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Task2:Itisrightthatcollegegraduatesearnhighersalariesthanthelesswell-educatedinthecommunity.Buttheyshouldalsopaythefullcostoftheirstudy.Doyouagreeordisagreewiththisstatement?大膽發(fā)揮。不要一開(kāi)始就直接談Doyouagreeordisagreewiththisstatement2.大學(xué)生應(yīng)該全額支一個(gè)牛津?qū)W生的9分作文Someconcludethatcollegestudentsshouldbearexpensesfortheirhigherlearningonthegeneralizationthatcollegegraduatesusuallyreceivehighersalariesforsimilarjobsthanthosewithoutacollegedegree(開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山,直入).Wecannotdenythathigherlevelofeducation,indeed,doassociatewithbetter e.Still,builtonsuchfactalone,theconclusionremainsquestionablewhenmoreaspectsaretakenintoconsideration(此句承上啟下。自然鋪墊下文。).Thewholeargumentinquestionrestson(用詞不俗)anassumptionthatitisalwaysthecasethatpeoplewithhighereducationmakemoremoneythanthoselesswell-educated(本句承上并成為本段的句子。句式復(fù)雜、地道。).Butsalaryoreis,inmostcases(語(yǔ)),basedoncontributionsmadebyemployeestocompaniesororganizationsinwhichtheyareemployed(作者的觀點(diǎn)已經(jīng)出現(xiàn)).Statisticsinthelabormarketindicatethatpeoplewithprofessionaltrainingtendtofindjobseasierthancollegegraduatesdoandthatblue-collarworkerswhodonotholdcollegedegreesare ingthehottiesinthelabormarket(所謂statistics不過(guò)是作者杜撰hireandpaymoretohighlyskilledandspeciallytrainedpeopleratherthanfreshcollegegraduates.Intheautoindustry,forinstance,skilledtechniciansmaketwoorthreetimesmorethantheircollegeeducatedcounterpartswhomaketheaveragesalariesinothercompanie(舉例子總是必要的,是show).Anditiswidelyacceptedthatpeople’s eisdeterminedmorebytalent,hardwork,andwillingnesstotakerisksthansolelybycertainqualificationssuchascollegeeducation.Otherwise,theunemploymentrateofcollegegraduateswouldnotbeincreasingeveryyearandtheruleofsupplyanddemandwilllosemuchofpowerincontrollingthelabormarket.Admittedlyinsomeknowledgeextensivefieldsuchasresearch,teaching,andpracticeoflawthelaborforceareprimarilyconsistedofhighlyeducatedprofessionals(略提事物的另一面,不做展開(kāi)).Butsuchpeoplemakeuponlyafractionofthelabormarketandarethusunrepresentativeofthewholeemploymentingeneral.(本段論述是否受過(guò)教育的人的求職情況。)Consideringthegoalofeducation(過(guò)渡詞語(yǔ)),wefindthatitisevenmoreproblematicforthecountrytothrowalltheresponsibilityoffinancingcollegeeducationtocollegestudents.Thegoalofhighereducationofanationistoimproveandstrengthenterallevelofin lectualandprofessionalcapacityofitslaborforce,therebyincreasingthecompetencyofthenationintheglobaleconomy.Astaxpayers,parentsallcontributestotheeducationsystemandcountryinvariousways.Itisonlyreasonableandnecessarythatthecountrygivessomeformsoffinancialassistancetostudentstoeasetheburdenofrisingeducationcosts(提出了個(gè)人的觀點(diǎn)。).Suchhelpshouldgotonotonlystudentsfromneedyorimpoverishedfamiliesbutalsooutstandingstudentsfromaffluentbackgrounds. ngsocansignificantlyboostthemotivationofchildrenfrommillionsoffamiliestoengageinhigherlevelofstudy.Itisunderstandablethatteralqualityofpeopleinacountrywillimproveanditseconomywillbenefitbothnowandinyearstofollow.(本段回應(yīng)Doyouagreeordisagreewiththisstatement?作者不同意Buttheyshouldalsopaythefullcostoftheirstudy的說(shuō)法。)Iftheburdenofsupportingchildren’shighereducationisdumpedonparentsandstudents,thousandsofbrilliantstudentswillbedeprivedofchancestopursuetheiracademicinspiration.Amongthosewhosufferwoulddefiniybefuturegreatscientists,businessmanagers,artistsandstatesmen.Thelosswillbedisastrousandirreversible.(本段是正文的小結(jié)論。)Inconclusion,theideathatstudentsshouldalsopaythefullcostoftheirstudyiswrongandharmfulbecauseitiswrongtoassumethathighereducationnecessarilyequalizehigh Moreover,itisinthebestinterestofanationtotakeresponsibilityinfinancingcollegesothatthegoalofhighereducationwillbebettermet結(jié)論明確,強(qiáng)化了作者的觀點(diǎn)。Task2的范文與分析題目:Somepeoplethinkthatteachingchildrenofdifferentabilitiestogetherbenefitseveryone.Othersbelievethatinligentchildrenbetaught yandgivenspecialtreatment.DiscussbothsidesofandgiveyourownDiscussbothsidesofviewsandgiveyourownopinion主體段第一段:Somepeoplethinkthatteachingchildrenofdifferentabilitiestogetherbenefitseveryone.(正方)第二段:Othersbelievethatin ligentchildrenshouldbetaughtseparayandgivenspecialtreatment。(反方)“譜”結(jié)尾段knowledgebases,studyhabitsaswellasinligence,posingcertainbarriersforstudying,especially,theinfluencetosmarterstudents,whoarefarmoredemandinginteachingprogressandcontent.(鋪墊,句式Oneopinionisthatanidealmethodtosolvetheproblemmightbetoseparatethemoreinligentstudentsfromtherestandbenurturedindividually.(本段句子,對(duì)應(yīng)寫(xiě)作要求)Inthiscase,thereorganizedintentionwillbecateredfor.Insuchclasseswhereoutstandingstudentsaregathered,teachingisconductedinaquickerwayandlearningdoneinamoreefficientway,thusshorteningthelengthoftrainingwhileguaranteeingagroupoffuture-to-betalentswhowillbethebackbonesofthesociety.(一段一個(gè),不發(fā)岔)Somepeoplearestronglyagainstsuchseparation,maintainingthateveryoneisendowedwithhisorherownmeritsinvariousaspects(句子).Studyinginschoolsnotonlyservesacademicpurpose,butalsohelpsbalancestudentsdevelopmentbothmentallyandphysically--tolearnhowtobehaveondifferentoccasions,howtohandleinter alrelationsandsoforth.Weshouldnotblinkthefactthatstudentswithhighinligencehavesomeflawsin,forinstance,communication,extra-curricularactivities.Whatisworse,isolationamongsttheseparatedstudentswilloccur,whichmightdiscouragethempsychologicallyandunderminetheirstudymorale.And,ifyzedinlightoflaw,suchseparationisadiscriminationagainststudentswithlowinligence.Inconclusion,I allypreferthatallthestudentswithdifferentin shouldsharethesameteachingenvironment.Anyway,thefuturesocietyisnotapurelyacademicone,rather,itislikeanoceanwithsharksandprawnscompetingforsurvival.Aseparatedclasswithonlyin ligentstudentsislikeafishbowlnurturingfish,good-looking,inligentbutnotimmunetoanyesorattacks.Therefore,mixingratherthanseparatingstudentsisablessingforbothstudents.(結(jié)論明確。)Task2范文與分析:(選自外語(yǔ)教學(xué)與研究:《雅思考試全題型預(yù)測(cè)試題集》)Presentawrittenargumentorcasetoaneducatedreaderwithnospecialistknowledgeofthefollowingtopic:Newseditorsdecidewhattobroadcastonevisionandwhattoprintinnewspapers.Whatfactorsdoyouthinkinfluencethesedecisions(第一個(gè)要點(diǎn))?Dowe usedtobadnews?Woulditbebetterifmoregoodnewswasreported?(第二個(gè)要點(diǎn))Youshouldwriteatleast250words.Useyourownideas,knowledgeandexperienceandsupportyourargumentswithexampleandrelevantevidence.Ithasbeeoftensaidthat“Goodnewsisbadnews”becauseitdoesnotsellnewspapers.AradiostationthatoncedecidedtopresentonlygoodnewssoonfoundBadnewsontheotherhandissocommonthatinordertocopewithit,weoftensimplyignoreit.Wehave eimmunetobadnewsandnewspapersandradiostationsareawareofthis.(引出背景,鋪墊)WhilenewspapersandTVstationsmayaimtoreportworldeventsaccuray,disasters,ofwar,itisalsotruethattheirmainobjectivesistosellnewspapersandattractlistenersandviewerstotheirstations(回答Whatfactorsdoyouthinkinfluencethesedecisions的問(wèn)題).Forthisreason,TVandradiostationsattempttoreflecttheflavoroftheirstationbyprovidingnewsbroadcaststailor-madetosuittheirlisteners’ ProgrammesspecializinginpoporTVsoapoperasfocusmoreonlocalnews,homeissuesandup-to-datetrafficreports.Themoreseriousstationsandnewspapersliketoprovide‘socalled’objectivenewsreportswitheditorialcommentaimedatyzingthesituation.(本段對(duì)應(yīng)WhatfactorsdoyouthinkinfluencetheseIfitsistrue,then,thatnewspapersandTVstationsaretailoringtheirnewstotheirreaders’andviewers’requirements,howcantheypossiblybereportingrealworldeventsinanhonestandobjectivelight?ManyradioandTVstationsdo,infact,reportitemsofgoodnewsbuttheynolongercallthisgoodnews.Theyrefertotheseashumanintereststoriesandpackagetheminprogrammesspecializing,forinstance,inconsumeraffairsorlocalissues.Goodnewsnowcomestousintheformofaries:thefightagainstchildren’scancerorAIDS,orthelatestdevelopmentsinthefighttosavetheplanetfromenvironmentpollution.Task2范文與分析:Youshouldspendabout40minutesonthisAspartofaclassassignmentyouhavetowriteaboutthefollowingWeare ingincreasinglydependentoncomputers.Theyareusedinbusinesses,hospitalscrimedetectionandeventoflyplanes(大背景).Whatthingswilltheybeusedforinthefuture(正文第一個(gè)要點(diǎn))?Isthisdependentoncomputersagoodthingorshouldwebemoresuspiciousoftheirbenefits(個(gè)人的觀點(diǎn))?Youshouldwriteatleast250要素:1.人類(lèi)對(duì)電腦的依賴(lài)現(xiàn)狀(簡(jiǎn)述對(duì)這種依賴(lài)的評(píng)價(jià)(提出個(gè)人觀點(diǎn))Computersarerelativelynewinvention.Thefirstcomputerswerebuiltfiftyyearsagoanditisonlyinthelastthirtyorsoyearsthattheirinfluencehasaffectedoureverydaylife. alcomputerswereintroducedasrecentlyastheearlyeights(以回顧開(kāi)頭Inthisshorttimetheyhavemadeatremendousimpactonourlives(本句回到作文).Wearenowsodependentoncomputersthatitishardtoimaginewhatthingswouldbeliketodaywithoutthem(扣題句)Youhaveonlygotintoabankwhentheirmaincomputerisbrokentoappreciatethechaosthatwouldoccurifcomputersweresuddenlyremovedworldwide(假想——加強(qiáng)前述說(shuō)法).(本段對(duì)應(yīng)寫(xiě)作要求1,是一種常規(guī)開(kāi)頭Inthefuturecomputerswillbeusedtocreatebiggerandevenmorecomputerprospectsforthisarequitealarming(本句引出作者的觀點(diǎn)).TheywillbesocomplexthatnoindividualcouldhopetounderstandhowtheyworkTheywillalotofbenefitsbuttheywillalsoincreasethepotentialforunimaginablechaos.Theywill,forexample,beabletoflyplanesandtheywillbeabletoco-ordinatethemovementsofseveralplanesinthevicinityofanairport.Providingallthecomputersareworkingcorrectlynothingcangowrong. Ifonesmallprogramfails---disaster.(本段對(duì)應(yīng)寫(xiě)作要求2,全段采用了一分為二式的寫(xiě)法,兼顧正Thereisacertaininevitabilitythattechnologywillprogressand increasinglycomplex(提出個(gè)人預(yù)測(cè)Weshould,howeverensurethatwearestilltechnolog(tooeasytosuddenlydiscoverthattechnologyiscontrollingus.Bythenitmightbetoolate.Ibelievethatitisveryimportanttobesuspiciousofthebenefitsthatcomputerswillbringandtomakesurethatwenever etotallydependentona ytechnologicalworld.(本段對(duì)應(yīng)寫(xiě)作要求3,對(duì)人類(lèi)對(duì)電腦的以來(lái)提出 (選自外語(yǔ)教學(xué)與研究:《雅思考試全題●改寫(xiě)Fiftyyearsago,thehumanworldsawitsgreatest broughttremendousimpactinanunprecedentedway.Thiswasassertedintheeightiesbytheintroductionof alcomputers,thustouchingeveryaspectofourdailylifelikemagictentacles.Neverinhistoryhavehumanbeingssodependentonalifelessthingwhichwouldturnthewholeworldintoatrulylifelessoneifitbreaksinbanks,airplanes,railways,internetandevenatourhomes.Theusesforcomp

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