Unit1Art同步寫作讀后續(xù)寫微技能及實踐

PBL教學(xué)模式探究系列：微技能語料(XB3U1)動作描寫Asaresult,painters

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religiousthemes.Theybegantoadoptamorehumanisticattitudetolife.Kings,nobles,andpeopleofhighrankwantedtopurchaseaccuratepicturesofthemselvesandthepeopletheyloved.Fromthis,ImpressionismemergedinFrance.Inthiswork,Monet’saimwastoconveythelightandmovementinthesceneWhilemanyImpressionistspaintedscenesofnatureordailylife,others,suchasRenoir(1841–1919),focusedonpeople.7.Hesoughtto

shownotjusttheouterimageofhissubjects,buttheirinnerwarmthandhumanityaswell.8.PainterssuchasPicasso(1881–1973)triedtoanalysetheshapeswhichexistedinthenaturalworldbutinanewway,withCubism.9.Whattheyattemptedtodowasnolongershowreality,butinsteadtoaskthequestion,“Whatisart?”心理描寫1.Thus,artistswerenot

interestedinpaintingrealisticscenes.StepOne:Revision(復(fù)習(xí))1.

我想我們應(yīng)該專攻一兩項大比賽。(concentrateon)________________________________________________________________________.2.

他擺出一副滿不在乎的樣子。(adopt)____________________________________.3.

保存好收據(jù)作為購貨憑證。(purchase)_____________________________________.4.

我們來到明媚的陽光下。(emerge)__________________________________.5.

請向你的妻子轉(zhuǎn)達我的歉意。(convey)___________________________________________.IthinkweshouldconcentrateononeortwoofthereallybigtournamentsHeadoptedanairofindifferenceKeepyourreceiptasproofofpurchaseWeemergedintobrightsunlightPleaseconveymyapologiestoyourwifeStepTwo:Check(檢測)6.油漆開始起皮剝落了。(paint)_________________________.7.

我想我們現(xiàn)在該咨詢一下律師了。(seek)________________________________.8.

他試圖分析自己的感情。(analyse)_______________________________.9.不要試圖自己修理這個東西。(attempt)__________________________________.10.明天你有興趣去看賽馬嗎？(beinterestedin)__________________________________________________ThepaintisstartingtopeeloffIthinkit’stimewesoughtlegaladviceHetriedtoanalysehisfeelingsDonotattempttorepairthisyourselfWouldyoubeinterestedingoingtothehorseracestomorrow?StepTwo:Check(檢測)細節(jié)描寫結(jié)構(gòu)1:主+謂1...,謂2...,and謂3....句型多個連續(xù)動作，用“主語+謂語動詞1,謂語動詞2and謂語動詞3”，按動作先后或邏輯排列，簡潔呈現(xiàn)連貫動作流。遷移示例Hearrangedtheexhibition,introducedtheRenaissanceworksandexplainedtheartisticbreakthroughs.他布置展覽，介紹文藝復(fù)興作品，講解藝術(shù)突破。賞析依次呈現(xiàn)“布置展覽-介紹作品-講解突破”連貫動作。Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?StepThree:Learningthenew(知新)仿寫練習(xí)1-主+謂1...,謂2...,and謂3....在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題1.They_________theceramicvase,_________itshistoricalvalueand_________itasapermanentcollection.他們端詳陶瓷花瓶，評估其歷史價值，買下它作為永久藏品。2.Thesculptor________thebronze,______thenoblefigureand__________thememorialwords.雕塑家熔化青銅，雕刻崇高人物像，寫下紀念文字。3.Visitors_________thegallery,__________theImpressionistpaintingsand______photoswiththewaterlilyworks.游客們走進畫廊，欣賞印象派畫作，與睡蓮作品合影。observedevaluatedpurchasedmeltedcarvedwroteenteredadmiredtook句型“主語+謂語動詞+非謂語動詞（現(xiàn)在分詞/過去分詞，體現(xiàn)伴隨肢體動作或心理狀態(tài)）”，讓動作與伴隨情況融合，豐富表意。遷移示例MonetpaintedbythepondinGiverny,focusingonthechanginglightofwaterlilies.莫奈在吉維尼的池塘邊作畫，專注于睡蓮的光影變化。賞析“painted”是謂語，“focusingonthechanginglightofwaterlilies”現(xiàn)在分詞短語表伴隨動作細節(jié)描寫結(jié)構(gòu)2:謂語動詞+非謂語動詞（描述肢體動作/心理）Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?StepThree:Learningthenew(知新)仿寫練習(xí)2-謂語動詞+非謂語動詞（描述肢體動作/心理）在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題1.Theartcritic________thePicassowork,________byitsCubistinnovation.藝術(shù)評論家看著畢加索的作品，被其立體主義創(chuàng)新所震撼。過去分詞短語表伴隨狀態(tài)2.She_________throughtheexhibition,______particularlyfondofthehumanisticsculptures.她漫步在展覽中，尤其喜愛富有人文精神的雕塑?，F(xiàn)在分詞短語表伴隨心理3.Thephotographer________thesunriseoverthemountain,________toconveytheprimitivebeautyofnature.攝影師拍攝山間日出，希望傳達大自然的原始之美?，F(xiàn)在分詞短語表伴隨目的viewedshockedwanderedbeing

capturedhoping句型先以非謂語動詞（多為現(xiàn)在分詞）呈現(xiàn)肢體動作，后接句子說明心理，把外在動作和內(nèi)在情緒關(guān)聯(lián)，讓情緒表達更具畫面感。遷移示例StaringattheRenaissancepainting,hesaidhewasamazedbytherealisticdescriptionofhumanity.凝視著文藝復(fù)興畫作，他說自己被對人性的寫實描繪所震撼。賞析“StaringattheRenaissancepainting”展現(xiàn)肢體動作，后續(xù)句子點明震撼心理細節(jié)描寫結(jié)構(gòu)3:情緒+動作融合（非謂語動詞（描述肢體動作）+句子（描述心理））Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?StepThree:Learningthenew(知新)仿寫練習(xí)3-情緒+動作融合（非謂語動詞（描述肢體動作）+句子（描述心理）)在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題1.______attheinkpainting"FeelingfromMountainandWater",she______theartist'ssubjectiveemotionstouchedherdeeply.凝視著《溪山行旅圖》水墨畫，她說藝術(shù)家的主觀情感深深打動了她。非謂語體現(xiàn)動作，句子說明觸動心理2.______hisbrushgently,he______hewantedtocapturethefleetinglightofthesunrise.輕柔地握著畫筆，他說想捕捉日出轉(zhuǎn)瞬即逝的光線。非謂語表肢體，句子表渴望心理3._________theexhibitioncatalog,they___________themedievalworkswereworthyoftheirreputationforreligiousdevotion.翻閱展覽目錄，他們說中世紀作品在宗教虔誠表達上名不虛傳。非謂語展動作，句子表認可心理StaringsaidHoldingstatedSkimmingcommented句型非謂語動詞（如現(xiàn)在分詞）體現(xiàn)心理，句子進一步闡釋心理，并用“with+名詞+形容詞/現(xiàn)在分詞”復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)描繪神態(tài)，多維度渲染情緒。遷移示例Thrilled,theaudiencewatchedtheanimation"TadpolesSearchingforMother"witheyesfullofcuriosity.觀眾激動不已，看著動畫《小蝌蚪找媽媽》，眼里充滿好奇。賞析“Thrilled”表心理，“witheyesfullofcuriosity”復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)描神態(tài)細節(jié)描寫結(jié)構(gòu)4:情緒+神態(tài)融合（非謂語動詞（描述心理）+句子（描述心理+with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)（神態(tài)描寫））Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?StepThree:Learningthenew(知新)仿寫練習(xí)4-情緒+神態(tài)融合（非謂語動詞（描述心理）+句子（描述心理+with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)（神態(tài)描寫）在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題1.__________,theartstudentanalyzedthesketchwithhiseyes______onit.專注地，美術(shù)生分析素描，目不轉(zhuǎn)睛的盯著它。非謂語表心理，復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)描神態(tài)2.___________,sheappreciatedtheBuddhistsculpturewitha______smileonherface.崇敬地，她欣賞佛教雕塑，臉上帶著虔誠的微笑。非謂語體現(xiàn)心理，復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)繪神態(tài)3._________________,theydiscussedthesymphony"TheCowboy’sFlute"withtheirvoices______withexcitement.熱烈地，他們討論《牧笛》交響樂，聲音里充滿興奮。非謂語表心理，復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)描狀態(tài)AttentivelyfixedRespectfullyholyEagerlyfilled句型先用形容詞體現(xiàn)人物心理，接著句子描述肢體動作，再以“with+名詞+形容詞/現(xiàn)在分詞”復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)補充神態(tài)，借環(huán)境或場景關(guān)聯(lián)心理、動作與神態(tài)。遷移示例Astonished,thevisitorwalkedthroughtheRenaissancehallwithbreathheldatMichelangelo'ssculpture.游客驚嘆不已，在文藝復(fù)興展廳漫步，看到米開朗基羅的雕塑屏住了呼吸。賞析“Astonished”表心理，“walkedthroughtheRenaissancehall”是動作，“withbreathheld”描神態(tài)細節(jié)描寫結(jié)構(gòu)5:環(huán)境描寫（形容詞（描述心理）+句子（描述肢體動作）+with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)（神態(tài)描寫））Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?StepThree:Learningthenew(知新)仿寫練習(xí)5-環(huán)境描寫（形容詞（描述心理）+句子（描述肢體動作）+with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)（神態(tài)描寫））在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題1.___________,thescholar________themedievalmanuscriptwithhisattention______ontheChristiansymbols.恭敬地，學(xué)者研究中世紀手稿，注意力集中在基督教符號上。形容詞表心理，句子描動作，復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)繪狀態(tài)2.______,she______thewaterlilypondinGivernywithherface_________indelight.愉悅地，她望著吉維尼的睡蓮池，臉上洋溢著喜悅。形容詞體現(xiàn)心理，句子表動作，復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)描神態(tài)3.____________,they______theCubismexhibitionwiththeirminds______bythemulti-dimensionalexpressions.震撼地，他們參觀立體主義展覽，思想被多維表達方式所沖擊。形容詞表心理，句子描動作，復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)繪感受RespectfullystudiedfocusedJoyfullygazedsmilingAmazinglyvisitedstruck句型用視覺、聽覺、嗅覺相關(guān)形容詞描繪環(huán)境，營造氛圍，為故事添背景色彩，讓讀者借感官感受場景。遷移示例Thegrandgallery,withthesoundofwhispersandthesmellofoldcanvas,wasfullofartisticatmosphere.（宏偉的畫廊里，低語聲和舊畫布的氣味交織，充滿藝術(shù)氛圍。賞析“grand”（視覺）、“soundofwhispers”（聽覺）、“smellofoldcanvas”（嗅覺）營造氛圍）細節(jié)描寫結(jié)構(gòu)6:環(huán)境描寫（形容詞（視覺、聽覺、嗅覺））Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?StepThree:Learningthenew(知新)仿寫練習(xí)6-環(huán)境描寫（形容詞（視覺、聽覺、嗅覺））在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題1.The______studio,withthe______ofbrushesmovingandthe______ofoilpaints,showedabusycreativescene.明亮的工作室里，畫筆移動的聲音和油畫顏料的氣味呈現(xiàn)出繁忙的創(chuàng)作景象。填視覺、聽覺、嗅覺相關(guān)詞匯2.The______square,withthe______ofchildrenlaughingandthe_________offreshflowers,hostedanoutdoorartfair.熱鬧的廣場上，孩子們的笑聲和鮮花的香氣中，正舉辦一場戶外藝術(shù)展。用視覺、聽覺、嗅覺相關(guān)詞匯3.The______temple,withthe______ofbellsringingandthe______ofincense,createdasolemnreligiousatmosphere.古老的寺廟里，鐘聲和香燭的氣味營造出莊嚴的宗教氛圍。借視覺、聽覺、嗅覺詞匯營造氛圍brightsoundsmelllivelysoundfragranceancientsoundsmell句型把謂語或謂語部分提前，如“副詞/介詞短語+謂語+主語”，突出強調(diào)，讓句子有變化、更緊湊，增強表達力度。遷移示例OnlyduringtheRenaissancedidsuchabreakthroughinrealisticpaintingemerge.（只有在文藝復(fù)興時期，寫實繪畫才有如此突破。賞析“OnlyduringtheRenaissance”提前，引發(fā)倒裝，強調(diào)時期細節(jié)描寫結(jié)構(gòu)7:倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?StepThree:Learningthenew(知新)仿寫練習(xí)7-倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容在此處添加內(nèi)容點擊此處添加標題1._______________________________________didpeoplerecognizethevalueofthishumbleinkpainting.直到專家進行精確鑒定后，人們才認識到這幅不起眼的水墨畫的價值。用倒裝突出意識到的時機2._____________________canweunderstandthedepthofhumanisticspiritinRembrandt'sworks.只有通過研究他的生平，我們才能理解倫勃朗作品中人文精神的深度。借倒裝強調(diào)理解的方式3.________________________cametheinspirationforMonet's"WaterLilies"series.在吉維尼的池塘邊，莫奈《睡蓮》系列的靈感涌現(xiàn)了。用倒裝突出靈感出現(xiàn)的情境OnlyafterexpertsmadeapreciseappraisalOnlybystudyinghislifeBythepondinGiverny續(xù)寫原文Lilylovedschool.However,therewasoneclassLilyworriedaboutmorethananyother—art.Shedidn’tknowwhyshejustwasn’tanygoodatdrawing,painting,orcutting.Ms.Clay,theartteacher,stoodatthefrontoftheroom.“Class,nextFridayourschoolisgoingtohaveanartcompetition,”sheannounced.Ms.Claywasagreatteacher,andLilylikedheralot.ButthisannouncementmadeLilynervous.“Everyoneintheschoolwillcreateapieceofartworktoshowinthelibrary.Youcanusethedifferenttypesofartworkwehavebeenstudying.”Ms.ClaywasquiteexcitedwhenshespokewhileLilyfoundherselfsinkinglowerinherchair.Lilyhadthewholeweekendtoworkonherproject,butshecouldnotthinkofanythingtodo.OnMonday,Lilyfeltfrightened,soafterschoolLilyaskedMs.Clayifshecouldwriteanartpaperinsteadofdoinganartproject.19StepFive:Practice（操練）續(xù)寫原文“Iunderstandthisprojectscaredyou,Lily.”Ms.Claysaid.“Justremember,youcancreateanykindofartyouwant.”Ms.Claysmiledather.“Artisaperson’swayofexpressinghisorherfeelings—itisn’talwayspainting,drawing,orcutting.Iknowyouwillthinkofsomethingverycreative,andIcan’twaittoseeit.”WhenLilyarrivedhome,shetookoutapieceofpaperandapencil.SherememberedMs.Clay’swords.“Artisaperson’swayofexpressinghisorherfeelings.”Lilywrotetheword“terrified”onherpaper.Shecrumpled(揉皺)thepaperandthrewittothesideofherdesk.ThenLilystaredatthecrumpledball.Suddenlyanideastruckher.Whynotcreatesomethingoutofcrumpledpaper?20段首句Para.1：

Thecrumpledpaperremindedherofasnowball.————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————Para.2：

OnFriday,Lilycarefullycarriedherprojectintothelibrary.————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————21續(xù)寫原文分析22莉莉熱愛學(xué)校，但唯獨對美術(shù)課憂心忡忡，因為她不擅長繪畫、作畫和裁剪。美術(shù)老師宣布學(xué)校將舉辦藝術(shù)比賽，這讓莉莉倍感緊張。周末她毫無靈感，周一便向老師提出能否寫一篇藝術(shù)論文代替創(chuàng)作。老師鼓勵她藝術(shù)有多種表達方式，讓她發(fā)揮創(chuàng)意?；丶液螅蚶驈娜喟櫟募垐F中獲得靈感。點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點23續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：Thecrumpledpaperremindedherofasnowball.

皺巴巴的紙團讓她想起了雪球。受此啟發(fā)，莉莉仿佛打開了靈感的大門。她迅速在家里翻找紙張，將它們一張張揉成大小各異的紙團。接下來的幾個小時，她全神貫注地擺弄著這些紙團，精心雕琢。她先用較大的紙團搭建雪人的身體，再用稍小的紙團做腦袋，將它們巧妙拼接。之后，她找來一根橙色紙條，扭成胡蘿卜的形狀，當作雪人的鼻子；用黑色彩筆在小紙片上畫了兩個圓，當作雪人的眼睛；還從舊圍巾上剪下一段，給雪人圍上?？粗饾u成型的雪人，莉莉心中滿是成就感。24續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：OnFriday,Lilycarefullycarriedherprojectintothelibrary.、

周五，莉莉小心翼翼地捧著她的作品走進圖書館。一路上，她都生怕弄壞了這個凝聚著自己心血的雪人。到了圖書館，她輕輕將雪人放在展示臺上，退后半步，仔細端詳。周圍的同學(xué)陸續(xù)進來，看到她的作品，都投來驚訝與贊嘆的目光。有的同學(xué)湊近詢問她是如何想到這個創(chuàng)意的，莉莉微笑著分享自己的創(chuàng)作過程。當美術(shù)老師走來，對她豎起大拇指時，莉莉的笑容更加燦爛了。她終于明白，藝術(shù)果然有無限可能，自己也能創(chuàng)造出獨特的作品。25Thecrumpledpaperremindedherofasnowball.

Spurredbythissparkofinspiration,Lilyscurriedaroundthehouse,rummagingthroughdrawersandshelvesinsearchofmorepaper.Withenthusiasm,shebegancrumplingthesheetsintospheresofvaryingsizes.Fortheensuinghours,shewascompletelyengrossedinthetaskofshapingthesepaperballsintoaworkofart.Employingthelargerballsasthebase,shemeticulouslyconstructedthesnowman'sbody,andthen,withequalcare,addedthesmallerballsforthehead,seamlesslypiecingthemtogether.Subsequently,shesourcedanorangestripofpaper,deftlytwistingitintothelikenessofacarrotforthenose.Usingablackmarker,shep