高考英語讀后續(xù)寫精讀精煉（十四）一：原文重現(xiàn)BalesleftthepavementofBaseRoadandsteppedontosnow-coveredJewellTrail.Sheplannedasix-hourhikethroughNewHampshire’sMountWashingtonStatePark.Shehadpackedforalmosteveryemergencyandintendedtowalkalone.She’dcheckedtheweatherforecastpostedbytheMountWashingtonObservatorybeforesheleft.Basedonherexperience,Balesknewthatherhikewasrealistic.Besides,shehadtwoemergencyplansandextralayersofclothingtobetteradjustherbodytemperatureasconditionschanged.ThehikeupthelowerpartofJewellTrailwaspleasant.Balesfeltexcitedasshewalkedupintosnowypaths.Thesunshonethroughthetreesandcastashadowoverhersmilingface.Lessthananhourlater,loadsofdarkcloudshadreplacedthesunshine,andsnowcoveredthesurroundingtrees.Shestillsmiled.However,theweatherwasshowingitsteeth.Balesaddedevenmorelayerstoshelterherselffromthecoldwindsandthickfog.Shemadeherwayacrossthesnow-coveredridge(山脊towardMountWashingtonandbegantothinkaboutcallingitaday.Suddenly,shenoticedsomething:asinglesetoffootprintsinthesnowaheadofher,whichhadbeenmadebyapairofsneakers-typicallynotthetypeforhiking.Meanwhile,Baleswasgettingcolder,eventhoughshewasmovingfastandgeneratingsomebodyheat.Withstronggustsofwindscreamingandattackingherbackandleftside,shedecidedtoabandonherplan.Theonlything,however,keptheronthetrailwasthesneakertracksinthesnow.Paragraph1:Balesfacedadilemmaaboutwhethertofollowthetracksornot.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________二：文本解析【詳解】1.認(rèn)真讀懂所給提供的材料：通過文章描述可知，Bales是一個很有經(jīng)驗的遠足者。她計劃在新罕布什爾州的華盛頓山州立公園徒步旅行6個小時。當(dāng)她穿過白雪覆蓋的山脊向華盛頓山走去時，突然，她注意到一件事：她前面的雪地上有一串腳印，是一雙運動鞋留下的——通常不適合徒步旅行。狂風(fēng)呼嘯著襲擊她的背部和左側(cè)，她決定放棄她的計劃。然而，唯一能讓她堅持下去的是雪地上的運動鞋留下的痕跡。21·cn·jy·com2.續(xù)寫部分和前面的文章要銜接得當(dāng)，并且與原文情節(jié)發(fā)展和人物性格相一致，故事情節(jié)的向后延續(xù)發(fā)展要合乎情理?！境鎏帲?1教育名師】3.根據(jù)第一段首句Balesfacedadilemmaaboutwhethertofollowthetracksornot.(Bales面臨著是否跟隨這些足跡的兩難境地)及第二段首句Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.(她的搜尋現(xiàn)在變成了營救那個人)，第一段可以描寫B(tài)ales面臨兩難境地時的思想斗爭和最終確定去搜尋那個人。第二段則可以描述Bales搜尋到了那個人，那個人應(yīng)該身處困境，所以她對他展開了營救。21教育名師原創(chuàng)作品4.續(xù)寫的語言要盡可能與原文的語言保持風(fēng)格上的一致。文章時態(tài)以一般過去時為主。應(yīng)使用自己熟悉的句型和短語進行寫作，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒壘涫胶透呒壴~匯，以提高書面表達的檔次和可讀性。作文要層次清晰，要點全面，表達流暢，切合題干要求，句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，適當(dāng)補充信息，使篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。三：續(xù)寫單句訓(xùn)練Bales面臨著一個兩難的問題，是否遵循軌道。如果她選擇沿著走，她會增加徒步旅行增加時間和風(fēng)險。但前面的軌道表明有人可能有危險。她不能放棄這一切。她在冰凍的霧中喊道：“外面有人嗎？”你需要幫助嗎？強風(fēng)把她的聲音帶走了。然后，她小心翼翼地朝鐵軌的方向走去。她繞過一個角落，發(fā)現(xiàn)一個男人一動不動地坐著。她的搜尋現(xiàn)在變成了救了那個人。她立刻走近他，發(fā)現(xiàn)他的腳被凍傷了。她毫不猶豫地用暖和的衣服蓋住他的身體，然后給他倒了一些含糖飲料。風(fēng)呼嘯而過，如果他們不離開，他們很快就會死去。她扶著那個人，沿著小路蜿蜒前進。經(jīng)過巨大的努力，Bales設(shè)法救了這個人的命。她筋疲力盡了，她覺得這一切都是值得的。四：佳作展現(xiàn)Balesfacedadilemmaaboutwhethertofollowthetracksornot.2·1·c·n·j·y__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:【來源：21·世紀(jì)·教育·網(wǎng)】Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________五：課后練筆Iwasdoingabigclean-uprecentlyandmykidswerehelpingwhenmyson,Freddo,cameacrossaknottedhandkerchiefwithanolddarkbrowncoininside.“Mum,canIhavethis?CanIplaywiththiscoin?”heasked.Itookonelookandwasimmediatelytransportedtoanothertime.In1991,herewasatimewhenmyfriendandIworkedinabackwardAfricancountry,Niger,hitbysandstormsandburningheat.ThereweremanythingsIfounddifficultaboutthisplace—theclimateandbeggarsweremybiggestheadaches.Soafterfinishingfivemonthsofnursingworkthere,wemovedontoworkatahealthclinicintheneighboringcountry,BurkinaFaso.“It’smuchgreenerinBurkina.EventheCoketastesbetter,”thelocalsassuredus.www-2-1-cnjy-comYetthefactwasquitetheopposite.ArrivingbytaxiatourdestinationinBurkina,webegantounload.Iwasreachingformylargerpieceofluggagewhen,outofthedarkness,amotorbikewithtwomenapproachedslowly.Withoutwarning,oneofthemengrabbedmydaypackasthemotorbikesweptcloseby.Withinseconds,thepairwereoutofsight,swallowedupbythenight.Withmypassport,money,traveler’schequesallinthebag,Iwasindeeptrouble.Howfrustrating!2-1-c-n-j-yAllIwantedwastoleavethishellhole!Then,walkingthroughBurkina’sstreetsoneday,Iwasstoppedbyanoldwomanwhothrustherhandinmyface.“Cadeau(‘gift’inFrench)!Cadeau!”shecried.I’dhadenough!Iwasextremelytiredofthecountry:itspoverty,itsthieves,theheat,thedustand...everything!ItoldherangrilyandfirmlyinFrench,“Ihaveno‘cadeau’.Ihavenomoney.AthiefstoleallmymoneytwoweeksagoandnowIcan’tgetoutofyourcountry.Icannotgiveyouanything.NOTHING!”Thebeggarwomanlistenedattentively.Tomygreatsurprise,afterhearingmywords,shegavemeabroadsmile.【版權(quán)所有：21教育】Paragraph1:Shereachedintothepocketofherdress.

___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Therewasaslighttouchonmyhand;lookingdown,Isawmysonlookingatme,curious.

___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________六：單句訓(xùn)練她把手伸進衣服口袋，“那我給你一個硬幣，”她說。幸好，她把一枚深棕色的舊硬幣放在我手里。我驚訝地看著硬幣，然后又看了看那個女人。這時，我對老婦人的可怕態(tài)度感到相當(dāng)羞愧。盡管她很貧窮，但她還是能給我一些無價的東西。我理所當(dāng)然地認(rèn)為乞丐只會從別人那里得到一些東西，但布基那那個女乞丐的硬幣確實改變了我對他們的看法，她的微笑深深地打動了我的心。21我的手輕輕碰了一下，我低頭一看，看見兒子好奇地看著我?！皨寢?，我能得到這個嗎？”我能玩這枚硬幣嗎？他重復(fù)道。“你不能玩，親愛的，”我碰了碰兒子的頭，慢慢地說，“這個很特別?！边@對我來說是一段令人難忘的珍貴的記憶。來吧，讓我給你講一個故事吧。”參考答案三：單句訓(xùn)練Balesfacedadilemmaaboutwhethertofollowthetracksornot.21世紀(jì)教育網(wǎng)版權(quán)所有Ifshechosetofollowthetracks,she’daddtimeandrisktoherhiking.Butthetracksaheadsuggestedsomeonemightbeindanger.21教育網(wǎng)Shecouldn’tletthisgo.Shecalledoutintothefrozenfog,“Isanybodyoutthere?Doyouneedhelp?”Thestrongwindscarriedhervoiceaway.Thenshewalkedcautiouslyinthedirectionofthetracks.21*cnjy*comSheroundedacornerandspottedamansittingmotionlessly.Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.Sheapproachedhiminstantlyandfoundhewassufferingfromfrostbiteonhisfeet.Withoutanyhesitation,shecoveredhisbodywithwarmclothes,andthenpouredhimsomesugarydrink.21·世紀(jì)*教育網(wǎng)Thewindroaredoverandtheywoulddiesooniftheydidn’tgetoutofthere.Shesupportedthemanandinchedalongthetrail.21*cnjy*comWithgreatefforts,Balesmanagedtosavetheman’slife.【來源：21cnj*y.co*m】Exhausted,shefeltthatitwasallworthit.六：單句訓(xùn)練Shereachedintothepocketofherdress.“ThenIwillgiveyouacadeau,”sheannounced.Kindly,sheplacedanolddarkbrowncoininmyhand.Insurprise,Ilookedatthecoin,andthenatthewoman.Atthatmoment,Ifeltratherashamed,ashamedofmyterribleattitudetowardstheoldwoman.Inspiteofherpoverty,shewasabletogivemesomethingpriceless.Ihadtakenitforgrantedthatbeggarswouldonlyreceivesomethingfromothers,yetthecoinfromthebeggarwomaninBurkinatrulychangedmyviewtowardsthem,andhersmilehitthedeepestofmyheart.Therewasaslighttouchonmyhand;lookingdown,Isawmysonlookingatme,curious.“Mum,canIhavethis?CanIplaywiththiscoin?”herepeated.“Youcan’tplaywithit,honey,”Itouchedmysonontheheadandsaidslowly,“Thisoneisspecial.Itisanunforgettablepreciousmemorytome.Comeandletmetellyouastory.”四：佳作展現(xiàn)（一）Balesfacedadilemmaaboutwhethertofollowthetracksornot.Ifshechosetofollowthetracks,she’daddtimeandrisktoherhiking.Butthetracksaheadsuggestedsomeonemightbeindanger.Shecouldn’tletthisgo.Shecalledoutintothefrozenfog,“Isanybodyoutthere?Doyouneedhelp?”Thestrongwindscarriedhervoiceaway.Thenshewalkedcautiouslyinthedirectionofthetracks.Sheroundedacornerandspottedamansittingmotionlessly.Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.Sheapproachedhiminstantlyandf