初三英語(yǔ)作文教學(xué)建議2/1/20231WhatIhavelearntfrommakingmistakesSuccessplaysanimportantroleinourdailylife.Butfailureisthemotherofsuccess.Asanordinarystudent,Ialwaysmakesomemistakesinmydailylife.Forexample,throwingthelitterhereandthere,makingmathsmistakes,brokingother’sglassandsoon.AfterIremindmymistakes,Iwillgetridofmistakesquickly.Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthatnevertoooldtoturn,nevertoolatetoturn.IfIknowI’mwrong,Iwillnevermakethesemistakesagain.Thereisnodenyingthatfailureandsuccessisallimportant.(104intotal)

WhatIhavelearntfrommakingmistakesSuccessplaysanimportantroleinourdailylife.Butfailureisthemotherofsuccess.Asanordinarystudent,Ialwaysmakesomemistakesinmydailylife.Forexample,throwingthelitterhereandthere,makingmathsmistakes,brokingother’sglassandsoon.AfterIremindmymistakes,Iwillgetridofmistakesquickly.Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthatnevertoooldtoturn,nevertoolatetoturn.IfIknowI’mwrong,Iwillnevermakethesemistakesagain.Thereisnodenyingthatfailureandsuccessisallimportant.

(104intotal)2016長(zhǎng)寧一模Modelfromyou(I)Modelfromyou(II)MyLifestyleAsweallknow,everyonehashisownlifestyleandme,

too.Ioftenhavetwopiecesofbreadwhichcoveredwithblueberryjamandaglassofmilkforbreakfast.Forlunch,Ihavevegetables,meatandapples.“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”Andforsupper,Iusuallyhavefish,eggsandrice.Sweetsandcakesaremyfavouritesnakes.Inordertoprotectmyteeth,Ibrushthemtwiceaday.Isleepaboutsevenhoursonaverageaday.Generallyspeaking,Iusuallyrunninginthemorningandsometimesplaybasketballafterschool.WhenIhavesomesparetimeIwilllistentomusicandreadbooks.HowfantasticmyLifestyleis!

（2016黃浦一模120wordsintotal）Modelfromyou(III)ASpecialDayThoughitwasalongtime,itgavemeanunforgettablememory.ThedayisMother’sDay.IlovemymothersomuchthatI’vedonemanythingsforher.Aftersupper,Igavemymotherthecardwhatmadebymyselfandsaid,“HappyMother’sDay”toher.ThenItoldhertopayattentiontoherhealthandnottooverwork.Ialsopromisedtohelpdosomehomeworkfromtodayon.Motherwassosurprisedthatshecouldn’tbelieveit.Todayisameaningfulday.(模擬卷四98wordsintotal)Thereweren’tanygrammaticalmistakesinmycomposition.Whydidyougivemycompositionsuchalowmark?Howtoevaluateacompositionfromcontent?HowtograspthecontentofacompositionByShenYaqin(沈亞琴）Dongmen

JuniorHighSchoolLet'sFocuson指標(biāo)采分點(diǎn)采分點(diǎn)滿分情況描述滿分值給分情況內(nèi)容8分（content）

1）切題無(wú)偏離句，無(wú)廢話4

2)完整、充實(shí)有開頭、結(jié)尾；段落完整；內(nèi)容充實(shí)

4

語(yǔ)言8分（language）

1)語(yǔ)言正確，無(wú)中文式表達(dá)語(yǔ)法、句式、用詞正確無(wú)錯(cuò)誤不超過(guò)2處；無(wú)中文式表達(dá)4

2)語(yǔ)法現(xiàn)象豐富，使用恰當(dāng)4

結(jié)構(gòu)4分（structure）表達(dá)通暢、流暢；句際邏輯關(guān)系清晰思維連貫；無(wú)邏輯錯(cuò)誤、連接詞使用恰當(dāng)、正確，4初中英語(yǔ)“五維度寫作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)”（中考）動(dòng)詞形態(tài)正確、多樣；句式富有變化

1.Accuracy(內(nèi)容的準(zhǔn)確性)4.Coherence(內(nèi)容的連貫性)3.Integrity(內(nèi)容的完整性)2.Richness（內(nèi)容的豐富性）Fouraspectsofthecontent:Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“HowtoOvercomethePressureofExams”.提示：根據(jù)調(diào)查，每次考試時(shí)總有些同學(xué)出現(xiàn)頭昏、乏力、睡眠不足和食欲不振等等緊張情緒。請(qǐng)你以“如何克服考試壓力”為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，介紹一下你是如何看待考試及如何克服考試壓力的。Phrasesforreference(以下短語(yǔ)供參考):feelnervous;worryabout;haveacorrectattitude（態(tài)度）towards…;workhard;calmdown;doproperoutdoorexercise材料作文(in2012)EnlargethesentencesReadcarefullyFindkeywords1.Accuracy準(zhǔn)確性What’syourattitudetowardsexams?

Why

doyouwanttoovercomeit

?

1.如何看待考試2.如何克服考試壓力3.克服壓力后的好處How

doyouovercomethepressureofexams?1.Accuracy內(nèi)容的準(zhǔn)確性

overcomethepressurelistentomusictakeawalkoutsidedosomesportstakeadeepbreathdrinkhotmilktakeahotshowertalkwith…readbooksgetfullypreparationfor……Enlargethesentences

BodypartWecan

listentosomelightmusicortakeawalkoutsidetorelaxourselves.It’shelpfulto

talkwithourteachersbecausetheywillgiveusgoodsuggestions.Thebestwayistogetfullypreparationbeforeexams.

ProcessWriting:2.Richness豐富性wecanlistentosomelightmusictorelaxourselves.It’shelpfultotakeawalkoutsideafterawholeday’shardwork.Doingsportsisalsoagoodwaytoreleasepressure.Enlargethesentences

BodypartBeginningpart(what)Endingpart(why)First,wecanlistentosomelightmusictorelaxourselves.Second,it’shelpfultotakeawalkoutsideafterawholeday’shardwork.Inaddition,doingsportsisalsoagoodwaytoreleasepressure.Bodypart(how)ProcessWriting:2.內(nèi)容的豐富性3.內(nèi)容的完整性Step1:(Beginning):writeatopicsentenceWeshouldgiveouropinionsclearlyandconcisely(簡(jiǎn)潔).Step2:(Body):writesupportingsentencesWeshouldwriteenoughsupportingsentencestosupportouropinions.Donotwriteunnecessarysentences.Step3:(Ending):makeaconclusionWeshouldwriteashortconclusiontoemphasize(強(qiáng)調(diào))ouropinions.Trytousedifferentsentencestructures.3.內(nèi)容的完整性Booksareourbestfriends,andtheycanofferusalotofknowledge.2.Readingbookscanmakeusfeelrelaxed.3.Agoodbookisagoodfriendtocomfortyouwhenyouareunhappy.4.Readingisagoodwaytohelpuskeepintouchwiththeoutsideworld.5.Everybookcanopenanewworldbeforeus.6.Readingisveryusefulforustowritearticles.×√√××√Readingisagoodwaytolearnabouttheworld.Task1:1.WecandoalotofthingseasilywiththehelpoftheInternet.2.TheInternethelpsuslearnaboutwhatishappeningaroundtheworld.3.TheInternetcanhelpussolvemanydifficultproblems.4.OntheInternet,wecancommunicatewithforeignersandlearnabouttheircultures.5.WecangetmuchinformationaboutothercountriesontheInternetwithinafewseconds.√√√××TheInternetisagoodwaytolearnabouttheworld.Task2:WhatIhavelearntfrommakingmistakesSuccessplaysanimportantroleinourdailylife.Butfailureisthemotherofsuccess.Asanordinarystudent,Ialwaysmakesomemistakesinmydailylife.Forexample,throwingthelitterhereandthere,makingmathsmistakes,brokingother’sglassandsoon.AfterIremindmymistakes,Iwillgetridofmistakesquickly.Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthatnevertoooldtoturn,nevertoolatetoturn.IfIknowI’mwrong,Iwillnevermakethesemistakesagain.Thereisnodenyingthatfailureandsuccessisallimportant.(104intotal)Modelfromyou(III)修改稿

I’veheardthatyouareupsetbecauseofacomingexam.Inmyview,havingapositiveattitudetowardstheexamisimportant.

Therefore,Iwanttogiveyousomeadvice.First,don’toftenthinkabouttheresultoftheexamforit’sexactlyuseless.Secondly,whenyoufeelnervous,listeningtosomelightmusicisagoodchoiceforyoutorelax.Lastbutnotleast,yououghttohaveagoodsleep.Asthesayinggoes,”Healthiswealth.”

Inbrief,themoreconfidentyouare,thebetterresultyou’llget.2012年中考滿分作文(8+8+4)滿分作文的特點(diǎn)內(nèi)容充實(shí)結(jié)構(gòu)完整詞匯豐富句式多變銜接流暢Jimismygoodfriend.Hedoeswellinstudy.Healwayscarriesabigbag.Itisfullofbooks.Heoftenhelpsothers.Heisverybusy,butheoftendoesexercisetokeephealthy.Hesays,“Schoolworkisimportant.Andhealthisimportant,too.”Everyday,hedoeshishomeworkafterhegetshome.修改作文MyGoodFriend4.Coherence內(nèi)容的連貫性1.Ihaveaclosefriend,Jim,who________________________.2.Nomatter_____hegoes,hecarriesabigbag_________________.

3.Hedoeshishomeworkas_________hegetshome.4.__________heisverybusy,hedoesexerciseas__________possibleto____________.5.Hesays,“Schoolworkisimportant.Andhealthisimportant,too.”Jimismygoodfriend.Hedoeswellinstudy.Healwayscarries

abigbag.Itisfullofbooks.Heoftenhelpsothers.Heisverybusy,

butheoftendoesexercisetokeephealthy.Hesays,“Schoolworkis

important.Andhealthisimportant,too.”Everyday,hedoeshis

homeworkafterhegetshome.Readthepassage,thencompletethesentences.Exercise1doeswellinstudywherethatisfullofbookssoonasThoughoftenaskeephealthyHesaysthathealthis________________schoolwork.asimportantas

Ihaveaclosefriend,Jim,whodoeswellinstudy.Nomatterwherehegoes,hecarriesabigbagthatisfullofbooks.Hedoeshishomeworkassoonashegetshome.Thoughheisverybusy,hedoesexerciseasoftenaspossibletokeephealthy.Hesaysthathealthisasimportantasschoolwork.Inconclusion,

Ilearnalotfrommygoodfriend.4.Coherence內(nèi)容的連貫性writingsteps:一、認(rèn)真審題，結(jié)構(gòu)合理1、題目（寫什么，參考問題）2、重點(diǎn)寫什么（問題提示）3、時(shí)態(tài)（參考問題）二、理清思路，列出提綱主題句：支持句：結(jié)論句：三、連詞成句，初步成形writingsteps:四、檢查修改，內(nèi)容無(wú)誤。五、遣詞造句，爭(zhēng)取文采

加：短語(yǔ)，上下連貫。減：重復(fù)，可有可無(wú)的。合：邏輯關(guān)系上的上下簡(jiǎn)單句，狀語(yǔ)從句替：考綱中常用詞組、諺語(yǔ)Writingsteps:Assignment1.Finishrevisingyourcomposition"Howtoovercomethepressureoftheexams"2.

Modify

oneofthethreecompositions

3.ReleasethepressureinyourreallifejustasyouwriteThankYouforYourAttention

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