題型15讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)

銜接儲(chǔ)備

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)是隨著我國(guó)高考改革由教育部考試中心研制的英語(yǔ)高考新題型,2016年10月在浙江省首次使

用.該題型通過(guò)讀寫(xiě)結(jié)合,檢測(cè)學(xué)生的英語(yǔ)書(shū)面語(yǔ)言理解與表達(dá)能力.要求學(xué)生能夠梳理故事文體的結(jié)構(gòu)、分析

故事發(fā)展的線(xiàn)索、想象故事發(fā)展的情節(jié)以及續(xù)寫(xiě)故事的發(fā)展和結(jié)局.下面介紹一下讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的答題技巧：

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)五步寫(xiě)做法

1.高分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)

?故事要圍繞主要人物展開(kāi).

?詳細(xì)刻畫(huà)人物角色及其情感.

?有效使用連接成分，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊.

?運(yùn)用豐富的詞匯、語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和修辭使描寫(xiě)生動(dòng).

?第一段和第二段的內(nèi)容銜接自然，邏輯合理通順.

?續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容與所給短文融洽度高，語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格保持一致，思想積極向上.

2.高分手段

（一）增加細(xì)節(jié)

?環(huán)境描寫(xiě)

?肖像描寫(xiě)

?動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)

?語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)

?心理描寫(xiě)

（二）營(yíng)造沖突

?人物和人物之間的沖突

?人物和環(huán)境之間的沖突

（三）升格語(yǔ)言

?非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞

,with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)

?雙形容詞作狀語(yǔ)

?特殊句式

?虛擬語(yǔ)氣

?常用修辭

3.寫(xiě)作步驟

?StepI瀏覽所給信息，確定大意主題一落點(diǎn)

?Step2梳理已知段落，確定主要情節(jié)一重點(diǎn)

?Step3借助段落開(kāi)頭，確定續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容一突破點(diǎn)

?St叩4刻畫(huà)細(xì)節(jié)沖突，優(yōu)美連貫表達(dá)一一亮點(diǎn)

?Step5做到首尾呼應(yīng)，結(jié)構(gòu)完整合理一基本點(diǎn)

4.兩個(gè)雷區(qū)

?情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)要符合生活實(shí)際和文章邏輯，避免太過(guò)離奇.

?敘述力求精煉、生動(dòng)、連貫,對(duì)話(huà)不要太多，書(shū)面化的長(zhǎng)句不宜太多.

典例剖析

例題1

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě),使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事.

Mymotherwasasupporterofphysicalpunishment,butforallhertalkingshehasneverspanked（打屁股）my

siblings（兄弟姐妹）andmeonlyonce.Insteadshefoundwaysofpunishmentthatleftamorelastingmemorythan

givingusaspanking.OneofthemostmemorableoftheseoccasionsoccurredwhenIwasfour.Intheearly70*smy

motherattendedcollegeduringthedayandIwasindaycare.Onedayatdaycarewatchedanextremelytired

motherattempttopickupherdaughter.Thelittlegirlasked,“Momma,arewegoingtoMcDonald'sfbrdinner?^^

Themotherreplied,t4Honey,nottonight.Mommahastorunafewerrands（差事）andthenwehavetogohomeand

cookdinnerfbrDaddy.,HfcButIwannago.”"Susie,Isaidnottonight.Maybe,ifyouareagoodgirl,wecango

tomorrow."Susieimmediatelydroppedtothefloor,kickingandscreaming,wanttogotoMcDonald^s.^^

Noamountofpleading（懇求）orscolding,hermothertriedtostopSusie'stantrum（發(fā)脾氣）.Finallyhermother

gavein,“Okay,Susie,let'sgotoMcDonald's."Susiestoppedyellingandsmiling,shegrabbedhermother'shand

andtheyleft.TosayIwasamazedwouldbeinaccurate;IwasdelightedthatanythingIwantedcouldbehadby

throwingatantrum.

Thatdaymymotherpickedmeupearlyfromdaycarebecauseweweregoingtoastoretopurchasesome

Christmasitems.Iwasexcitedbythelightsanddecorations,andaswewalkedthroughthetoysectionontheway

tothecounter,IsawatoyIhadtohave.Itwasawhiteandredtelephonewhosebellsrangasitwaspulledalongon

astring.LookinglovinglyupatmymotherIasked,"Mama,canIhavethattelephone?^^

Shereplied,44Baby,notnow,butifyouareagoodgirl,maybeSantawillbringittoyou.”"ButMama,Iwant

thattelephonerightnow."Hereyesnarrowedandherhandtightenedonmine."Becky,youcan'thavethat

telephonetoday,butifyoumisbehave,youcanhaveaspanking.,,

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下畫(huà)線(xiàn)的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；

3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；

4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下畫(huà)線(xiàn)標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ).

Paragraph1:

BynowwewerestandinginthelongHolidaylinetopaythebill,andIfigureditwasagoodchance.

Paragraph2:

“Mama,stop.Mama,getupJItearfullypleaded.

思路點(diǎn)撥:第一步;通讀文本，提取線(xiàn)索詞和信息句,寫(xiě)出每段段落大意.

重點(diǎn)信息句:shefoundwaysofpunishmentthatleftamorelastingmemorythangivingusaspanking.

線(xiàn)索詞:mymomandI

第一段情感詞：lastingmemory

段落大意:despitethefactthatmymomsupportsphysicalpunishment,shefoundaspecialwayto

punishmewithoutspankingme.

重點(diǎn)信息句:Susieimmediatelydroppedtothefloor,kickingandscreaming.

線(xiàn)索詞:Susieandhermom

第二段

情感詞:kickingandscreaming

段落大意:SusiewantedtogotoMcDonald'sfordinner,butwasdeclinedbyhermom.

重點(diǎn)信息句:hermothergaveinandtheywenttoMcDonald's.

線(xiàn)索詞:sloppedyellingthrowingatantrum.

第三段

情感詞:delighted

段落大意:Susiegotwhatshewantedbythrowingatantrum,soIwouldmodelafterher

第四段重點(diǎn)信息句:LookinglovinglyupatmymotherIasked,"Mama,canIhavethattelephone?^^

線(xiàn)索詞:IsawatoyIhadtohave

情感詞:excited;lovingly

段落大意:IsawthetoyIlikedverymuchandaskedmymomtobuyit.

重點(diǎn)信息句:ButMama,Iwantthattelephonerightnow.

線(xiàn)索詞:butifyoumisbehave,youcanhaveaspanking.

第五段

情感詞:Hereyesnarrowedandherhandtightenedonmine.

段落大意:Iinsistedonbuyingthetoybutmymomrefused.

第二步:根據(jù)文本每段內(nèi)容，結(jié)合所給續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的首句，構(gòu)思完整的故事情節(jié).

人物Mom;I

矛盾焦點(diǎn)我想耍賴(lài)獲得玩具，媽媽如何在不體罰我的情況下讓我明白耍賴(lài)是行不通的.

我媽媽主張對(duì)孩子應(yīng)該體罰，但是從未真正體罰過(guò)孩子.我四歲的時(shí)候看到小朋友在媽媽面前任

故事情節(jié)性耍賴(lài)而得到滿(mǎn)足，我心里就有了效仿小朋友的想法.沒(méi)想到媽媽在大庭廣眾之下坐在地上模仿

我的耍賴(lài)樣子，我被嚇到了，流著淚求媽媽起來(lái).媽媽沒(méi)有體罰我卻給我上了一節(jié)終生難忘的一課.

參考范文:

Paragraph1:

BynowwewerestandinginthelongHolidaylinetopaythebill,andIfigureitwasagoodchance.Ilaydown

onthegroundandbeganscreaming,wantthattelephone,overandoveragain.WearyChristmasshoppers

lookedasmymothercalmlysaid,"Becky,you'dbettergetupbythecountofthreeorelse.

One...Two...Three."Nothing.Iwasstillinfulltantrum.Sothenshelaydownbesidemeonthefloor,andbegan

kickingandscreaming,"Iwantanewcar,Iwantanewhouse.Iwantsomejewelry,Iwant..."Shocked,Istoodup.

“Mama,stop.Mama,getup,“Itearfullypleaded.Shestood,andbrushedherselfoff.Atfirststunned,the

otherswaitinginlinebegantosporadicallyclap,andbeforeIknewittheywerecheeringandlaughingandpatting

mymotheronherback.Sheblushedandtookalittlebowandthenextthirtyminutesinlinewaspuremiseryfbr

measvariousparentsleavingthestore,shaketheirheadsatmeandsaywithasmile,“Yourmomgotyougood.I

betyou*llnevertrythatagain."And1didn*t,becauseitleftalastingmentalpicturemoreeffectivethanany

physicalmark.

即學(xué)即練

Onacoldwindyday,apoorboytriedtopayhiswaythroughschoolbysellinggoodsdoortodoor.Wandering

onthestreet,hewasnotasuccessfulseller.What'sworse,hefoundthatheonlyhadonedime(-角硬幣His

emptystomachremindedhimconstantlythatfordayshehadn'teatenanything.Hehadnochoicebuttobegfora

mealatthenexthouse.Hesitantlyheknockedatdoor,thinkingaboutwhattosaywhenitopened.However,helost

hisnervewhenalovelyyoungwomanopenedthedoor.44WhatcanIdoforyou?^^askedtheyoungwoman.Theboy

pausedforawhile“Wouldyoupleasegivemesome...adrinkofwater<?^^theboydarenottolookdirectlyintoher

eyes.Shelookedatthebonyboyandthoughthemightneedsomethingtogivehimenergysoshebroughthima

glassofmilk.Hisheadrisingandsmallhandstakingthecup,hedrankitupslowly,andthenasked,“Howmuchdo

Ioweyou?”"Youdon'towemeanything,“sherepliedwithawarmsmileonherface.tuMymotherhastaughtme

nevertoacceptpayforakindness."Deeplymoved,hesaidsincerely,"ThenIshallthankyoufromthebottomof

myheart.^^AsHowardKellyleftthathouse,henotonlyfeltstrongerphysically,butitalsoincreasedhisfaithin

Godandthewholehumanrace.Asamatteroffact,hewasabouttogiveupandquitbeforethatpoint.

Yearslatertheyoungwomanbecamecriticallyill.However,thelocaldoctorswereunabletogivethe

effectivemedicaltreatment.Finally,theysenthertoahospitalinthebigcity,wherespecialistscanbecalledinto

cureherraredisease.Amongthosefamousspecialists,Dr.HowardKellywascalledinfortheconsultation.When

heheardthenameofthetownshecamefrom,astrangelightfilledhiseyes.Immediately,heroseandwentdown

throughthehospitalhallintoherroom.

Paragraph1:

Dressedinhisdoctor'sgown,hewentintoseeher.

Paragraph2:

Thebillwassenttoherroom.

參考范文：

Paragraph1:

Dressedinhisdoctor'sgown,hewentintoseeher.Hesawherlieonthebedandrecognizedheratonce.Her

lovelyfacelookedpale.Hewentbacktotheconsultationroomanddeterminedtodohisbesttosaveherlife.Form

thatdayon,hegavespecialattentiontohercase.Luckily,afteralongstruggle,thebattlewaswon.Dr.Kelly

requestedthebusinessofficetopassthefinalbilltohimforapproval.Helookedatitandthenwrotesomethingon

theside.

Paragraph2:

Thebillwassenttoherroom.Hesitantlyshetookit.Shewasafraidtoopenitbecauseshewassurethatit

wouldtaketherestofherlifetopayitoff.Finally,sheopenedit,onthesideofwhichanotecaughiherattention.

Shereadthesewords,“Paidinfullwithaglassofmilk."signedDr.HowardKelly.Tearsofjoyfloodedhereyes

assheprayedsilently,"Thankyou,God.^^

例題2

Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcamp

outside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld"-thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.

Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears,likeallwildanimals-shouldbe

photographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawitha

telephotolens.Butsometimesthatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.

AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelled

ourgarlicbread.

Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbit

thewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.

Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfired

blankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbear

though-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）.

Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutes

beforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇）,1tooksomepicturesofthebear.

Elliand1fearedthefencewouldn'tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.Thecampmanager

suggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears1eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvited

guestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar（吼叫）,thebearrantothelaketo

washhiseyes.

Paragraph1:

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.

Paragraph2:

Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.

思路點(diǎn)撥：

思路一：

本文主要講述了人與熊對(duì)抗，之后成功脫險(xiǎn)的故事.主人公的感情線(xiàn)變化為:興奮渴望一驚恐T放松.劇情

線(xiàn)以主人公如何與北極熊周旋并成功擺脫它展開(kāi).

由第一段的段首提示句可知:幾分鐘后,熊又回到營(yíng)地.接下來(lái)可通過(guò)場(chǎng)景渲染，描寫(xiě)當(dāng)時(shí)令人顫栗驚恐的

畫(huà)面，例如"Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.“這不僅合理地描寫(xiě)了熊的反應(yīng)，也

描繪出讓人戰(zhàn)栗的場(chǎng)景.

由第二段的段首提示句可知:此時(shí)，直升機(jī)到了.如果想要進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段的合理銜接,第一段的結(jié)尾可描寫(xiě)

成“Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,thebeartrottedforwardafewsteps.”這樣可以營(yíng)造出危急的場(chǎng)景."我

們“看到直升機(jī)的到來(lái)，感到絕處逢生的喜悅，可以以人物心理描寫(xiě)作為第二段的開(kāi)頭，重點(diǎn)描寫(xiě)喜極而泣的狀

態(tài)，例如“MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.”

最后，結(jié)尾部分需要迅速收束，并說(shuō)明成功逃脫的結(jié)局.

關(guān)于畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞:EHi作為女主人公，是續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容中應(yīng)該出現(xiàn)的畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞,noises,pictures,fence,spray與熊有關(guān)，也

在兩段續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容中出現(xiàn).最終，兩人回歸安全狀態(tài)，因此畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞safe也可自然而然地出現(xiàn)在續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容中.由此劃

分畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞，可迅速鎖定需使用的畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞范圍，輔助構(gòu)思.

參考范文：

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-like

shrillness.ThenoisesturnedElliandIpalewithhorror.Ifearedthatthegiantwoulddestroyourwholefence.He

roaredrepeatedly,shatteringwhatwasleftofthesilence.Elliseizedthisopportunitytotakesomepictuiresofthe

bear.Theanimal'snoisesechoedallaroundus.Webetrayedourfeelingsbyhuddlingtogether,shiveringwithfear.

Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,hetrottedforwardafewsteps.

Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.

Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswith

themercilessnecessityofhunger,sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.As

wewereclimbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.

思路二：

由第一段的段首句可知，熱愛(ài)攝影的“我”和妻子Ellie處于危險(xiǎn)之中一北極熊再次向他們靠近了，表明情

況不容樂(lè)觀.而第二段的首句明確了救援的直升機(jī)終于趕來(lái)，一切就此出現(xiàn)了轉(zhuǎn)機(jī).所以在構(gòu)思時(shí)，越是將第一

段寫(xiě)得危急，就越能與后面的轉(zhuǎn)折形成鮮明對(duì)比,增加故事性.

因此,聯(lián)系前文背景，續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段可以先描寫(xiě)熊的動(dòng)向和作者的心理，之后描寫(xiě)作者的應(yīng)對(duì)舉措.由前文和

段首句分析可知，胡椒噴霧并未阻擋熊繼續(xù)靠近,反而激怒了它.而“我”作為攝影師，看到拍攝對(duì)象不斷進(jìn)入自

己的取景范圍不禁想要立刻實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想去拍攝，然而求生的本能讓"我'’無(wú)暇他顧.后面采取的措施可以是作者急

中生智，決定和妻子把面包給熊來(lái)拖延時(shí)間等待救援.而眼看著可怕的熊在不斷靠近，面包也即將耗盡.至此，作

者夫婦二人幾乎陷入絕境.這一部分可以進(jìn)行生動(dòng)的描寫(xiě)讓作者的心理刻畫(huà)更為生動(dòng)，例如“Whileitwas

lookinglikeadarkcloud...”.

第二段首,直升飛機(jī)抵達(dá)，至此，可以進(jìn)一步渲染危急的場(chǎng)景，繼續(xù)描寫(xiě)熊的動(dòng)作，例如猛擊柵欄.在描寫(xiě)完

二人獲救后,結(jié)尾呼應(yīng)前文，作者一路有驚無(wú)險(xiǎn)，成功用相機(jī)拍到夢(mèng)寐以求的照片，不虛此行.關(guān)于畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞:Elli作

為女主人公，是續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容中應(yīng)該出現(xiàn)的畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞，除此以外,spray的提及可呼應(yīng)前文，交代故事發(fā)展,photograph,

camera可以直接呼應(yīng)“我”采取的一些行動(dòng),bread是我們想到的解決方案，fence與熊相關(guān).由此展開(kāi)畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞，保

證了故事的合理性.

參考范文：

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Hecouldnotresistthetemptationofthebread.The

peppersprayhadslowedthebearbutwasn'tenoughtostopthebeast.Onthecontrary,itprovokedthebearand

madehimevenmorefurious.MuchasIwantedtophotographtheapproachingbear,mysurvivalinstinctovertook

mydesiretocapturetheperfectphoto.Inamomentofpanic,EllieandIdecidedtogivehimwhathewanted-the

garlicbread.Whileitwaslookinglikeadarkcloud,wethrewthebreadatthebearalittlebitatatimeuntilithad

runout.

Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Buttheirritatedbearhasalreadystartedtowhackthefence.1

fearedthatthebearwouldteardownthefenceatanyminute.Luckily,therangerscametoourrescue.They

managedtocalmthebeardownanddistracthimwithsomesortofacoustics.Eventhoughmyheartwasstill

thumpingwildlyinsidemychest,Isnatchedmycameraandsnappedonelastshotofthebear,aphotothatIhad

alwayslongedtocapture.Thoughriskingmylife,Tvegotthebestpictureeverandit'sallworthit.

思路三：

續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段中,故事的劇情在第一段結(jié)尾達(dá)到高潮，之后開(kāi)始回落;可以推測(cè)主人公的情緒呈現(xiàn)出“緊張一驚

恐一松一口氣—徹底放松”的變化.

第一段北極熊返回后，可以通過(guò)熊的新一輪進(jìn)攻引出劇情，隨著熊的攻擊愈發(fā)猛烈,主人公需要采取新方

法避險(xiǎn).例如，可以描寫(xiě)熊再次攻擊柵欄，“我”如何使用隨身物品應(yīng)對(duì)進(jìn)攻，保護(hù)自己和妻子的安全.同時(shí)也可以

描寫(xiě)妻子的動(dòng)作和情緒，烘托場(chǎng)面的危急.通過(guò)“我”與熊的動(dòng)作交替，在第一段最后一句將人與熊的矛盾推至

最大.

第二段直升機(jī)到來(lái)后，可以描寫(xiě)“我'’避險(xiǎn)的動(dòng)作，例如立刻調(diào)轉(zhuǎn)方向跑回營(yíng)地.之后利用直升機(jī)的優(yōu)勢(shì)解

決問(wèn)題，如利用螺旋槳發(fā)出的巨大聲響嚇退經(jīng)驗(yàn)不足的北極熊.結(jié)尾處呼應(yīng)開(kāi)頭,總結(jié)作者此行的目的是否達(dá)

關(guān)于畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞:Elli作為女主人公，是續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容中應(yīng)該出現(xiàn)的畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞，除此以外,fence的描寫(xiě)與熊相關(guān)，“我”用

camera進(jìn)行攻擊防身，以達(dá)到safe的目的，動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)包含run,危急時(shí)刻直升飛機(jī)的noises保證了可以擊退熊,

最終提及pictures呼應(yīng)此行目的.由此展開(kāi)畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞,布局合理自然，符合故事邏輯.

參考范文：

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Thefurrygiantmusthavegatheredhiswits,forhe

suddenlyrearedupandattackedthefencewithferociousstrength,leavinganarrowopeningonit.Behindme,Elli

muffledacryofterror.Myeyeswerefixedontheintruder.Mymindracedlikeflashasmyhandsgropedfor

anythingthatmightkeepussafefromthebear*srampage.That'swhenIfeltthecamera.Withlittlehesitation,I

shovedtheequipmentthroughtheopeningasthepolarbearclosedhisjawsonthelensandthenpulledmywhole

cameraoutandsmashedit.

Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Iranbacktothecamp,stumblingahundredtimesinmyhaste.

Ellicontactedthepilotovertheradio.Hearingthatwehadnotsufferedanyphysicalinjury,thepilottoldustostay

putandcoverourears.Theharshwhooshingnoiseoftheapproachinghelicopterspookedtheyoungbear.The

animaltookafewhesitantstepsbackandeventuallydisappearedbacktowardsthelake.Althoughmycamerahas

metitsgloriousend,andthoughallourpictureswerelost,ourmemoryofthisunexpectedencounterremainsfresh

tillthisday.

即學(xué)即練

“I’mgoingtomissyousomuch,Poppy,“saidthetall,thinteenager.Hebentdowntohughisoldfriend

goodbye.Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotions（情緒）getthebetterofhim.

Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutof

towntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.The

familyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.

Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmiledguessthisisit,“hesaid.’THsee

youbackhomeinamonth,okay?”Hisparentsnodded,andtheywatchedashewalkedoutofsightintothecrowds

ofhundredsofstudentsandparents.Theboy'smotherturnedtothedog,“Okay,Poppy,timetogobackhome.^^

Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.Allthatweek,Poppydidn'tseeminterestedin

herdinner,herfavoritetoy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoo,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbe

backtovisit.Poppydidn't.

Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofa,buttheoldgirl

justwasn'therusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried.€UWhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup?”

askedDad.utWe*vetriedeverything.^^

“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecrazy,“smiledMom."Withoutanybodyleftinthehousebutus,this

placecoulduseabitoffun.Let'sgetalittledogforPoppy.^^

Itdidn'ttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhome

asusualbutwhenshesawthebox,shestopped.Sheputhernoseonit.Hertailbeganwagging（擺動(dòng)）eversoslowly,

thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.

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Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.

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Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.

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Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Obviously,Poppywascheerfulonseeingtheadorable

littledog.Butthelittlepuppywasscaredanduneasyinthenewenvironment.Poppy'seyesglitteringwith

rapture（狂喜）,shetriedtotouchthepuppy'sface,butthepuppyhiditselfunderthetable.Afterseveralminutes,the

puppyfeltsafeandtheirfriendliness,gettingclosetoPoppy.Poppyseemedtobeoverwhelmedbypleasure,asshe

couldn'thelplickingthelittledog.Theworriedparentssighedwithrelief.TheynamedthelittledogDodo.Ever

sincethen,thehousewasfilledwithwarmthandlaughter,thecheerfulatmosphereenvelopedthewholefamily.

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Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromtheuniversity.

Hewasquiteastonishedtobewarmlygreetedbytwolovelydogs.Seeinghisconfusion,theparentsexplained

whathadhappenedtopoorPoppyandhowtheyfiguredoutsuchasplendidsolution.Agiantsmilebloomedonhis

face,theboyhugginghisparentstightly.Withtheireyesblurring,thefamilychattedjoyfullyaboutwhattheyhad

gonethroughduringthelastmonth.Ultimately,theboysighed,"It'ssonicetoseeyoubathedinloveandharmony.

I'vebeensupportedbyyourlong-lastinglovewhichalwaysexertedadramaticimpactonmealongthelearning

path.MJustatthatmoment,poppyandthelittledogbarked,asiftheyhadtakeninwhattheboysaid.

驗(yàn)學(xué)

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě),使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事.

I

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetown

hadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachother

meetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.She

knewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicine

tothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,

hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewas

Bernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.

“Iwishyoucouldseeshesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara,44Heissuchahelptohis

mother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon*tseewhathecando.”

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.€€Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearn

money,“saidClara.44Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch."

“SodoIJsaidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem."

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,"Ihaveagreatidea!I

haveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone."Itell

youwhatwecando,“saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmake

popcorn（爆米花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.?,

注意:1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下畫(huà)線(xiàn)的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；

3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)己為你寫(xiě)好；

4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下畫(huà)線(xiàn)標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ).

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WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

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Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

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WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Shewasveryhappythatthekids

weremorethangladtohelptheneedypeople.Thentheywenttothesupermarkettobuyallthatwasneededto

makepopcorn.Mrs.Meredithtaughtthekidshowtomakepopcorn.Havingmadealargebagofpopcorn,theyput

thepopcornintosmallerbags.WhentheycametoBernard'shouseandtoldthemoftheirplan,Bernardwasso

movedthatheworeabroadsmileandacceptedtheirkindness.

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Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Everyafternoonafterschool,Bernardwentto

theMeredithfamilypickingthefreshly-madepopcornandwenttothetowntheatrewherethereweremany

film-goers.WiththehelpofMrs.Meredith,Bernarddevelopedpopcornofdifferentflavorstocaterfordiverse

tastes.Graduallyhemadeenoughmoneytobuyhisfathermedicine.Whenhegrewup,hestartedsomechain

storesandhewasalwayswillingtohelpthoseinneedofhelp.

II

OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeinthe

forest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimethey

reachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom."Pmgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp"and

walkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,she

turnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnow-capped

mountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried."Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershe

walked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopfbrthe

night.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimand

tellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling（滴落）somewhereatadistance.

Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandatea

fewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthe

streamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,the

treesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.

Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgo.toanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.

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Butnomore.helicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

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ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

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Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Feelingcoldandhungry,shesaidtoherselfwith

greatregret:IfIhadn'tquarreledwithTom,Iwouldn'thavegotlostintheforest.NowJanehadnochoicebutto

walkalongastreamuntilshefoundasuitableplacetostayintheforestforthenight.Luckily,shefoundaboxof

matchinherpocket,shelitafireintheopenspacetokeepwarmandkeepawaywildanimals.Exhausted,Shefell

fastasleepanddreamedofseeingTom.

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ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sheatesomeberriesandthenwalkedalongthestream,hopingtofinda

suitableplacetoguidethehelicopterwhenshesawahugerockerectingatadistance.Sherushedtotherock,

climbedontoitandwaited.Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterappearedagain,shewildlyflaggedtheyellowblouse.

Luckily,thehelicopterspottedJanethistimeanditlandednearthebigrockslowly.Tomjumpedoffthehelicopter

andrantowardsJane.ShehuggedTomtightlyandwhispered:Itisallmyfault,nothingwillseparateusfromnow

on.^^

III

Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaska

withhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,

andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（騎行）alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwo

youngdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.

ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim."Man,that'sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhe

lookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn'tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.

Mac'sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthe

wolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac*srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead,Butaminutelater,

itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfa

secondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追趕）.

Macwaspedalinghardno