讀后續(xù)寫示例與寫作訓練9

【寫作示例】

【原文呈現】

閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。

Thepassengersonthebuswatchedsympatheticallyastheattractiveyoungwomanwitha

whitewalkingstickmadeherwaycarefullyupthesteps.Shepaidthedriverand,foundtheseat

he'dtoldherwasempty.Thenshesettledinandrestedherstickagainstherleg.

IthadbeenayearsinceSusanbecameblind.Duetoamedicalmisdiagnosis（誤診），shewas

suddenlythrownintoaworldofdarknessandfrustration.Andallshehadtodependonwasher

husband,Mark.

MarkwasanAirForceofficer.Whenshefirstlosthersight,hewatchedhersinkinto

hopelessnessandwasdeterminedtohelphegaintheconfidence.

Finally,Susanfeltreadytoreturntoherjob,buthowwouldshegetthere?Shewasnowtoo

frightenedtogetaroundthecitybyherself.So,Markdrovehertoworkeachday,eventhough

theyworkedatoppositeendsofthecity.

Atfirst,thiscomfortedSusan.Soon,however,MarkrealizedthenecessityforSusanto

becomeindependentandwantedhertostarttakingthebusagain.Justasexpected,Susanwas

afraidofthisidea.ButMakepromisedSusanthathewouldridethebuswithheruntilshegotthe

hangofit.

Fortwoweeks,Mark,inmilitaryunifoimaccompaniedSusantoandfromworkeachday.He

taughtherhowtorelyonherothersenses,specificallyherhearing,totellwhereshewasandhow

toadapttohernewsurroundings.

Atlast,Susandecidedthatshewasreadytotryonherown.Mondaymorningarrived,and

beforesheleft,shehuggedMark.Hereyeswasfilledwithtearsofgratitudeforhispatienceand

love.Shesaidgood-bye,andfbrthefirsttime,theywenttheirseparateways.

Eachdaywentperfectly,andSusanhadneverfeltbetter.Shemadeit.

OnFridaymorning,Susantookthebustoworkasusual.Asshewaspayingforthebusfhre.

thedriversaid,“Lady,Isuredoenvyyou.^^(340words)

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數應為150左右；

2.應使用5個以上短文標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語以為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞。

Paragraph1:

Curious,sheaskedthedriver,(iWhydoyousaythatyouenvy^me?”

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TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusanscheeks.

【思維路徑】

［核心內容］

文本主要內容為：一位女士因失明而感到沮喪與絕望，丈夫陪伴她重建自信。在她害怕

獨自出門時，她丈夫每天開車接送她上下班。為了讓她重新獨立起來，她丈夫說服她重新坐

公交車上班。一開始，他陪她一同坐公交車，教她學會用其他的感官去判斷位置。兩周后，

女士決定獨自出行，一切都很順利。在第五天早上上車之后，司機表達了對她的羨慕。

［寫作思路］

(1)明確故事人物關系(characters)。故事中主要人物為失明的女士Susan,她的丈夫Mark

以及公交車司機。

(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。丈夫陪失明的妻子每天坐公交車上下班兩周后，妻子開

始自己坐公交車。在她獨自出行的第五天，公交車司機表達了對她的羨慕。

(3)根據已知人物、事件及續(xù)寫段落首句預測故事發(fā)展(development)。故事總體的發(fā)展

應該是司機告訴Susan羨慕她的原因。因為司機敘述的這個原因，Susan流下了幸福的眼淚。

可以結合前文表達的Mark對Susan的耐心與愛，預測這個原因可能是因為Mark每天都在

暗中跟著Susan上下班，為了保證她的安全。續(xù)寫第一段：Susan問司機為何羨慕她，司機

告訴她羨慕她的原因是因為她有一個非常愛她的人。他看到她丈夫每天都看著她坐公交車安

全到達辦公室才離開，表達了對她濃濃的愛意。續(xù)寫第二段：Susan聽完之后流下了幸福的

眼淚。或許她回憶起Mark一直以來對她的愛和照顧，并因此而感到幸福與感動；或許她開

始想象回想這一周上班的經歷，回憶著Mark在周圍暗中關注她的跡象；也有可能她回家后

表達了對Mark所做的一切的感動，表達了她的幸運與對丈夫的愛。

(4)結合下劃線詞羅列寫作要點(points)。結合下劃線詞和文本內容，展開盡可能豐富的

想象，羅列出盡可能多的故事發(fā)展情節(jié)。例如，第一段可以通過問以下問題來獲取寫作要點

“WhydidthedriverenvySusan?Whatwouldbethepossibleanswer?Whatwouldthedriver

say?DidithaveanythingtodowithSusan'shusband,Mark?等"；第二段可以問以下問題來獲

取寫作要點：WhatwouldSusanthink?Whatmightbeherfuthcrreaction?Whatwouldshedo?

等”。

［參考范文I

Curious,sheaskedthedriver,''Whydoyousaythatyouenvyme?”Thedriverresponded,"it

mustfeelgoodtobetakencareofandprotectedlikeyouare."Confused,Susanaskedagain,

“Whatdoyoumean?”Thedriverexplained,ltWell,youknow,everymorningforthepastweek,a

finelookinggentlemaninamilitaryuniformhasbeenstandingacrossthecornerwatchingyouas

yougetoffthebus.Hemakessureyoucrossthestreetsafelyandhewatchesuntilyouenteryour

officebuilding.Thenheblowsyouakissandwalksaway.Youarealuckylady.”

TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusanscheeks.Althoughshecouldn'tseehimwithhereyes,

shehadalwaysfeltthatMarkwasjustthere.Shewassuchaluckyandhappylady,fbrher

husbandhadgivenheragiftmorepowerfulthansight,agiftthatshecouldfeelanddidn'tneedto

see一thegiftoflovethatcanbringlightwherethereisdarkness.(150words)

［范文解析］

范文圍繞文章的內容進行了合情合理的拓展。給出的兩段開頭分別為Susan好奇地問

司機為何羨慕她，以及Susan留下幸福的眼淚。因此第一段主要寫司機對Susan的這一問題

進行回答，而這一原因是Susan的丈夫為確保安全而每天暗暗陪伴她上班，因而讓Susan流

下了幸福的眼淚。第二段寫Susan知道之后的心理活動，包括回顧這幾天坐公交車有被陪伴

的感覺，以及對丈夫的這種無微不至的愛的感動。范文最后一句寫了這份愛“照亮”了Susan

黑暗的世界，既與她失明這一事實想結合，又升華了主題。

［提煉歸納］

1.合理拓展情節(jié)

讀后續(xù)寫首先要讀通給定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基礎上根據提示對故事的

發(fā)展作出合情合理又合乎邏輯的預測。為了將預測過程顯性化，可以通過設問的方式，將預

測重點以問題的方式顯示出來，以利后續(xù)寫作時的心理整理和語言組織。在該練習中，我們

通過7個問題來拓展并整理自己的寫作思路，這7個問題以“司機羨慕Susan的原因”以及

“Susan由此做出的反應”為主體，之間有一定的邏輯關系，符合故事發(fā)展的合理結局。

2.有效運用銜接手段

在具體的寫作過程中我們要對羅列的要點進行篩選和整合,還要考慮寫作要點之間連接

手段(connectives)的有效運用,例如在范文中，我們用了“until"，“although"，“for”等連詞，

使得小句間的邏輯關系更清晰明了，文章更加連貫。同時:我們也使用了“waching…”和

“confused”這樣的非謂語動詞結構作伴隨狀語和原因狀語，使得行文更加流暢，語言更加

地道。

【寫作演練】

1.閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。

AtDana'syardsale,Timchoseabaseballfromthetoysspreadonthecardtableandasked

abouttheprice.DanatoldhimeverythingwasaquarterexceptNezumi,acottontoyrat.Itwas

greywithsomecottonstickingoutfromtheholewhereanearhadbeentornoff.

“Nezumiisextraspecial,soheistendollars.Heneedsasafenewhome.^^Danasighed.Tim

laughedsayinghedidn'thavetendollars.DanalaughedtooandgaveNezumitoTimasafreegift

becausehewasherfriend.WhenTimwhispereditwassortofold,Danasaidoldtoyswerethe

best.ShetheninvitedTimtoherbirthdaypartythenextevening,addingthatherparentswere

givingherarealratforherbirthday.Timwasamazedandaskedifitwasaliverat.

“Ofcourse.^^Danasaid.

Athome,Tim'smothershowedhimthegiftshehadboughtforDana.Itwasaknitting

spool（針織線軸）shapedlikeamushroom.MomsaidDanacouldknitascarffbrherdoll.Tim

sighedthatDanawasn'taknittingkindofpersonbutaratkindofperson.Momlaughedafter

knowingwhathadhappened.Togethertheydrovetothepetstore,whereTimsearchedand

searchedandselectedaclearplasticball,oneinwhichtheratcouldrunaroundonthefloorsafe

fromcatsanddogs.TimthoughtofNezumi'searanddecidedDana'snewratwouldneedthisball.

Thenextday,Danabroughtcupcakestoclass.WhenshehandedacupcaketoTim,sheasked

ifTimbroughtNezumitoschoolasNezumilikedtorideinbackpacks.Timwasatalossbecause

Nezumiwasathomeonhisbed.ThenDanaaskedwhatgifthewasgivingher.Timreplieditwas

asurprise.InsilencetheysatfbrawhilebeforeheheardDanasayherparentsweregivinghera

newbikefbrherbirthdayinsteadofaliveratbecausetheythoughtratswouldbitethings.

注意:1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數應為150左右；

2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

Para1:

Athomethatafternoon,Timstaredattheplasticratball.

Para2:

Allofasudden,hehadanidea.

2.閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。

Everynightafterdinner,mygrandparentswouldturnonTVforthe6o*clocknews.No

matterhowhardItriedtoactthegrown-upandwatchwiththem,Iwouldinevitably（不可避免地）

getdistracteduntil6:30whenWheelofFortunecameon.

Mygrandmawouldplayalong,tryingtoguesstheanswersbeforetheplayers.Hershoutsof

excitementwhenshesucceededcouldbeheardacrossthehouse.

AsIgrewolder,myloveofreadingandwritingblossomed,andIwouldjoinmygrandmain

yellingoutletters.Soon,Iwasexperiencingthethrillofsolvingthepuzzlesfasterthanthe

contestants（選手）andevenmygrandma.Iwashooked.

Duetoconstantmovingaroundwithmymomandfather,Istartedtospendlesstimewithmy

grandparents,butourbondremainedstrong.Mygrandparentsprovidedmewiththestability,love

andsupportthatIdesperatelyneededwhenIgrewup.WhenIwasinabadmood,Iwould

remcinberthosesweetnights.

Afewyearslater,IwaslivingwithmygrandpainChicago.Whilewatchinganepisode（集）

ofWheelofFortune,wehadawaveofnostalgia（，懷I日）.Withapplication,Ididn'tthinkmuchofit

untilIreceivedamailmonthslater,announcingthattheWheelofFortunecastingteamwould

cometoChicago.Inordertobeconsideredforanin-personaudition（試演）,applicantswouldneed

tosubmitasixty-secondvideoexplainingwhytheywantedtobeacontestant.

Allmychildhoodmemoriesofwatchingtheshowcamefloodingback,andIknewIwas

meanttospin（旋轉）thewheelforreal.Immediately,Irecordedavideoandsubmittedit.Acouple

ofweekslater,Ireceivedane-mailinvitingmetoauditioninperson.Iwasverynervousonthe

auditionday.Icouldn'tbelieveIwastryingoutfor"America'sGame”!Aftertworoundsofintense

auditioning,withhalfofthehopefulslettinggoafterthefirstround,itwasover.Allofus

applicantsweretoldwewouldreceivealetterinthemailwithintwoweeksifwewereselected.

注意：

所續(xù)寫短文的詞數應為150左右；

2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語

Paragraph1:

Irantothemailboxeverydaybuttherewasnothing.

Paragraph2：

Thenonemorningwhilegettingreadyfbrwork,Icheckedmymailandletouttheloudest

screamever.

3.閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。

Whenshelookedaroundherhouse,BettyMargaretsawlotsofelectronics.Alongwiththe

usualthingslikeherlaptopandsmartphone,therewereallofherkids'electronicdevices:cell

phones,videogamedevicesandmore!Thereseemedtobemorethanenoughwaysforherandher

threechildrentobeonlineallday,everyday.ks5u

Ms.MargaretworriedthatherkidswerebecomingtoodependentontheInternetand

electronics.Thenshebegantorereadoneofherfavoritebooks,HenryThoreau'sWalden,which

gaveMs.Margaretanidea.Thoreauspent2yearsinasimplecabinwithoutrunningwater,and

havingtogrowhisownfood.Maybesheandherfamilycouldlivewithoutsuchluxuriesas

computersandelectronicdevicesforawhile.

Ms.Margarettalkedwithherkidsandexplainedthatshewantedthefamilytotrylivingfor6

monthswithouttheInternet,cellphones,TV,andvideogames.Ms.Margaretwritesarticlesfora

newspaperinAustralia,andhadwrittenseveralbooksaswell.Shetoldherchildrenthatifthey

agreed,shewouldwriteabookabouttheirexperienceandtheycouldgoonatripabroadwiththe

moneyfromsalesofthebook.Herthreechildrenagreed,and“theexperiment,"asMs.Margaret

called,began.

Overthecourseoftheexperiment,theMargaretchildrenhaddifferentreactionstolife

withoutelectronics.Beforetheexperimentbegan,Anni,theeldestofthechildren,readbooks

morethanheryoungerbrotherandsister.Shethereforehadarelativelyeasyadjustmenttothe

family'snewlifbstyle.Annicouldalsousethelibrary'scomputerforherhomework.Bill,who

lovedtoplayvideogamesbeforetheexperimentbegan,hadtofindawaytospendallofhisnew

freetime.Hestartedtospendmoretimepracticinghissaxophone（薩克Wf管）.Susan,the

youngestchildinthefamily,hadthehardesttimeadjustingtolifewithoutelectronics.Shefelt

restlessforthefirstweeksandlater,influencedbyhereldersister,graduallybegantofindinterest

inthenovelexperiencesbroughtbyvariousbooks.

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數應為150左右；

2.應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。

Paragraph1：

Thefamilycarriedonwiththeexperimentfbrthe6monthswithouttechnologycontrolling

theirlives.

Paragraph2:

Ms.Margaretwrotethebookshehadplanned.

4.閱讀下面材?料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫

的詞數應為150左右。

Iwaslackingineverythingneededtostartanewfriendship.

Myparentsmovedtothetownwhentheydecidedtolookfornewjobsbuttheydidn'trealize

IwasreallyhurtwhenIsaidgoodbyetomyoldfriends.Itfeltawfultobeanewstudentinthe

schoolandwhenmyclassmateswerechatting,whatIcoulddowastobecaughtupinmy

thoughtswatchingthecloudsoutsidethewindow.Iwasnotgoodatmathorhistory;norwasI

goodatdrawingordancing.Iwasshyandtimid.Ihadafewfriendsbackatmyhometownandit

seemedthattheyweretheonlyoneswhoIcouldbefriendswithformywholelife.IfeltIhad

achievedapointofsaturationwithregardtohavingfriendsandIcouldmakenofurtheraddition

tomyfriendlist.Iwasashamedofmyself,soIbelievedIdeservednonoticefromothersuntil

Emilycametomyworld.

Emilywasfearless,outspokenandeasytogo.ShewaseverythingIwasnotandIwastoo

shytocomeoutofmyshell.ImetEmilyinschoolalmosteverydayandyetInevertalkedtoher.

Wewereinthesameclassbutwewerelikepolesapart.HowIwishedIcouldbelikeherorat

leastbeafriendofhers!

Itwasanotherordinaryday.

Iwanderedtothebusstopinthemorningandwaitedfortheschoolbus.Birdsweresinging

songswiththeirfriendsbutwhocouldIsingsongswith?Igotonthebusandwentstraighttomy

usualseat,complaininginalowvoiceaboutgettingupearlyandgoingtoschoollikeeveryother

day,andabouthowthingsweregoingtobethesamealloveragain.LittledidIrealizesomething

differentwouldhappenthatday.

Para.1:

WhenIgotuptogetdownthebus,myschoolbagwasstuckinthearmrest.

Para.2:

IgotnoticedbyEmily,whobroughtmecouragetostartanewfriendship!

5.閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,some

peopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.

Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisiting

thepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,she

wouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasa

mansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.

Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.

“Iwishyoucouldseehim,^^shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara."Heissuch

ahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdonftseewhathecando.”

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.wishwecould

helphimtoearnmoney,“saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”

“SodoI,“saidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.^^

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihave

agreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobea

goodone."ItellyouwhatwecandoJsaidJohn.uYouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsent

us?Well,wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeit

aroundtothehousesandsellit.”

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右：

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Para.1:

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

Para.2:

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

笞案與解析

1.【參考范文】

Athomethatafternoon,Timstaredattheplasticratball.Wonderingabouttheuseofthe

clearplasticballifDanahadnorat,hestartedwalkingupanddowntheroomwithafrownonhis

face.Momwassurprisedandaskedhimwhatwashappening.TimtoldherDanawasn'tgettinga

liveratfromherparentsbutabike.Astheywererackingtheirbrains（絞腦汁）tocomeupwithan

appropriategift,TimturnaroundandsawNezumionhisbed.

Allofasudden,hehadanidea.HeliftedNezumiandsqueezingNezumiintotheplasticball

withgreatcautionsothatNezumiwouldbesafefromcatsanddogs.Seeingthis,MomaskedTim

whetherhewasgivingDanaanoldcottonratwithoneearasagift,Timnoddedwithasmile

sayingshewoulddefinitelylikeit.LookingatMom'sconfusedexpression,TimaddedthatDana

wasaNezumikindofpersonwhothoughtoldtoysweretheBEST.

【解析】

通過閱讀所給文章可知，Tim從Dana的庭院舊貨出售會得到了有一只耳朵被扯掉了的

玩具老鼠Nezumi,Tim很喜歡。Dana的生日快到了，Tim去商店里為Dana喜歡的老鼠買

了一個透明的塑料球，可以讓它在里面跑，不會被貓和狗咬傷。第二天Tim聽到Dana說她

的父母給她的生日禮物是一輛新自行車，而不是一只活老鼠，因為他們認為老鼠會咬東西。

續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：那天下午在家里，Tim盯著塑料老鼠球。所以后文應該

是講述Tim得知Dana不會受到老鼠作為生日禮物后的心理活動，他覺得買的這個塑料老鼠

球沒有用了，于是他皺著眉頭開始在房間里走來走去。媽媽很驚訝，問他發(fā)生了什么事。

Tim告訴她Dana從她父母那里得到的不是一只活老鼠，而是一輛自行車。當他們絞盡腦汁

想出合適的禮物時，Tim轉過身，看見Nezumi躺在床上；第二段開頭是：突然，他有了一

個主意。本段應該寫Tim為Dana準備生日禮物的過程，Tim要送Dana一只長著一只耳朵

的老鼠。

最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數應為150左右。按要求完成寫作任務。

【范文點評】

本文描寫詳略得當，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：walkupanddown,not...but...,with

greatcaution等高級i司丫匚；WonderingabouttheuseoftheclearplasticballifDanahadnorat,he

startedwalkingupanddowntheroomwithafrownonhisfhce.非謂語動詞的運用和if引導的條

彳牛狀語從句；Seeingthis,MomaskedTimwhetherhewasgivingDanaanoldcottonratwithone

earasagift,Timnoddedwithasmilesayingshewoulddefinitelylikeit.運用了whether弓|導的

賓語從句等高級句式。

2.【參考范文】

Paragraph1:

Irantothemailboxeveiydaybuttherewasnothing.Afteroneweek,Ibecamevery

frustratedandeventhoughtthemailhadbeendeliveredtothewrongdepartment.Mygrandma

cameandcomfortedme,"Laura,waitpatiently.nFeelingdefeated,Ireplied,nIwasn'tgoodenough.

Theydidn*twantme."Shesaidwithaconfidenttone,nYouwillbeselectedandreceivethemail.

Trustme."ThoughIdidn'tbelieveIwouldreceivethemail,Iwasnotsoanxious.Icalmeddown

andlivedmylifeasbefore.

Paragraph2:

Thenonemorningwhilegettingreadyforwork,Icheckedmymailandletouttheloudest

screamever.Thereitwas:amailfromWheelofFortunestatingthattheyhadatapedateforme.I

hadtoreaditseveraltimesbeforeItrulybelievedit.IwasgoingtobeacontestantonWheelof

Fortune!Iendedupfilmingmyepisodeafewmonthslater,andtheentireexperiencewasamazing.

FrommeetingPatandVanna,tospinningthewheeland,mostimportantly,sayingthosemagical

words,'*rdliketosolvethepuzzle.nItwasadayIwillneverforget.

【解析】

這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。文章講述了作者在爺爺奶奶的影響下喜歡上一檔名叫Wheelof

Fortune的節(jié)目。多年后，當回到芝加哥和爺爺一起居住時，作者收到一封信，邀請他參加

這個節(jié)目的試演。出于對這個節(jié)目的喜愛，作者決定錄制一個短片嘗試。兩輪比賽后，節(jié)目

組請作者回家等通知。

續(xù)寫分為兩段。

根據第一段的開頭“我每天都去郵筒看，但什么都沒有“可以接著寫：一周后還是沒有信

件，作者感到沮喪，估計自己可能被淘汰了。但是祖父母安慰她，給她信心，并且讓她耐心

等待。作者調整心態(tài)，回歸正常生活。

根據第二段的開頭“那天早上我正準備好去上班，檢查郵筒時，我大聲尖叫起來“可以接

著寫：作者不敢相信自己收到節(jié)目組的來信，并給她安排了錄制時間。作者把自己的喜悅同

祖父母分享。非常感謝曾經那段陪著他們一起觀看節(jié)目的日子，讓她不僅得到了歡樂還學到

了很多知識，得以參加這個全美國人民都喜歡的節(jié)目。

用5個以上的關鍵詞加大了寫作難度?？忌鷳煜りP鍵詞，以便在適當時候加以運用。

寫作完成后，要將關鍵詞下劃線。

【范文點評】

范文內容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數適當，上下文意思連貫，符合邏

輯關系。作者在范文中使用了一些主從復合句，例如：ThoughIdidn*tbelieveIwouldreceive

themail,Iwasnotsoanxious.中though弓|導讓步狀語從句；Thereitwas:amailfromWheelof

Fortunestatingthattheyhadatapedateforme.中that弓|導賓語從句。

3.【參考范文】

Thefhmilycarriedonwiththeexperimentforthe6monthswithouttechnologycontrolling

theirlives.Ms.Margaretbelievestheyallcameoutbetterfortheexperience.Thechildrenhada

lotmoreinteractionwitheachotherandwiththeirmother.Nowthattheycouldnottextothers,

theyhadtoactuallyseeeachotherandtalk.Meanwhile,thefamilyplayedboardgamestogether,

cookedmealstogetherandreadthenewspapertogether.Billendedupdevelopingaserious

interestinmusic,andinSusan'scase,sheimprovedhergradesinschool.

Ms.Margaretwrotethebookshehadplanned.Thebookbecameanimmediatehitand

arousedgreatinterestamongmanyparents.Inherbookandininterviewsaboutthebook,Ms.

Margaretdescribesthepleasantchangesthathappenedinherfamilyandtheprogressherchildren

havemade.Sheencouragesfamiliestosetasidespecial"screen-freedays“wherefamiliesunplug

themselvesandspendtimetogether,whichisexactlywhatherfamilyhaveagreedtodoafter

returningfromanenjoyablefamilytripabroad.

【解析】

本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，貝蒂?瑪格麗是一位母親，她有3

個孩子。因為擔心她的孩子們變得過于依賴互聯網和電子產品，于是她向她的孩子們提出說

她想讓這個家庭試著在沒有互聯網、手機、電視和電子游戲的情況下生活6個月的計劃。如

果他們同意，她將寫一本關于他們的經歷的書，他們可以用賣書的錢去國外旅行。孩子們同

意并開始了這種生活。

【范文點評】

續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：這個家庭在沒有科技控制他們生活的情況下進行了

6個月的實驗。所以本段應該寫這次經歷給她的孩子們帶來的變化（好的方面）。第二段開頭

是：瑪格麗特寫了這本她計劃好的書。本段應該寫這本書出版后引起了人們的興趣，以及貝

蒂?瑪格麗就這種生活方式向家長提出建議。續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的

關鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當的時候加以運用.最后還要注意

所續(xù)寫短文的詞數應為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。按要

求完成寫作任務。

4.【參考范文】

Para.1:

WhenIgotuptogetoffthebus,myschoolbagwasstuckinthearmrest.Ididn'tnoticeitand

stoodupwithallmystrength.Unfortunately,myschoolbagwastomapartandallthecontentsfell

ontheground.Ikneltdowntopickthemup.Suddenly,Isawahandpassingmesomeofthe

books.IlookedupandfounditwasEmilywhowashelpingme.Withherhelp,Iputallthe

contentsback,tomyschoolbag.Ibegantotalkwithherandwassurprisedtofindthatwehad

muchincommon.

Para.2:

IgotnoticedbyEmily,whobroughtmecouragetostartanewfriendship!OnedaywhenItold

herthatIadmiredherandhowIwishedtobeafriendofhers,shesaid,“Wehavealreadybeen

fidends."IfeltsohappythatIevensangasong.Hearingmysong,shethoughthighlyofitand

askedmetoteachhertosingit.ShemademerealizehowuniqueIwasandatlastIcameoutof

meshell.

【解析】

通過閱讀所給文章可知，作者跟隨父母來到了一個新城鎮(zhèn)，作為一名新生在學校的感覺