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自我成長(zhǎng)類讀后續(xù)寫講評(píng)

MyJourneyinSellingGreetingCards閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

IfacedatightbudgetwhenIwasnine.OnNovember1st,IusedupmostofthemoneyIsaved.WithasmallamountofpocketmoneyleftbeforeChristmasIdidn’thaveenoughtobuypresentsforthefamily.

Iwasseriouslyconsideringgoingtomydadandaskingforanadvanceonthenextyear’spocketmoney,soIcouldatleastbuygiftsformyfamilymembers.Butthen,oneevening,Iwassittinginmyroomreadingadvertisementsinthebackofamagazine.Severalgreeting-cardcompaniesweretellingushowpeoplecouldmakemoneybysellingtheircardsandstationery（文具）.Normally,Iwouldhavepassedrightovertheads,butthistimemysituationwassodifficultthatIfeltIhadnothingtolose.Theadthatattractedmemostwasonebyawell-knowngreeting-cardcompanyinmynation,whoseproductswereofhighquality.Withmyparents’help,Icontactedthecompany,althoughtheypreferredadultsorolderkidstoadvertisetheirproducts.Aftermysincererequest,theyagreedtogiveme,anine-year-oldboy,achance.

Mysalesmaterialsarrivedwithintheweek.Ihadexpectedsomethingsmallandneat,butthepackagelookedlikeadinosaur’sshoebox;itwasclosetothreefeetlongandnearlyafootwide,fullofstuff.Therewasathickbinder（活頁(yè)夾）containingacompleteselectionofthecardsandsomewritingpaper,whichIwouldbesellingforaround$3perbox.

Althoughmyparentssupportedmytrytomakemoneybymyself,theyhadlittleconfidenceinmysuccess;afterall,insteadofanoutgoingkid,Iwassomewhatshy.However,Iwasdeterminedtohaveatrytochallengemyself.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Para1Wastingnotime,Isetoffandknockedondoorsinmyneighborhood.Para2Eventually,Iearnedover$20,alargesumofmoneyfora9-year-oldkidin1954.I.ReadingforbasicinformationCharacters:

I,my

parents,myneighbors

Time:BeforeChristmasPlace:

IntheneighborhoodPersonality:(shy/determined/independent)

原文：Afterall,insteadofanoutgoingkid,Iwassomewhatshy.However,Iwasdeterminedtohaveatrytochallengemyself.Conflict：

Inanefforttoearnmoney,Ihadtosellcardsandstationerybymyself.情節(jié)構(gòu)建---回扣原文Para.5Althoughmyparentssupportedmytrytomakemoneybymyself,theyhadlittleconfidencein

mysuccess;afterall,insteadofanoutgoingkid,Iwassomewhatshy.However,Iwasdeterminedtohaveatrytochallenge.Theme：自我成長(zhǎng)（突破自我）II.Workouttheplotline

Para.1Wastingnotime,Isetoffandknockedondoorsinmyneighborhood.銜接句HowdidIfeelandwhatdidIdotosellthecards?過渡句Howdidmyneighborreact?銜接句Howwasmysellinggoinglater?Para.2Eventually,learnedover$20,alargesumofmoneyfora9-year-oldkidin1954.銜接句WhatdidIdowiththemoney?過渡句Howdidthisexperienceaffectmylife?Theme

WhatdidIlearnfromthisexperience?III.微場(chǎng)景緊張賣貨我的心怦怦直跳，手心直冒汗，我深吸一口氣，鼓起勇氣介紹自己，推銷產(chǎn)品。(獨(dú)立主格)Myheartpoundingandmypalmssweating,Itookadeepbreathandgatheredmycouragetointroducemyselfandpromotetheproducts.2.懷著忐忑的心情，我向大家介紹了賀卡的質(zhì)量，并分享了我賣東西的故事。（介詞短語(yǔ)）Withbutterfliesinmystomach,IexplainedthequalityofthegreetingcardsandsharedthestoryofwhyIstartedthisventure（冒險(xiǎn)）.

顧客反應(yīng)（如何列舉不同顧客的反應(yīng)）1.起初，鄰居們看到一個(gè)賣賀卡的小男孩都很驚訝。有些人猶豫不決，但還是有幾位好心人決定支持我，買了幾盒。Initially,myneighborsweresurprisedtoseeayoungboysellinggreetingcards.Somewerehesitant,butafewkind-heartedsoulsdecidedtosupportmeandboughtafewboxes.2.出乎我意料的是，一些鄰居婉言謝絕了我，而另一些鄰居則熱情地歡迎我。有些人甚至贊揚(yáng)我的創(chuàng)業(yè)精神，鼓勵(lì)我繼續(xù)下去。

Tomysurprise,someneighborspolitelydeclined,while

otherswelcomedmewarmly.Someevenpraisedmyentrepreneurialspirit企業(yè)家精神andencouragedmetokeepgoing.取得進(jìn)步1.隨著我挨家挨戶地推銷，鄰里間很快就傳開了這個(gè)賣優(yōu)質(zhì)賀卡的小男孩。我的銷售額開始上升，很快我就發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的顧客絡(luò)繹不絕。（介詞短語(yǔ)）AsIwentfromdoortodoor,wordspreadquicklyintheneighborhoodabouttheyoungboywiththequalitygreetingcards.Mysalesstartedtopickup,andsoonIfoundmyselfwithasteadystreamofcustomers.

2.接下來的幾個(gè)小時(shí)見證了我信心的增長(zhǎng)和銷售的順利。令我驚訝的是，最初每盒3美元的收入逐漸增加了。(無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)句）Thefollowinghourswitnessedmygrowingconfidenceandsmoothsale.Muchtomyamazement,theinitial$3perboxgraduallyaddedup.

送父母禮物1.我興奮地用這筆錢給父母買了圣誕禮物。（副詞前置）圣誕節(jié)早上，當(dāng)他們拆開禮物時(shí)，臉上洋溢著喜悅。(無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)句）他們被我掙錢給他們買禮物所付出的心思和努力深深感動(dòng)了。他們的快樂和感激讓我充滿了成就感和自豪。（介詞短語(yǔ)）Excitedly,IusedthemoneytobuyChristmasgiftsformyparents.OnChristmasmorning,astheyunwrappedthepresents,theirfaceslitupwithjoy.TheyweredeeplytouchedbythethoughtandeffortIhadputintoearningthemoneytobuythemgifts.Theirhappinessandgratitudefilledmewithasenseofaccomplishmentandpride.自我改變鄰居們的支持不僅緩解了我的經(jīng)濟(jì)壓力，還幫助我克服了害羞的天性(倒裝句)。他們的鼓勵(lì)對(duì)增強(qiáng)我的信心和信念至關(guān)重要。Notonly

didmyneighbors’supporteasemyfinancialstrainbutitalsohelpedmeovercomemyshynature.Theirencouragementwasvitalinboostingmyconfidenceandbeliefinmyself.主題升華1.這是一個(gè)難忘的圣誕節(jié)，它讓我明白，只要有勇氣和毅力，即使是一個(gè)害羞的九歲孩子也能取得成就。（強(qiáng)調(diào)句）ItwasamemorableChristmasthattaughtme,withcourageandperseverance,evenashynine-year-oldcouldachieveachievements.

2.回想這段經(jīng)歷，我明白了一個(gè)道理：無(wú)論最初的挑戰(zhàn)看起來多么艱巨，勇氣和決心都能帶來意想不到的機(jī)遇和成功。(非謂語(yǔ)+同位語(yǔ)從句)這次經(jīng)歷是我人生的一個(gè)轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)，給我上了寶貴的一課，讓我在今后的歲月里受益匪淺。(非謂語(yǔ)+定從）Reflectingontheexperience,Ilearne