2023年1月浙江首考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)真題解析人鳥(niǎo)情未了目錄序號(hào)內(nèi)容Step1閱讀原題及梗概Step2語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格與表達(dá)Step3續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)預(yù)測(cè)Step4名師范文賞析占位符標(biāo)題01Step1閱讀原題、掌握故事梗概原文閱讀Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥(niǎo)),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網(wǎng))andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.She

ceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?原文閱讀AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthe

window.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”占位符標(biāo)題04

梗概

故事講述了主人公“我”發(fā)現(xiàn)一個(gè)廢棄房子里面有一只蜂鳥(niǎo)被蜘蛛網(wǎng)困住了?！拔摇卑逊澍B(niǎo)救了出來(lái)。在“我”要離開(kāi)時(shí)，這只蜂鳥(niǎo)停在了我的面前，似乎在和我告別。

主題：人與自然——講述了人與動(dòng)物之間的趣事，體現(xiàn)了人與自然和諧相處。

視角：第一人稱兩句段首句1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.占位符標(biāo)題05故事線IwenttoafarmIfoundatrappedhummingbirdandsaveditItcamebacktomewanttosaygoodbyeIcamebacktothefarmThehummingbirdappearedclimaxrevesalresulotion占位符標(biāo)題0Step2語(yǔ)言表達(dá)文章語(yǔ)言表達(dá)WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.蜂鳥(niǎo)表現(xiàn)出類似人類的情感：感謝野生鳥(niǎo)類盯著人類野生鳥(niǎo)類盯著人類，發(fā)出叫聲文章語(yǔ)言表達(dá)Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”主人公對(duì)蜂鳥(niǎo)行為進(jìn)行猜測(cè)話語(yǔ)：烹飪對(duì)蜂鳥(niǎo)的行為進(jìn)行猜測(cè)占位符標(biāo)題01Step3續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)預(yù)測(cè)Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain情節(jié)一：brokenwindowWhenpassingthefamiliardesertedmilkinghousewhereIlastmetmyhummingbird,Iinstantlynoticedthebrokenwindowhadbeenreplacedaspromised.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain情節(jié)二：thoughtaboutthehummingbirdIcouldnothelptofondlyrecallthelovelyhummingbirdthatcharmedeveryoneofuswithitsdeterminationtobidfarewell.Whatacuteandintelligentcreatureitwas!Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain情節(jié)三：wanttoseethehummingbirdagain.Asamatteroffact,IsecretlymadeawishtoseeheronceagainsomehowandsomewhereinthisexpeditionthoughIknewdeepdowninmyheartitwasanextravagantidea.Thingswentasplannedandasusual,cheerfullybutnotsurprisingly.Para2：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

主要預(yù)測(cè)：thehummingbirdexpressedhergratitude.Theamazinglittlebirdwithshockingmemoryuseditsuniquewaytoexpresshergratitudetoahumanfriend.Naturewassoadorableandmysteriousthatweallfeltawedandhumblewhenfacedwithit.占位符標(biāo)題01Step4名師范文賞析段落一

Afewweekslater,Ivisitedthefarmagain.

Thesamedilapidatedhouse,thesamegiganticspiderweb,thesamegreenblackberrypath."Willthehummingbirdbethesame?Willthislovelyandhumanisticcreaturebetrappedinthewebagain?Notlikely,sincetheholeinthewindowhadbeenfixed."Thesequestionsandthoughtspoppedintomyheadlikestrandsofspiderthread.Withsmellofroastedfoodwaftingintheair,myfriendsandIchattedandlaughedmerrilyaroundthepicnictable.Itseemedthehummingbirdwastemporarilythrowntothebackofmymind.Soon,thesunbegantosetanditwastimeforhome.

段落二

Iwasabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

Itperchedonasmalltwigjustaninchbeforemeandstudiedmewiththesamesparklingandpleasanteyes.Inanecstasyofdelight,Iheldoutmyfingersforittorestandwecommunicatedwithourhalf-human,half-birdlanguage.Mytearyfr