走進(jìn)2016高考(ɡāokǎo)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)Continuationwritingin2016CollegeEntranceExamination第一頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。對(duì)第五檔(21-25)作文的描述：與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)銜接合理。內(nèi)容豐富，應(yīng)用了5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但完全不影響意義表達(dá)；有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接(liánjiē)成分，使所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊；Tipsforwriting:1.Thoroughreading2.Creativeplotting（構(gòu)思(ɡòusī)）3.Swiftdrafting4.Carefulpolishing5.Neatcopying第二頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step1：ThoroughReading1.Readthearticlecarefullyandanalyzethe5elements:when,where,who,what,how.When:Who:Where:What&how:oneweekendJaneandherhusbandTomintheforest第三頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step1：ThoroughReadingJane________withTomand______awayto_____abetterspot.Unfortunately,shewas____ontheway.She____forhelpandkept______untilshewassotired.Afteranight’srest,Jane____atthebreakofthedayand_______thesoundtoastream,gettingsomethingtoeat.What&how:quarrelledwalkedfindlostcriedmovingrosefollowed1.Readthearticlecarefullyandanalyzethe5elements:when,where,who,what,how.第四頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step1：ThoroughReading1.Readthearticlecarefullyandanalyzethe5elements:when,where,who,what,how,What&how:Asshepickedherwayalongthestream,Jane______ahelicopterandanother,soshe_______heryellowblouse,______thatsheshouldgoand_____themifthehelicopterscomeback.heardtookoffthinkingflag第五頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step1：ThoroughReadingTheplotoforiginalarticlequarrelled——walkedaway——gotlost——savedherself——missedherhusband——savedherselfagain——helicopterappearedandflewaway……第六頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step1：ThoroughReading2.Readandpayattentiontothefeelingofthecharacterindifferentparagraphs.Para1:Para2-4:Para5:Para6:angryfearful,regretful,tired,helplesshappy,strongerhopeful第七頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step2：CreativeplottingAttention：

Beingcreativedoesn’tmeanyoucanwritewhateveryoulike.Continuationwritingmustbedesignedinalogicalandreasonableway.Andontopofthatbeingcreativewillbeappreciated.logic+creativity第八頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step2：CreativeplottingParagraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.______________________________________Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.______________________________________第九頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step2：CreativeplottingUseover5ofthefollowingwords:

Jane

Tomlakewalkedclimbedatadistancestreamtohergreatjoyhelicopteryellowblouse

peopleactionfeelingobjectplace第十頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step3：Swiftdrafting1.Whennomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain,what’sJane’sfeelingandwhat’sheraction?2.WhathappenedwhenJanewakeupatdaybreak?(helicopter,yellowblouse,Tom,atadistance,lake)(Jane,tohergreatjoy,walked,climbed,stream)第十一頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step4：Carefulpolishing第十二頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.AllofJane’shopesankintodarknessduetoonlytheemptyvalleyrepliedtoheryellowblousewithbirds’soundsatadistance.Whentheprettybeautifulmemoryflashedbackinhermind,Janefeltreallyregrettowalkawayandhereyeswerefilledwithtearsshininglikeastream.Shetakesomeoftheberries,whichwastheonlyonecansupportherforawhile,thenshefellasleepwithupset.第十三頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sheheardafamiliarsoundcallinghername,whenshefoundshewassurroundedbytrees.Sheyelledloudlyandrushedintothedirectionwherethesoundcame,assoonasshefiguredoutthatTomwasfindingher.TomheardJane’svoice,asshewasappearedinhersight,hedashedtoherandhuggedhertightlywithouthesitation.Bothofthemweresurvivedbyahelicopterthatfoundthemintime.第十四頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Althoughshefeltalittlesad,shedidn’tgetfearful.ShethoughtaboutTom.“Hemusthavecalledforthosehelicopters.Maybehewasinoneofthemandwillcomebackagain!Ihavetoguidehimtomorrow.”ShefellasleepanddreamedofseeingTom.

SampleOne第十五頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

Sheatesomeberriesandthenwalkedalongthestream,hopingtofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.Fortunately,shesawahugeflatrockinanopenareaatadistance.Sherushedtotherock,climbedontoitandwaited.Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterappearedagain.Theneareritgot,themoresheflaggedtheyellowblouse.Luckily,thehelicopterdidn’tmissJanethistimeanditlandednearthebigrockslowly.TomjumpedoffthehelicopterandrantowardsJane.Shebrokedownandburstintotears.

第十六頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。

Paragraph1:

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janetriedtofindshelterfromthenightcold.Butunfortunately,sheslippedoverandbrokeherleg.Withtheextremepain,Janemanagedtomakeherwaytoarockforshelter.Undertherock,Janestayedwideawake,knowingshemightnotbeabletogettothelakewithabrokenleg.“Don’tbeafraid.Tommustbesearchingforme.Andthehelicopterwillcomebacktomorrow,”shethoughttoherself.Afterquiteawhile,Janefellasleep.SampleTwo第十七頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shestruggledtoherfeetandheadedforthestream.Afterhavingsomeberriesandstreamwater,Janewalkedslowlytoanopenareatowaitforherrescue.

Tohergreatjoy,shesoonheardthehelicopter.Janemadlywavedheryellowblouse

whenitcameintosight.Sadly,thehelicopterfliedawayagain.However,sooncametherescueteam,togetherwithTom,whohadfoundJane’slocationfromthehelicopter.Janewassaved.SampleTwo第十八頁(yè)，共27頁(yè)。Step5