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主題04.人類眼中的動物趣事
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一、主題解析
木專題的主題是“人類眼中的動物趣事”,其核心是通過捕捉人與動物互動中的意外瞬間、溫情片段與
智慧碰撞,展現(xiàn)跨物種關(guān)系的治愈力量與生命共性。這類題材在高考讀后續(xù)寫中高頻出現(xiàn),如蜂鳥邂逅、
海豚秘密等,多以“小事見真情”為敘事邏輯。
“趣事”并非單純的滑稽場景,而是蘊(yùn)含情感張力的互動:可能是流浪狗用笨拙動作表達(dá)依賴的溫暖,
如“蹭手心求撫摸”;或是松鼠為儲糧“偷藏鑰匙”的頑皮;也可能是企鵝擠堆取暖給人類的生存啟示。這類
故事往往以“相遇一互動一感悟”為脈絡(luò),既需通過細(xì)節(jié)刻畫動物的靈性(如“眼神閃爍好奇”),更要
挖掘人類的成長(如從冷漠到關(guān)愛),最終落腳于“人與自然和諧共生”的主題升華,符合高考對“情感共
鳴”與“價值導(dǎo)向”的雙重要求。
二、詞句儲備
1.基本詞匯
furry(毛茸茸的)strayanimal(流浪動物)
wagitstail(搖尾巴)adopt(收養(yǎng))
chirp((小鳥)唧唧叫)rescue(救助)
snuggle(依偎)feed(喂食)
scamper(蹦蹦跳跳)bandagethewound(包扎傷口)
paw(爪子)buildashelter(搭建庇護(hù)所)
beak(鳥喙)stareat(盯著看)
purr((貓)咕嚕叫)chase(追逐)
nibole(輕咬)hide(躲藏)
playtricks(惡作?。﹍ick(舔)
showaffection(表達(dá)愛意)bark(吠叫)
loyal(忠誠的)meow(唯唯叫)
curious(好奇的)flock((鳥群)聚集)
playful(愛玩耍的)herd((獸群)聚集)
gentle(溫順的)nest(鳥巢)
mischievous(調(diào)皮的)kennel(狗窩)
cautious(謹(jǐn)慎的)pet(寵物)
approach(靠近)wildanimal(野生動物)
retreat(后退)companionship(陪伴)
cuddle(擁抱)bond(聯(lián)結(jié))
2.高分詞匯
canine(犬類的;犬科動物)
【例句】Thecanine'seyeslitupwhenitspottecitsowner,waggingitstailfrantically.(那只犬看到主
人時眼睛一亮,瘋狂地?fù)u著尾巴。)
feline(貓科的;貓科動物)
【例句】Thefelinecurleduponthesofa,purririgsoftlyasitsoakedupthesunlight(那只貓科動物
蜷縮在沙發(fā)上,一邊曬太陽一邊輕聲咕嚕。)
scamper(輕快地跑;蹦跳)
[例句]Thesquirrelscamperedupthetreewithanacornclampedinitsmouth.(松鼠嘴里叼著橡子,
輕快地爬上了樹。)
perch((鳥)棲息;停歇)
【f列句】Asparrowperchedonthewindowsill,chirpingasifgreetingthemorning.(——只麻雀棲,息在
窗臺上,唧唧叫著仿佛在迎接清晨。)
nuzzle(用鼻子輕蹭)
【例句】Thepuppynuzzledmyhand,seekingcomfortafterbeingleftalone.(小狗獨(dú)自留守后,用鼻
子輕蹭我的手尋求安慰。)
forage(覓食)
【例句】Therabbitsforagedinthegarden,diggingupcarrotswiththeirpaws.(兔子們在花園里覓食,
用爪子挖胡蘿卜。)
8wer(畏縮;退縮)
【例句】Thestraycatcoweredinthecorner,afraidofthesuddennoise.(流浪貓?jiān)诮锹淅镂房s著,
害怕突如其來的聲響。)
frisk(活潑跳躍;歡蹦亂跳)
【例句】Thepuppyfriskedaroundtheyard,chasingbutterflieswithexcitement(小狗在院子里歡蹦
亂跳,興奮地追逐蝴蝶。)
snuffle(用鼻子嗅;抽鼻子)
【例句】Thedogsnuffledatthedoor,eagertogooutsideforawalk.(狗用鼻子嗅著門,急切地想出
去散步。)
preen((鳥)梳理羽毛)
【例句】Thepeacockpreeneditscolorfulfeathers,showingofftotheonlookers.(孔雀梳理著彩色的
羽三,向圍觀者炫耀。)
tende「(溫柔的;體貼的)
【例句】Shegavetheinjuredbirdatendertouch,carefulnottohurtit.(她溫柔地?fù)崦軅男▲B,
生怕弄疼它。)
astute(機(jī)敏的;精明的)
[例句]Thecrowshowedastutejudgmentbydroppingnutsontheroadtocrackthem.(烏鴉通過把
洋生物學(xué)家的好奇心。)
3.高分句式
Withitstailwaggingwildly,thepuppydashedtowardsmethemomentIopenedthedoor.(我——開門,小
狗就瘋狂搖著尾巴朝我沖來。)
Curiousaboutthenewobject,thesquirreltilteditsheadandstaredatitforalongtime.(松鼠對這個新物
件很好奇,歪著頭盯著看了很久。)
Itwasnotuntilthebirdflewawaythatsherealizedhowmuchshehadgrownattachedtoit.(直到鳥兒飛
走,她才意識到自己有多依戀它。)
Wrappedinasoftcloth,theinjuredsparrowlayquietlyinherpalm,tremblingslightly.(受傷的麻雀裹在軟
布里,安靜地躺在她掌心,微微顫抖。)
Soplayfulwasthekittenthatitkeptchasingitsowntail,makingeveryonelaugh.(這只小貓?zhí)珢弁嫠A?
一直追著自己的尾巴跑,逗得大家都笑了。)
Asthesunset,theolddogcurledupbesidethedoor,waitingoatientlyforitsowner.(夕陽西下,老狗蜷
縮在門邊,耐心等待主人歸來。)
Havingbeenfedbythegirlforweeks,thestraycatbegantotrusthumansagain.(被女孩喂食了幾周后,
這只流浪貓開始重新信任人類。)
Themomentthedooropened,aburstofbarkscamefrominside,tellingusthedogwasexcited.(門一打
開,里面就傳來一陣叫聲,說明狗很興奮。)
Whatsurprisedusmostwasthatthecrowcouldrecognizethefacesofpeoplewhohadhelpedit.(最讓
我們驚訝的是,這只烏鴉能認(rèn)出幫助過它的人的臉。)
Holdingthebowlinherhand,shewalkedgentlytowardsthecat,afraidtoscareitaway.(她手里拿著碗,
輕輕走向那只貓,生怕把它嚇跑。)
Therabbithoppedaroundthegardenasifitwereshowingusitslittle"territory".(兔子在花園里蹦來蹦去,
仿佛在給我們展示它的小“領(lǐng)地
Nomatterhowfarwewent,thedogfollowedusclosely,neverleavingourside.(無論我們走多遠(yuǎn),狗都
緊緊跟著我們,從不離開我們身邊。)
Itwasthedog'sloyalcompanionshipthathelpedhergetthroughthedifficultdays.(正是狗的忠誠陪伴幫
她度過了艱難的日子。)
Whentherainstopped,thebirdflewoutoftheshelter,singinghappilyinthesky.(雨停后,鳥兒飛出庇護(hù)
所,在天空中快樂地歌唱。)
Lickingherfingersgently,thepuppyshoweditsgratitudeforthefoodshehadgiven.(小狗輕輕舔著她的
手指,以此表達(dá)對她給的食物的感激。)
Themoretimewespentwiththeanimal,thedeeperthebondbetweenusbecame.(我們和這只動物相處
的時間越長,彼此間的聯(lián)結(jié)就越深。)
Hiddenbehindthebush,thesquirrelwatchedussecretly,readytorunawayatanytime.(松鼠躲在i霍木
叢后,偷偷看著我們,隨時準(zhǔn)備逃跑。)
Itseemedthatthecatunderstoodhersadness,foritsatonherlapandpurredsoftly.(那只貓似乎讀懂了
她的悲傷,因?yàn)樗谒耐壬?,輕聲咕嚕著。)
Havinglearnedtoopenthedoorbyitself,thedogoftensurpriseduswithitscleverness.(學(xué)會自己開門后,
這只狗經(jīng)常用它的聰明給我們帶來驚喜。)
Thewolf,whicheveryonehadfeared,turnedouttobeprotectingthelostchild.(那只人人都害怕的狼,原
來是在保護(hù)迷路的孩子。)
Assoonasthebellrang,thedograntothedoor,expectingitsowner'sreturn.(鈴聲一響,狗就跑到門口,
期待著主人回來。)
Coveredwithsnow,thelittleducklookedsoweakthatwedecidedtotakeithome.(這只小鴨子渾身是雪,
看起來很虛弱,我們決定把它帶回家。)
Themonkeynotonlystolethebananabutalsomadeafunnyfaceatusbeforeleaving.(猴子不僅偷了香
蕉,還在離開前對我們做了個鬼臉。)
Itwasamazingthatthedolphincouldsensethedangerandwarntheswimmers.(海豚能察覺至ij危險(xiǎn)并警
告游泳者,這太令人驚訝了。)
Walkingsidebysidewiththedog,hefeltasenseofwarmthhehadneverknownbefore.(和狗并肩走著,
他感受到了前所未有的溫暖。)
Thebird,whosewinghadbeenhurt,recoveredquicklywithourcarefulcare.(那只翅膀受傷的鳥,在我們
的悉心照料下很快康復(fù)了。)
Sotimidwastherabbitthatithidunderthegrasswhenitheardanynoise.(這只兔子太膽小了,?一聽到聲
響就躲到草叢下面。)
Afterplayinginthemud,thepuppylookedsodirtythatitsownerlaughedoutloud.(在泥里玩過之后,d、
狗看起來臟極了,主人大聲笑了起來。)
Thecatjumpedontothetable,knockingoverthecupasifitwereplayingagame.(貓?zhí)阶繫上,打翻
了杯子,仿佛在玩游戲。)
Itwasnottheanimal'scutenessbutitsloyaltythattouchedallthepeoplearound.(打動周圍所有人的不是
這只動物的可愛,而是它的忠誠。)
三、寫作策略
【策略解析】
主題類型段落推進(jìn)典型詞句寫作要求寫作策略
溫情陪伴類
場景引入Tnuzzle,fervent,1.突出動物的1.以感官細(xì)節(jié)(觸覺、聽覺)刻畫
親昵動作與人
互動細(xì)節(jié)一"wagitstail互動(如“舔手心”“輕聲咕噌');2.
類的情感變
情感升華
frantically",Hcurl通過時間線索(“每個黃昏”)強(qiáng)化
化;2.用細(xì)節(jié)
upbesidethe陪伴感;3.結(jié)尾用主題句點(diǎn)出“陪
體現(xiàn)陪伴的治
door"愈力。伴的意義:
頑皮趣事類
意外發(fā)生Tmischievous,1.營造輕松詼1.用動作鏈(“偷藏鑰匙一躲到沙發(fā)
動物行為一scamper,"play諧的氛圍;2.下一探出頭”)展現(xiàn)趣事過程;2.加
人類反應(yīng)體現(xiàn)動物的
tricks","knock入人類的心理描寫(“又好氣又好
“靈性調(diào)皮”與
overthecup"笑”);3.以對話或笑聲增強(qiáng)畫面
人類的包容,
感。
智慈啟示類
困境出現(xiàn)Tastute,intrigue,1.清晰展現(xiàn)1.先鋪墊困境的緊張感(“供暖故
動物行為一"sensethe“困境一啟發(fā)障”“迷路”);2.聚焦動物行為的特
人類頓悟
danger","show—解決”的邏殊性(“企鵝擠堆”“烏鴉砸堅(jiān)果”);
astutejudgment"輯;2.突出動3.用"suddenlyrealized''銜接頓
物智慧對人類悟過程。
的影響。
救助成長類
發(fā)現(xiàn)險(xiǎn)情Trescue,bandage1.細(xì)節(jié)描寫救1.按“觀察一行動一照料”梳
助動作的專業(yè)
救助過程Tthewound,理救助步驟(“輕輕捧起一包扎傷口
雙向蛻變性與溫情;2.
"cowerinthe一喂食”);2.對比動物前后狀態(tài)
體現(xiàn)人與動物
corner","recover(“畏縮T親近”);3.借人類感悟
的共同成長。
quickly"(“學(xué)會敬畏生命”)升華主題。
沖突化解類
遭遇沖突一cower,retreat,1.營造緊張氛1.用環(huán)境描寫(“昏暗的森林”“寒風(fēng)
緊張周旋一"glowwith圍;2.體現(xiàn)人呼嘯”)渲染緊張感;2.刻畫人類
類的冷靜與動
和解/脫hunger","stand的應(yīng)對動作(“緩緩后退”“輕聲安
物的非惡意本
險(xiǎn)
myground"撫”);3.以“動物主動退讓”或
質(zhì)。
“第三方介入”實(shí)現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)折,
【策略示例】
[寫作試題]
(江蘇省無錫市2024-2025學(xué)年高三上學(xué)期期終教學(xué)質(zhì)量調(diào)研測試英語卷)閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所
給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
WhenSamwastwoyearsandtwomonthsold,hebegantoshuttheworldaway.Theonce-happylittleboy,
whowasalreadystartingtopickupwordsofbothEnglishandSpanish,suddenlystoppedspeaking;stopped
lookinghisfamilyintheeye;stoppedcommunicatingaltogether.Mostofthetime,ailSamdidwaslieonthesofa
touchinghisears.
Hestartedtodisplaycertainbehavioralchanges.Hebegantohavethisfunnythingwithstraightlineswhere
hewouldpickupatoyandlookatitsideways,orlieonhisfrontforhoursonend,rollingacarinfrontofhiseyes.
Withintwoyears,hismotherJovisitedoneexpertafteranotherwithSamandtriedvarioustreatment
methods;however,nothingseemedtowork.Whatwasworse,inaboutthreeweeksSam'sgrandfatherdiedof
cancer,hisparentsdivorcedandhisfamilywererobbed—andallthewhile,Samwasbecomingmoreandmore
withdrawn.Hiseyesweredead.
AnditwasthenthatSamwaseventuallydiagnosed(診斷)withautism(自I制癥).
Asasinglemother,Johadncchoicebuttogostraight(oworkherselftoeamalivingwhileresearchingthe
conditionandtryherbesttohelpSamtocomebackoutofhimself.ForJo.thefollowingeightyearswasa
terrifyingtime,watchinghersondisappearingjustinfrontofhereyes.Allmethodstried,moneyrunningout,Jo
hadnochoicebuttotakeSam,bynowcompletelynon-verbal(不使用言語交際的),fromthehustleandbustle(喧
囂)ofthecitytothecalmoftheDevoncountryside.
Onceonalocalfarm,theycameacrossChester,aminipigbelongingtoafarmer.Itwassosmallthatthey
didn'tevenseeitatfirstsight.Astheywalkeddownthegrassland,theonlylittlepigwashidinginthecomer.He
lookedsadandlonely,likeSamoftendid.
注意:
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
WhenSamsawChester,hewentovertothelittlepigimmediately.
ThefarmeragreedandJotookChesterhome.
[范文實(shí)踐]
【參考范文】
WhenSamsawChester,hewentovertothelittlepigimmediately.Sam,whohadbeensoisolated,reachedout
andgentlytouchedthepig.ChestergotclosertoSaminresponse,asifacknowledginganewfriend.Forthefirst
timeinyears,Sam'seyeslitupwithasparkofcuriosityandwarmth.Jowatchedinamazementanddecidedthere
andthentobuyit.Sheapproachedthefannerandaskediftheycouldbuythepig,hopingChestermightbreathe
vitalityintoSam'slife.
ThefarmeragreedandJotookChesterhome.Sincethen,SamandChesterwerelikepeasandcarrots.
Chester'spresencebecameacomforttoSam'slonelysoul.HewouldoftensitbesideChester,strokingitsback.Jo
noticedagradualchangeinSam—hebeganhavingmoreinteractionswithChesterandher.Apparently,theunique
bondbetweenSaniandChesterhadagoodeffectonSam'sotherrelationships,offeringJohopethathersonmight
slowlyfindhiswaybacktotheworld.
【寫作分析】
本文以人物為線索展開,本文講述了小男孩山姆在兩歲兩個月大時突然變得沉默自閉,經(jīng)過多方求醫(yī)
無果,且家庭遭遇變故后,他被確診為自閉癥。山姆的母親喬在努力工作的同時,不懈研究自閉癥并嘗試
各種方法幫助山姆。后來,在山姆與一只迷你小豬切斯特相遇并建立深厚友誼后,山姆的情況逐漸好轉(zhuǎn),
開始與外界有更多的互動,這給喬帶來了希望。
【要點(diǎn)分析】
1.段落續(xù)寫:
①由第一段首句“當(dāng)山姆看到切斯特時,他立刻朝小豬走過去。”可知,第一段可描寫山姆與小豬切斯特的初
次互動以及喬決定買下切斯特的經(jīng)過。
②由第二段首句“農(nóng)夫同意了,喬把切斯特帶回了家?!笨芍?,第二段可描寫山姆與切斯特的親密相處以及喬
對此的感悟。
2.續(xù)寫線索:
相遇——互動——決定買下——帶回家——親密相處——感悟
3.詞匯激活
行為類
①伸出:reachout/stretchout
②買下:buy/purchase
③開始:begin/start
情緒類
①好奇:curiosity/interest/wonder
②安慰:comfort/ease/relief
[高分句型l]Sheapproachedthefarmerandaskediftheycouldbuythepig,hopingChestermightbreathevitality
intoSam'slife.(由if引導(dǎo)賓語從句以及現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語的結(jié)構(gòu))
[高分句型2]Apparently,theuniquebondbetweenSainandChesterhadagoodeffectonSam'sotherrelationships,
offeringJohopethathersonmightslowlyfindhiswaybacktotheworld.(由現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語以及that引導(dǎo)賓語
從句)
[策略運(yùn)用]
一、聚焦“情感聯(lián)結(jié)與成長治愈”,貼合原文情感基調(diào)
該試題主題圍繞“自閉癥男孩Sam的治愈之旅”展開,核心是“特殊情感聯(lián)結(jié)(人與動物)對困境個
體的救贖”,需嚴(yán)格貼合原文壓抑后尋得希望的情感主線。
原文鋪墊:通過"Samshuttheworldaway,,Meyesweredeadm*completelynon-verbal”等描述,塑造
出Sam封閉、冷漠的狀態(tài),以及母親Jc"mcnayrunningcut""tarrifyinqtima"的絕望感:偶遇Msadand
lonely”的迷你豬Chester,為“同類共情”的情感聯(lián)結(jié)埋下伏筆。
范文呼應(yīng):參考范文緊扣"治愈”主題,HForthefirsttimeinyears,Sam'seyeslitupwithasparkof
curiosityandwarmth0,通過Sam眼神的變化,體現(xiàn)Chester帶來的情感破冰;后續(xù)uSamandChester
werelikepeasandcarrotsM,4gradualchangeinSam,,uofferingJohope",則完整呈現(xiàn)“相遇—聯(lián)結(jié)—治
愈”的主題閉環(huán),與原文“困境中尋希望”的基調(diào)高度契合。
二、遵循“開頭引導(dǎo)一細(xì)節(jié)支撐一過渡銜接”,保證邏輯連貫
試題給出兩段開頭句("WhenSamsawChester...m,Thefarmeragreed...,,)?需圍繞開頭句構(gòu)建"場景
描寫一動作/情感刻畫一情節(jié)推進(jìn)”的段落結(jié)構(gòu),且兩段間需形成“事件發(fā)展(請求買豬)一結(jié)果落
地(帶回家后變化)”的邏輯鏈。
1.第一段(WhenSamsawChester...):聚焦"相遇互動與請求買豬”
結(jié)構(gòu)拆解:先描述Sam與Chester的初次互動(細(xì)節(jié)支撐)-刻畫Sam的情感變化(核心亮點(diǎn))
一母親的行動(情節(jié)推進(jìn))。
實(shí)例分析:范文先寫"Sam...reachedoutandgentlytouchedthepig.Chestergotcloser...asif
acknowledginganewfriend5'(互動維I節(jié));再用"Sam'seyeslitupwithasparkofcuriosityandwarmth”
(情感變化)突出轉(zhuǎn)折;最后以"Jo...decidedthereandthentobuyit.Sheapproachedthefarmer*'(母
親行動)收尾,自然銜接第二段“買豬”的結(jié)果。
2.第二段(Thefarmeragreed...):聚焦"相處日常與治愈效果”
結(jié)構(gòu)拆解:先建立Sam與Chester的緊密關(guān)系(總起)-描述具體相處細(xì)節(jié)(支撐)一點(diǎn)明Sam
的成長與母親的希望(升華)。
實(shí)例分析:范文以"SamandChesterwerelikepeasandcarrots"(總起,用諺語強(qiáng)化親密感)開篇:
再寫"HewouldoftensitbesideChester,strokingitsback”(具體細(xì)節(jié)):最后通過"gradualchangein
SamM,,beganhavingmoreinteractions,,MofferingJohope',(成長與希望),完成情節(jié)升華,呼應(yīng)原文"help
Samcomebackoutofhimself'的核心目標(biāo)。
三、兼顧“原文詞匯復(fù)用”與“情感/動作精準(zhǔn)表達(dá)”
讀后續(xù)寫需避免脫離原文語境的“新詞堆砌”,同時通過精準(zhǔn)詞句刻畫細(xì)節(jié)與情感,參考范文在詞句使
用上有兩大特點(diǎn):
1.復(fù)用原文核心詞匯,保持語境統(tǒng)一
原文關(guān)鍵詞"withdrawrT'non-verbaUlonely”,范文通過"isolated"(與withdrawn同義)、"Sam'slonely
soul”(直接復(fù)用lonely),強(qiáng)化Sam的封閉狀態(tài);用"breathevitalityintoSam'slife"呼應(yīng)原文HhelpSam
tocomebackoutofhimself,確保語義連貫。
2.用“動作+神態(tài)”詞句刻畫情感變化,避免空洞抒情
情感破冰:不用"Samwashappy",而用"reachedoutandgentlytouched"(動作)+"eyeslitupwith
asoarkofcuriosityandwarmth"(神態(tài)),具象化Sam的“第一次主動”;
關(guān)系深化:不用"SamlikedChester",而用"sitbesideChester,strokingKsback”(動作)、"likepeas
andcarrots”(諺語),l上親密關(guān)系更生動可感;
成長體現(xiàn):不用"Samchangedalot",而用ubeganhavingmoreinteractionswithChesterandher”
(具體行為),讓“治愈”有細(xì)節(jié)支撐。
四、緊扣“詞數(shù)限制”“邏輯銜接”“情感連貫”三大核心
試題明確要求“續(xù)寫詞數(shù)15。左右”“構(gòu)成完整短文”,需在有限篇幅內(nèi)滿足以卜.要求:
詞數(shù)分配:兩段需均衡,參考范文第一段約75詞,第二段約70詞,避免一段過詳、一段過略;
邏輯銜接:需用"過渡詞/句”連接情節(jié),如第一段*'Jowatchedinamazementanddecidedthereand
thentobuyit\用“and”承接母親的觀察與行動;第二段“Sincethen”承接“帶回家”與“E常相處”,確
保情節(jié)不脫節(jié);
情感連貫:需延續(xù)原文“絕望一微光一希望”的情感曲線,范文第一段Yarn'seyeslitup"是"微
光”,第二段“gradualchange”“offeringJ。hope”是“希望”,完美承接原文情感,避免情感跳躍。
五、遵循“三貼合+兩聚焦”,確保續(xù)寫不偏離
1.三貼合:貼合原文人物設(shè)定、情節(jié)走向、情感基調(diào)
貼合人物:Sam是“自閉癥男孩”,范文中他的改變是“gradual”(漸進(jìn)的),而非突然開口說話,符合
自閉癥康復(fù)的現(xiàn)實(shí)邏輯;母親Jo是“堅(jiān)韌的單親媽媽”,范文中她4,askediftheycouldbuythepig"的主
動行動,呼應(yīng)原文"tryherbesttohelpSam"的人設(shè);
貼合情節(jié):原文提到Chestedsadandlonely,likeSamoftendid",范文據(jù)此設(shè)計(jì)"Chester'spresence
becameacomforttoSam'slonelysoul",讓"人與豬的聯(lián)結(jié)”有合理依據(jù),避免憑空創(chuàng)造情節(jié)(如突然加
入其他角色);
貼合情感:原文"J。hadnochoicebuttotakeSam..tothecalmoftheDevoncountryside"體現(xiàn)"尋
求改變的嘗試”,范文"hopingChestermightbreathevitalityintoSam'slife"延續(xù)了母親"不放棄"的情感,
保持情感一致性。
2.兩聚焦:聚焦"關(guān)鍵細(xì)節(jié)刻畫”與“主題升華”
聚焦關(guān)鍵細(xì)節(jié):選擇能體現(xiàn)“變化”的細(xì)節(jié)(如眼神、動作),而非無關(guān)場景(如描寫鄉(xiāng)村風(fēng)景),范文
僅用"walkeddownthegrassland""hidinginthecorner”簡筆交代環(huán)境,重點(diǎn)刻畫Sam與Chester的互
動;
聚焦主題升華:結(jié)尾需呼應(yīng)‘治愈"主題,范文"theuniquebondbetweenSamandChesterhada
goodeffectonSam'sotherrelationships",將"人與豬的聯(lián)結(jié)"延伸到"Sam與世界的聯(lián)結(jié)”,升華原文
"comebackoutofhimself的核心目標(biāo),讓續(xù)寫更有深度。
■,?,,,,,,,??,,?,?,,?,,,,,“〃〃〃〃〃〃〃〃〃〃〃〃,,‘
1.(25-26高三上?湖北?開學(xué)考試)閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇
完整的短文。
ThesmellofroastedchickenfilledthekitchenaswegatheredforourusualFridaydinner.Havingswallowed
abigmouthfulofchicken,Itookadeepbreathandbegan,“CouldIinvitesomefriendsovertomorrow?Justforthe
afternoon?”
Myparentsexchangedaglance,thennoddedreadily.Butbesideme,myyoungersister,Lily,froze.Herwide
eyeslockedontomine."But...whataboutMiracle?She'llbeterrified,Ethan.”
MiraclewasacatLilyrescuedonarainydaylastwinter.Truetohername,thecathadsurvived.Yet,it
retrainedacreatureofprofoundshyness:Loudvoicessenthertremblingunderbeds;suddenmovementsmadeher
juirp.Shewasn'tjustapet;shewasafragilesoulLilyfiercelyprotected.
“Ipromise,Lily,^^Iinsisted,leaningforward,meetingherworriedgaze(凝視).“We'llstayinthelivingroom.
Noloudmusic,noshoutinggames.I'llkeepthebackdoorshuttight,andI'llwarneveryonetobequiet.Miracle
won'tevenknowthey'rehcrc.^^Isawtheconflictinhereyes—herdesiretobesupportivewarringwithherdeep
concernforthepoorcat.Afteratensesilence,shefinallygaveasmall,reluctantnod.
Saturdayarrivedwithsunshineandlaughterasmyfriendspiledin.Truetomyword,Iguidedthemstraight
to(helivingroom,remindingthemfirmlyaboutMiracle'ssensitivity.Initially,wechatted,playedcardsquietly.
Glancingaround,IspottedMiracleslidingsilentlydownthehallwaytowardsLily'sroom.Good,she'skeepingher
distance,Ithought,relieved.
Astheafternoonworeon,however,theinitialcautiondisappeared.Acompetitiveboardgameledto
enthusiasticcheersandlaughter.Lostinthesheerfunofbeingwithmyfriends,1forgoteverything-hepromise,
thefragilecreature.
Afterfriendsdepartedwithcheerfulgoodbyes,Ibegantidyingemptyglasses,stilllostinthehappyscenes
whenLilyburstthroughthefrontdoorintoherroom.Thencameherscream,“Ethan,Miracleisgone.”
注意:
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請按如卜格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Acoldwaveoffearrushedthroughme.
Luckily,wcfinallyfoundMiracleinthebackyard.
2.(24-25高三下?遼寧?開學(xué)考試)閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成?篇
完整的短文。
Katie'sfirstmorningatUncleRalph'sSeaviewResortalwaysfollowedacomfortingtraditicn.Shewould
wakeuptotheloudcryofGulliver,(heone-leggedseagull(海鷗),ringingoverthecottages."Kee-aah!Kee-aah!
Kcc-aah!''Itwaslikeanannouncementofherarrival.Gulliver'stimingwasmysterious—heshoweduptheday
Katieandherdadarrivedanddisappearedthedaytheyleft.UncleRalphoftenjoked,“Iswearthatbirdknowsyour
holidayplansbetterthanyoudo."Thisroutinerepeateditselfeverysummer,asreliablyasthetides.
Butthissummerwasdifferent.Katiewokeearly,eagertohearGulliver'sfamiliarcry.Instead,sheheardthe
sparrowsquarrelinginthebushes,thelowhumoffishingboatsgoingoutthroughthemorningmist,andthesoft
soundofsmallwaveshittingtherocks.Theseweretheusualsoundsoftheharbor,yettheyfeltemptywithout
Gulliver'spresence.Katiestaredatheruntouchedbreadduringbreakfast.uHc'snotcoming,“shesaidquietly,her
heartsinking.
“Maybehemissedtheferry,^^Dadjoked,tryingtolightenthemood.
"Orfoundhimselfanewgirlfriend,UncleRalphjokedwithagrin.
Katiebarelysmiled.ShehadlovedGulliverforaslongasshecouldremember,andhisabsencefehpersonal.
Afterbreakfast,shegrabbedhercameraandwandereddowntotheharbor.Theshelteredharborwasbusywithits
usualactivity:boatsgentlyrockedwiththesoftbreeze,andthesunlightplayedonthewater,sparklinglikea
thousandtinydiamonds.Itwaspicturesque,butnotthepictureKatielongedtocapture.
Hereyesmovedtotheboathouseroof,Gulliver'sfavoriteplacetorest.Itwasempty,aswerethenearby
banksandrocks.ShecalledouttoErnest,anoldfriendwholivedonahouseboatwithhisdog,Shipmate."Hi,
Ernest.SeenGullivef?”
“Notyet,Katie,“Ernestansweredwithasympatheticsmile.Hisanswerdeepenedherworry.Asshepatted
Shipmateandwatchedtheboatsdrift,sherealizedthatsummerwithoutGulliverfeltincomplete—likesomething
magicalwasmissing.
注意;
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題旨的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Thenextmorning,Katietookonelastlookat(heboathouseroof.
Justthen,aloudcryechoedthroughtheair,lkKcc-aah!Kec-aah!”
3.(24-25高三下?山東?開學(xué)考試)閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇
完整的短文。
GrgaBrkieneverexpectedthatamountain-climbingtripwouldputhiminsuchadesperatesituation.That
Sunday,whileclimbingthehighestpeakoftheVelebitmountainrange,whichwasabout5,800feetabovecoastline,
heaccidentallyslippedandfellnearly5(X)feetdownasnowyslope(斜坡).Thefallcausedhislegtobeseverely
brokenandhecouldn'tmoveatall.Hewasfilledwithfear,knowingclearlythatifnoonecametorescuehim,he
mightdieofthefreezingtemperatureinthissnowyplace.
Fortunately,twonearbyhikersspottedBrkeandhiseight-month-oldAlaskanmalamute(阿拉斯加犬),
North,atthebottomoftheslope.However,theycouldn'treachthemsafely.Afterabriefdiscussion,theyknew
theyhadnochoicebuttorushoffinsearchofprofessionalrescuers.Beforetheyleft,theydroppedsomenecessary
suppliestothebottomoftheslopesothatBrkiecouldkeephisstrengthandenergy.Inspiteofthat,Brkiecouldn't
helpbeingshivering(顫抖)inthesnowwiththetemperaturegettinglowerandlower.
Atthiscriticalmoment,Nortli,sensingitsmaster'sgreatdanger,immediatelysprangintoaction.Itcircled
aroundBrkieafewtimes,asifassessingthebestwaytohelp.Then,withagentleyetdeterminedmotion,itslowly
andcarcfiillylaiditselfoverBrkie,sbody,makingsuretocoverasmuchofhimaspossible.AsanAlaskan
malamute,Northarcnaturallyresistanttocold,whosewaterproofdoublecoatscankeepitwarmevenin
temperaturesaslowas-20°F.Nowitwaslikeawarmlittlesun,tightlyguardingBrkie.Northremainedperfectly
still,andwasalerttoanysignsofapproachinghelporpotentialdanger,asifithadtakenon(hegreatresponsibility
ofbeingBrkie'sguardianandprotectinghismasterfromanypossibledanger.
注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
BeforeBrkielostconsciousness(意識),heheardNorthbarkingloudly.
Finally,therescuersmanagedtosaveandrushBrkietothehospitalwithNorth.
4.(2025?云南紅河?二模)閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短
文。
Ourtcn-ycar-oldson,Eric,wasahappybuthyperactive(多動癥)child.Althoughhewasquitebrightand
hadawarmspiritwithabrightsmilelightinguphisface,hehadlearningdifficultiesinfocusingonreadingand
wri:ing.Hestruggledwithunderstandinginstructionsorrememberingnewinformation,causinghimtofallbehind
inclass.Thepsychologistdidtheteststhatshowedhelikedanimals,sowctookintworabbits,hopingthatcaring
forthemwouldimprovehiscondition.
OneSundaymoming,awanrlittlehandurgentlypattedmycheek.t4Mom,wakeup!There'sabigstonn.We
havetobringinBucketandCaptainp,Instin
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