讀后續(xù)寫ContinuationWriting—Focusondesigningtheplots

LearningObjectivesAttheendofthislesson,weareableto1.Learntogetthemainplotandanalyzethecharacter’semotion.2.Learntomasterskillstomakeemotionaldescriptionanddialogues.3.Learntomakeattemptswithcourage

.Elarastaredatthe800-meterracesign-upsheetintheschoolhallway,herfingershoveringoverthepaperlikenervousbutterflies.Justlastmonth,she'dstruggledtofinisha400-meterPEtest,farbehindherclassmates-herlungsburninglikefire,herlegsheavyaslead-untilshe'dfinallycrossedthefinishline,cheekshotwithshame."I'mnotarunner,"shethoughttoherself,alreadysteppingbacktoturnaway,hershoesscrapingsoftlyagainstthefloor.ButthenshesawCoachMillerwalkingover,holdingastopwatchthatshoneinthehallwaylight,hissmilewarmandsteadyasarock."Isawyououtthereafterclasslastweek-runningaroundthetrackevenwheneveryoneelsehadgonehome,"hesaid."That'sdeterminationrightthere.Whynotgiveitatry?It'snotaboutbeingfast;it'saboutchallengingyourself."Hiswordsmadeherpause,atinysparkofhopelightingupinherchest.Forthefirsttime,shethought:MaybeIcanstopsaying"Ican't."Shepickedupapen,itsplasticbodycoolinherpalm,andwrotehernamedown,theinkbleedingsoftlyintothepaper.Atthestartinglineofthe800meterraceaweeklater,Elara'shandswerestillshaking.Afinelayerofsweatwasstartingtoformonherforehead,andthedistantcheersdriftedover,mixingwiththesoftwhisperofwindthroughtheoaktrees.She'dalmostquittraininglastweek.Herlegshadachedsobadlythattheyfeltreadytogiveout,andtearshadstreameddownhercheeksassheleanedagainstthetrackfence,catchingherbreath.She'dneverrunsuchalongdistancebefore,notevenforfun.ButCoachMiller'swordskeptechoinginhermind:"It'snotaboutwinning,butgivingyourbest.Paragraph1:Thestartinggunpopped,andElaratookoff.Paragraph2:Newstrengthfillingher,shepushedforwardfirmly.閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。1.Sixelements：5W+1H一、讀懂大意，理清脈絡【1】Who（人物)---何人參與，誰是主角？【2】When（時間)---何時發(fā)生，有沒有具體時間？【3】Where（地點)---何地發(fā)生，有沒有地點變化？【4】What（事件)---發(fā)生了什么事？【5】Why（原因)---事件的起因？【6】How（結果)---事件的經過及結局？

whowherewhenHowwhywhatendingbeginning

Elara&Thecoach800-metertracetheschool’shallway;theschool’srunningtrack.Activity1Readfortheelements

Storymountain【How】BuildUpSolutionBeginningEndingPara1:Elararecalledherfailureinthe400mrace,soshedidn’tdaretosignup800racePara2Thecoachbrokeherself-doubtwithencouragingwordsandpromptedhertodecidetogiveitatryThestartinggunpopped,andElaratookoff.Newstrengthfillingher,shepushedforwardfirmly..Conflict-SolutionActivity2Readfortheplotandemotion寫作步驟二、細讀首句，構思框架1.兩段首句定一框2.二框二首正能量由續(xù)寫的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。第二段的框架，由第二段首句與正能量結尾來確定。

Activity3：Inferplotsoreventsineachparagraph.Paragraph1Thestartinggunpopped,andElaratookoff.定句①：銜接提示句

情節(jié)⑥：主角（心動情）

情節(jié)⑦：主、配角（心動情）

情節(jié)⑧：主、配角（心動情）

定句②：過渡句（下段）Paragraph2Newstrengthfillingher,shepushedforwardfirmly.定句③:銜接提示句

情節(jié)⑨：主角（心動情）

情節(jié)⑩：主、配角（心動情）

定句④:扣故事、說結局

定句⑤：主旨升華看到了什么？聽到了什么？想到了什么？說了什么？做了什么？感受到了什么？SKILL1Emotions表示情緒的形容詞：Skill1：emotionsjoyfuldelightedpleasedgladcheerfulangryfuriousannoyedupsetfrustratedhelplessdepressedheartbrokenafraidscaredterrifiedshockedfrightenedhopefulthrilledoverjoyed1.what引導主語從句Whatmadehimfeelsatisfiedwasthathisstudentswereabletoread,speakandwriteinEnglish.通過主語從句揭示“真正讓某人產生情緒的原因”，突出情緒背后的深層觸動。表示情緒的動詞：喜悅開心類：please、amuse、delight悲傷難過類：depress、upset、hurt、disappoint、frustrate憤怒生氣類：annoy、anger、irritate驚訝震驚類：surprise、astonish、shock、stun（stunned）感動印象類：impress、move、touch害怕擔憂類：frighten、worry、terrify、scare困惑困擾類：puzzle、bother、confuse句型：what+情緒動詞+sb+was+that從句。Practice1.讓我驚訝的是，他禮貌地拒絕了邀請。

___________________________________herefusedtheinvitationpolitely.Whatsurprised/astonishedmewasthat2.讓他們失望的是，音樂會因天氣惡劣取消了。

theconcertwascanceledduetobadweather.Whatdisappointedthemwasthat

2.分詞作狀語1.Iwasfeelingastrangesenseofguilt.2.IregretoverwhatIhaddone.3.Iwasfilledwithguilt.4.IrushedouttoapologizetoTom.regrettingoverwhatIhaddone.Iwasfeelingastrangesenseofguilt，主語＋句子V-ing作狀語IrushedouttoapologizetoFilledwithguilt，主語＋句子V-ed作狀語samesubjectsamesubjectSkill2分詞作狀語（v.-ing&v.-edasadverbial）(感到堅定和受到鼓舞的）,Iraisedhishead,lookingatherwithgratitude.（2022全國1卷）Determinedandinspired5.Iwasdeterminedandinspired.6.Iraisedmyhead.7.Ilookedatherwithgratitude.V-ed作狀語主語＋句子samesubjectV-ing作狀語Skill2分詞作狀語（v.-ing&v.-edasadverbial）(感到放松的和快樂的),Davidwavedatmeimmediatelyaftercrossingthefinishline,conveyinghishappinessandgratitude.（2022全國1卷）Relievedanddelighted8.Davidfeltrelievedanddelighted.9.Davidwavedatmeimmediatelyaftercrossingthefinishline.10.Davidconveyedhishappinessandgratitude.總結句型:

v-ing/v-ed狀語，主語＋句子，（v-ing/v-ed狀語）

Skill2分詞作狀語（v.-ing&v.-edasadverbial）samesubjectV-ed作狀語V-ing作狀語V-ed作狀語主語＋句子SKILL2DIALOGUES對話描寫原則③

不宜過長，側重口語化詞匯，避開生僻詞匯；②

對話描寫必須反映人物的心理與情感，刻畫人物的性格；

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盡可能結合動作描寫，明確對誰說。①

對話要為推動故事情節(jié)服務，每段出現一兩句即可；

“Xxxxxx,

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sbsaid.Sbsaid,

“Xxxxxx.”

“Xxxxxx,”

sbsaid,“xxxxxx.”①

說話人在前②

說話人在后③

說話人在中間

規(guī)規(guī)矩矩一、標點符號、大小寫的規(guī)范性1.說_________________________2.小聲說_____________________3.解釋_______________________4.請求________________________5.大喊________________________6.建議________________________7.尖叫________________________8.補充說______________________9.宣布________________________10.同意__________________11.承認___________________12.重復說_________________13.繼續(xù)說_________________14.嘆息說_________________15.責備___________________16.認為___________________17.嘟囔____________________18.結巴地說________________say,utterwhisper,murmurexplainask,beg,request,demandyell,shout,cryadvise,suggest,proposescreamaddannounce,declareadmit,acknowledgeagreerepeatcontinuesighscold,blamethink,believe,arguemumblestammer各種各樣的“說”二、換個詞---不能只是said1.“That’sokay!”saidMaryinapleasanttone.2.“Ididn’tmeanthat,”shemurmu