讀后續(xù)寫(二）好故事來(lái)源于好結(jié)構(gòu)亮點(diǎn)刻畫細(xì)節(jié)環(huán)境、語(yǔ)言、心理、動(dòng)作豐富句式：非謂語(yǔ)，從句，倒裝，獨(dú)立主格，虛擬，強(qiáng)調(diào)，感嘆修辭豐富：比喻，夸張，擬人情緒描寫原則：Don’ttell!Showme.Aflushof(表情緒的名詞)=Awaveof...=Afeeling/senseof...joy/excitement/pride/anger/rage/panic/terror/sorrow/sadness/grief/embarrassment/disappointment/guilt/shame...floodedoversb=sweptoversb=seizedsb=tookcontrolofsbAsenseof______welledupwithin/insidesb(涌上心頭）withtearsrollingdownsb’scheeks.（with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)）Lookingupandseeingahelicopter,Janefeltagreatsenseofexcitementwellingupinherheartandsurgingthroughher（涌遍全身）.3.因...顫抖：...tremble/shiver/shake(withfear,panicexcitement,rage...)流淚：Tearsblurredone'seyes.One'seyesgotmisty.One'seyesmisted/dimmedwithtears.淚眼模糊...beclosetotears幾乎要哭了tears(rolldownone'seyes/cheeks/face)淚水落下心跳，手掌：One’sheartpounded/thumped(最后用獨(dú)立主格)環(huán)境描寫Immediately/Suddenly,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforestandawaveofterrorsweptoverher.Seeingthemoonshininginthedarksky,shecouldn’thelpthinkingofthedaysthatshespentwithTomandherfamily.（分詞）Arayofsunlightshinesthroughthedarkclouds,bringingwarmthandhopetotheworld.（分詞）Withthecoldwindblowing,Janehadtoquickenherpacetocatchupwiththem.（With結(jié)構(gòu)）Thesoundofthestreamsoundedrelaxing,whichrelievedJane’sanxiety.（which定從）Thewaterwasdeepblueandsunlightglittered（閃光）onitslookingglassclearsurface.動(dòng)作+心理描寫：Herheartpounding（怦怦跳）fiercelyandherpalm（手心）sweating（獨(dú)立主格）,aninnervoicetoldherthatshehadtofindasafeplace.Tiredandterrifiedasshewas（as,雖然，倒裝）,Janestruggledtoherfeet,tryingnottohaveabreakdownbothphysicallyandmentally.（分詞作伴隨狀語(yǔ)）Eagerandexcited(形容詞作狀語(yǔ)）,sheflaggedheryellowblouseandsparednoefforttoyellsoastoattractothersattention（動(dòng)作描寫）Hewhisperedintomyears.Hebreathedasighofrelief.Hestruggledoutofthebed.萬(wàn)能嘗試之我命由我不由天人定勝天SbcouldhardlywaittodosthSbdidsthwithouthesitation/delay/asecondthought/eventhinking......Sbpluck/gatherupone’scouragetodosth天助我也Toone’srelief/surprise/delight...Strangelyenough,itturnedoutthat...Luckily,itdidn’ttakelongbeforeshefoundacave.Sighingwithrelief（分詞作狀語(yǔ)）,shesensedaglimmerofhopeandfeltasif（虛擬/擬人）thecavehadbeenfortingherandsaying,”ein,youmustbeexhausted.嘗試失敗不幸的是:...butbadluckforsb/,butinvain/butwithoutsuccess/butnouse不知道做什么Sbdidsth,wonderingwhattodonext./notknowingwhattodonext./unsureofwhattodonext.Sbwasatalosswhattodo.Sbwasinadilemma（進(jìn)退兩難的窘境）aboutwhethertodoornot.感到難以決定...Judgingfromthequietsurrounding,itwasevidentthatJanewasstilltrappedintheforestwithoutanyoneingtotherescue.Janewasatalosswhattodo.萬(wàn)能轉(zhuǎn)折之靈機(jī)一動(dòng)It作主語(yǔ)Itsuddenlyoccurredto/hit/strucksbthat...Itdawnedonsbthat...(使..開始明白/理解）物作主語(yǔ)（A/Anidea,thought...）occurred/cametosbthat......came/flashedintoone’smind....crowdedinone’smind.解決問(wèn)題1.Toone'ssurprise(delight)/Strangelyenough,itturnedoutthat從句2.Luckily/Fortunately/Eventually,shewasnoticedandbroughtintothehelicopter.Here,shesawherhusband,amanstartingather,wearinganexpressionofrelief.讀后續(xù)寫萬(wàn)能結(jié)尾之升華點(diǎn)睛我悟了（倒裝/強(qiáng)調(diào)）Notuntilthendidsbrealize/noticethat...Itwasnotuntilthenthatsbrealizedthat...Thisspecialexperiencein...mademerealizethat...Itwasatthemomentthattheydecidednottoquarrelanymorebutlearnedtopromise.妙?。ǜ袊@）Whata/anvaluable/useful/great/painfullessonsbtaughtme!Whata/anthrilling/plea