專題4讀后續(xù)寫之人與動物類寫作要點寫作要點人與寵物之間的關系：*友誼和陪伴：描述人與寵物之間建立深厚友誼的故事，寵物成為人們生活的陪伴。*成長和學習：講述人類與寵物共同成長、相互學習的故事，強調(diào)相互之間的影響和啟示。*拯救和保護：描述人類拯救和保護動物的故事，關注人與動物之間的責任和關懷。人與野生動物的互動：*保護和保育：講述人們?yōu)楸Ｗo野生動物而努力的故事，強調(diào)環(huán)境保護和生態(tài)平衡。*友誼和合作：描述人類與野生動物之間建立特殊友誼或合作的故事，展示彼此之間的理解和信任。*冒險和探索：描述人類在野外與野生動物相遇的冒險和探索故事，強調(diào)自然界的神奇和美麗。人類與野生動物的冒險：*狩獵和拯救：描繪人類與野生動物之間進行狩獵或拯救的故事，強調(diào)人類對自然的影響。*人與野獸對抗：講述人類與野生動物對抗的故事，強調(diào)生存技能和智慧。寫作結(jié)構(gòu)寫作結(jié)構(gòu)套路一：可愛型動物故事情節(jié)可愛型動物，如狗，鳥等，主要構(gòu)思陪伴、忠誠，或者人救助動物生命，動物（主要是狗）救人的生命等故事情節(jié)。1.TheyweregladtoseePoppycoming

backtoherusualself（他們很高興看到Poppy又回到以前的自己）,guidingthelittledogondailywalksandevenintroducingtoitherfavoritetoys.（2020年1月高考浙江卷）2.Smilingeversobright（笑得更加燦爛。）,hecalledouttohisparents,whotuggedhiminforalonghug.（2020年1月高考浙江卷）3.Herparentswatchedthemplayingaroundandsmiledwithrelief（輕松地笑了）–Poppywasbacktoheroldcheerfulself!（2020年1月高考浙江卷）

【關于狗的神態(tài)描寫】Howtomakethedoginyourwritingvividandeye-catching?

1.Uponhismaster’sarrival,thedog

leapttohisfeet

，snortedhappily

and

boundedforward.(高興狗狗)2.Thedog

curledintoawetlump

and

layshivering

ontheground.(可憐狗狗)3.Awareof

theimmensedanger,

thecrippled

dogwas

doingimpressionofacorpse.

（膽怯狗狗）4.He

stretched,

shookhimself

and

circledseveraltimes

beforedroppingtotheground.（伸個懶腰抖抖身，保證有個好睡眠）5.Withprickedears,he

watchedforamoment

andthen

yawned.

（警覺狗狗）6.

Lyingontheground，thedog

kepthiseyeswideopen,

earsflat,avibratinggrowldeepinhischest.（別惹我，后果自負）7.Thedog

wanderedoff

to

resthernosesinherpaws.（我想靜靜，不想理你）8.Dogs

takemuchpleasureinrollingandrubbingtheirnecksandbackswiththeirpaws.（調(diào)皮狗狗）9.Seeingthemeat

inthemaster’shand,thelittledog

waggeditstail

and

watchedwithhopefuleyes.（饞狗狗）10.Atthesightof

astranger

approachingthehouse,

thedog

watchedhim,

earsup,

headslightlycocked.

（高度戒備狗狗）11.Thedog,

whenintentlywatchingandslowlyapproachingtheprey,

keptoneofits

fore-legsdoubledupforalongtime,

readyforthenextcautiousstep.（伺機一撲,成敗在此一舉）12.Littlepuppies

enjoyplayinggrowlingandbitingeachother’sfacesandlegs.（天真爛漫小可愛）

13.Thedog

gotworried,crawlinguparoundtheoldman’sfeet

asif

to

seekforsafetyandwarmth.

（好怕怕，別過來）套路二：兇猛型動物故事情節(jié)

兇猛的動物，如狼、熊等，一般會給人造成生命威脅，所以主要是以遇險、脫險的故事情節(jié)為主。1、害怕1.Terrified（非常害怕）,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.（2020.7高考浙江卷）2.Seeingtheapproachofthepolarbear,Ifrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch（被恐懼嚇呆，害怕到動也不能動）.（2020.7高考浙江卷）3.MywifeElligraspedmyclothesandtrembled,swallowinghard（抓住我的衣服，顫抖著，使勁吞口水）.（2020.7高考浙江卷）4.Anumbingchill

grippedme（一種麻木的寒戰(zhàn)擢緊了我）.（2020.11金華十校）5.Thinkingofthewolf’sbloodymouth,Macwasnearlydeadwithfright（幾乎給嚇死）（2017年6月高考浙江卷）6.Iwasseizedbyastrongsenseofhorror（被一種強烈的恐懼感所控制）,mypalmssweating.（山東省青島市2020年4月高三?？迹?/p>

2、求助與獲救1.Atthesightofit,Elliwavedherhandswildly（瘋狂地揮手）,screaming,“Help!”（2020.7高考浙江卷）2.Whenweweresafeonthehelicopterupintheair,Iwasamazedtospot（驚奇地發(fā)現(xiàn)）thatthebearhadfinallytorndownthefenceandrantowardsthefoodweleftbehind.（2020.7高考浙江卷）3.Havingpulledthemassivebodyoutofthestump,Briancleanedthewounds（清潔傷口）andthengavehimcarefultreatment.Becky

kneltdownandtendedtothewolf（蹲下來照顧狼）togetherwithBrian.（2020.11金華十校）

4.Iwentneartheinnocentoneandhelditinmyhandandwipedthepuppy（擦干小狗）tillhehadbecomedry.（山東模擬）5.Usingarockasthesupportingpoint,Iunlockedthechainandsetthewolffree（放走這只狼）.（山東省青島市2020年4月高三?？迹?/p>

套路三：主題升華設計

可愛型動物主題：陪伴、珍愛生命、自然和諧、忠誠等。兇猛型動物主題：難忘的經(jīng)歷、獲得教訓、感謝他人救助等。1.ElliandIlearnedourlesson（學到一個教訓）:Beawareofabearwithatoothache.（2020.7高考浙江卷）2.Despitethechillautumnwind,theirhomewasfilledwiththewarmthofloveandreunion（充滿愛和團聚的溫暖）.（2020年1月高考浙江卷）3.Therainthatcamethatdaywasamiracle（那天下的雨是一場奇跡）,savingourfarm,justlikemyboysavedalife.（202103寧波十校）4.Appearingtobefeelingbetter,thewolfslowlyraisedhisheadandgaveagentlekisstoBecky’shandasiftoexpressthanks（好像在表達感謝）.Whatawarmscene!

（2020.11金華十校）寫作真題寫作真題2020年浙江卷1月“I'mgoingtomissyousomuch,Poppy,"saidthetall,thinteenager.Hebentdowntohughisoldfriendgoodbye.Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotions(情緒)getthebetterofhim.Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutoftowntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.Thefamilyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmile.”Iguessthisisit,“hesaid.”I'llseeyoubackhomeinamonth,okay？"Hisparentsnodded,andtheywatchedashewalkedoutofsightintothecrowdsofhundredsofstudentsandparents.Theboy'smotherturnedtothedog,“Okay,Poppy,timetogobackhome.”Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.Allthatweek,Poppydidn'tseeminterestedinherdinner,herfavoritetoy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoo,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbebacktovisit.Poppydidn't.Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofa,buttheoldgirljustwasn'therusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried."WhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup？"askedDad.“We'vetriedeverything.”“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecrazy,“smiledMom.”Withoutanybodyleftinthehousebutus,thisplacecoulduseabitoffun.Let'sgetalittledogforPoppy."Itdidn'ttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhomeasusual,butwhenshesawthebox,shestopped.Sheputhernoseonit.Hertailbeganwagging(擺動)eversoslowly,thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.注意:1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Para1.Dadputtheboxonthegroundandopenedthetop.Ashinylittlewetnosepoppedup.Thentwofluffypaws.Nexttheboxtippedoversideways,andouttumbledamassofwigglygoldensilliness.

Poppywasamazed.Shewaggedfuriously.Shebarkedwithjoy.Shesmiled,hertonguelollingoutassheinvestigatedthesurprise.Thelittlepupwasnotshyand