'ssweater,Jimrepaid

bypettingPony'sscreenwithhisfingersendingheartsfloatingupfromthedog'shead.OneeveningwhenArlyn

cametovisitherfatherasusual,shewasamazedtofindthatPonywasholdingupaphotoofherlatemumcoher

dadbetweenits