微雕動(dòng)作鏈助力讀后續(xù)寫付莉娟contents1Leadin2Dividetheaction3Combineachainofactions.4DivideMrAdler’saction5Modifyandbeautifytheactions6ModifyandbeaytifyMrAdler’sactions7WritingtheoutlineofPara2.LearningActivity1AssessingActivity1LearningActivity2AssessingActivity2AssessingActivity3HectorMr.AdlerPlot&Emotion1Beginning2Risingaction3Climax4Fallingaction5EndingReadfortheplotandemotionCompetingforthechampionhopefullyandproudPickingupanenvelopeandopeningit.wide-eyedandsurprisedAtalosswhattodo.tornbyhisconsciousnessPara1Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler’sroomPara2ThenextdaytheentireschoolcametowatchtheFifthGradeGeographyBeeSearchingfortheanswersheet.disorganisedbutgoodLeadin

Para1Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler’sroom.Hectorhesitated

Mr.AdleraskedHectorwhatbroughthimhere.Hectortoldthetruthandapologized.

Para1Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler’sroom.Leadin

Para1Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler’sroom.Leadin

Para1Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler’sroom.LeadinLeadin

Para1Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler’sroom.LeadinBeforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler’sroom.Clutchingtheenvelopeinhishands,hehesitated,consideringwhethertoconfessorremainsilent.Feeling

surprisedandconfused,Mr.Adlerlookedup

fromhismessydeskand

asked,“Hector,whatbringsyouhere?”Takingadeepbreath,Hectorhandedovertheenvelopeandexplainedeverythingthathadhappened,eyessparklingwithtearsofregret…Hectorhesitated.Mr.AdleraskedHectorwhatbroughthimhere.Hectortoldthetruthandapologized.Howdowewriteavividanddynamicsentence?

Createanactionchain.2Dividetheactionintoseveralsteps.

HectortoldMr.Adlerthetruth.Followingtimeorder.BeforeAfterhandovertheenvelopetookadeepbreath

toldhimthetruthapologizedaskedforforgiveness

_________________________________________________Useconcrete(具體的）verbsratherthangeneral(籠統(tǒng)的)verbsUseexplain/confessratherthantell

_________________________________________________explainedeverythingPairwork2Dividetheactionintoseveralsteps.

動(dòng)詞籠統(tǒng)詞Generalverbs具體詞Concreteverbswalkstroll(溜達(dá))

stagger(蹣跚)

trudge(跋涉)

tiptoe(踮腳走，躡手躡腳地走)

creep

(緩緩行進(jìn)；潛行）runcharge(猛沖)dart(飛奔)gallop(疾馳)scamper（歡快低奔走）sprint(沖刺)say/talkannounce

(宣布)

argue(爭(zhēng)論)

confess（坦白，承認(rèn)）

complain(抱怨)

debate(辯論)discuss(討論)

murmur(低語）

whisper(低語：耳語)

persuade(說服)crywail(哭號(hào)，慟哭)，sob(啜泣：?jiǎn)柩?，whimper(抽泣；嗚咽)laughguffaw(大笑；哄笑)

snigger（竊笑；暗笑）

chuckle(輕聲地笑)giggle(咯咯地笑；傻笑)

eatbite(咬)

chew

(咀嚼)

devour

（狼吞虎咽地吃光)

swallow(吞下：咽下）drink

Drain(喝光；喝干)

sip(小口喝：抿)wantcrave(渴望；熱望)

desire(渴望：期望)catchcapture(捕獲)grasp(抓緊：抓牢)

seize(抓??；提住)clutch（緊握）hitpat(輕拍)beat（敲打；錘砸）strike(撞擊）breakcrack(裂開；破開)demolish(拆毀，拆除)destroy(摧毀；毀滅)2Dividetheactionintoseveralsteps.

HectortoldMr.Adlerthetruth.Followingtimeorder.BeforeAfterhandovertheenvelopetookadeepbreath

toldhimthetruthapologizedaskedforforgiveness

_________________________________________________Useconcrete(具體的）verbsratherthangeneral(籠統(tǒng)的)verbsUseexplain/confessratherthantell

_________________________________________________explainedeverythingPairworknosemindmouthmouth___________________________________________________tookadeepbreathmustereduphiscouragetoconfess.apologizedAskyourbodypartsforhelp.3Combineachainofactionstogether_________________________________________________toldhimthetruthapologizedhandovertheenvelopeHectorhandedovertheenvelope,toldhimthetruthandapologizedforopeningtheenvelopeandreadingthequestions.Hectortookadeepbreath,explainedeverythingthathappenedandakedforforgiveness.Hectortookadeepbreath,mustereduphiscourageandapologizedforopeningandreadingthequestions.did...did...anddid...4DivideMr.Adler’sactionintoseveralstepsandcombinethem.WhatwouldMr.Adler’sactionbeafterHectortoldthetruth?Groupwork___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4DivideMr.Adler’sactionintoseveralstepsandcombinethem.WhatwouldMr.Adler’sactionbeafterHectortoldthetruth?Groupwork_______________________________________________________forgavehimpraisedhimforhishonestypromisedtorewritethequestionsMr.Adlerforgavehisimplusetoopentheenvelope,praisedhimforhishonestyandpromisedtorewritethequestions.5ModifyandbeautifytheactionsHectortoldMr.AdlerthetruthHectortookadeepbreath,mustereduphiscouragetoconfessandapologizedforopeningtheenvelopeandreadingthequestions.Takingadeepbreath,Hectormustereduphiscouragetotellthetruthandapologizedforopeningtheenvelopeandreadingthequestions,withhisheaddrooping/withhisfaceflushingwithshame.Usedoing/doneAddfeelings/emotions

Specifyyourfeelingswithbodylanguage5ModifyandbeautifytheactionsSpecifyyourfeelingswithbodylanguageone’sfacepaledwithfightone’sfacelitupone’sfaceturnedredwithangerone’sfaceflushed/burnedwithembarrassment/shamewithtearsof...wellingupone’seyes.withtearsof...rollingdownone’seyes.tearsof...brimmingoverone’seyes.one’seyessparkled/twinkledwithtearsof......wasshininginone’seyeswithone’slegtrembling/shaking...One’sheartpoundedwith...Havebutterfliesinone’sstomachlowerone’shead.withone’sheaddroppingraisedone’svoiceinagentlevoicegrindone’steeth咬牙切齒myhandsweresweatingClutching...inhishands.5ModifyandbeautifytheactionsHectortoldMr.AdlerthetruthHectortookadeepbreath,mustereduphiscouragetoconfessandapologizedforopeningtheenvelopeandreadingthequestions.Takingadeepbreath,Hectormustereduphiscouragetotellthetruthandapologizedforopeningtheenvelopeandreadingthequestions,withhisheaddrooping/withhisfaceflushingwithshame.Usedoing/doneAddfeelings/emotions

SpecifyyourfeelingswithbodylanguageTakingadeepbreath,Hectormustereduphiscouragetoconfessthetruthandapologizedforopeningtheenvelopeandreadingthequestions,awaveofregretsweepingoverhim.Usesomefixedstructures.5ModifyandbeautifytheactionsUsesomefixedstructures.1.Aburst/wave/flood/sceneof+n.+seize/grasp/swallow/take/holdof/washover/floodover/wellup/surgethrough/sweepover+sb2.UseAbsoluteStructure(獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）3.UseInanimateSubjects(無靈主語）...Eg.Hearingwhathesaid,Alicegrinnedfromeartoear,awaveofhappinessfloodingoverher.6ModifyandbeautifyMr.Adler’sactionsMr.Adlerforgavehisimpulsetoopentheenvelopepraisedhimforhishonestyandpromisedtorewritethequestions.Muchtohissurprise,Mr.Adlerforgavehisimpulsetoopentheenvelopeinanunderstandingandcomfortingvoiceandpraisedhimforhishonest,promisingtorewritethequestions…WhatwouldbeMr.Adler’sactionafterHector’sconfession?PeerChecklist7ExpandtheoutlinesofPara.2withactionchains.Para.2Thenextday,theentireschoolcametowatchthefitthGradeGeographyBee.PairworkHectorsteppedontothestage.Hectorwon.Hectorexpressedhisthanks.(Ps:thesearenotalltheoutlinesofPara.2,justpartofit.)StandardsScore(30)3-4vebsareusedinthesentences(0-10)Alltheverbsaregrammaticallycorrect.(0-10)Allthesentencesarewellmodified.(0-10)7Ex