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第二節(jié)（滿分25分）

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Aftersixmonthsofsearching,Ihadn’tfoundacarformysixteen-year-oldsonMarcus,whojustwantedablackcar.EverythingI’dseenrequiredrepairs,wasadifferentcolor,orwentaboveour$7,000budget.

MydrivetoworkwasalmostanhoureachdayandIoftenstayedlate.Marcus’sdad,Robert,sufferedfromaseriousillnessandhardlydrove.Marcusneededtoattenddailyfootballpractice,weeklyteammeetingsanddinners,aswellasotherafter-schoolactivities,forcinghimtotakerideswithfriends.

Oneevening,Marcusarrivedhomeinateammate’snewblackcar.WhentheteammateDaVarisrolleddownthewindowtosayhello,thatnew-carsmellgotintotheair.Ibentinsidetolookatthebrown,softleatherseats.

“Verynice,"Isaid.

Hisfacebrightenedwithpride.“Thanks.Marcussaidyouwerelookingforacar.”

“I’msurewe’llfindsomethingsoon,"IspokewithconfidenceIdidn’tfeel.Itwouldn’tbeanewcar,forsure.IturnedtoMarcus.AneagerlookcrossedhisfaceasDavariswavedandbackedoutofthedriveway.Thatlookhurtmyheart.

Thenextday,IranintothemotherofoneofMarcus’sclassmates-adoctor.Thefamilyhadalsobeentryingtofindacarfortheirson.“Oneofmypatientswantstosellhiscar,butmysondoesn’tlikeit,”Shetoldme.Iaskedwhattypeofcar,anditturnedouttobeatthetopofmywishlist.“Canyouarrangeformetoseeit"

Thenextday,RobertandIwenttothehomeoftheelderlymanwhowassellingthecar.Itwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch.Itonlycovered12,000milesalthoughitwassixyearsold!Havingexperiencedsomanyfailuresbefore,Iwasalmostafraidtotest-driveit.Buttheenginemadeanormalsoundandthespeedingwassmooth.Thiscarhadbeenwellmaintained(保養(yǎng)).Thereremainedonequestion,abigone-theprice.

注意：

（1）續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；

（2）請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedourofthecar.

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamount(金額)we’dsaved!

第二節(jié)（滿分25分）

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Aftersixmonthsofsearching,Ihadn’tfoundacarformysixteen-year-oldsonMarcus,whojustwantedablackcar(定從).EverythingI’dseen(定從)requiredrepairs(非謂語動(dòng)詞做后置定語),wasadifferentcolor,orwentaboveour$7,000budget.

MydrivetoworkwasalmostanhoureachdayandIoftenstayedlate.Marcus’sdad,Robert,sufferedfromaseriousillnessandhardlydrove.Marcusneededtoattenddailyfootballpractice,weeklyteammeetingsanddinners,aswellasotherafter-schoolactivities,forcinghimtotakerideswithfriends(非謂語動(dòng)詞做結(jié)果狀語).

Oneevening,Marcusarrivedhomeinateammate’snewblackcar.WhentheteammateDaVarisrolleddownthewindowtosayhello,thatnew-carsmellgotintotheair.Ibentinsidetolookatthebrown,softleatherseats.

“Verynice,”Isaid.

Hisfacebrightenedwithpride.“Thanks.Marcussaidyouwerelookingforacar(賓從)."

“I’msurewe’llfindsomethingsoon(賓從),”IspokewithconfidenceIdidn’tfeel(定從).Itwouldn’tbeanewcar,forsure.IturnedtoMarcus.AneagerlookcrossedhisfaceasDavariswavedandbackedoutofthedriveway(狀從).Thatlookhurtmyheart.

Thenextday,IranintothemotherofoneofMarcus’sclassmates-adoctor.Thefamilyhadalsobeentryingtofindacarfortheirson.“Oneofmypatientswantstosellhiscar,butmysondoesn’tlikeit,"Shetoldme.Iaskedwhattypeofcar(賓從),anditturnedouttobeatthetopofmywishlist.“Canyouarrangeformetoseeit”

Thenextday,RobertandIwenttothehomeoftheelderlymanwhowassellingthecar(定從).Itwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch.Itonlycovered12,000milesalthoughitwassixyearsold(狀從)!Havingexperiencedsomanyfailuresbefore,Iwasalmostafraidtotest-driveit.Buttheenginemadeanormalsoundandthespeedingwassmooth.Thiscarhadbeenwellmaintained(保養(yǎng)).Thereremainedonequestion,abigone-theprice.

注意：

（1）續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；

（2）請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedourofthecar.

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamount(金額)we’dsaved!

1.續(xù)寫分析（表格）

分析角度內(nèi)容原文反應(yīng)句

類型家庭情感類讀后續(xù)寫“Marcusneededtoattenddailyfootballpractice..."

思路構(gòu)思構(gòu)思重點(diǎn)為展現(xiàn)母親對(duì)兒子的愛與努力，圍繞母親尋找汽車的過程，著重情感轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)與人物心理活動(dòng)。布局包括矛盾沖突（預(yù)算有限與兒子需求的矛盾）、情感轉(zhuǎn)折（意外獲得黑車的機(jī)會(huì)）、解決沖突（最終買到滿意的汽車）?！癕arcusarrivedhomeinateammate’snewblackcar.Thatlookhurtmyheart.”

框架提煉-開頭：描述母親對(duì)兒子的擔(dān)憂和努力；

-中間：圍繞與醫(yī)生母親的對(duì)話展開情節(jié)；

-結(jié)尾：以解決沖突并讓兒子感到滿足為高潮。“I’msurewe’llfindsomethingsoon,"IspokewithconfidenceIdidn’tfeel.

實(shí)施使用“故事山”模式：

-起點(diǎn)：找車失敗，陷入困境；

-上升：得知有一輛車可買；

-高潮：見到車后發(fā)現(xiàn)完美符合需求；

-下降：價(jià)格談判；

-解決：買車成功并滿足情感需求?！癏avingexperiencedsomanyfailuresbefore,Iwasalmostafraidtotest-driveit."

承接事項(xiàng)-人物心情銜接：母親的憂慮到滿足；

-語言銜接：保留對(duì)Marcus期待的細(xì)節(jié)描寫；

-情節(jié)銜接：黑車線索與預(yù)算線索融合?！癆neagerlookcrossedhisfaceasDavariswavedandbackedoutofthedriveway.”

設(shè)計(jì)內(nèi)容巧妙設(shè)計(jì)車主背景（如老人對(duì)汽車的感情），加入更多心理和環(huán)境描寫，如“握著方向盤時(shí)的猶豫”，增強(qiáng)代入感?！癐twasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch.Itonlycovered12,000milesalthoughitwassixyearsold!”

2.StoryMountain思維導(dǎo)圖分析

StoryMountain

起點(diǎn)：家庭經(jīng)濟(jì)有限，買車需求迫切。

原文句子：“Ihadn’tfoundacarformysixteen-year-oldsonMarcus."

上升：遇到醫(yī)生母親，得知有機(jī)會(huì)買到車。

原文句子：“Oneofmypatientswantstosellhiscar.”

高潮：見到黑車，符合所有期待。

原文句子：“Itwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch."

下降：價(jià)格懸念。

原文句子：“Thereremainedonequestion,abigone—theprice.”

解決：最終價(jià)格正好符合預(yù)算。

原文句子：“Itwastheexactamountwe’dsaved!"

3.英文例句與高級(jí)替換詞

情境描寫例句

動(dòng)作描寫

Sheclenchedherfists,herheartpoundingwithanticipation.

Heranhisfingersacrosstheshinyblacksurfaceofthecar.

Shehesitatedbeforeopeningthecardoor,herfingerstremblingslightly.

Henoddedeagerly,unabletohidehisexcitement.

Sheletoutalongsigh,reliefwashingoverher.

Headjustedhisposture,sittingstraighterwithadeterminedlook.

Hereyesdartedaroundtheroom,searchingforasignofapproval.

Hepressedhisfootonthegaspedalgently,feelingthesmoothacceleration.

心理描寫

Amixtureofdoubtandhopeswirledinhermind.

Hecouldn’tshakeoffthenervousfeelinginhischest.

Hermindracedthroughpossibilities,tryingtomakeadecision.

Awaveofexcitementcrashedoverhim,leavinghimbreathless.

Shebattledherinnerfears,determinedtomaketherightchoice.

Hisheartsankatthethoughtofyetanotherfailure.

Relieffloodedherassherealizedeverythinghadworkedout.

Theweightofuncertaintylifted,leavingherfeelinglighter.

環(huán)境描寫

Thesunglintedoffthecar’spolishedsurface,castinglongshadowsonthedriveway.

Thefaintsmellofleatherlingeredintheair,addingtotheluxuryofthecar’sinterior.

Acoolbreezerustledtheleaves,creatingacalmandpeacefulatmosphere.

Thesmall,neatgaragewasfilledwiththefaintscentofmotoroil.

Thequiethumoftheenginefilledthespace,asoothingrhythm.

Theeveninglightbathedthedrivewayinwarmhuesoforangeandpink.

Theoldman’shousestoodinasereneneighborhood,surroundedbybloomingflowers.

Thefaintsoundofbirdschirpingbrokethestillnessofthemoment.

高級(jí)替換詞

場(chǎng)景常用單詞高級(jí)替換

描述情緒happyoverjoyed,elated

sadheartbroken,despondent

nervousjittery,apprehensive

描述動(dòng)作walkstride,saunter

lookgaze,glance

環(huán)境描述beautifulpicturesque,breathtaking

quietserene,tranquil

4.高中語法現(xiàn)象與語料積累

語法現(xiàn)象例句分析

過去完成時(shí)“Havingexperiencedsomanyfailuresbefore,Iwasalmostafraidtotest-driveit.”表達(dá)動(dòng)作完成的先后順序，用于突出母親之前的挫折經(jīng)歷。

定語從句“Itwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch,whichmademefallinlovewithit."“which”引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句，補(bǔ)充說明汽車外觀的吸引力。

現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語“Aneagerlookcrossinghisface,Marcuswavedathisfriend."描寫Marcus神態(tài)與動(dòng)作，同時(shí)表現(xiàn)人物心理。

名詞性從句“WhattouchedmemostwasMarcus’seagerexpression.”“What"引導(dǎo)主語從句，表達(dá)觸動(dòng)母親的具體情感。

虛擬語氣“Ifithadn’tbeenforthedoctor,wewouldn’thavefoundthecar.”表達(dá)假設(shè)情況，突出醫(yī)生母親的重要作用。

生詞短語積累

budget(n.)預(yù)算

Synonyms:allowance,allocation

Antonyms:overspend

Example:Shesetastrictbudgetforherson’scar.

scratch(n.)劃痕

Synonyms:mark,blemish

Antonyms:perfection

Example:Thecarwasshinyblack,withhardlyascratch.

PossibleAnswers

Version1:

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedoutofthecar.Havingthoroughlyinspectedthevehicle(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作),IexchangedanervousglancewithRobert.Theelderlymansmiledwarmly,gesturingusintohislivingroom(非謂語動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作).“I’vekeptitwell-maintainedforyears,"hesaid,atraceofnostalgiainhisvoice(獨(dú)立主格).Afterabriefpause,henamedtheprice:$7,000.Myheartskippedabeat—itwasexactlyourbudget.Foramoment,disbeliefrenderedmespeechless.Marcus’slongingfaceflashedinmymind,andIfeltasenseofreliefwashoverme.“We’lltakeit,”Isaidfirmly.Theelderlyman’seyeslitupashehandedmethekeys(狀從).Drivinghomelater(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作),IimaginedMarcus’sreaction.Thethoughtofhisjoymadeeverystruggleworthit.

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamountwe’dsaved(定從)!Thenextmorning,Marcus’sexcitementknewnoboundswhenhesawtheshinyblackcar(狀從)parked(非謂語動(dòng)詞做后置定語)inourdriveway.Hiseyeswidened,andhelookedatmeinsheeramazement.“Isthis...forme"hestammered.“Everybitofit(習(xí)語),”Irepliedwithasmile.Heranhisfingersacrossthepolishedsurface,hisgringrowingwider(獨(dú)立主格).Marcuseagerlyclimbedinside,adjustingtherearviewmirror(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作)asifitwerehisthrone(狀從).Thesunlitmorningreflectedoffthecar’sspotlesswindows(環(huán)境描寫),symbolizingafreshstart(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作).AsIwatchedhimdriveofftofootballpractice(狀從),hisenthusiasmwascontagious.Forthefirsttimeinmonths,Ifeltaprofoundsenseoffulfillment,knowingthatloveandpersistencehadwontheday(賓從).

Version2

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedoutofthecar.Theoldmanpouredustea,hisvoicekind(獨(dú)立主格)ashesharedstoriesaboutthecar'spast(狀從).“Thiscarbroughtmegreatjoy,"hesaid,hishandstremblingslightly(獨(dú)立主格).Whenherevealedtheprice,mybreathcaught(獨(dú)立主格)—$7,000,preciselywhatwehadsaved(同位從).Itfeltlikefate.Robert,usuallyreserved(adj做補(bǔ)語),whispered,“Wemusttakeit.”Signingthepaperwork(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作),Ifeltawaveofgratitudeforthisunexpectedgift.Onthedriveback,thesmoothhumoftheengineandthesightofthesettingsunpaintedtheperfectscene(環(huán)境描寫).Icouldn’twaittorevealthesurprisetoMarcus,imagininghiswidesmileanddisbelief(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作)whenhefinallysawthecarofhisdreams(狀從).

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamountwe’dsaved!IcalledMarcustothedrivewaythatevening.Hesteppedouthesitantly,andwhenhiseyeslandedontheblackcar(狀從),theylituplikefireworks.“It’syours,"Isaidsoftly.Hefrozeforamoment,thensprintedtowardme,wrappingmeinatighthug(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作).“Thankyou,Mom!”Hisvoicecrackedwithemotion.Watchinghiminspecttheinteriorwithawe,Inoticedtheburdenofourpaststruggleslift.Thatnight,Marcuswashedthecarunderthemoonlight,humminghappily(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作).Thoughthejourneytothismomenthadbeentough(狀從),itwaswortheverysleeplessnight.Thememoryofhisjoywasareminderofthepowerofperseveranceandlove.

Version3

Paragraph1:Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedoutofthecar.Theelderlyman,leaningslightlyonhiscane(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作),motionedustohisporch.“Thiscarhasbeenmypride,"hesaid,histonetingedwithnostalgia(獨(dú)立主格).“ButI’dratherseeayoungboyenjoyitnow.”Theprice—$7,000—wasamiracle.Asreliefcoursedthroughme(狀從),Ieagerlyhandedoverthemoney.“It’llbeingoodhands,"Ipromised.Drivinghome(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做時(shí)間狀語),Icouldn’tstopsmiling.Theenginepurredlikeadream,andeveryturnofthewheelfilledmewithanticipationforMarcus’sreaction(細(xì)節(jié)描寫心理環(huán)境).Thiscarwasn’tjustagift;itwasproofofourhardwork,apromisefulfilled.

Paragraph2:Itwastheexactamountwe’dsaved!Thenextmorning,Marcusstumbledoutside,rubbinghissleepyeyes(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作).Whenhesawtheblackcar(狀從),hefroze,mouthagape(獨(dú)立主格).“Noway...”hewhispered,thenbrokeintoarun,touchingthecar(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作)asiftoconfirmitwasreal(狀從+賓從).Hisjoywascontagious,andIlaughedashebouncedaroundlikealittlekid(人物描寫).“It’sperfect,Mom!"heexclaimed,openingthedoorandslidingintothedriver’sseat.(非謂語動(dòng)詞短做伴隨動(dòng)作)Heglancedatmethroughthewindow,hisgratitudeunspokenbutclearinhisexpression(獨(dú)立主格).Ashedroveofftopractice(狀從),Istoodthere,themorningbreezecarryingasenseofquiettriumph(狀從).Thismomentwouldbeetchedinmyheartforever.

亮點(diǎn)語法和詞匯分析

高級(jí)語法現(xiàn)象

過去完成時(shí)：

Example:"Havingthoroughlyinspectedthevehicle,IexchangedanervousglancewithRobert."

Usage:表示在過去某一動(dòng)作之前已經(jīng)完成的動(dòng)作，提升時(shí)間邏輯表達(dá)。

Relatedphrases:"Havingexperienced,""Havingdecided."

非限制性定語從句：

Example:"Thesunlitmorningreflectedoffthecar’sspotlesswindows,symbolizingafreshstart."

Usage:補(bǔ)充說明畫面細(xì)節(jié)，增加生動(dòng)性。

Synonyms:"whichindicated,""thatrevealed."

分詞短語作狀語：

Example:"Drivinghomelater,IimaginedMarcus’sreaction."

Usage:表示時(shí)間、原因或伴隨狀態(tài)，減少句子冗長(zhǎng)。

Relatedphrases:"Smilingsoftly,""Feelingrelieved."

亮點(diǎn)詞匯短語

情緒描寫

litupwithjoy:表示愉快

heartskippedabeat:表示緊張或期待

eyeswidenedinamazement:表示震驚

feltawaveofgratitude:表示感激

動(dòng)作描寫

ranhisfingersacross:表示動(dòng)作細(xì)節(jié)

frozeforamoment:表示震驚

wrappedmeinatighthug:表示情感流露

bouncedaroundlikealittlekid:生動(dòng)展現(xiàn)動(dòng)作

升級(jí)詞匯選項(xiàng)

普通詞高級(jí)替換聯(lián)想詞例句

happyelated,overjoyeddelighted,ecstatic"Shewasoverjoyedattheunexpectedgift."

surprisedastonishedshocked,stunned"Hewasastonishedbythecar’scondition."

saddespondentheartbroken,forlorn"Shefeltdespondentafterrepeatedfailures."

carvehicleautomobile,ride"Thevehiclegleamedunderthesunlight."

官方：

Backattheowner’shouse,weclimbedoutofthecar.“Howmuchareyou